讀后續(xù)寫微技能細(xì)節(jié)描寫 【知識精講精研】 鏈面結(jié)合 高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫微技能指導(dǎo)

——鏈面結(jié)合

別有“動”添

Howtomakeyouractiondescriptions

vivid?ContinuationwritingWhatmakesMr.Beansofunnyandinteresting?2actions,expressions,voice.......Learnandexplore31

Strategy1:Actionprecision動作精準(zhǔn)化generalwords→concretewords

Howtomakeactionsvivid?

WordBankgeneralwords（通用詞）concretewords(具體詞）rundash/rush(猛沖)lookglance(瞥見),glare(怒視),stare(凝視)say/talkchat(閑聊),whisper(耳語),murmur(低語)cryweep/sob（啜泣）eatbite(咬)，chew（嚼），swallow（吞）take（拿）grab/grasp(抓住)1.Olivewentintotheroom,tookhisbag,andwentoutagain.generalwords→concretewords通用詞匯→具體詞匯Olivedashed/ranintotheroom,grabbed/grasped/seizedhisbag,andrushedoutagain.

Practice:將句中籠統(tǒng)詞替換成具體詞以優(yōu)化表達(dá)。1.Becauseofhislies,shelookedathim.2.Notknowingwhattodo,Iwalkedontheflooranxiously.3.Withonlytwominutesleft,he

atehismeal.4.Sheheardhermotherspokeinalowvoiceasshewalkeddownthehall,"Don'twakeyourdadup."glared/staredpacedswallowedwhisperedtiptoed

7Strategy2:ActionChains動作鏈?zhǔn)褂靡贿B串動作讓畫面動起來分解動作，建構(gòu)畫面Thestepsweshouldtaketoeathotstrips(辣條)tearthepackageopensqueezeoutonestriptakeabigbite撕開包裝擠出一根大咬一口8Justnow,Tomtorethepackageopen,squeezedoutonestripandtookabigbite.Structure1:

S+V1,V2andV3He

wasoverwhelmedbyjoy

,

singinganddancing

intherain.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。Structure2:

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....

or

Doing...anddoing....,S+V31.媽媽沖了進(jìn)來，靜靜地站著，然后突然大笑起來。(2021年浙江卷)

Mymom

,

andthen

.rushedinstoodstillburstintolaughter2.他站起來，擁抱著父母，微笑著.(2020年1月浙江卷)_________,hestoodupand________hisparents.Smilinghugged

11Strategy3:ActionScenes動作面EmotionsDialoguesInnerthought4Actions動作面IDEA=動作+心理，對話，情感被老師的話鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說(whisper)：“我來試試。”Encouraged

bytheteacher'swords,Lucy

raised

herhand,whispering:”Iwanttohaveatry.”Stucture1:Doing/done,S+V,saying/whispering......聽完后深受鼓勵，David伸出(holdout)雙臂抱住了我,微笑著回復(fù)我說：“我可以做到！”(2022年新高考I讀后續(xù)寫)__________________afterhearingthis,David___________hisarmsand___________me,_________________“Icandoit！”Deeplyencouragedhuggedheldoutreplyingwithasmile又累又餓，他們終于安全到達(dá)了目的地。Exhaustedandhungry,theyeventuallyarrivedatthedestinationsafely.Stucture2:Adj,S+V(形容詞作狀語)Sadbutfearless,hewasdeterminedtochangetheplanimmediately.Structure3S+V+with/in+emotionalnoun（情感名詞）....with/in+surprise/amazement/terrorHelooksupanger/dissatisfactionpride/joyAddprepositionalphrase（介詞短語）tomaketheactionvivid.Hesteppedforward,with______________tearsfillinghiseyesActivity3Summarizeandpresent(Pairwork)18Drawamindmaptosummmerisewhatwe’velearntthisclass.vividactionactionchains動作鏈條化①

S+V1,V2andV3②

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....

or

Doing...anddoing....,S+V3

①Doing/done,S+V,saying/whispering②Adj,S+V(形容詞作狀語)actionscenes動作全面化把動作和面部表情，心理，語言等結(jié)合，形成動作面actionprecisions動作精準(zhǔn)化Mindmap③S+V+with/in+emotionalnoun（情感名詞）

分解動作，建構(gòu)畫面Activity3Applyandcreate(Pairwork)20Polishtheunderlinedsentences.

故事梗概：

雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff期待在母親節(jié)給媽媽制造驚喜，給她做一頓豐盛的早餐。可在廚房準(zhǔn)備早餐時，屢遭失敗還把廚房弄得一團(tuán)糟。正當(dāng)她們無比焦慮和沮喪時，父親進(jìn)來了。父親耐心鼓勵并指導(dǎo)他們做好早飯。雙胞胎把飯菜端上樓送給媽媽，媽媽既興奮又感動.Thetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①hefoundthekitchenwasinamess.Fatherwasalittleshockedandasked,“Whathappened?”（設(shè)計動作鏈）

ThetwinssaidthewholestorytoFather.②Totheirrelief,hecomfortedthegirls（分解動作，使用具體詞）andsaid,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether”.Withouttheslightesthesitation,theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeandtoastedthebreadonceagain.③Beforelong,thetwinsmadeadeliciousbreakfastwiththeirfather’shelp.④Thoughtheyweretired,theyfelthappyandproud.

(從表情，心理，動作,感官等方面創(chuàng)造動作面).Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMother’sDay!”Theysaidtogetherloudly.⑤Themotherjustcouldn’tbelievewhatshesawandcried.⑥Shehuggedandkissedthemagainandagain.(從表情，心理，動作等方面創(chuàng)造動作面)“Mum,haveatasteofit”,thetwinsasked.Themotherbitintothetoastandsaid“ItisdefinitelythemostdeliciousbreakfastIhaveeverhad.Iamsoproudtobeyourmother”.

Polishtheunderlined6sentences(選自2021全國卷Ⅰ

）①Hefoundthekitchenwasinamess.Fatherwasalittleshockedandasked,“Whathappened?”（設(shè)計動作鏈）

Seeingthemessystoveandtheblackbread,fatherfeltabitshockedandaskedthem,“Whathappened?”②Totheirrelief,hecomfortedthegirls（分解動作，使用具體動作）Totheirrelief,havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshoulder.③Beforelong,thetwinsmadeadeliciousbreakfastwiththeirfather’shelp.(從表情，心理，動作,感官等方面創(chuàng)造動作面)Beforelong,armedwiththeexperienceoffailureandfather’help,theymadethebreakfast,givingoffpleasantsmell.

⑤Themotherjustcouldn’tbelievewhatshesawandcried.Shestaredatthebreakfastontheplate,withtearsofjoystreamingdownherfa