題型精析19.讀后續(xù)寫之故事情節(jié)設計5法(原卷版)

19.讀后續(xù)寫之故事情節(jié)設計5法【策略突破】突破策略1面對問題,人物產生的消極或積極情緒【真題示例】(2022·浙江高考·1月卷)Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.ThoughIwantedtosharemyideaswithhimfully,IfailedtodosoforfearthatIwouldholdhimback.Ijustkeptnoddingwhenheaskedmewhetheritwasokaytodothiswayorthatway.Ithoughtitwasimpossibletopersuadehimintoacceptingmyviews,soIdidn’twanttowasteourtimetodiscuss.Istartedtowaittoleaveimmediatelywearrivedattheplace,andsodidhe.Ijusthopedthatthepresentationdaycouldeearlier.【解答思路】本文講述了作者在一次課上被分配了一個不想要的隊友共同完成作業(yè)共享分數,他們從最開始的無法配合到最后圓滿完成任務的溫暖故事。根據第一段首句內容“我們開始定期碰面,制訂我們的計劃?！笨芍?本段可寫為了起草計劃,雖常見面,但剛開始還是抱著不太合作的心態(tài),這樣做為第二段的協作做好鋪墊,從而推知了情節(jié)的發(fā)展。突破策略2面對復雜的情境,人物產生急迫/復雜的心理【真題示例】(2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.HowIwishedIhadnotactedsofoolishly,makingmyselfalaughingstockofmyfamily!Icouldwellimaginehowtheywouldlookwhenmyheadcameout.Seeingmyrepeatedeffortsbutinvain,JasondartedoutoftheroomandturnedtoDadforhelp.Seeingmecaughtinsuchasituation,Dadwasunexpectedlysurprised,butsoonsurprisetransformedintolaughter.Hetriedmanyapproaches,andeventuallymanagedtogetmyheadoutbycarefullycuttingthepumpkinopenwithaknife.JustwhenIfeltrelievedtobefreedfromthepumpkin,IsuddenlyfoundthatMomwasshootingallthathappenedtomeandplannedtouploaditonline.【解答思路】本文講述了“我們家”一直有個傳統(tǒng)活動:每年十月份萬圣節(jié)前,一家人一起到當地農場挑南瓜,作者和弟弟妹妹比賽看誰選的南瓜大。往年作者都贏了,可今年作者的南瓜和弟弟的不分伯仲。為了證明自己的南瓜大,作者把頭塞進了挖空的南瓜里,沒想到,作者的頭卡在南瓜里了。由第一段首句內容“我的頭在南瓜里卡了大概有五六分鐘,但我覺得要漫長得多?！笨芍?第一段內容可描寫作者當時的恐慌情緒以及面對這種情況怎么做。突破策略3面對他人的行為或行動,人物展開了新的動作/行為【真題示例】(2021·新高考I卷)Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【解答思路】當雙胞胎叫醒母親后,母親的動作首先有“saw”和“wasverysurprised”,之后在雙胞胎發(fā)出節(jié)日問候“HappyMother’sDay”時,母親的動作有“hugged”和“kissed”,這些動作合理地展示了美味而完美的早餐讓母親感到相當意外,同時使母親倍感溫暖與感動,母親對自己的孩子做出的兩個呼應的動作也符合常理,此時無聲勝有聲。突破策略4情況好轉或情境向好,人物突然有了一個想法【真題示例】(2020·浙江高考·7月卷)Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrewallthefoodwehad.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.【解答思路】當救他們的直升機到達時,故事主人公的心情好轉,并且當再次遇到熊的攻擊時,主人公就又有了新的想法,這將故事的沖突與發(fā)展帶到另一個情境中;此外,當獲救后,主人公又開始感謝,用新的想法接續(xù)“情況好轉”,這樣可以充分展現人物對整個事件的回應的特寫鏡頭。突破策略5面對他人的鼓勵/激勵/幫助等,人物找到了解決辦法【真題示例】(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Droppinghishead,hewasinlowspirits.Isaidgentlyandquietly,“Noonecanchangeyourmind,exceptyourself.Ifyoudesiretochallengeyourself,thereisnothingtodowithothers’thoughts.”Hesatstillwithadeepbreath.“Youhaveafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyoushowuphere,”Iaddedwithasinceretone.Hearingmywords,Davidturnedtomewithtearsspillingoutofhiseyesandexpressedhehadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecrosscountryrun.HiscoachheardwhatDavidsaidandgavemealook—thekindthatwasmoredeterminedthananyoneelse’s.【解答思路】講述了作者是一名特殊教育教師,在大型越野賽跑那天,發(fā)現患有大腦疾病的大衛(wèi)獨自站在一旁。作者問其原因,他說準備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知,因為擔心同學們會嘲笑大衛(wèi),所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己去決定是否參加賽跑。作者讓大衛(wèi)追尋自己的內心,不理會別人的看法,大衛(wèi)最終參賽,盡管遇到困難,他戰(zhàn)勝了自己,這已經無關名次,而是他的勇敢和堅定讓這一切成為可能。由第一段首句內容“我們挨著坐著,但大衛(wèi)不愿看我一眼”可知,第一段可描寫作者鼓勵大衛(wèi)比賽,大衛(wèi)經過強烈的心理斗爭,最終決定參加比賽。這既把故事推到了高潮,也使問題得到解決?！绢}型精練】1.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Barryisamiddleagedmanwhoisgoingthroughaverydifficulttimeinhislife.Hiswiferecentlypassedaway.SheandBarryhadmanyhappyyearstogether,sharingtheirfreetimeandevenstartingabusinesstogether.Withouthiswife,Barryisfullofsorrowandfeelsthatlifeispointless.Heevendecidestoclosetheirbusinessbecauseworkingtheremakeshimmisshertoomuch.Evenmonthslater,Barrysitsaroundinhishousealldayfeelinggloomy.Hisfriendsandfamilytrytogethimoutofthehouseandencouragehimtostartdoingnewthingsandenjoylife,buttheyarenotsuccessful.Barry’sneighbor,averyoldwomannamedGertrude,seeshimfromheryardonedayashestepsoutontohisporch.Shehasnotseenhimoutsideindays!Sheaskshimtoecloser.Irritated,hewalkstothefencethatprotectsthefrontofherhouse.“Hello,Barry!Justlookatthisfence.Ionlyhaditputintwoyearsago,butitisfallingapart.Youareastrongman,andyouhavesomefreetime.Iwantyoutofixthisfenceforme,”Gertrudesays.Barryisangry.Sheknowsthesituationheisin.Heistheonewhoneedshelpandsupport.Hethinkstheoldladyisbeingveryselfish.Still,heknowssheistoooldtofixthefenceherself,andtheyhavebeenneighborsforyears.Sheisanicewoman,andherespectsher.Heagreestofixherfencebecauseitisreallynotsafeforhertohaveitbrokenlikethat.Barryworksonthefencefordays.Gertrudebringshimlemonadewhileheworks.Whenhefinishes,sheisverygrateful.Barrysmilesforthefirsttimeinmonths.“Nowthatyoudidsuchawonderfuljobfixingmyfence,doyouthinkyoucouldpaintitforme?”Gertrudesmilesathim.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Barrycannotbelievesheisaskingformorehelp._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Barrynolongerfeelsthatlifeispointless._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:Barrycannotbelievesheisaskingformorehelp.Doesn’tsheknowhowsadheis?Butbecauseherespectshersomuch,Barryagrees.Heworkshardpaintingthefenceinthehotsun,butGertrude’slemonadeandencouragementarewonderful.Hefeelsproudofthebeautifulfenceheismaking.Overthenextfewweeks,GertrudekeepsgivingBarryjobs.Herepairsherdoorandevenbuildsabeautifulpatiowithwoodenfurnitureforher.Astheysitthereanddrinklemonade,alltheneighborspassbyandtellBerrywhatabeautifuljobhehasdone.HeandGertrudecannotstopsmiling.Paragraph2:Barrynolongerfeelsthatlifeispointless.HefeelsproudofhisworkandusefultoGertrude.Andheisstillyoung,hethinks.Barrydecideshewillbeeacarpenter!HethanksGertrude.Hefinallyrealizesthatshewasneverbeingrude,andthatactuallysheisreallyverywise.Sheknewthatsorrowcanbeeasedbysimplygettingbusyatsomething.Hehelpedher,butshetrulysavedhim.【解析】本文以故事發(fā)展的順序為線索展開，描述了一個名叫Barry的中年男子經歷了妻子去世后的悲傷和迷茫，鄰居Gertrude請求他幫忙，他漸漸從悲傷中走出來，得到了贊許后的Barry決定改變自己的職業(yè)方向成為一名木匠，整個故事展示了互相幫助和關心能夠改變一個人的生活態(tài)度?！窘馕觥?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內容“Barry不敢相信她在尋求更多的幫助。”可知，第一段可描寫B(tài)arry內心的矛盾，自己已經很傷心了但Gertrude還是讓他幫忙，出于尊重Gertrude他同意了，漂亮地完成所有工作后他得到了很多人的贊美，Barry感到了開心的經過及相關細節(jié)。②由第二段首句內容“Barry不再覺得生活毫無意義?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫B(tài)arry為自己的工作感到自豪，他不再沉淪和墮落，決定成為一名木匠，通過鄰居請求他的幫助，Barry在內心中感謝Gertrude真正救了自己的過程及相關細節(jié)。2.續(xù)寫線索：Barry不想幫忙——改變主意——得到贊美——Barry感到開心——覺得生活有意義——決心做木匠——感謝Gertrude的拯救3.詞匯激活行為類①修理：repair/fix/mend②經過：passby/gooff③緩解：ease/relieve情緒類①因……感到自豪：beproudof/takepridein②悲傷：sorrow/sadness[高分句型1]Astheysitthereanddrinklemonade,alltheneighborspassbyandtellBerrywhatabeautifuljobhehasdone.(使用了as引導的時間狀語從句)[高分句型2]Hefinallyrealizesthatshewasneverbeingrude,andthatactuallysheisreallyverywise.(使用了that引導的并列的賓語從句）2.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Acatwandersintoourbackyardduringathunderstorm.Thecatstaresatusthroughthekitchenwindowasweeatsteakandgarlicpotatoes.Sheplacesapawagainstthewindowandmakesasadface.Weopenthedoorandthecatesrightthroughthebackdoorandmakesherselfathomeonthebeanbag.Wegiveherthesteakandgarlicpotatoes.Sheeatsthesteakbutleavesthegarlicpotatoes.Thenextevening,thecatreturns.Dinnerissalmonandgreenbeans.Luckyforthecat,ourchildrenwouldrathereattheirownshoes.Thecatlicks(舔)herselfforanhour,makingsurenottomissasinglesquareinchofherbody.Shefallsasleepwithherpawsintheair.Thechildrendecidethatthecatisours.Shehasenowforsevennights,alwaysarounddinnertime.Nowonder,mywifesays,she’sbeingfedlikeaqueen.Iremindmywifethatthecatiseatingwhatweareeating,whichmeansthatwetoomustbefedlikequeens.Iwasrubbingherbelly,andshebitmyfinger.Bloodisdrawn.Ifshedoesitagain,she’llhavetogo.Fiveminuteslater,shedoesitagain,thistimetomywife.Thechildrenbegforonelastchance,butmywifeputsthecatoutandtellsittogohome.Lateron,wehearthecatmewingthroughthebedroomwindow.Therainisstrikingtherooflikegunfire.Mywifesighsandrollsoutofbed.Withoutspeaking,shegoestothekitchenandcookschickenonafryingpan.Sheputsacardboardboxintheshed(小屋)andputsthecatintherewiththechicken.Sheesbacktobed.Icanfeeltherainonherfeet.Almosteverythinggoesaroundthecatinthefamily.Webuycattoysandcattreatsandevenabedforher.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Iamanxiousaboutgoingawayfortheweddinganniversary(紀念日)wehaveplanned___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Whenwegetback,thecatisgone___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Iamanxiousaboutgoingawayfortheweddinganniversary(紀念日)wehaveplanned.Thechildrenarecrying,sayingtheydon’twanttogo.Itellthemthatwehavebookedthehotelanditcostalotofmoney,buttheyarenotinasympatheticmood.Theywouldliketostayathomeortakethecatalong.Itellthemcatssufferalotinahotel.Mywifesayscatsareindependentanimals,thatshe’llhavegreatfunhereallonherown.Thechildrencantellwearelyingthroughourteeth.Weleavefoodandwaterandhertoys.Weleavethesheddooropen.Weareallcryingaswedriveoutthegate.Whenwegetback,thecatisgone.Wewalkupanddown,theroaduntilmidnight.Weasktheneighbors.Wecallforhoursfromthebackyard.Adaygoesby,thenaweek.Thechildrenmakepostersandhangthemontelephonepoles.Theguiltweighslikesteel.Theabsenceissomethingyoucanholdinyourhands,presstoyourchest.Herbed,hertoys.Thecatisgoneforever.Intime,thechildrenmoveonbutInolongerseetheworldthewaytheydoalthoughIknowmovingondoesn’tmeanforgetting.【解析】本文以一只貓為線索。講述了一只流浪貓經常晚上來作者家，作者的妻子經常給它食物吃，像女王一樣喂養(yǎng)它。后來小貓咬了作者，不得不被送走，孩子們乞求再給貓一次機會，妻子還是送走了貓。下雨的時候，小貓又回來了，妻子又給貓做了一些食物吃，作者感覺家里的一切都在圍繞著這只貓?！窘馕觥?.段落續(xù)寫①由第一段首句“我為我們計劃的結婚紀念日的離開感到焦慮”可推斷，第一段描寫孩子們不愿意把貓留著家里，作者和妻子說服了孩子們給貓留下食物和水。②第二段首句“當我們回來的時候，貓不見了”可知，第二段可描寫作者一家人尋找小貓的經過，最終沒有找到小貓以及這件事情留給作者的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索孩子們不愿意留下貓——說服孩子——獨自留下小貓——貓不見了——尋找——沒有找到——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類：①預訂：book/reserve②留下：leave/keepback③時間流逝：goby/passby情感類①哭泣：cry/shedtears②內疚：guilty/punctious【高分句型1】Thechildrenarecrying,sayingtheydon’twanttogo.（運用了現在分詞走狀語）【高分句型2】Theabsenceissomethingyoucanholdinyourhands,presstoyourchest.（運用了省略了關系代詞的定語從句）3.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Manyyearsago,mydadwasdiagnosedwithaseriousheartcondition.Hewasputonpermanentdisabilityandwasunabletoworkatasteadyjob.Hewouldbefineforquiteawhile,butwouldthenfallsuddenlyillandhavetobeadmittedtothehospital.Hewantedtodosomethingtokeephimselfbusy,sohedecidedtovolunteeratthelocalchildrenhospital.Mydadlovedkids.Itwastheperfectjobforhim.Heendedupworkingwiththeterminally(不治的)andcriticallyillchildren.Hewouldtalktothemandplaywiththemanddoartsandcraftswiththem.Sometimes,hewouldloseoneofhiskids.Incertaininstances,hewouldtellthegrievingparentsofthesechildrenthathewouldsoonbewiththeirchildinheavenandthathewouldtakecareofthemuntiltheygotthere.Hewouldalsoasktheparentiftherewasamessagetheywouldliketosendwithhimfortheirchild.Mydad’sassurancesseemedtohelpparentswiththeirgrieving.Oneofhiskidswasagirlwhohadbeenadmittedwithararediseasethatparalyzed(使癱瘓)herfromtheneckdown.Idon’tknowthenameofthediseaseorwhattheprognosis(預測)usuallyis,butIdoknowthatitwasverysadforagirlaroundeightornineyearsold.Shecouldn’tdoanything,andshewasverydepressed.Mydaddecidedtotrytohelpher.Hestartedvisitingherinherroom,bringingpaints,brushesandpaper.Hestoodthepaperupagainstabacking,putthepaintbrushinhismouthandbegantopaint.Hedidn’tusehishandsatall.Onlyhisheadwouldmove.Hewouldvisitherwheneverhecouldandpaintforher.Allthewhilehewouldtellher,“See,youcandoanythingyousetyourmindto,”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Eventually,shebegantopaintusinghermouth.

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