讀后續(xù)寫人和動物類+Emma和小鹿+講義 高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Inhersmalltown,Emmawasknownforherloveandrespectforalllivingcreatures,andshebelievedthathumansandanimalsshouldcoexistpeacefullyandharmoniously.Oneday,whilehikinginthenearbywoods,Emmaspottedawounded(受傷的)deercaughtinahunter'strap.Withouthesitation,shecarefullyfreedthedeerandnurseditbacktohealth.Overthenextfewweeks,Emmadevotedhertimeandenergytocaringforthedeer.Shevisitediteverydayafterschool,bringingfreshfruitsandvegetables.Shecarefullyexamineditswounds,applyingsomemedicinetohelpitgetbetterandpreventinfection.

Asthedayswentby,thedeerbegantoregainitsstrength,andEmmawasoverjoyedtoseeitstandonitslegsonceagain.Emmaalsotookthetimetolearnaboutdeerbehaviorandtheirnaturalhabitat.Sheresearchedthebestfoodstofeedthedeerandcreatedacomfortableplaceforittorestinduringtheday.Sheevenmadeasmallwaterfountaintoensurethatthedeerhadaccesstocleandrinkingwater.Astheweeksturnedintomonths,Emmawatchedasthedeergrewstrongerandmoreconfident.Itwouldoftenfollowheraroundthebackyard,nudging(輕推)herplayfullywithitsnose.Emmafeltadeepsenseofsatisfactionknowingthatshehadplayedapartinsavingthisbeautifulcreature'slife.Onesunnyafternoon,asEmmasatinherbackyardreadingabook,sheheardafamiliarsound.Shelookedupandsawthedeerstandingnearher,lookingatherwithgentleeyes.Itwasclearthatthedeerhadfullyrecoveredandwasreadytoreturntothewild.Emmafeltasenseofsadnessbutalsoknewthatitwastimeforthedeertogobacktoitsnaturalhabitat.Sheopenedthegateandwatchedasthedeerboundedaway,disappearingintotheforest.Fromthatdayon,

Emmacontinuedtocareforanimalsinneed,knowingthatshehadmadeadifferenceinthelifeofatleastonecreature.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.重點詞匯：livingcreatures

生物coexist

共存harmoniously

和諧地(be)

caughtin

遭遇，陷入freev.

釋放，使自由nursev.看護(hù)，照料carefor

照顧，喜歡haveaccessto

接觸，進(jìn)入，有使用......的權(quán)利Astheweeksturnedintomonths,

隨著時間的推移，adeepsenseofsatisfaction

深深的滿足感l(wèi)ookatsb.withgentleeyes

用溫柔的眼神看著某人boundaway

跳著離開makeadifference

產(chǎn)生影響，有所作為anunexpectedvisitor

不速之客aregularvisitor

?？屠m(xù)寫分析：讀完文本之后，考生需厘清以下幾個方面：①艾瑪有愛心，非常喜歡小動物；②艾瑪照顧受傷的小鹿，投入了很多的時間、精力和金錢，甚至愿意研究它的習(xí)性，盡可能地給它提供舒適的居住環(huán)境；③小鹿在艾瑪?shù)南ば恼疹櫹拢祻?fù)良好，關(guān)心變得親密；④小鹿回復(fù)了體力之后，有了回歸自然的欲望；⑤艾瑪做出正確的決定，放小鹿回歸自然，繼續(xù)踐行自己的愛心。

通過續(xù)寫第一段開頭語Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.可知本段續(xù)寫的主要內(nèi)容為主人公再次見到小鹿時的驚喜以及與它的一系列互動?？忌山柚膬?nèi)容，用自己的話paraphrase一些句子，既避免摘抄原文，同時又有話可說。例如：喂食物、喝水、艾瑪情緒激動與小鹿擁抱、小鹿的外表等，都是可利用的點。只要言之有理，情節(jié)連貫，都可以成為寫作的素材。當(dāng)然，原文提到第一次小鹿離開時，艾瑪很傷心，而此時如果考生能想到小鹿再次離開時，艾瑪更多的是祝福，而不是悲傷，個人感覺是加分項。通過續(xù)寫第二段開頭語

Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.可知，小鹿成為了艾瑪家的?？?，不定時地回來。說明艾瑪和小鹿之間的關(guān)系更加牢固了。此段仍然可以寫小鹿回來時，艾瑪?shù)姆磻?yīng)，一如既往地關(guān)愛小鹿。另外，本段屬于全文的結(jié)尾，考生還可以借助艾瑪有愛心的性格特點進(jìn)行發(fā)揮。升華部分，可以是人與動物的和諧共存、艾瑪?shù)臒o私奉獻(xiàn)亦或是小鹿通人性并體現(xiàn)出感恩的靈性，都可以拿來做文章，只要巧妙地與文本主題銜接，都是不錯的選擇。

本續(xù)寫的難點在于，原文本只提供了艾瑪和小鹿兩個角色，考生讀懂文章后，感覺沒得寫。如果考生沒有良好的共情能力，能與主人公感同身受；如果沒有平時語料的積累，把簡單的情感用復(fù)雜的語言描述出來的能力，恐怕部分考生很難湊夠字?jǐn)?shù)。參考范文：Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.Shenoticedaflashofwhitedartingthroughthetrees.Tohersurprise,itwasthesamedeerthatshehadrescuedearlierthatyear.ThedeerstoppedinfrontofEmmaandbegantonuzzlehergentlywithitsnose.ItseemedasifthedeerwantedtothankEmmaforallthatshehaddoneforit.Emmafeltawarmsenseofhappinesswashoverherassherealizedthathereffortspaidofffinallyandwerenoticed.Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.Itwouldoftenaccompanyheronherwalksorstayedinhergarden.Thebondbetweensheandthedeergrewstrongereachday,provingthatkindnessandcompassioncancreatecloseconnectionsbetweenhumanandanimals.Sheknowsthatnomatterwherelifetakesher,shewillstrivetoliveinharmonywiththew