01指導(dǎo)性作文之夾敘夾議文-2022年上海高考英語考前寫作沖刺強(qiáng)化集訓(xùn)

備戰(zhàn)高考作文之夾敘夾議文備戰(zhàn)高考作文之夾敘夾議文理論指導(dǎo)及實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練要點(diǎn)精析要點(diǎn)精析夾敘夾議文是一種比較常見的寫作文體,以記人敘事為主,記敘人物的經(jīng)歷或事物/事件發(fā)生、發(fā)展、變化的過程。兼有總結(jié)全文，深化主題。材料常涉及社會生活現(xiàn)象、人物或自然景物。無論記人還是敘事都要通過敘述、描寫來加以表達(dá),把人物的經(jīng)歷或行為、發(fā)生的事情/事件用一定的順序和語言技巧敘述出來。在敘述過程中“人以事顯,事由人生”,人和事是密不可分的。在一篇記敘文中記人、寫景、敘事往往是交織在一起的,不能簡單地分裂開。高考作文一般都不會單純的記敘某事，而是夾敘夾議。課堂典例課堂典例作文要求：你是王海,是學(xué)校學(xué)生會主席,最近你做了一次調(diào)查,發(fā)現(xiàn)你校學(xué)生都不愿在學(xué)校食堂(canteen)就餐,有的則把食物丟進(jìn)垃圾桶。請你以學(xué)生會主席的身份向校長反映你調(diào)查的結(jié)果,并談?wù)勀愕目捶?。命題解讀：本文屬于多種文體綜合寫作,書信體的格式加上夾敘夾議,要求：1.書信體的格式; 2.對學(xué)生就餐情況作陳述或描述; 3.就此現(xiàn)象作議論。DearPrincipal,I’mWangHai,presidentoftheStudents’Union.Iamwritingtoyoutoreportanunpleasantphenomenonthatisgoingonintheschoolcanteen.Recently,I’veconductedaresearchandfoundthatmostofthestudentsinourschooldonotfeellikediningintheschoolcanteen.Someofthemeventhrowthefoodintotherubbishbin.Amongthefactorsthesurveypresented,themajorconcernslieintheslowpaceofthestaffsserviceandtheplaindishesoftheschoolcanteen①.Asstudentsintheseniorhighschool,we’reallbusywiththeschoolwork.Unfortunately,theinefficiencyofthecanteencostsustoomuchtime,whichmakesusturntofastfood.What’smore,wehavequitefewchoicesofdishes,andinfact,they’renotsatisfactoryinqualityandflavor,whichmayresultintheunpleasantwasteaswell.Inmyopinion,itishightimeforourcanteentomakesomeimprovements.First,thereshouldbemorewindowssellingfoodandamoreefficientmanagingsystem.Second,variousdishesshouldbeaddedtothemenuandthefoodqualityneedsimproving.Ontheotherhand,studentsshouldbeeducatedtorespectothers’laborandavoidwastingfoodinthefuture.Withthejointefforts,I’msurethatnexttime,thecanteenwilleasthebestchoicetosatisfythestudents’need②.Yourssincerely,WangHai結(jié)構(gòu)點(diǎn)評書信體的格式：日期、稱呼、正文、結(jié)束敬語和簽名五個(gè)部分完整正文部分先描寫現(xiàn)象后論述：1. 開門見山點(diǎn)明寫信目的：反映學(xué)生就餐情況,反映調(diào)查結(jié)果;2. 分析論述引起不良現(xiàn)象的幾個(gè)原因;3. 提出解決的措施;4. 對未來學(xué)生就餐情況進(jìn)行展望。語言點(diǎn)評第一段：一短一長句(that引導(dǎo)的定語從句)交代了自己的身份和寫信的目的;接著用一長(that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)一短句描述了學(xué)生就餐情況；第二段：①句總啟論述;用liein分析原因所在：食堂服務(wù)的慢節(jié)奏和食堂乏味的菜;用一短一長句(which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句)分析第一個(gè)原因;What’smore連接兩個(gè)并列的原因;用and連接的并列句和which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句分析了第二個(gè)原因；第三段：用“itishightimefor...todo...”提出解決的措施;用“First”“Second”論述食堂應(yīng)采取的措施;“Ontheotherhand”表述從學(xué)生的角度應(yīng)采取的措施;三個(gè)并列的“should”表達(dá)作者肯定的態(tài)度；第四段：“Withthejointefforts”承上啟下：概括第三段的三個(gè)措施;②句展望未來。實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練演練1就你讀過的一本書,寫一篇讀后感。具體要求如下：* 寫出書名及作者* 簡單介紹書中你感興趣的人物、情節(jié)或思想(選一即可)* 說明感興趣的理由例文：Asthesavinggoes,goodbootsaregoodteachers.Thebookswereadexertsignificantinfluenceonourmentalgrowthaswegetmature.Asforme,whatimpressesmemostisTheLittlePrincewrittenbyaFrenchwriterAntoineSaintExupery.Undoubtedly,thestoryitselfabouttheprince’sadventureistouching.Butthefoodforthoughtbetweenlinesissomethingmorevaluable.Ofallthethoughtsthatthewriterwantedtoconvey,Iappreciatethisonemost,“Themostimportantthingsareinvisibletoeyes.”Iwasdeeplytouchedbyitatthefirstsight.Therearemanythingsthatwearebusypursuing：keyschools,goodjobs,money,reputation...Thelistseemstobeendlessandthereforeourscheduleisalwaysfulloftasks.However,whatmakesourlifemeaningfulissomethingapartfromthosevisible.Love,friendship,dreamsofrealizingourvalueactuallymakeuptheessenceoflifeandmeanwhiletheeffortsandthespiritsaddthebrightandshinningcolorstoourlife.“Themostimportantthingsareinvisibletoeyes.”Bearitinourmindandletitguideusforamoreworthylife.演練2臨近畢業(yè)，回顧三年高中生活，你肯定參加過很多班集體活動(dòng)。請具體描述你參加過的最難忘的一次活動(dòng)，并簡要說明這次活動(dòng)對你產(chǎn)生的影響。Howtimeflies!ItwillbeonlyamonthbeforeIgraduatefrommyseniorhighschool.RecallingwhatIhaveexperienced,Ikeepthemilitarytraininginmind,whichwasthefirstclassactivityofthelifeinseniorhighschool.Withthesunshininginthebluesky,webeganourmilitarytrainingwithgreatexcitementandconfidence.Sweatfallingdowntheface,westoodlikesoldiers.However,astimewentby,plaintsemergedoneafteranother.“Whymustwetakepartinsuchatoughtraining?”“What’sthemeaningofwalkinglikethat?”Someofmyclassmatesevenpretendedtofeeldizzyinordertoaskforasickleave.Butthemonitorsaid,“Sincewehavebeenhere,whynotpersevereuntilthelastminute?”O(jiān)urclassteacheralsoencouragedusnottogiveuphalfway.Inspiredbywhattheysaid,thewholeclasskeptonhardtraining,andwonthefirstplaceinthepetitioneventually,whichwasthebestrewardofthe7dayefforts.Notonlydidthetoughtrainingleaveadeepimpressiononmebutitalsoincreasedmycourageoffacinguptogreatchallenges.Bytakingpartinthisunforgettableactivity,I’vefullyrealizedthatgettingsomethingdoneisjustanacplishmentandgettingsomethingdonewellisanachievement.Fromthenon,wheneverImeetwithdifficultiesinmystudy,Iwillalwaysstrivetothebestadvantage.演練3描述你在學(xué)校的一次難忘的活動(dòng)。具體要求如下： 1. 詳細(xì)描述活動(dòng)的情況; 2. 簡要表述你在活動(dòng)中的感受。例文： Thursday,December27th,2020,wasthemostunforgettabledayinSeniorThreeforme.Itwasthefirsttime,aswellasthelasttimethatIhadperformedonthestageofourschoolattheclosingceremonyoftheSchoolArtFestival. Asscheduled,theceremonybeganat7o’clockthateveningandeveryonefeltexcited,awaitingthewonderfulperformances.Infact,theperformanceswereundoubtedlysensationallyterrific,butIjustcouldn’tbefullyabsorbedinthem.Iwasabitnervous.Atthesummonoftheteacher,nearly200SeniorThreestudents,includingme,wenttothebackofthestagetoprepareforoursingingperformance.Everyonetookhisplaceandafterthat,Icouldn’thelpthinkingthatitwasmylastArtFestivalandthatIshouldsparenoefforttoaddabrillianttouchtoit.Slowly,thecurtainwasdrawnup.Thereburstoutaloudapplauseintheaudience,louderthanwhateverI’dheard.Allthepeoplewereexpectingagreatdealofusandwewerestandingstill,everymuscleready.Atthesoundofthemusic,wethrewallthenervousnessintothewindandsangtoourheart’scontent.Togetherwesangoutourpassion,ourbeliefandourdreams.Thecharmofthesongfascinatedeveryoneandourresoundingvoicelastedintheauditorium.Absolutely,wesangfarbetterthananyofthepreviousrehearsalsandourperformanceturnedoutasuccess. Verysoon,we’llbidfarewelltoourbelovedAlmaMaterandheadedintoourbrightfuture.However,theunforgettablesceneofthatdaywillimpressmeuponmymindpermanently.演練4Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120~150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.疫情期間，作為社區(qū)青年志愿者的你，計(jì)劃幫助老人團(tuán)購生活必須品。你的計(jì)劃如下：（1）計(jì)劃團(tuán)購那些物品（選擇2至3件）；（2）選擇的原因?！?6題答案】【答案】Asamunityvolunteer,Iwanttohelptheelderlytobuysomedailynecessities,becausemanyofthemarenotabletousemobilephonestoorderandpayonline.Withobservationandconsideration,Ithinkfoodwhichishighinproteinandeasytocookshouldbebought.Iplantobuyeggs,noodles,fishandmilk,sothattheircookingcanbemucheasier.Inaddition,freshfruitsandvegetablesareequallyimportant,whichhelptokeeptheirdietbalancedandmakethemeathealthilyduringthisspecialtime.Ofcourse,dailyprotectiveappliancessuchasalcohol,disinfectantandfacemasksshouldalsobeincluded.Olderpeoplehaveweakimmunityandaremorelikelytobeinfectedwiththevirus.Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemictoexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.【解析】【導(dǎo)語】這是一篇開放作文。假設(shè)作者是社區(qū)青年志愿者，計(jì)劃幫助老人團(tuán)購生活必須品，談?wù)勛约旱挠?jì)劃購買什么以及原因?！驹斀狻?.詞匯積累能夠做某事：becapableofdoingsth,→beabletodosth.計(jì)劃做某事：intendtodosth.→plantodosth.重要的：significant→important差的，弱的：poor→weak2.句型拓展簡單句變復(fù)合句原句：Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemictoexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.拓展句：Ihopetohelptheelderlyduringtheepidemicthroughwhichwecanexpressourgratitudeandletthemfeelthewarmthofthemunity.【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Withobservationandconsideration,Ithinkfoodwhichishighinproteinandeasytocookfoodshouldbebought.（運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)的定語從句）[高分句型2]Iplantobuyeggs,noodles,fishandmilk,sothattheircookingcanbemucheasier.（運(yùn)用了sothat引導(dǎo)的目的狀語從句）演練5（25分）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.讀書之妙趣，不僅在于書，還在于讀書的人和事。請把你讀書的趣事寫下來，參加某一英文報(bào)征文大賽，與人分享。在征文中，你必須：1.回憶與同學(xué)或教師或家人的讀書生活場景。2.簡要談?wù)剬ψx書的感受。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考范文：Whenyoung,Iwasaddictedtoreading,whethericstripsornovels.Itfeelslikeakindofbreathwithoutwhich