廣東省深圳市二模英語讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長類-解除同學(xué)間的誤會(huì)+講義

讀后續(xù)寫原題目呈現(xiàn)：Ididn'tlikeDelsomuch.Healwayscalledmethenickname“Germy”,whichmeant“dirty”,insteadofmyrealname“Jamie”.Besides,hewasknownasatrouble-makerinschool.SowhentheheadteacherMr.SmithaskedDeltocometohisoffice,InaturallythoughtthatDelhaddonesomethingmeantosomeone.Throughthewindow,Icaughtsightofasmallerboycrying.Delseemedunhappy,too.Hedidnotreturntoclassthatday.Allofuswerediscussingwhathadhappenedtohim.Whatelsecouldsuchanannoyingboydo?“Hemusthavehittheboyandwassenthome,”Iwhisperedtomyfriends.Theireyeswidened.ItfeltgoodtoseethemsointerestedinwhatIsaid.Thenextmorning,thewholeschoolwastalkingaboutDelbeingexpelled(開除)forbeatingupakid.Iwassurprisedthatmyassumptionswerepassedonsoquickly.SowhenDelwalkedintotheclassroom,allthekidswereshocked.Thekidsnexttohimshiftedtheirdesksaway.“What’syourproblem?”Delasked.“Idon'twantyoutoattackme,”onekidsaid.Somelaughed.“Yeah,Imight,”saidDel.Icouldtellhewasjoking,butmanykidsthoughtheadmittedhedidbeatupsomeone.Duringrecess(課間休息),Deltriedtojointhekickballgame.“Neitherteamwantsyou,”oneoftheplayerssaid.“Why?”Delasked,lookingconfused.“Ialwaysplaywithyouguys.”Theyignoredhimandwentonplaying.Delsatbyhimselfwhiletherestoftheschoolenjoyedtheirrecessawayfromhim.Dellookedlonelyandsad,muchdifferentfrombefore.Istartedtofeelsorryforhim.Laterthatday,Ilearnedwhatreallyhappened.ThekidwasDel'slittlebrotherandhewascryingbecausetheirmotherfellillandwassenttohospital.IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.Istartedarumor(謠言).Paragraph1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.Paragraph2:NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecess.故事大意概括：“我”不喜歡Del，因?yàn)镈el總是用貶義的昵稱“Germy”稱呼“我”，而不是“我”的真名Jamie。當(dāng)Del被老師叫去辦公室，“我”誤以為Del又做了壞事，并且在學(xué)校里傳播了這個(gè)謠言，導(dǎo)致Del被同學(xué)們排斥。后來，“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)真相：Del的弟弟因?yàn)槟赣H生病住院而哭泣，Del并沒有做錯(cuò)事從P2得知，續(xù)寫第一段主要描寫“我”向Del道歉，并得到了他的原諒續(xù)寫第二段主要寫“我”做了哪些事來化解謠言對(duì)Del的影響。續(xù)寫第一段思路：P1:

我看到Del獨(dú)自坐著。銜接部分可以繼續(xù)對(duì)Del進(jìn)行描寫，突顯出他的傷心難過。然后用角色互動(dòng)的方式來推動(dòng)情節(jié)展開我：看到Del的失落，“我”感到內(nèi)疚（情緒），“于是，走向Del（動(dòng)作），道歉”Del:

聽到“我”的道歉后，他的反應(yīng)“有些吃驚，片刻后，還是原諒了我”我：看到Del的情緒變化“失落的情緒得到了緩和”續(xù)寫第二段思路P2：“我”決定多做一些事。銜接部分應(yīng)該是“我”開始做什么。所謂“造謠一張嘴，辟謠跑斷腿”“我”要辟謠，需要先…,

再…

然后…

最后…“先找?guī)讉€(gè)朋友說明謠言”然后“朋友們?cè)偃ジ麄兊呐笥殉吻濉弊詈螅嫦嘀饾u擴(kuò)散到整個(gè)校園升華下水文1P1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.Hisshoulderswereslumped,hiskneesdrawnuptohischest,andhisarmswrappedaroundthem.（感官細(xì)節(jié)描寫，突顯Del

的失落）IfeltapangofguiltasIrememberedhowquicklyIhadjudgedhimandspreadthatharmfulrumor.

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看到Del的失落，“我”為自己之前所做感到內(nèi)疚）Takingadeepbreath,Iwalkedoverandsatdownbesidehim.

（動(dòng)作鏈的使用；套句做了一點(diǎn)修改）"Hey,Del,"Istarted,“I'msorryabouteverything.Ishouldn'thavespreadthoserumorswithoutknowingthetruth.Iknownowthatyouwerejustworriedaboutyourbrotherandyourmom."

（道歉的內(nèi)容，協(xié)同閱讀）Del'seyeswidenedslightly,andforamoment,hejuststaredatme,asiftryingtoprocessmywords.（聽到“我”的道歉后,Del的反應(yīng)：感官細(xì)節(jié)）"Thanks,Jamie,"hesaidquietly,hisvoicetingedwithsurprise."Iappreciateyoutellingmethat.Iforgiveyou."

（Del回應(yīng)我的道歉。）Ashespoke,Icouldseethetensioninhisshoulderseaseslightly,andhiseyessoftened,thecloudofsadnessliftingjustabit.

（道歉讓Del心情好了些，但是這還不夠，銜接P2）P2：NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecessended.Igathered

afewofmyfriendsandexplainedthattherumorsaboutDelwereuntrue.

（第一步）Together,

weapproachedtheotherkidsandsharedwhatwehadlearnedaboutDel'sbrotherandtheirmom.

（第二步）Slowly,

thetruthbegantosinkin,andthehostilitytowardsDelstartedtodissipate.

（我的行動(dòng)起了作用）Bytheendofrecess,somekidsevenapologizedtoDelandinvitedhimtojointhenextkickballgame.

（具體化作用）升華Reflectingonthisexperience,Irealizedhowdamagingrumorscanbeandhowimportanttoseekthetruthandunderstandsomeone'scircumstancesbeforepassingjudgment.使用了較多課上所講的細(xì)節(jié)描寫，所以字?jǐn)?shù)遠(yuǎn)超要求。不過，Highlight部分的描寫，算是常用套句，值得背誦。下水文2Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.

Thesightofhisisolatedfigure

tuggedatmyheartstrings.

Ashamedandembarrassed,Itookadeepbreath,

approachedhiminchbyinch

andsatbesidehim.Atthesightofme,

hiseyebrownarrowed,

withamixtureofsurpriseandconfusion.I

loweredmyhead,murmuring,“Sorry,Del.ItwasIwhospreadtherumorthatyouhitthelittleboy.”Hiseyeswidenedinsurprise,Icouldfeelsomethinginhisvoice

soundedmorehurtthanangry.Butamomentlater,hepattedmyshouldergentlyandrepliedinasoftvoice,“It’sokay,Jamie.I’malsosorryforcallingyournickname.”

Itwasthefirsttimehe’dusedmyrealname.IwasdelightedthatIgothisforgiveness.(125詞)NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.

I

gatheredmycourage,walkedupintothefrontandbeganto

callforothers’attention.

Allthekidsstoppedkickingtheballandexchangedconfusedlookswitheachother.

I

clearedmythroatandexplainedwhatactuallyhappened.Ifeltasenseofreliefwellingupinmyheartandsurgingthroughmeaftermyconfession.Muc