廣東省深圳市高考二模英語續(xù)寫作文課件

Takeactiontosavethepark第二節(jié)（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OnahotSeptemberafternoon,PeterandhisfriendIsabelwereontheirwaytothelibrary.WhentheypassedbyTubmanpark,Isabelsuggestedcuttingthroughittogettothelibrary.Astheyenteredthepark,thesightoftheswings(秋千)andthemerry-go-roundbroughtbackafloodofmemoriesoftheirchildhoodspentthere.Butnoweverythinglookedsoold,sad,anddirty.Litterlayonthegroundnexttoanoverflowingtrashbin.Therewerestillyoungschoolchildrenplayingtherebuttheyhadtoavoidthetrashthatlitteredtheplayground.Alittleboytoldthemthatthecitytooktheothertrashcansawayandtheremainingonenevergotemptiedoften.Astheyheadedtowardthelibrary,thetwohighschoolstudentswrinkledtheirforehead.Inthelibrary,theyencounteredMrs.Evans,theirkind-heartedfifth-gradeteacher,retiredyetstillpassionate.Mrs.EvanslistenedasIsabelandPetereagerlyexplainedwhatthey’dseen.Finally,sherecommendedthemtogototheCityHalltovoicetheirconcerns.Thenextday,IsabelandPeterwentintothebuildingoftheCityHallbutweremetwithanimpatientofficer.Theywereinformedthatthecitycouldn’thelpwiththeirproblemduetoatightbudget.Discouraged,theyleftandturnedtoMrs.Evansforhelp.Underherguidance,theydecidedtoaskGoGreen,anon-profitorganizationwhosegoalistoprotecttheenvironment,forhelp.“Thisgroupisgoodatraisingmoneyforprojectsjustlikeyours,”saidMrs.Evans.ShepromisedtoarrangethemtopresenttheirideastoGoGreen.Hearingthis,theirfacelitup.Twomaintasksremainedahead:researchingwaystocleanuptheparkandpreparingaconvincingpresentation.AsIsabelwasgoodatresearchingwhilePeteralwayshadatalentforspeaking,theycooperatedquitewell.Isabellearnedfromasciencemagazinethatanewtypeoftrashbincansqueezethetrashdownwithoutbeingemptiedoften,whichsavestime,money,andenergy.Basedonthis,Peterpracticedhispresentationoverandoveragain.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.Step3:Prediction

通讀全文，把握文本的脈絡(luò)在此基礎(chǔ)上確定故事情節(jié)發(fā)展的方向。Step1

TheplottingWho:Peter,Isabel,Mrs.Evans,impatientofficer,GoGreen(組織);Where:Tubmanpark,library,GoGreen;When:ahotSeptemberafternoon;What:PeterandIsabelcutthroughTubmanpark,whichoncegavethemalotofhappychildhoodmemories,tothelibrary,butfounditlitteredandmessyduetolimitedtrashcansandemptying.TheyaskedMrs.EvansforhelpandwereadvisedtovoicetheirconcernintheCityHall.However,theywerediscouragedbytheofficer’sresponse.Again,theywentbacktoEvans,whoaskedthemtoturntoGoGreen,anenvironmentalorganization,andarrangedthemtomakeapresentation.Theycooperatedwell,oneresearchingonanewtrashcanwithoutbeingemptiedoften,theotherpreparingforapresentation…How/why:Torecovertheparktoacleanonebytakingactiontogethelpfromdifferentparties.

TheplottingBriefintroduction/Backgroundinfo:OnahotSeptemberafternoon,ontheirwaytothelibraryPeterandhisfriendIsabelfoundTubmanParkfulloflitterandmessy.Theparkwasfulloftheirchildhoodmemories.Thebeginning:Theyknewthetrashcansweretakenaway,andtheexistingoneswereseldomemptied.Thedevelopment:TheyturnedtoMrs.Evansforhelp,whoadvisedthemtoconsultCityHallbutwerediscouragedattheresponse.OneClimax:Undertheteacher’sguidance,theydecidedtoaskGoGreenforhelp,andMrs.Evansarrangedthemtopresenttheirideas.Theycooperatedwitheachother.Oneisresponsibleforpresentation,andtheotherforresearchingintopossibleapproaches.Thebiggerclimax:Howwastheirpresentation?Weretheirideasaccepted?Wastheparkrestoredtoitspreviousstate?3.Whataretheplotsgiveninthereadingpart?（給出信息）九月一下午PeterandIsabel抄近道TubmanPark去圖書館，發(fā)現(xiàn)童年美好記憶的公園已垃圾滿地，了解到一些垃圾桶被帶走，現(xiàn)有垃圾清理頻率也低；→Mrs.Evans傾聽了兩位的陳述，建議向theCityHall求助;→在市政大廳不耐煩的官員告訴他們預(yù)算有限，無法解決，小伙們伴很沮喪，再次向MrsEvans求援；→MrsEvans指點迷津要他們找GoGreen綠色慈善組織，并想辦法安排他們在組織做陳述；→兩位立馬行動分工合作，一個負(fù)責(zé)演講，另一個負(fù)責(zé)研究問題解決的新科技,基于此Peter反復(fù)練習(xí)演講部分…Paragraph1:Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.

Paragraph2:Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.ThequalityandstatusoftherolesPeterenthusiastichelpfulresponsibledeterminedeloquenteagerreminiscentIsabelenthusiasticresponsiblegoodatresearchingcreativeeagerreminiscentMrs.Evanskind-heartedhelpfulpassionateresourcefulKeyWordsThesewordsorinformationdeservetobeinyourcontinuationtask.1.concern2.trash3.presentation4.park這些詞值得在你的續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)，讓前后文連貫。

Theme1.Takeresponsibilityforenvironment.2.Takeactiontocontributeourshare/bittotheenvironmentalprotection.3.Neverstandbyidlybutgetinvolvedinthegoodcause,environmentalprotection.TransformationofemotionsandfeelingsNervousness–seriousness–nervousness–excitement–enthusiasm–senseoffulfillment演講陳述前的緊張感-演講中的嚴(yán)肅認(rèn)真-等待結(jié)果的緊張-得知結(jié)果后的興奮-投入環(huán)境工作的熱忱-工作成果的滿足感1.把握內(nèi)容要點所給首句：閱讀每一段中的首句，進(jìn)行布局、解讀。在布局第一段的內(nèi)容時，要兼顧兩段的首句：第二段的首句決定著第一段的走向。1:Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.2:Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.Step2審題與構(gòu)思注意：第一段續(xù)寫要巧妙銜接第二段，陳述方案一定要通過-對應(yīng)好消息。Step3:Outlinethepossibleplotsorevents

ineachparagraph.1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右,主線清楚;描寫視角是萬能角度；2.關(guān)鍵人物和角色隨故事情節(jié)邏輯發(fā)展轉(zhuǎn)變自然，人稱保持一致;3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好;用過去時態(tài)；4.確定好續(xù)寫情節(jié)，用合理句型和直接引語表達(dá);原文段末交代兩個主要任務(wù)，在續(xù)寫中都需要解決，第一：完成演講陳述任務(wù)，第二：新型垃圾桶的采用解決公園垃圾問題。Whattowrite?段1首句:1.Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.1.HowdidPeterfeelandwhatwerehisgesturesinthissituation?(增加情緒、肢體語言、思想描寫和心理活動)2.HowdidPeterpresenthisideasinthemeeting?（列舉出舉措比如保護(hù)公園的重要性，高科技垃圾桶的解決方案等）3.WhatwastheresponseoreyecontactwithjudgesorIsabelandMrsEvans?4.HowdidPeterfeelafterthespeech?Thecore:Howdidhepresenthisideaandmeasures?

Whattowrite?段2首句：2:Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.1.Whatwasthegoodnews?2.HowwouldGoGreensupporttheirplan?3.Didtheygethelpfromothersintheformofdonationsorparticipation?4.Howdidtheyinvolvethemselvesinrestoringthepark?4.Whatweretheirgainsorfeelingsoracknowledgmentstheygot?Thecore:1.Whatwasthenews?2.Howdidtheyrestorethepark? 3.Sublimation

Nervousness1.當(dāng)聽到自己的名字后，Elias可以聽到自己的心跳聲甚至緊張的呼吸聲。Whenhearinghis

namecalled,Eliascouldhearhisownheartbeatandevennervousbreaths.2.他如此緊張以致他可以感覺到手心出汗心臟猛跳。Sonervouswashethathecouldfeelhispalmssweatingandhisheartpoundingviolently.ExcitementandJoy1.聽到方案被委員會通過Peter內(nèi)心狂喜。Peterwaswildwithjoywhenhearinghisschemewasapprovedbythecommittee.2.消息讓他一陣興奮，讓他確信成功就在眼前。Thenewssentarippleofexcitementthroughhim,convincinghim

ofthesuccesscloseathand.3.喜不自勝，Peter抱著Isabel慶祝他們的合作成功。Transportedwithpleasure/Delightedbeyondmeasure/Beamingwithpleasure,PeterhuggedIsabelandcelebratedtheirsuccessofcooperation.情節(jié)表達(dá)1.HequicklycalmeddownandclickedhisPowerPoint,_________somepicturesofthepreviousTubmanPark_____________________________.他迅速鎮(zhèn)定下來打開ppt,上面的Tubman公園的之前圖片吸引了委員們的注意。2.戴著嚴(yán)肅的表情，Peter陳述了他恢復(fù)公園往日榮光的計劃。_________________________________,Peterstatedhisschemeon_____________________________.3.雖然之前精心準(zhǔn)備，但走上臺的那一刻,Peter仍然覺得緊張，雙腿微微發(fā)抖。Though_______________________,asPetercametothepodium,hestillfeltnervous,________________________.4.緊張地瞟了一眼Mrs.Evans，Peter終于鎮(zhèn)定下來講述著他的方案。_______________________________,Billyfinallycomposedhimself__________________________.howtorestoretheparktoitspreviousglorywithhislegstremblingslightlyFlickinganervousglanceatMrs.EvansandexpandeduponhisplanWearingaseriouslookonhisfacewellpreparedbeforehandonwhichcaughtthecommittee’sattention情節(jié)表達(dá)(1)

消息對于他們是鼓舞，讓他們心里充滿了熱情和感恩。Thenewscame_________________________,fillingtheirheart_________________________.(2)

_____________________wereMrsEvansandIsabel,__________________________Peter’spowerfulspeechandthumbedathim.MrsEvansandIsabel在會場，她們也被深深感動朝他豎起了大拇指。(3)Wildwithjoy,Isabelsharedthegoodnewsonhersocialmedia,________________________________.欣喜若狂，Isabel在社交媒體上分享了好消息得到了更多積極回饋。(4)Somepeopleinquiredaboutthedate________________andeventhenewtrashbincompanypromisedto_________________________________.人們打聽日期為了參與，垃圾桶公司承諾成本價提供產(chǎn)品。Presentatthemeetingwhowerealsodeeplyimpressedbyreceivingmorepositiveresponsessoastogetinvolvedsupplytheirproductsatacostpricewithenthusiasmandgratitudeasagreatinspirationtoallofthem2.

Sublimation(1)Wehaveamoralresponsibilitytoprotecttheenvironmentandensurethatallofus_______________________________________________.我們都有道德上的義務(wù)去保護(hù)環(huán)境確保我們有健康可維持的環(huán)境居住。(2)

Theloveforourselvesis__________________________________.愛自己就是愛護(hù)環(huán)境。(3)Theonlywayforward,________________________________,istotakeactionandgeteveryoneinvolved.如果要保護(hù)環(huán)境，我們的前進(jìn)之路就是要采取行動讓大家都參與。(4)ConservingtheenvironmentstartswithmebecauseIknowthat_______________________________________.保護(hù)環(huán)境由我開始因為我知道自己不出力別人也不會。haveahealthyandsustainableenvironmentinwhichtolivethelovetoprotecttheenvironmentifwewanttopreserveourenvironmentifIdon’thelpnooneelsewilleither

Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.Butdeterminationandresponsibilitydrovehimon.Afterthehost’sintroduction,Petertookadeepbreathandsteppedtothepodium.Thoughbutterfliesinhisstomach,PetersolemnlystatedwhattheParkwaslikeinhismemoryandhowimportanttheparkwastothecommunity.TheninPowerPoint,Petershowedhowthenewtrashbinfunctionedinthepublicareas,wheremanpowerandresourceswerelimited,tryingtoproveitsfeasibility.Attheendofhispresentation,Peterconcluded,“Wecan’taffordtoloseourparadise,andit’sourresponsibilitytoprotectit.”Applauseranthroughthehall.Andthecommitteeexchangedtheirthoughts,withanapprovinglookontheirfaces.Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.Thecommitteereachedaconsensusabouttheneedtorestoreandprotectthepark.Theywouldnotonlyfundtheschemeofthenewtrashbinbutorganizevolunteerstoengageinclear-upwork.Thenewsspreadrapidly,gettingmorepeopleinvolved.SoonTubmanParkrestoredtoitsformerlook,cleanandtidyagain.Besides,withthenewtrashbinsfurnished,thetroublebotheringthecommunityforlongwasresolved.WalkingalongwithPeterandIsabelintherefreshedpa