2024屆高考英語寫作短文故事續(xù)寫講義素材

2024年高考英語寫作短文故事續(xù)寫的作文閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。DaveandPatrowareanoldlovingcoupleInhiscareerasaTVphotojournalistandlatershootingandeditingvideos,Davealwaysmadeittofinishhisworksuccessfullyondeadlines.Heconsideredithissuperpower.Hewassobusythatheseldom/sparedanytimetokeephiskidscompany.Nowhischildrenhadstartedtheirowncareers.Hewasnottalkativeandalwaysburiedhimselfinhisownworld.Heneverboughtexpensivethingsandalwaysavoidedwasting.PatrowalwayssupportedDaveandtookgoodcareofthefamily.Lastyear,thecoupleretiredfromworkandstartedtheirtravel.Afteraseven-hourdrivebackhometoWoodbury,Minnesota,Daveplannedtodowhathealwaysdid;carrytheirsuitcasesupstairstounpackanddolaundry.“Dave,please,let'sjustrelaxandleaveitfortomorrow,”saidPatrow.Shedidn'twanttoseeDavefelttired.Heagreedandjoinedheronthecouchtowatchtheirfavoritenewseries,“Yellowstone.Afewminutesintotheshow,Davemadeanunusualsound,ThenoisewassoshockingthatPatrowturnedtocheckonhim.Dave'seyesandmouthwereopen,buthewasn'tmoving.Hisheartwasn'tbeating.Fortunately,PatrowhadtakenaCPR(心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù))classatwork,Thetrainingkickedin.Sherolledhimoffthecouchontothefloor,calledtheambulanceandstartedtoperformCPRAfternearly10minutes,doctorsarrived,TheyrushedDavetothehospital.DoctorssaidDavecardiacarrestcouldbeduetostress.Aftertwoweeks，Davefinallycameoutofthecoma(昏迷)“Where'smywife?”heaskedthenurseeagerly.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。范文一ThenursephonedPatrow."Ihavegoodnews.Somebody'saskingforyou."

Withamixtureofexcitementandnervousness,"IsheDave?"shewhispered."Yes."NosoonerhadsheheardthenamethansherantowardsDave.WhenshesawDave'sface,shecouldn'tholdbackhertearsanylonger."Don'tgiveyourselftoomuchpressure,let'sdosomethingrelaxing,"Patrowsaid."Howaboutdoingsomeworkprojects?""Iwanttolaunchaprojectwhereeveryonecanposttheirworks."

Hisotherworkprojectistoco-workabookwithhiswifeabouttheirexperience.

"Thebookwillbeamazing."Withouthesitation,theybegantogatherinformation.Withhisprofessionalcompetence,Davevolunteeredtotakephotosforthemandaddedthemtothebook.Finally,thebookwasfinished.ThisbookholdsthememoriesandexperiencesofPatrowandDave.范文一：進一步優(yōu)化潤色成拔高款作文，藍(lán)色是好詞好句好素材，尖子生可以選用The

nursephonedPatrow."Ihavegoodnews.Somebody'saskingforyou."Ablendofanticipation

andjitters

filledtheair

asshewhispered,"CouldhebeDave?"Confirmationcameinasimple"Yes."ThemerementionofhisnamesentherdashingtowardsDave.Atthesightofhisfamiliarface,hertearsflowed

uncontrollably."Takeiteasy,weneedsomerelaxation,"Patrowcomfortedher."Whynot

embarkon

acreativeproject?"hesuggested."I

envision

aplatformwhereeveryonecanshowcasetheirtalents."

Hisotherworkprojectistoco-workabookwithhiswifeabouttheirexperience.

"Imaginehowincrediblethebookcouldbe,"Daveenthused.Withoutamoment'shesitation,theyembarkedongatheringinspiringcontent.Leveraginghisphotographyskills,Dave

offeredtocapturetheessenceandweavethemintothebook'spages.

Induecourse,theirlaboroflovewascomplete—abookthatencapsulatesthesharedjourneyandcherishedmemoriesofPatrowandDave.

空氣中彌漫著期待與緊張的氛圍，她輕聲問道：“他會不會是戴夫呢？”一個簡單的“是”確認(rèn)了她的猜想。僅僅聽到他的名字，她就忍不住朝戴夫奔去。看到他熟悉的臉龐，她的淚水止不住地涌出?！胺泡p松點，我們需要一些放松，”帕特洛安慰她?！盀槭裁床婚_始一個創(chuàng)意項目呢？”他建議道。“我設(shè)想了一個平臺，每個人都可以在上面展示自己的才華?！薄跋胂笠幌逻@本書會有多精彩，”戴夫興奮地說。他們毫不猶豫地開始收集靈感內(nèi)容。戴夫利用他的攝影技巧，主動提出捕捉精髓，并將它們編入書頁中。在適當(dāng)?shù)臅r候，他們的愛心之作完成了——這是一本封裝了帕特洛和戴夫共同旅程和珍貴記憶的書。范文一與范文二：優(yōu)化改寫理由供參考1.“Ablendofanticipationandjittersfilledtheair”

用詞更高級，營造了一種期待與緊張交織的氛圍，比原先的“mixtureofexcitementandnervousness”更富有文學(xué)色彩?！癈onfirmationcameinasimple'Yes.'”

增加了句子的動態(tài)感，使得對話更加生動。2.“ThemerementionofhisnamesentherdashingtowardsDave.”“dashing”比“ran”更能傳達出女主角急切的心情。3.“hertearsfloweduncontrollably”“floweduncontrollably”比“couldn'tholdbackhertears”更能形象地描述女主角淚流滿面的情景。4.“Patrowcomfortedher”—直接點明了帕特洛的安慰行為，使得句子更加簡潔明了?！癢hynotembarkonacreativeproject?”

“embarkon”比原先的“doingsomeworkprojects”聽起來更加正式和有計劃性。5.“Ienvisionaplatformwhereeveryonecanshowcasetheirtalents”

“envision”和“showcase”兩個詞提升了句子的層次，使之聽起來更有遠(yuǎn)見和創(chuàng)意。6.“Leveraginghisphotographyskills,Daveofferedtocapturetheessenceandweavethemintothebook'spages”

“l(fā)everaging”和“weave”兩個詞使