讀后續(xù)寫第三課實(shí)踐操作課件高一上學(xué)期英語寫作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫分值：25分建議用時(shí)：30mins

真題內(nèi)容主題2024新高考I&II卷旅途中遇到一位熱心的出租車司機(jī)的故事人與社會(huì)2023新高考I&II卷我在老師鼓勵(lì)之下愛上寫作人與自我2022新高考I&II卷患病男孩自強(qiáng)之“跑“人與自我2021新高考I&II卷母親節(jié)雙胞胎給媽媽做飯人與社會(huì)2020新高考I&II卷愛心幫助他人人與社會(huì)主題語境：人與社會(huì)、人與自我為主文本類型：記敘文真實(shí)的生活情境，貼近學(xué)生生活主題正能量,致力于立德樹人圍繞矛盾沖突,發(fā)現(xiàn)問題,解決問題選材規(guī)律故事線索通常有兩種:一種是關(guān)于人的故事;另一種是間接涉及人的寓言故事?？忌诶m(xù)寫故事時(shí)應(yīng)注意以下事項(xiàng):(1)明確故事的明線和暗線，即人物線和情感線(2)明確故事的主題，即你的故事是基于原文的主題(3)尋找故事沖突，構(gòu)思合理的故事情節(jié)。合理的故事情節(jié)有兩個(gè)方面的要求:一是人物性格、情節(jié)在故事前后保持一致，不能有矛盾。二是故事情節(jié)不能違背生活邏輯、情感邏輯、思維習(xí)慣等。總之，續(xù)寫故事我們可以從“依據(jù)首句，‘六所’來入手，即他人當(dāng)時(shí)所見(whattosee)，所聽(whattohear)，所說(whattosay)，所想(whattothink)，所做(whattodo)，所感(whattofeel)，當(dāng)然有時(shí)為了故事或語篇的連貫性和簡(jiǎn)潔化，也可選部分要素來寫。這種依據(jù)所給首句的“六所”表達(dá)方式讓學(xué)生有話可寫，有情可推。讀后續(xù)寫入門篇之快速構(gòu)思ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestospare,werolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."'Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereattheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage,"Outoforder.Sorry."

Para1：IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.________________________Para2：

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.__________ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestospare,werolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."'Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereattheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage,"Outoforder.Sorry."

Gunterresponsiblewarm-heartedfriendlyprofessional分析明線和暗線IanxioushonestImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestospare,werolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."'Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereattheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage,"Outoforder.Sorry."

Conflict1:ItriedtocatchthelastbustoPraguesolution1:jumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankConflict2:Gunterdidn’thearmydestinationclearly.solution2:Guntergothelpfromhisfriendandstartedhiscar.Conflict3:Ihadnocashtopaythetaxifee.solution3:Iusedmybankcard.Conflict4:Thecardmachineandthecashmachinewentwrong.Conflict5:Thebuswasabouttostart/setoff.Solution4:?Solution45:?分析沖突精讀文章，梳理故事線索OpeningDevelopmentClimaxResolutionEndingIwasinahurrytocatchthe

lastbustoPraguebecauseof

the

delayedofflight.IjumpedintoataxiandGuntertookmetothebusstationjustintime

despitesomestruggles.Ihadnocashtopaythetaxifareaftertrying

everypossiblemeans.IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.......Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised....Theme:behonestandhelpfulPlotContinuation兩段首句定一框二框二首正能量點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的故事（常與原文最后一段呼應(yīng)）和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。Think?Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereattheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage,"Outoforder.Sorry."Para1：IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

Para2：Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.ToshowGunter’sremarkablequality.上文結(jié)尾：機(jī)器故障卡不能用續(xù)寫段1：IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews續(xù)寫段2：Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.段1尾句：承上啟下，推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展段2結(jié)尾：順接故事，升華主題Tips:75wordsorsoGunter’sreactions...Thepromise...Phonenumber...Emotions...Tips：75wordsorsoWhatwould“I”do?HowwouldGunterrespond?Whatemotionsmight“I”have?Whatarethecorevaluesintheend?

Paragraph1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.1.HowwouldGunterrespondtothebadnews?2.Whatpromisewould“I”maketoGunter?3.Howwas“I”abletocallGunterfourdayslater?4.WhatdidGunterdo?5.Howwould“I”feel?6.“I”gotonthelastbusfinally.......Paragraph2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.WhatdetailsmustbementionedinParagraph1?ActionResponseEmotionStep3:研讀線索，設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)

Paragraph2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.1.Whatwould“I”tellGunter?2.HowmightGunterrespondnext?3.HowwouldIfeelintheend?4.Whatmightbetheendingthatshowsthecorevalues?......WhatdetailsmustbementionedinParagraph2?ActionResponseEmotionStep4:小組討論，設(shè)計(jì)第二段情節(jié)I靈光一閃作出承諾留下電話號(hào)碼焦慮緊張某人突然想到...某人毫不猶豫地...情節(jié)-解決矛盾-靈光一閃Itflashedthroughone’smindthat...=Itoccurredtosb.that...

ItoccurredtomethatIwouldbebackinViennafourdayslater.Withouttheslightesthesitation,IpromisedGunterthatIwouldreturnmyfarenexttimeandwrotemyphonenumberdown.Withouttheslightesthesitation,sb....我突然想到4天后要返回，我毫不猶豫地許諾Gunter在下次回來的時(shí)候，一定返還車費(fèi)并寫下電話號(hào)。I靈光一閃作出承諾留下電話號(hào)碼焦慮緊張某人

feltagreatsenseof+n.+wellingupinone’sheart.

造句-情緒描寫-名詞句式某人感到一股強(qiáng)烈.....在內(nèi)心升騰、奔涌。在等待回復(fù)時(shí)，我感到一股強(qiáng)烈焦慮在內(nèi)心奔涌。IfeltagreatsenseofanxietywellingupinmyheartwhenIwaitedforhisreply.Gunter發(fā)奮圖強(qiáng)

(立即改變)立即同意某人沒有...而是...Insteadofdoing...,sb.did...情節(jié)-解決矛盾-發(fā)奮圖強(qiáng)Gunter

沒有拒絕我的請(qǐng)求，而是點(diǎn)了點(diǎn)頭。

Insteadofrefusingmyrequest,henodded.Gunter思考，未立刻同意猶豫不決出乎意料的是，某人做了...Toone’ssurprise.,sb.did...,did...,anddid...但是出乎意料的是，他只是思考了一小會(huì)就掏出現(xiàn)金，遞給了我。情節(jié)-解決矛盾-猶豫不決But

to

my

surprise,

he

just

hesitated

for

a

moment

,

then

took

out

the

cash

and

handed

it

to

meI喜出望外追趕bus/沮喪轉(zhuǎn)化為欣喜某人這輩子從未.....Neverinone’slifehadsb.done...before.我這輩子從未這么開心。

情節(jié)-正向結(jié)局-喜出望外NeverinmylifehadI

beendelightedbefore.One’s+n.1+overcame+n.2.某人的情緒1戰(zhàn)勝了情緒2。我的沮喪轉(zhuǎn)化為欣喜，立即追趕bus。

造句-情緒描寫-名詞句式Mydelight

overcame

depression,Icatchingthebusimmediately.I按部就班致電1.見面2.面露喜色

3.擁抱Havingdone...+主句+doing...

動(dòng)作描寫-動(dòng)作鏈+動(dòng)作面One’sfacelight(lit)up

我見面擁抱了G，面露喜色。

HavingmetwithGunter,Ihuggedhim,myfacelightingup.I+Gunter真情感化G拒絕了酬金我說不出話來感激被...打動(dòng)，某人感到一股強(qiáng)烈的...在內(nèi)心奔涌。Struckby...,sb.feltagreatsenseof+情緒+wellingupinone’sheart.

情節(jié)-解決矛盾-真情感化被他的回應(yīng)所打動(dòng)，我感到一股強(qiáng)烈的感動(dòng)在內(nèi)心奔涌。Struckbyhisresponse,Ifeltagreatsenseoftouchwellingupinmyheart.I（結(jié)局）時(shí)光荏苒幫助和承諾的意義后來，我和G建立了深厚的友誼。他的話語自此一直縈繞在我的腦海中。即使是現(xiàn)在，我也不斷地想起那段經(jīng)歷，學(xué)到了幫助和承諾是珍貴且有用的。Later,IdevelopedadeepfriendshipwithGunter.Hiswordskeptlingeringinmymindeversince.Even

now,I

amconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,whereIgotthelessonthathelpandpromisearevaluableanduseful.這段故事/畫面/場(chǎng)景/話語自此一直縈繞在某人的腦海中。即使是現(xiàn)在，某人也不斷地想起那段經(jīng)歷，從中某人學(xué)到了...Thestory/picture/scene/wordskeptlingeringinone’smindeversince.Even

now,sb.beconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,w