金華十二校聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫-我沉默不語的鄰居講義

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Forcourage,myfingersclungtotheharness(背帶，保護帶)onChó’sbroadbackaswepassedthefenceofmyneighborMr.Groll’syard.WalkingbyMr.Groll’syardisthebestpartofourmorningwalk,andalsotheworst.Itisthebestpartbecausetherosestalktous.“Goodmorning,Chó,”whispertherosescentstomyguidedog’snose.Otherrosesshouttome,“Hello,Mai!”

Nowestheworstpart:Mr.Groll.Asusual,friendlyChóthumpshertail.ButChóisjustadog;howcansheknowthatthisneighbordoesnotlikemeatall?

“Hello,Mr.Groll.”IgreetedhimasIdideverymorning.Andlikeeveryothermorning,hedidnotanswerme.ButIknewhewasthere,watching,behindhisfence.Healwayssoundsoutofbreath,andthecreakygateswingsnervouslyinhishand.

Maybehe’safraidofmebecauseI’mblind.Disabilitiesdoscaregrownupssometimes.ThenIremembered:theotherdayIheardhimplayingcheckers(西洋跳棋)withmyfriendJimmy,who’sinawheelchair.

Chóa(chǎn)ndImarchedon,andmythoughtskeptstep.WhydidMr.Grollignoreme?It’samysterytome.

Papahastoldmethatsomefolksdonotlikepeoplefromfarawayplaces.Doesthissolvethemystery?MaybeMr.Grolldoesnotlikeneighborsfromfarawayplaces.No,thatcan’tbeit.EverySaturdayMr.Grollandmybigbrother,Lien,helpeachotherwithyardwork.Theyarefriends.

Well,then,Iwondered,whywouldn’thetalktome?Thetoeofmyshoescuffedthesidewalk,andIthink,maybehedidn’tlikemebecauseI’magirl.Thesidewalkhummedbeneathmyfeet.Askateboardzoomedby.“Hello,MaiandChó!”myfriendJanayelled.“Hi,Mr.Groll.”Iwaited.IfMr.GrollignoredJana,thenthemysterywassolved.Buthisvoicecalledout,“Hello,Jana!”協(xié)同與呼應(yīng)。

Paragraph1:Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.Paragraph2:“ItisChóthatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。個段落里面的協(xié)同點:thoughtskeptstep:寫“我”打算質(zhì)問的時候，我的思緒不能keepstep。themystery:真相出爐的時候，寫themysterywassolved。3.Thetoeofmyshoescuffedthesidewalk:繼續(xù)寫“我”的走路姿態(tài),比如考場作文的一個句子Thetoeofmyshoe.onceagain,scuffedthesidewalkasIapproachedthemannotfromafar.sidewalkhumedbeneathmyfeet:同上，大家可以再自己嘗試造句。skateboardzoomedby“Hello,MaiandCho!”myfriendJanayelled;這里主要有兩條分歧的設(shè)計角度一條是“我”和MrGroll對峙的時候，Jana已經(jīng)滑著skateboard走了;一條是Jana見證了“我和MrGroll的對峙，并在MrGroll被Cho嚇到的時候安撫他這里給到幾個例句:1)Inahaze,IthoughtIheardJana'sfortingvoice,“It'sokay,Choisagoodgirl.2)WhenJanaskatedawayonherskateboard,ImusteredthecouragetoapproachMr.Groll,aboutto..Paragraph1:Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.段落的銜接處：第一段首句:“我”的分析進行一個總結(jié)，比如:Jamaalsoagirl,receivedawarmgreetingfromMrGroll.So,itwasn'taboutmydisability,normyorigin,normygender.“it(MrGroll對于Jana的回復(fù))”去寫，比如這擊垮了“我”最后的信心第一段尾句:對應(yīng)第二段開頭的“replied”,這里需要寫到“我”的發(fā)問，比如:Gatheringmycourage,Itentativelyasked,“Excuseme,Mr.Groll"pausingforamoment,“Whyhaveyouneverspokentome?Paragraph2:*ItisChothatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.第二段首句:寫“我”的反應(yīng)，比如1.Uponhearinghiswords,Icouldn'thelpbutburstintolaughter,showcasingtheharnessgrippedinmyfingerstohim.“Yousee.Choisonaleash,verysecure.Inthatinstant.asuddenrealizationdawnedonme.unravelingthemysteryofwhyheconsistentlysoundedbreathlesseverytimeIgreetedhiminthemorning.第二段結(jié)尾:情節(jié)結(jié)尾+主旨升華情節(jié)結(jié)尾:“我”和MrGroll消除誤會主旨升華:見文本解讀下水作文:Paragraph1:Thesoundofittwistedmyheart,Jana,alsoagirl,receivedawarmgreetingfromMr.Groll.So,itwasn'taboutmydisability,normyorigin,normygender.Thenwhatwasit?Immersedinthoughtssearchingforanalternativeexplanation,IsankintoareverieuntilCho'sbarksnappedmebacktoreality.Inahaze,IthoughtIheardJana'sfortingvoice,“It'sokay,Choisagoodgirl"Followingthat,Mr.Groll'slaughter,strangelytingedwithahintofdryness,echoedaroundus.Anyway,theirlaughtertwistedmyheartagain.ThelingeringaromaofrosesatthetipofmynosehintedthatMr.Grollwasakindperson,andhemusthavehisreasonsfornevertalkingtome.Gatheringmycourage,Itentativelyasked,“Excuseme,Mr.Groll"pausingforamoment,“Whyhaveyouneverspokentome?Paragraph2:“ItisChothatscaresmywordsaway.hereplied.Icouldhardlybelievemyears,yetthequiverinMr.Groll'svoicehadservedasatestament.Suddenly,IsensedJanapattingChoonherbroadback,whogaveajoyfulbarkinresponse.Janachuckled,“Mr.Grollhasalreadyrunaway!”Chobarkedagain,asifchiminginwithJana.Thenextsecond,Mr.Groll'svoicedriftedfromadistance,“I'vealwaysbeenafraidoflargedogs.WheneverIseeonemymouthjustmutesitself"Itallcameout!IpettedChotoshowhergentleness.“Yousee.MrGroll,guidedogistrainedandtame.Besides.Choreallylikesyourgarden.”Takingadeepbreath.MrGrollWoof!