高三英語一輪復習讀后續(xù)寫之動作描寫3課件

讀后續(xù)寫之動作描寫3主語+動作A+動作Band動作C(三個并列謂語,動作依次發(fā)生)(doingsth.)，主+謂主+謂,(doingsth.)主+謂,(doingsth.)and(doingsth.)(doingsth.)，主+謂，(doingsth.)Donebysth.，主語+謂語,doing動作鏈思路一：按照時間軸，把動作拆解成飽滿的動作鏈(描述一系列動作)思路二：構(gòu)造動作面(動作和伴隨狀態(tài))在同一時間點，描寫不同的角度，剪接在一起。從整體→局部，從肢體→面部→語言/心理描寫，從多個角度描繪一個場景。拆解動作描寫03Strategy3:ActionScenes動作面EmotionsDialoguesInnerthought4Actions動作面IDEAS=動作+心理，對話，情感，環(huán)境Surroundings123451Iwalkedthroughaforest.2Iadmiredthelandscape.34IfeltIwasbeingwatched.Isawaviolentbear.5Itookaphotoofthebear.Thebearranaway.①Iwalkedthroughaforest.②Iadmiredthelandscape.③IfeltIwasbeingwatched.④Isawaviolentbear.

⑤Itookaphotoofthebear.⑥Thebearranaway.12

Fillintheblankstocompletethestory:當我正聚精會神地拍攝這驚人的景觀時,我突然感覺有什么在盯著我。我慢慢地轉(zhuǎn)身,相機還端在眼前……然后我僵住了。那是一只熊,離我只有幾米遠。它也盯著我,水珠從厚厚的棕色皮毛上滴下來。時間凝固了,我和熊都等著看誰會先動。我的雙腿開始顫抖。但我竟然還硬是按下了快門。一秒鐘過后,那頭熊轉(zhuǎn)身跑回了森林。等我從震驚中緩過神來,我查看了相機。這個可怕至極卻又如此神奇的經(jīng)歷已經(jīng)被永久地定格在一張照片中。

WhileIwasconcentratingonphotographingthisamazingscene,IsuddenlyhadafeelingthatIwasbeingwatched.Slowly,andwiththecamerastillheldtomyeye,Iturned…and1.

______.Onlymetresawayfrommewasabear.Withwaterfallingoffitsthick,brownhair,thebearstaredbackatme.2.______________asthebearandIbothwaitedtoseewhowouldmovefirst.3.

.Somehow,Iforcedmyfingertopressthebutton.Asecondlater,thebearturnedandranbackintotheforest.WhenI4.______________________Ilookedatmycamera.Mymost5._____________________________wasnowcapturedforeverinasingleimage.

frozeTimestoodstillMylegsstartedshakingrecoveredfromtheshockfrighteningbutmagicalexperience1.Nezhajumpedoffthewall.3.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.6.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullywithhiseyeswideopenandjumpedoffthewallbrisklyinhighspirits.

5.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbrisklyinhighspirits.2.Nezhaheard

mom'swords,smiledandjumpedoffthewall.4.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly.1.Nezhajumpedoffthewall.3.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.6.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfully

withhiseyeswideopenandjumpedoffthewallbriskly

inhighspirits.

5.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly

inhighspirits.2.Nezhaheardmom'swords,smiledandjumpedoffthewall.4.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly.(UseA,BandC)(Usenon-finiteverbs)(Addadverbs)(Addprepsitionalphrases)(Addwithstructure)

Nezhasmiled___________andjumpedoffthewall_________.

Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.

cheerfullyquickly

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修飾語）1)Addadverbs（添加副詞）Themanletoutascream_________,ranaway_________

andjumpedintothewell_________.這位男子緊張地尖叫，趕緊跑開，勇敢地跳入井中。nervouslyhurriedlybravely

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修飾語）1)Addadverbs（添加副詞）

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修飾語）1)Addadverbs（添加副詞）副詞(短語)可放在整句話，

形容詞或動詞的前或后。1.幸運的是，除了腳踝扭傷外，情況并不嚴重。

,nothingwasseriousexceptasprainedankle.2.伯納有禮貌而興奮地請他們教他如何做爆米花。(2020年新高考I卷)

,Bernardaskedthemtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.

PolitelyandexcitedlyLuckily

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修飾語）2)Addadjective（添加形容詞）Atthatmoment,__________________________________,JeffandJennawinkedattheirfatherstandingbesidethem.1.在那一刻，Jeff和Jenna非常自豪和高興，他們向站在他們身邊的父親眨了眨眼。（winkatsb.）extremelyproudand

overjoyed

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修飾語）1)Addadjective（添加形容詞）2.簡天剛亮就起床了，又餓又渴。Janeroseatthebreakofday,.3.幸運的是，安然無恙地登上直升飛機。(2020浙江卷)Fortunately,wegotinthehelicopter,.4.他繼續(xù)跑，汗流浹背，精疲力竭。(2022新高考卷1)Hekeptrunning,

.hungryandthirstysweatyandexhaustedsafeandsound

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介詞短語）

Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly.

Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介詞短語）excitement/delight/joysurprise/amazementwith/in+情緒名詞grief/sorrow/lowspiritsanger/annoyancepanic/fear/horrorWhenNezhacame,thevillagersfledoutofthehouse__________________________.

inahurry/ingreatfear/inpanic

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介詞短語）toone’ssurprise等表情感的名詞without…1.令我吃驚的是，他的腳踝扭傷得很厲害。

,hisanklewassprainedbadly.2.我不假思索地跪在他身邊，支持他。

,Ikneltdownbesidehimandofferedmysupport.MuchtomysurpriseWithoutthinking

Tip3:AddWith復合結(jié)構(gòu)Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits.Nezhasmiled

cheerfully

____________________andjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits.withhiseyeswideopen

Tip3:AddWith復合結(jié)構(gòu)1.這位男子緊張地尖叫，拳頭攥緊(clench)。Themanletoutascreamnervously,____________________________.withhisfistsclenched

Tip3:AddWith復合結(jié)構(gòu)2.老師手里拿著書走進來。Theteachercamein

.withabookinhishand3.錢丟了，她不知如何是好。

,shewasatalosswhattodo.Withhermoneylost

Tip3:AddWith復合結(jié)構(gòu)我一個人躺著，頭靠在電話上。想你直到心痛。I’mlyingalonewithmyheadonthephone.Thinkingofyoutillithurts.WatchthevideoandfillintheblanksJack

Oneday,hecametoanewschool...alovelycreaturewithspines(刺)

/spa?n/Jack

thewholeclass.Then,Jack

tohisseat,buthe

_____________lotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwas

onhisspines.Jack

andfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedto

him.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.He

hiseyesandalmost

.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.

WordBankknockedoff,stuck,lowered,cried,playedwith,greeted,sidled（側(cè)身）,frozeWatchthevideoandfillintheblanksJack

thewholeclass.Then,Jack

tohisseat,buthe

_____________lotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwas

onhisspines.Jack

andfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedto

him.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.He

hiseyesandalmost

.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.

WordBankknockedoff,stuck,lowered,cried,playedwith,greeted,sidled（側(cè)身）,frozeWatchthevideoandfillintheblanksgreetedsidledknockedoffstuckfrozeplaywithloweredcriedJackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.Practice:Group-workPolishtheactiondescriptionbyusingthegivenstrategies.Jackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.ActionchainUse“v-ing”asanadverbial.Use“with-structure”asanadverbial.Use“adjective”asanadverbial.UpgradevocabularyUseinanimatesubjectsentences.PresentyourideasJackgreetedthewholeclass.Jackglancedathisnewclassmates,wavedhishandandgreetedthemwithasmile.

Paragraph1ActionchainPresentyourideas

Jacksidled（側(cè)身而行）tohisseat.Butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Paragraph1Jacksidledtohisseat,knockingoff

lotsofbooks.Use“v-ing”asanadverbial.PresentyourideasThefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.

Withthefootballstuckonhisspines,Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.

Paragraph2Use“with-structure”asanadverbial.Presentyourideas

Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.Paragraph2Lonelyandheart-broken,

heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.Use“adjective”asanadverbial.Presentyourideas“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.“Let’skeepitasecret!”whisperedTom.

Paragraph3UpgradevocabularyPresentyourideas

Jackwasunhappy.Paragraph3AstrongsenseofdepressionseizedJackwhenhewasleftaloneintheclassroom.Useinanimatesubjectsentences.Jackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Gradually,noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom....TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.Jack

glancedat

hisnewclassmates,wavedhishandandgreeted

themwithasmile.Afterwards,Jacksidledtohisseat,knockingofflotsofbooks,however....

Withthefootballstuckonhisspines,Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassedwhenplayingwithhisclassmates.Gradually,noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Lonelyandheart-broken,heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”whisperedTom....Instantly,astrongsenseofdepressionseizedJackwhenhewasleftaloneintheclassroom.Summary(Mind-map)

Strategy1.actionchains：S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...,anddoing...,S+V3

Strategy2.①:generalwords→specificwords

②:abstractwords→concretewords

Strategy3.actionscenes：

Combinethedescriptionsofactions,facialexpressions,psychologytogethertocreateasceneofactions.Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?41練習患有腦疾的小男孩David參加越野比賽，賽前他信心動搖想要放棄，“我“鼓勵他積極面對困難，戰(zhàn)勝自我，David接受了我的建議，盡管困難重重他依然勇敢地完成了比賽，贏得其了同學們的喝彩。(選自2022年高考全國1卷)Consolidation:completethefollowingparagraphfeaturingaseriesofactions請運用所學技巧續(xù)寫故事第二段：Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①__________________________________（轉(zhuǎn)過頭來看著我）andI②__________________________（我豎起大拇指向他示意，我為他感到驕傲）He③_________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口氣，準備比賽，眼里充滿決心）.Withabang,everyrunner④______________(跑得像箭一樣快).He⑤________________________________________________（盡管腳步異常，還是用盡全身力氣跑）.Eventually，hefinishedtherunning.AsDavid,thelastone,madeittothefinishingline,⑥__________________________.(時間像靜止了一樣)Thunderousapplausebrokeout,withthenameDavidechoingagainandagain.43He①__________________________________（轉(zhuǎn)過頭來看著我）Heturnedhisheadandlookingatme.Heturnedhisheadaroundandlookedatme.Heturnedhisheadaroundtolookatme.45I②__________________________（我豎起大拇指向他示意，我為他感到驕傲）

andfeltproudofhim.Isignaledtohimwithathumbs-up,feelingproudofhim.Isignaledtohimwithathumbs-upHe③_____________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口氣，準備比賽，眼里充滿決心）.Hesmiled,tookadeepbreathandpreparedfortherace,andhiseyeswasfullofdetermination.Hesmiled,tookadeepbreathandgotreadyfortherace,withdeterminationinhiseyes.Withabang,everyrunner④____