高考英語讀后續(xù)寫專題之救援類+生死瞬間：馬里蘭海岸大橋上的救援+講義

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwasabrightMayafternoonalongtheMarylandcoast,andJonathanBauer,51,atechnologyexecutiveatahospital,andhis13-year-olddaughter,Ava,weretakingfulladvantageofit.Theyweredrivingwiththewindowsdownastheyheadedhomeonthe14-mile-long,two-laneRoute90bridge,whichspanstheshallowwatersofAssawomanBay.Suddenly,thecalmwasdisturbedbythesquealoftires.Notfaraheadofthem,ablackpickupwasslidingfromonelanetotheother.TotheBauers’horroritcrashedintoaconcretebarrierovertheSUVdirectlyaheadofthem,andcametoresthangingovertherailingofthebridge.Bauerhitthebrakesintimetoavoidthevehiclesinhispath,butaBMWcarthathadsmashedintotheguardrailontherightcameslidingbackwardtowardhim.Heturnedleft,buttoolatetheBMWstruckhisVolvo’sfenderbeforecrashingintothevehiclebehindhim.Bauerstoppedthecar.“Ava,areyouOK?heasked,Shewasshaken,butotherwiseunhurt.

HerantotheBMW.“AreyouOK?”heaskedthedriver.Shenodded,tooshockedtospeak.Itcamefromthepickup,whichhadcometorestonitsrightside.Thepassengeratthebackofthepickupandtruckbedhungoutpasttheguardrail,30ormorefeetabovethewatersofthebay.Thedriver’sdoorthrewopenandamanclimbedout.Hedroppedtotheground.Bauerranupbesidehim.Themanpointeddown,sayingsomethinginSpanish.Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Amomentlater,ThelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意51歲的喬納森?鮑爾和他13歲的女兒艾娃在馬里蘭州沿海的一座橋上開車回家。突然，平靜被打破，前方一輛黑色皮卡失控撞上一輛SUV并卡在橋欄桿上，隨后一輛寶馬撞上護(hù)欄后向后滑向鮑爾的車，鮑爾停車確認(rèn)女兒沒事后，發(fā)現(xiàn)皮卡事故中有更嚴(yán)重的情況。皮卡側(cè)翻，后排乘客懸在橋外30多英尺的水面上方，而且水里還有一個(gè)汽車座椅和一個(gè)約兩歲的小女孩。五要素分析人物：?jiǎn)碳{森?鮑爾、艾娃、皮卡司機(jī)、寶馬司機(jī)、落水小女孩等。時(shí)間：五月一個(gè)晴朗的下午。地點(diǎn)：馬里蘭州沿海的90號(hào)公路橋。起因：一系列交通事故。經(jīng)過：車輛碰撞，皮卡側(cè)翻，發(fā)現(xiàn)小女孩落水。結(jié)果：鮑爾準(zhǔn)備營救小女孩。幾處伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)伏筆：小女孩在水中危險(xiǎn)。回應(yīng)：第一段續(xù)寫鮑爾爬下橋去救小女孩，展現(xiàn)水中救援過程和他的勇敢。伏筆：鮑爾靠近小女孩?；貞?yīng)：第二段續(xù)寫鮑爾抱住小女孩，帶著她往岸邊返回，體現(xiàn)對(duì)小女孩的保護(hù)。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段情感線：緊張、急切，鮑爾看到小女孩危險(xiǎn)后毫不猶豫地行動(dòng)，情況危急令人揪心。故事線：描述鮑爾下水救小女孩的過程，包括他克服困難和安撫小女孩。第二段情感線：安心，鮑爾抱住小女孩，讓讀者懸著的心放下。故事線：鮑爾帶著小女孩往岸邊走，有旁人協(xié)助，凸顯救援成功在望。主旨升華句Inthefaceofdanger,humankindnessandcourageshinebrightlylikealighthouse.Aheroicactinacrisismomentcanbethemostbeautifulmelodyofhumanity.Whendisasterstrikes,theinstincttosavealiferevealsthenoblesideofournature.Everylifeisprecious,andarescuerisanangelinthedarkesthour.Inthechaosofanaccident,ahelpinghandholdsthehopeoflifeandlove.寫作示范第一篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'sheartracedasheassessedthesituation.Withoutasecondthought,heshedhisshoesanddoveintothewater.Thewaveswerestrongerthanheexpected,buthefoughtthroughthem.Hereachedoutforthegirlasshebobbedupanddown,hercriesfuelinghisdetermination.Thecoldwaternumbedhislimbs,buthekeptgoing,inchingclosertotheterrifiedchild.

Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Withaburstofenergy,helungedforwardandgrabbedher.Sheclungtohim,hertinyhandsgrippinghisshirt.Bauerheldherclose,feelinghershiveringbody.Hewhisperedwordsofcomfortashebegantoswimback,theonlookersabovecheeringhimon.第二篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauerfeltasenseofurgencywashoverhim.Hequicklymadehiswaydownthebridge,ignoringthescrapesandbruises.Asheenteredthewater,itwasastruggleagainstthecurrent.Heusednearbydebristosteadyhimselfandreachedtowardsthegirl.Hecalledouttohergently,tryingtogetherattention.

Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Bauerstretchedhisarmasfarashecould.Whenhefinallygotholdofher,hefeltahugerelief.Hewrappedhisarmsaroundherprotectively.Thewaterseemedlesscoldandthetasklessdauntingwiththegirlinhisarms.Hestartedmakinghiswayback,followingtheguidanceofthepeopleonthebridge.第三篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'smindwentblankexceptforthethoughtofsavingher.Heclambereddownthebridgestructure,hishandsgettingscratched.Onceinthewater,hehadtobattletheswirlingcurrent.Hefocusedonthegirl,herlittlefigureinthebigexpanseofwater.Heswamwithallhismight,hiseyesneverleavingher.

Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Bauermusteredallhisstrengthandswamthelastfewfeet.Hegraspedthegirlfirmly.Shewascryinghysterically,andBauerheldhertighter.Hetoldheritwouldbeokay.Withnewfoundenergy,hestartedbacktowardstheshore,theshoutsofencouragementfromabovegivinghimmorestrength.參考答案Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'sheartlurchedatthesight.Withouthesitation,heclamberedoverthebridgerailing,ignoringtheheightandthedanger.Thesaltywindwhippedathisclothesashecarefullymadehiswaydowntheroughsurfaceofthebridgesupporttowardsthewater.Ashegotcloser,thewaterlookedevenmoremenacing,buthecouldn'tturnback.Hecalledouttothelittlegirlinagentlevoice,tryingtoreassureher.Somebystandersjoinedin,tryingtokeepthegirlcalmfromabove.Bauerfinallyreachedt