2025年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫熱考話題素材練習

專題二熱考話題素材

熱考話題1挑戰(zhàn)自我

困難性格內向、身體缺陷體、面對要完成的任務不白信、害怕、恐懼等

自我激勵或他人鼓勵（白我反思；師長、家人、朋友等的幫助和鼓勵）

戰(zhàn)螃難K挑戰(zhàn)過程及結果（直面恐懼、迎難而上、最終挑戰(zhàn)成功）

挑戰(zhàn)自我

注重突出人物在受到激勵后以及直面挑戰(zhàn)時的心理變化、挑戰(zhàn)過程中人物

細節(jié)刻畫的具體動作細節(jié)

的q重拾勇氣、自信；突破自我、戰(zhàn)勝自我等

[2022新高考I]Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinand

aroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfor

tenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeother

children.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.nIwasafraidthatkidsfrom

otherschoolswouldlaughathim,"heexplainedunfortably.nIgavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide."

Ibitbackmyfrustration。懊寸齒）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell——hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.After

makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsideto

sideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis

classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.

ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecrosscountryteam.Itjusttookhim

longer—that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheother

children,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavid

facedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

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主要人物David：從文中的描述”smallfortenyearsold""bigtoothysmile""hadworkedsohardforthis

event""hadabraindisease""alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability”和“hadnotmissedasinglepractice"

可知，David身患殘疾但積極樂觀、意志堅強。

人物

次要人物T'：從文中的描述”makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted"和"familiarwiththechallenges

Davidfaced”“proudofhisstrongdetermination可以看出，“我”是一個關愛學生的老師，也暗示了續(xù)寫部

分應有“我”與David溝通并試圖勸說他參加比賽以及David聽從勸說并以堅強的意志完成比賽的情節(jié)。

原文最后一段中描述的"hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid"表明，同學們對David態(tài)度友

好，這也為續(xù)寫第二段David在賽場上時同學們的表現(xiàn)埋下了伏筆。

越野賽前得知David決定不參加比賽（David情緒低落，害怕被嘲笑）一找教練獲悉原因，回想

情節(jié)及

David雖患腦疾卻認真積極訓練（"我"為他感到自豪）一續(xù)寫第二段提示語，David走向起跑線（David

情感線

重拾勇氣和信心）。

根據(jù)讀后續(xù)寫“結局圓滿”的原則可知，David最終應該完成了比賽。再結合原文中David遇到的困

主題難一一行走不穩(wěn)、害怕被嘲笑等可知，文章最終的主題應該體現(xiàn)David直面挑戰(zhàn)、克服恐懼、戰(zhàn)勝自

己。

Step2構思框架

根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段的提示語可知，本段主要描述David從不愿參加越野跑，到走向起跑線參加比賽的轉

續(xù)寫

'〔變過程。涉及的人物是T和David,主要故事情節(jié)："我”開導、鼓勵David以及他對“我”的勸說的反

自一段

應，側重人物對話、動作、—表情和心理描寫。尾句銜接第二段提示語：David最終決定參加越野跑。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語可知，本段的故事情節(jié)應發(fā)生在越野賽跑線路上，涉及的主要人物是

續(xù)寫David,也可以呼應原文，加入“我”、教練和學生們的反應。主要故事情節(jié)：David在越野賽跑過程中

第二段的具體表現(xiàn)及比賽結果，側重人物在比賽過程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的動作、心理描寫。最終升華主

題，David戰(zhàn)勝了內心的恐懼。

Step3優(yōu)化細節(jié)

l.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.

①用形容詞作狀語改寫句子，使行文更連貫。

Inspired,hedecidedtohaveatry.

②運用連續(xù)動作描寫將David決定參賽這一過程細化。

Inspired,hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage,"Iwillhaveatry."

2.Theycheeredhimon.

①將人群具體到個人或一些人，因為“我”尤為關注David,所以他一摔倒，"我"應該是第一個作出反應的人，緊

接著是他的同學們。這樣使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然順暢。

Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.

②用as引導的時間狀語從句改寫句①，并運用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語改寫cheerhimon,使句子語法結構更豐富。

AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.

③為句②同學們的加油鼓勵增加具體的話語，使內容更富有畫面感。

AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.neon,David.Youcandoit1

“theyshoutedenthusiastically.

3.Davidfinishedtherun.

①使用具體的動作描寫表示David完成比賽，切合當時比賽的氛圍和場景。

Davidcrossedthefinishline.

②為句①增加對David通過終點線時人們的歡呼聲和喝彩聲的描寫，使情節(jié)自然，更具有畫面感。

Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

Step4欣賞佳作

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,withhislimbs

unavoidablyshaking."It'snottherealyou,David,"Ipattedhimgentlyontheback（輕輕地拍了拍他的后背）and

saidquietly.HYouhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun?"Iheldmybreath（屏

住呼吸）asDavidlookedup.Inspired,hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage（深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣），

HIwillhaveatry.'1

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thestarter5sgunsounded!Davidsparedno

efforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsI

startedtoshoutencouragement,hisclassmatesallappeared,cheeringhimon.Meon,David.Youcandoit!”they

shoutedenthusiastically.Touched,hepickedhimselfupandstartedagain.Finally,hecrossedthefinishlinewithwild

cheersandapplause.Excitementswallowedhim（他激動壞了）andheembracedmetightly.Atthattime,Iknewhe

hadalreadyoverethedarknessstuckinhismind（戰(zhàn)勝了他腦海中的陰霾）.

熱考話題2個人成長

精節(jié)構思.

情嬴1苦惱、憤懣等消極情緒，左右為難的兩難處境等

/J與師長談心、參與勞動、參加集體活動或發(fā)生某一特殊事件等使主人公轉變

［個人成長）I成長中I原有想法'態(tài)度等---------------------------------------------

7T成長后?理解師長用心、感受勞動魅力、體會活動意義等，獲得了個人感悟和成長

［2021浙江改編］Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmy

worldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedanduseditto

payfamilyexpenses.

Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過）

anythinghehadacplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparing

formyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（長

號）.

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.

Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywith

chemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.This

happenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb^quarters,foxtails,

andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughI

wasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."My

dad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.Idecided

itwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119-mydadwantedtotalktome.

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.

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主要人物George（mydad）：從文中的描述”Aquietman...Fromage14,heworked.Andhis

dad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses"和”I'mgladyouwillbe

contributingtothehousehold”可以看出，父親George是一個沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭責任感的人，

他認為“我”的打工所得也應該貼補家用。

人物主要人物T'：從文中的描述“1wouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadacplished"和"Idecideditwas

notfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney”可以看出，“我“志存高遠、不理解父親，并不認可父親將“我"

的打工所得“征收”的想法，這也是文章的沖突所在。

根據(jù)文中的"hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities"和"Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworld

either”可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，這為下文的發(fā)展埋下了伏筆。

“我”與父親相互不理解（"我“想超越他）一"我“到隔壁農場打工掙錢（期待能擁有這筆錢）一父

情節(jié)及

親想用這筆錢貼補家用（“我”感到不公，對繼續(xù)在農場打工失去興趣）一續(xù)寫第二段提示語，父親讓

情感線

"我"自己支配薪水（感到驚喜）。

._父親本來要讓"我"把打工的收入用來貼補家用，最后卻改變了主意，這應該會給“我"帶來觸動，

主題

因此，文章最終的主題應該展現(xiàn)“我”的成長、對父親的理解以及對家庭責任的認可。

Step2構思框架

根據(jù)原文及續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要描述父親與“我”談話的內容、過程以及“我”的反

續(xù)寫

、應，可以從動作、神態(tài)描寫體現(xiàn)“我”不情愿和不甘的心理狀態(tài)，以及父親在與“我”談話過程中對“我”

第一段

的理解。尾句銜接第二段的提示語：父親讓“我“留錢自用。

續(xù)寫結合原文和本段的提示語可知，本段應該描寫“我“聽到父親的決定后驚訝、興奮的心理狀態(tài)；

第二段與此同時，在續(xù)寫本段時還應呼應原文中的描述并凸顯主題，將“我”的反思和成長感悟展現(xiàn)出來。

StepT優(yōu)化細節(jié)

1.1wantedtoarguewithmydad.

①用具體的動作描寫代替want,體現(xiàn)“我“想留著錢的決心。

Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad.

②為句①增加條件狀語從句，使文章邏輯更嚴謹，前后銜接更連貫。

Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad,ifheannouncedthemoneywasn'tmine.

③為句②增加具體神態(tài)描寫，凸顯“我“想留著錢的渴望。

Withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck,Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad,ifheannouncedthe

moneywasn'tmine.

2.1wasunwillingtohandinthemoney.

用具體手部動作和心理活動描寫改寫優(yōu)化句子，體現(xiàn)“我”的不情愿。

Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly,readytoargue.

3.1feltashamed.

①用面部表情代替feelashamed,使表達更生動。

Iflushedwithshame.

②為句①增加原因狀語，并運用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，使感情轉變更加順暢自然。

Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim,Iflushedwithshame.

Step4欣賞佳作

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome——itwas$119——mydadwantedtotalktome.Hetoldmetowaitintheliving

roomforawhile.Isatonthesofa，withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck（眼睛盯著薪水），searchingmymindfor（腦

海里才叟索著）wordstoarguewithmydadifheannouncedthemoneywasn'tmine.Justthen,thedooropenedandin

camemydad.Themomenthesatdownbesideme,Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly（更力口牢牢地握住薪水），

readytoargue.However,hegentlyplacedhisrighthandonmyshoulder（輕輕地把他的右手放在我的肩上）and

said,"Iknowyouhavegrownupalotthroughyourwork...**Thentherewasalongpause.Hewithdrewhishand（X攵回

他的手）andslowlycontinued,"Youdeservethemoneyandthemoneyisyoursnow."

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Inamoment,Ididn'tknowwhattosay.With

thismoney,Icouldbuyanewfootball,oranewbike.Ilookedatmydadwithgratitude,andhesmiledawkwardly,

nUseitwisely,son."Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim,Iflushedwithshame（羞紅了臉）.Althoughlife

hadn'tbeenfairtohim,hehadtriedhisbesttomakeitfairtome.Meanwhile,IalsorealizedtherewasaburdenthatI

shouldshoulderinmyfamily.

熱考話題3師生關系

在學習過程中遇到困難和打擊，如成績不佳、能力有限等，在老師的引導、

學習?鼓勵和幫助下,下定決心刻苦學習、奮發(fā)圖強，最終突破自我,取得進步

——-~?在校園生活中遇到挫折，如性格羞怯、缺乏自信心，不敢參加學校的活動或

/比賽，或者參加活動表現(xiàn)不佳，自信心受挫。老師及時發(fā)現(xiàn)問題或者學生向

I老師傾訴、求助，在老師的開導和鼓勵下，學生鼓足勇氣、重拾信心，順利

―-展—|參加活動或在比賽中取得好成績

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\展現(xiàn)教師師德、良師益友對學生的深遠影響，使學生取得進步或學到某種品

\|升華|質，受益終身____________________________________

[2023新高考I]WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaid

nowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.

Writingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingofthe

Titanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyour

stories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedto

giveitatry.

IchosePaulReveredhorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（專艮匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseat

nightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswereing.Mystorywouldestraightfromthe

horse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?I

sympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere?shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworked

hard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaul

Reverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,"Great.Now,writeitagain."

Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoyment

ofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher?sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.___________________________________________________

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主要人物TZ從文中描述的"saidnowithoutthinking""difficultandpainfulforme""Iagreedtogive

itatry""wantedtoquit...Ikeptgoing...checkedmyspelling...correctmygrammar...readafewofthem""wrote

itagain,andagainandagain"可以看出，"我"起初缺乏自信，但隨后變得努力勤奮二信念堅定。

人物次要人物mysocialstudiesteacher：從文中描述的"Noonelaughedharderthanhedid""Iloveyour

stories...youhaveagoodshotatthis""laughedoutloud,andsaid,'Great.Now,writeitagain.,"可

知，“我”的社會科學老師樂觀開朗，天心、理解、支持、鼓勵學生。為續(xù)寫第二段“我”來到老師辦公

室表達對老師的感激之情奠定了基礎。

社會科學老師要“我”參加寫作比賽（“我”很抗拒，直接拒絕）―他鼓勵“我”參加比賽（“我”受到

情節(jié)及

鼓舞，決定試試）一"我"選定主題開始寫作（糾結、自我懷疑，但還是繼續(xù)堅持）T“我”一遍遍修

情感線

改、潤色文章（已經不在意能否得獎）

通過"我"前后對待寫作的態(tài)度的強烈反差，體現(xiàn)了要持之以恒地努力，克服困難并從中獲得樂趣

主題和成長的主題；同時根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語可知，本文也體現(xiàn)了良師益友這一主題，贊美了老師對學

生潤物細無聲的引導和鼓勵。

Step2構思框架

銜接本段首句的thenews,接下來應該是得到獲獎的消息、聽到消息后“我”的反應；銜接第二段

續(xù)寫

首句，本段還應該講到頒獎典禮上發(fā)生的事情，尾句落腳點在回想老師對自己的幫助，與第二段首

第一段

句完美連貫起來。本段重點描寫消息引發(fā)的一系列心理活動和動作。

銜接本段首句，接下來應該是老師得知"我”獲獎后的反應、“我”對老師的回應；尾句升華主題：

續(xù)寫

個人感悟，這件事對“我”的深遠影響。本段重點描寫"我"到辦公室后師生間的互動，可通過對話、動

第二段

作、心理描寫等刻畫細節(jié)。

Step3優(yōu)化細節(jié)

1.1feltexcited.

①用短語beoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief替換feelexcited,體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。

Iwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief.

②用so...that結構改寫句①，引出“我”聽到消息后激動的身體表現(xiàn)。

Iwassooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.

③用倒裝結構改寫句②，更加凸顯“我"得知獲獎時的激動心情。

SooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefwasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.

2.1feltexcitedandproudwhenIacceptedtheprize.

①用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語改寫句子并增加副詞修飾，豐富句式結構。

Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize.

②為句①增加“我”的獲獎感悟，照應前文"我”寫作時的堅持和努力，使前后文銜接更緊密。

Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize,asymbolandrecognitionofmypastperseveranceand

hardwork.

3.Hecongratulatedme,andIexpressedmythankstohim.

①用對話形式展現(xiàn)“我”與老師的互動，使故事情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然、順暢。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,nhesaid."Thankyouforyourencouragement.H

②為句①中老師對“我"的獲獎感到開心增加肢體動作描寫；并用虛擬語氣表達“我”對老師的感激之情。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,nhesaid,huggingmetightly."Thankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIam

todaywithoutyourencouragement."

③為句②中“我”對老師的感激之情增加心理細節(jié)描寫，使我對老師的感激躍然紙上，更具有畫面感。

"Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,"hesaid,huggingmetightly."Thankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIam

todaywithoutyourencouragement."Asenseofgratitudewelledupfromthebottomofmyheart.

Step4欣賞佳作

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwonfirstplace!Sooverwhelmedwith

excitementanddisbelief（4口W匕興奮,口難以置信）wasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.Finallycamethebigday!

Whenmynamewasannounced,Iwalkedontothestageagainstwildcheersandthunderousapplause（在熱烈的歡呼聲

和雷鳴般的掌聲中）.Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud,Iacceptedtheprize,asymbolandrecognitionofmypast

perseveranceandhardwork.Thinkingaboutthis,Ishedtearsofgratitude（流下感激的淚水），astherewasone

specialpersonwhomeantalottome.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation."Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin,“hesaid,

huggingmetightly.nThankyou.Iwouldn'tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement."Asenseofgratitudewelled

upfromthebottomofmyheart（感激之情從我的心底涌出）.Pattingmyshoulder,hesmiled,"Itisyoureffortsthat

countmost."Fromthenon,IbegantoburymyselfinEnglishwriting.Withmyteacher'sinspiration,Ideterminedto

keeponchallengingmyselfandembraceabetterme.

熱考話題4同學關系

隋書構思

同學相互不了解或融入新環(huán)境有困難；因誤會、矛盾等導致關系破裂或疏遠

積極主動幫助新同學或跟同學因一些事或活動由不了解到相處融洽；因偶然

事件或一方改變想法，雙方消除誤會、化解矛盾、重歸于好、合作共贏等

展現(xiàn)同學間的純真友誼，或體現(xiàn)真誠相待、理解包容、誠實守信、精誠合作、

不以貌取人等品質___________________________________________________

[2022浙江1月改編]WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning（指定）projectmatesforhispsychologyclass,Isecretly

hopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall,Ihopedhe

wouldn'tassignmetoworkwiththefiercelypetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesand

apparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate（命運）wouldhaveit,Dr.Hendersonverydeliberatelymatched

everyoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIweren'tthere.Ifelthetreatedme

asthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehimfailtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn'tmeanorabusive;hejust

gavemetheimpressionthathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.

Needlesstosay,Ididn'tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitand

didn'tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.

Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis（假說）,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,do

thestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.

WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohada

reputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatone

point,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn'twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtosticktoitno

matterwhat.

Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwellbeingofteenagers.Iwasn'tsure

whatitmeantexactly,butatleastwehadatopic.

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.__________________________________________________________

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.

Stepl梳理原文

主要人物myteammate：文中描述的“fiercelypetitiveandextremelyserious"ndowhateverproject...

betterifhediditalone"和"hadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgrades”表明，myteammate成績

優(yōu)異、性情高傲、學習專注、好勝心強，且“我“和“我”的隊友關系冷淡，似乎互相看不上對方。

主要人物"I"：從文中描述的"makethebestofitanddidn'tsayanything""singlemindednessandgood

人物、、、、

grades一theexactoppositeofme"和“decidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat"可以看出，“我”學習成績一般、

性情隨和、努力且不輕言放棄。

兩個主要人物幾乎相反的性格為續(xù)寫部分兩人合作中的摩擦埋下了伏筆，第五段尾句"decidedto

sticktoitnomatterwhat”也為續(xù)寫部分“我”在項目中起到積極作用奠定了基礎。

“我”被安排與一位自己原本想避開的同學合作（感到自己很不幸）我"主動向隊友介紹自己，

情節(jié)及

卻被冷漠對待（感覺自己被忽視，同時很擔心倆人的合作）一"我"與隊友會面討論項目（面對優(yōu)秀的

情感線

隊友，“我”自慚形穢，想放棄但又不甘心，于是決定堅持）一最終確定了課題（感到一絲寬慰）

根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段提示語可知，“我”和隊友開始逐漸進入狀態(tài)，但隊友卻因病住院，結合讀后續(xù)寫"

主題結局圓滿”的原則可以推測，"我”和隊友在合作上應該是從消極配合到積極參與，最終研究項目一定

會成功。文章最終是要體現(xiàn)戰(zhàn)勝困難、精誠合作、隊友情深的主題。

Step2構思框架

根據(jù)原文中講到的人物性格特征和續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要講“我”和隊友定期碰面

續(xù)寫

推進項目、相互磨合的情景，主要通過敘述和心理描寫展現(xiàn)搭檔在推進項目中的表現(xiàn)、"我“對此的

第一段

反應、倆人關系的發(fā)展情況。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語以及續(xù)寫”故事曲折，結局圓滿”的原則可知，本段應該主要講述在得知

續(xù)寫

隊友生病后，“我”的反應、“我”對待項目的態(tài)度、為了最終完成項目“我“做了哪些努力等。尾句可以

第二段

升華主題：“我們”意識到了團.隊合作的重要性。

Step3優(yōu)化細節(jié)

l.Hetookchargeoftheproject.

①增加副詞，凸顯隊友的專權。

Hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.

②為句①補充as引導的原因狀語從句，講述隊友專權的原因。

Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.

③為句②補充結果，并運用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，講述隊友專權對“我”的影響，體現(xiàn)初期合作的不順暢。

Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimply

followinghisstepsandinstructions.

2.1wenttothehospital.

①增加副詞，并用hurry替換句中的go,體現(xiàn)"我"想去探望隊友的急切心情。

Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital.

②為句①增加定語從句，講述“我“在醫(yī)院了解到的情況，使故事性更強，情節(jié)更完整。

Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.

3.1triedhardtodotheproject.

①用putallmyheartinto替換tryhard,體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。

Iputallmyheartintodoingtheproject.

②用原文中的表達細化句①中做項目的過程，使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然完整。

Iputallmyheartintodoingtheanalysisandpresentingourfindings.

③用with復合結構優(yōu)化句②，并用副詞體現(xiàn)"我"分析和呈現(xiàn)結果的狀態(tài)，凸顯"我"的努力和認真。

Withallmyheartputintotheproject,Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsreasonably.

Step4欣賞佳作

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Ashewasafiercelypetitivefellow,hetookchargeoftheproject

totally,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling（盡管不情愿），I

didmypartbutdiditinablindway.Astheprojectprogressed,Iseemedtogetthetrick,whichbuiltupmyconfidence

（增強了我的信心）andmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthispoint,westartedtoreallyworkasateam.

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.Immediately,Ihurriedtothe

hospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhis

face（看著他臉上的憂慮和虛弱），IassuredhimthatIwouldcarryonwithourproject.Withallmyheartputintothe

project（我全身心投入至【J這個項目中），Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsreasonably.

Eventually,ourhardworkpaidoffandDr.Hendersonwasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthis

project,webothlearnedthatonepersoncangofar,butagroupofpeoplecantravelfarther（一個人可以走很遠,但

一群人可以走得更遠）.

熱考話題5溫馨家庭

（祖）父母在孩子做錯事或有困難時，給予糾正、理解、開導、

幫助、支持、安慰等

（孫）子女借助特殊節(jié)日、生日或在不經意間表達對（祖）父

（祖）父母與（孫）子女

母的孝順和愛

因性格、習慣等的不同造成相處問題，或因小事產生誤會，最終問題解決

或誤會消除，重歸于好

兄弟姐妹新成員的加入，由不喜歡到喜歡的轉變；或者兄弟姐妹通力合作完成某

項任務

產馨家庭

夫妻間相互體諒、理解，愛意滿滿，共渡難關

夫妻

通過家庭內部各種故事充分展現(xiàn)血濃于水的親情，或一家人其樂融融、互助互

二愛的溫馨畫面

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[2021新高考I]AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.How

pleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastand

chickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhat

todo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedto

boiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroke

twoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeff

turnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthe

bread.Thepanwastoohotandthe