高中英語續(xù)寫作文語料庫-動作描寫 課高三英語上學(xué)期一輪復(fù)習(xí)專項

續(xù)寫作文語料庫--動作描寫Howtomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid?1.分解動作--動作鏈2.具體動詞--忌籠統(tǒng)3.配上表情--帶情感4.融入心理--重思維感知:結(jié)合語境,如何優(yōu)化表達?1.Becauseofhislies,shelooked

athim.Becauseof

hislies,she_________athim.2Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irantotheline.Withonlytwentysecondsleft,I________________totheline.3.Withonlytwominutesleft,heatehismeal.Withonlytwominutesleft.He_______________hismeal.4.Sheheardhermothersayquietly

asshewalked

downthehall,"Don'twakeyourdadup."Sheheardhermother___________asshe________downthe

hall,"Don'twakeyourdadup...glaredrush/dashedswallowed

upwhispered

tiptoed目錄

Partone

用精準動詞代替籠統(tǒng)動詞Parttwo

用恰當(dāng)短語代替普通動詞Partthree

添加介詞短語/副詞修飾動作Partfour分解動作，形成動作鏈

Partfive動作描寫詞匯

PartOne

ChooseAccurateVerbs用精準動詞代替籠統(tǒng)動詞generalwords(籠統(tǒng)的詞籠統(tǒng)詞）walkrunlooksay/talkconcretewords(具體詞)chat(閑聊);whisper(耳語)weep/sob(啜泣)bite(咬)chew(咀嚼)swallow(吞下)tiptoe(躡手躡腳地走)dash/rush(猛沖)glare(怒視);glance(瞥見);stare(凝視)PartTwo

Chooseproperphrases

用恰當(dāng)短語代替普通動詞start/begindecidecryremembertiredseeattractappealto動詞動詞動詞短語動詞getdowntodoingmakeupone'smindburst

intotearskeepinmindwornoutcatchsightofPartThree添加介詞短語/副詞修飾動作動作描寫語料庫探究→ThefiercewolfstaredatMacwith

its_________________(adj.)teeth.→___________________________(adv.),hejumpedoffthebicycleanddashedintothecar.→Asthehungrywolfwasalmostreachinghim,Mac'seyeswerewideopen_______________________.(in/with+名詞)sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terribleImmediately/Instantly/Hurriedly/Breathlesslyinfear/panic/horror/shockPartFour分解動作，形成動作鏈Actionchains把動作過程分解成一連串的動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈，讓你的動作描寫既豐富又生動!舉例子：她擁抱了Betty.(失散多年的老朋友）Shedashedforward，gatheredBettyintoherarmsandburstintotears.沖上去--抱住她--流下眼淚--dashforwardhug/gatherherintoherarmsburstintotears分析：動作鏈有哪些？形成句子：舉例子：他向狗扔了一塊肉。形成句子：Hepickedupapieceofmeat,aimedatthedogandthrewittohim.撿起肉瞄準狗

扔過去

pickupapieceofmeataimatthedogthrowto動作鏈：

Iputonmycoathurriedly,grabbedmy

bagand

rushedtoschoolthismorning.訓(xùn)練：我早上匆忙去上學(xué)。分析動作鏈：穿外套抓起書包沖去學(xué)校putonmycoatgrabbedmybagrushedtoschoo!形成句子：Theboysrushedexcitedlytothelake,tookofftheirclothes

andjumpedintothewater.訓(xùn)練：孩子們跳入湖中嬉戲分析動作鏈：沖向湖邊脫掉衣服跳入水中rushedtothelaketookofftheirclothesjumpedintothewater形成句子：微寫作練習(xí)Imitatewriting：①Jimscreamed._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________②Heopenedthedoor._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________③Icomfortedhim.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________④Heruntothestartingline.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________⑤打籃球的動作鏈_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________他運球穿過球場，躲過防守者，快速傳球，然后投籃。⑥演講的動作鏈_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________他深吸一口氣，走上舞臺，調(diào)整了麥克風(fēng)，開始對觀眾講話。⑦描寫讀書的情景開始：打開書本，翻開第一頁。中間：專注閱讀，做記號，沉浸在故事中。結(jié)束：合上書，思考所讀內(nèi)容，感受閱讀的愉悅_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Jimscreamedatthetopofhisvoice,stormedoutoftheroomandslammedthedoorheavilybehindhim.Heapproachedthedoor,turnedthehandle,andslowly

pusheditopen.Igentlystrokedhishair,heldhishandtightly,andcomfortedhiminasoftvoice.Noddinghishead,hestoodup,clenchedhisfistandstumbledtothestartingline.Dribblingtheballdownthecourt,hedodgeddefenders,madeaquickpass,andtookashotatthebasket.Takingadeepbreath,hesteppedontothestage,adjustedthemicrophone,andbeganaddressingtheaudience.Openingthebook,I'mimmersedinitsworld;theoccasionalpageturnechoesinthesilence,andclosingitleavesalingeringjoy.她站在山頂，仰望天空，感受著這份珍貴的寧靜。Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedintotheskyandfeltthepreciouspeace.如何句式升級？升級句式：（1）句式：doing,主語+謂語,doingStandingontheemptyroad,shelookedintothesky，feeling

thepreciouspeace.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedinto

theskyand

feltthepreciouspeace.改寫下列句子：（2）主語+謂語，doinganddoingShe

stood

onthetopofthemountain,lookingintotheskyandfeeling

thepreciouspeace.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedinto

theskyandfeltthepreciouspeace.改寫下列句子：被老師的話所鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，說：我來。Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,sosheraisedherhandandsaid:“Ivolunteer”.案例分析：如何升級該句子？Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,sosheraisedherhandandsaid，“Ivolunteer”.（3）

done(byn),主語+謂語，doingInspiredbyherteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhand,saying，“Ivolunteer”.改寫下列句子：（4）善用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhandandsaid，“Ivolunteer”.Withteacher’swordsinspiringher,Lucyraisedherhand,saying:“Ivolunteer”.改寫下列句子：PartFive

describebodyactionsfrommulti-perspectives從頭部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多角度描寫肢體動作頭嘴腿手臂眼手腳手指動作描寫：肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--頭①drop/lower/bend/bow/hangone'shead低頭②put/hold/buryone'sheadinone'shands雙手抱頭③nodone'shead點頭④shakeone'shead搖頭⑤restone'sheadon/against把頭靠在...上面5⑥scratchone'shead撓了撓頭⑦headfor/towards朝走去1.史蒂文低著頭，眼里含著淚，慢慢地向公交車走去。______________________________________________________________________________________2.他的朋友John向他點頭微笑。______________________________________________________________________________________3.他心情不好，低下頭來掩飾，勉強笑了一下。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________既學(xué)既練：Stevenwalkedslowlytothebus,hisheaddown,tearsinhiseyes.(獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu))HisfriendJohnnoddedhisheadandsmiledathimThoughhewasinabadmood,hedropped/hung/loweredhisheadtohideitandmanagedasmile.肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--眼睛①meetsb'seyes接觸某人的目光②stareintoone'seyes凝視③fix/focusone'seyeson盯著④lower/dropone'seyes垂下眼睛⑤raise/liftone'seyes抬起眼睛⑥one'seyesshine/sparkle/glistenwithexcitement眼里閃著興奮的光芒按要求完成句子、1.約翰坐在窗邊，目光緊盯著一本書。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.他看完后，抬眼向窗外望去。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.他高興地唱著歌,用天真而又好奇的眼睛注視著周圍的一切。_______________________________________________________________________________________既學(xué)既練：①Johnsatbesidethewindow,andfixed/focusedhiseyesonabook.(并列句)②Johnsatbesidethewindow,withhiseyesfixed/focusedonabook.(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))Whenhefinishedthebook,heraised/liftedhiseyesandlookedoutofthewindow.Singinghappily,hegazedatthesurroundingswith

innocentandcuriouseyes.肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--嘴巴①open-mouthed目瞪口呆的②one'smouthwidens咧開嘴③cup/coverone'smouth捂住某人的嘴④mouthdrops/hangswideopen張大嘴巴⑤one'sheartinone'smouth提心吊膽1.聞到三明治的香味，饑餓的小女孩開始流口水了。_____________________________________________________________________________________________2.她剛要拿起三明治咬一口，突然一只手捂住了她的嘴。_____________________________________________________________________________________________3.她的哥哥一把搶走了三明治放入自己口中。_____________________________________________________________________________________________既學(xué)既練：Thehungrygirl'smouthstartedwateringwhenshesmelledthesandwich.(mouth作主語)Shewasabouttopickupthesandwichandtakeabitewhensuddenlyahandcuppedhermouth.Itwasherbrotherwhograbbedthesandwichandputitintohisownmouth.肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--手①holdone'shand抓住某人的手②shakehandswith與握手③cup...inone'shands將捧在手心④openone'shands張開雙手⑤handinhand手拉手)⑥r(nóng)aise/putupone'shand舉手⑦holdoutone'shand伸出手⑧takeone'shand牽某人的手⑨spreadone'shands攤開雙手1.一只小蝴蝶，正拼命扇動翅膀卻無法從地面上飛起來。_____________________________________________________________________________________2.在它面前是卡車的輪胎。_________________________________________________________________________________3.我不假思索就下了車，舉起手不讓卡車司機往前走，然后彎下腰去看那只蝴蝶。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________既學(xué)既練：Asinglebutterflywascrazilyflutteringitswingsbutcouldnotgetofftheground.Itwasrightinfrontofatruck'stire.WithoutthinkingIgotoutofmycar,heldmyhandupsothetruckdriverwouldn'tmoveforward,andbentdowntolookatthebutterfly.肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--腿①shaky/tremblinglegs顫抖的雙腿②tiredlegs疲憊的雙腿)③crossone'slegs盤腿④dragone'sheavylegs拖著沉重的雙腿1.他繼續(xù)努力向終點跑去，他嘴巴干澀，雙腿抖。2.他摔倒了，背部著地，雙腿又開。3.他費力地雙腿顫抖地站了起來。既學(xué)既練：①Hestruggledtoruntowardsthefinishingline.Hismouthwasdryandhislegstrembled.(簡單句)②Hestruggledtoruntowardsthefinishingline,withhis(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))mouthdryandhislegstrembling.Hefellover,flatonhisbackwithhislegswide.(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))Witheffort,herosetohisfeetonshakylegs.肢體動作細節(jié)類短語--腿1.單詞:barefootadj.&adv.赤腳的(地)2.短語:getleaptoone'sfeet直起身來/跳起來②)jump/risetoone'sfeet跳起來/站起來③dragone'sfeet拖著腳步④tap/stampone'sfeet跺腳