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讀后續(xù)寫——2024九省聯(lián)考CONTENTS目錄01閱讀分析02寫作流程故事框架整理故事大綱BackgroundRisingAction+ClimaxFallingActionResolution人物人設問題：矛盾/沖突如何解決故事結(jié)局文章結(jié)尾原文回顧Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.人物介紹主要沖突：K責備HH有錯，后面改正H沒錯，K道歉故事框架整理故事大綱BackgroundRisingAction+ClimaxFallingActionResolution人物人設問題：矛盾/沖突如何解決故事結(jié)局文章結(jié)尾人物MayaHildaKatherine人設海豚海洋館清理工海豚訓練師矛盾/沖突在Hilda打掃干凈水池之后，Maya銜來了糖紙，Katherine認為Hilda沒有認真工作如何解決？？？原文回顧Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.人物介紹Hilda決定追蹤Maya一探究竟原文回顧Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn’tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.次日，Hilda下水檢查沒有發(fā)現(xiàn)任何東西同時看到，Katherine也下水檢查，不出意外，也沒有任何東西Katherine對Hilda的工作不放心，不信任原文回顧Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.Maya游到過濾器之后，把鼻子伸進過濾器后面Hilda疑惑地再次跳入水中，發(fā)現(xiàn)了Maya的秘密Maya給Katherine銜來了一把梳子，并等待她的投喂原文回顧“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.Katherine對Maya銜來的梳子感到疑惑Katherine對我手里的東西感到疑惑知道真相的我，爬出水面，手里拿著一把東西原文回顧Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Hilda的解釋Katherine的道歉邏輯梳理Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda的解釋Maya的秘密手里的東西糖紙和梳子從哪兒來是什么過濾箱之后為什么過濾箱之后會有這些東西？Maya做的為什么這么做？寫作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda說1、糖紙和梳子是從過濾箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因為……原因。3、我手里的東西是……。寫作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda說1、糖紙和梳子是從過濾箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因為……原因。3、我手里的東西是……。范文一：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank.ItseemsMayaisplayingagameoftreasurehunting.Shehidestheitemsbehindthefilterbox,whichisherowntreasurecave.”寫作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda說1、糖紙和梳子是從過濾箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因為……原因。3、我手里的東西是……。范文二：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank,hidingthemnearthefilterboxinthebackofthetank.Thereasonwhyshedoesthisisthatshewantstogettreatsfromyou.”寫作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda說1、糖紙和梳子是從過濾箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因為……原因。3、我手里的東西是……。字數(shù)不夠怎么辦？1、先構建動作完成段落主要內(nèi)容描述2、補充其他描述（外貌、語言、心理、神態(tài)、性格、場景、環(huán)境）寫作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.范文二：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank,hidingthemnearthefilterboxinthebackofthetank.Thereasonwhyshedoesthisisthatshewantstogettreatsfromyou.”性格描寫聰明場景描寫Maya此刻的動作Mayaisacleverdolphin.Mayaismuchmoreintelligentthanwethought.ShelookedatMaya,whowasnowplayfullyswimminginthepool.寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Katherine道歉故事結(jié)局作者寫這篇文章的意義何在？文章結(jié)尾從故事中升華的道理務實?。。。?！不能輕易評判他人對海豚的關心從誤會分歧，到加強合作Katherine意識到了什么？不是Hilda的錯誤寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.1、前文情節(jié)概括。2、Katherine認識到自己的錯誤，并向Hilda道歉。3、文章主旨升華。寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.1、前文情節(jié)概括。范文一：ThoseobjectwerenotHilda’smistakesorcarelessness,butthesymbolsofMaya’splayfulnatureandintelligence.寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.KatherineapologizedtoHildasincerely.2、Katherine認識到自己的錯誤，并向Hilda道歉。重要情節(jié)應該有濃墨重彩的描寫。??道歉是動作也可以是語言。補充神態(tài)、心理、原因來表示道歉的真誠。寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Feelingamixofregretandguilt.【心理描寫】，“Ioweyouanapology,andIshouldn’tblamedyouearlier”【語言描寫】KatherineturnedtoHildaandsaidsincerely【動作描寫】,gratefulforherkeenobservationandpatience.2、Katherine認識到自己的錯誤，并向Hilda道歉。Atthatmoment,thetwoexchangedaknowingsmileandturnedtheirgazetowardsMaya.【對道歉動作的反饋】寫作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Thisincidentremindthemofthesurprisingnatureofthisclevercreatureandthetrustbetweenateam.3、文章主旨升華。Fromthenon,theybegantodiscussmoreeffectivewaystolearnMayasoastoimprovetheirapproa