讀后續(xù)寫樂高拼裝假肢幫助殘疾男孩課件高三英語一輪復習

WriteNancy讀后續(xù)寫：樂高拼裝假肢幫助殘疾男孩ContinuationWriting123用思維導圖理清故事情節(jié)分析寫作思路。學習主人公的個人愛心:雖自我殘疾，但也能幫助別人。利用主謂推進式閱讀，畫出句子主謂的方式來尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點。objectives：LeadinTask1：自主學習檢測翻譯下列句子Beforeconstructingit,Ihadalreadydecidedagainsttraditionalprosthetics._______________________________________________________________2.Notbecausetheywereineffective,butbecauseplayingwithLegodidsignificantlyimprovemydexterity,helpingmeadapttomycondition.__________________________________________________________________________非謂語動詞3.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1,whichhadfingers…..________________________________________________________________4.Oneday,acouplewiththeireight-year-oldson,wholostbotharmsinanaccident.________________________________________________________________定語從句在建造它之前，我已經(jīng)決定不使用傳統(tǒng)的假肢不是因為它們無效，而是因為玩樂高確實顯著提高了我的靈活性，幫助我適應(yīng)我的狀態(tài)。幾年后，我開發(fā)了另一種名為Mk-I的假肢。。。。有一天，一對夫婦帶著他的八歲兒子，他在一次事故中失去了雙臂，在了解到我的作品后，他們來到我的身邊自主學習檢測翻譯下列句子并背誦5.MyparentsandIhadlookedintogettingoneafewyearsearlier,onlytobediscouragedbythecostlyprice_______________________________________________________________結(jié)果狀語6.IconcludedthatImightnotneedtobuyone.________________________________________________________________7.wewerewonderingifyoucouldpossiblyhelpbuildasetofprostheticsforourson.________________________________________________________________名詞性從句我和我的父母幾年前發(fā)現(xiàn)了一個，但是卻因為昂貴的價格而感到氣餒。我總結(jié)出我可能不需要買一個。我們想知道你是否可能幫我們兒子做一套假肢。ABCDEFEBFDAC?Task2Pleaseputthosepicturesinorder.Task2Ifyouareaskedtodividethesepicturesinto2parts,whatwillyoudowiththem?Notethatonepartisforreadingandtheotherpartisforwritinginthecontinuationwriting?123456Howtodividethesepicturesinto2parts??Howtodrink?Turningpoint轉(zhuǎn)折點Reading(part1from___to___)aimstofindtheproblemWriting(part2from___to___)aimstosolvetheproblem1346123456ReadingandThinking深度解讀語篇——抓故事線/情感線深度解讀語篇Read淺層信息獲取:5W1H深層文本解讀理清情節(jié)和情感分析人物性格特點明確故事主題品味寫作風格和語言Think結(jié)合所給兩段首句原文呼應(yīng)+正能量結(jié)局生動編寫故事動作描寫情感描寫環(huán)境描寫語言運用推測情節(jié)發(fā)展構(gòu)思寫作框架WriteSteps動作描寫

情感描寫淺層信息獲取:5W1H“I，myparents,acouple,boy”Theboy’shome”NotspecifictimebuttimelineHowdidIimprovetheprostheticWhydidIgottheLego?IcreatedprostheticthoughpalyingwithLegoTask3Howtoread

用思維導圖理清故事時空線、情節(jié)線——情節(jié)定為四部分，分別是主要情節(jié)的開頭(beginning)、主要情節(jié)的發(fā)展階段（development），主要情節(jié)的高潮（climax）和結(jié)局（ending），結(jié)局也就是我們的續(xù)寫部分，情感線及主題。利用主謂推進式閱讀，畫出句子主謂的方式來理清開頭、發(fā)展和高潮各故事情節(jié)大意。深層文本解讀Task4Howtoread?時空線情節(jié)線情感線主

題語

言1.時間線

：__________________________2.空間線：__________________________Storymountain：BeginningDevelopmentClimaxSolutionEding“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文心理描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫心理描寫：__________________________________________whatisthetheme:_____________________1.原文語言特點：心理活動描寫、非謂語動詞、定語從句、名詞性從句等2.續(xù)寫語言模仿深層文本解讀時空線1.時間線:

atfiveyearsold→1.空間線:時空線1.時間線:

atfiveyearsold→bytheageofnine→yearslater-Oneday1.空間線:

myhome→theboy’shome1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)

StoryMountainPlot情節(jié)線4.Resolution5.Ending1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)Ending(atimetosolvetheproblem/howthingsendup/whatisthetheme？)

StoryMountainPlot情節(jié)線找到問題或情節(jié)發(fā)展高潮：答應(yīng)幫忙，遇到什么挑戰(zhàn)？是否成功？我從小患有罕見疾病，缺少右臂我玩樂高加強我的靈巧，同時制作義肢我制作的義肢功能越來越完善一對夫妻請求我為他們失去雙臂的兒子制作義肢。4.Resolution5.Ending情感線“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文情感描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫情感描寫：__________________________________________技巧：通過動作、語言、情景描寫可以推理出心理活動“我”期初拼樂高的情況：“我”設(shè)計的第一個義肢功能:“我”設(shè)計的第二個義肢功能:“我”設(shè)計的最新的義肢功能:Althoughitwasdifficulttoputallthepiecestoghther…Igrew

interestedinLegoTechnic,whichallowedmetocreatemorecomplicatingthings...Ihadmademyfirstprostheticarm(義肢)….asimpleboxthatperfectlysuitedmyrightarm.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1……thepurejoyofcreatingprostheticswithLegoTechnickeptmegoingon.Itfeaturedacontrolunitthatcouldsendandreceiveordersfromsensorsonthearmtothemotors,withcablesthatcontractlikemuscles.Optimistic樂觀的joyful高興的Fulfilled有成就感的續(xù)寫段心理變化？原文心理描寫續(xù)寫段心理變化？情感線“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文情感描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫情感描寫：__________________________________________Paragraph1:Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha“yes”.Paragraph2:Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsontohim!uncertainpersistentexcitedproud主題時空線情節(jié)線情感線綜合以上信息可概括文章大意:我從小患有波倫綜合征，缺少右臂。我玩樂高加強我的靈巧，同時制作義肢。我制作的義肢功能越來越完善。一對夫妻請求我為他們失去雙臂的兒子制作義肢。IsufferedfromPolandsyndromesincechildhood,lackingtherightarm.IplayedwithLEGOtoimprovemyflexibiltyandmadeprostheticsatthesametime.TheprostheticsImadeweremoreandmoreperfect.Acoupleaskedmetomakeprostheticsfortheirsonwholosthiswholearm!主題（Theme）：_________________________________________________________

身殘志不殘One’sbodyisdisabled,butnotmind個人愛心:雖自我殘疾，但也能幫助別人WriteTask5推測情節(jié)發(fā)展——構(gòu)思寫作框架語言、動作、心理：

【五官、肢體】對續(xù)寫開頭語利用主謂推進式進行研讀，以開頭句主謂內(nèi)容為基礎(chǔ)以問問題（問問題從語言、動作【五官，肢體等】、心理或周圍環(huán)境角度出發(fā)）的形式尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點。Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”語言、動作、心理：

【五官、肢體】聽到“yes”那個男孩的反應(yīng)式什么？我如何做出承諾？我的困難是什么？我如何成功做出假肢？語言、動作、心理：

【五官、肢體】Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsonhim.假肢是否合適？男孩和他父母如何感謝我？主題：我的感受是什么？1.heboyraisedhishead，eyesshiningwithasparkofhope.2.“Trustme,

I

will

make

it.”3.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy'shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind1.Holdingbreathandheartsbeatingwildly,weanxiouslyawaitedtheresult-theyworked2.“Thankyouverymuch”,theboyandHisparentsquicklyapproachedmetoexpresstheirimmensethanks.3.Feelasenseofaccomplishment;madeupmymindtodevotemyselftomakingalifelongimpactonthefieldofprostheticinnovation.（語言）（動作）（心理）（動作、心理）（語言）（心理）Writing：生動編寫故事注意：三銜接、二過渡、一靚尾動作、心理、語言等細節(jié)描寫模仿原文語言特點Task6：Writethefirstparagraphin6mins本段注意：兩個銜接句、一過渡動作、心理、語言等細節(jié)描寫模仿原文語言特點

Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”.Theboyliftedhisheadwithhisoncelifelesseyesnowshiningwithasparkofhope.(銜接句1)“Trustme.Iwillmakeit.”,Ipromisehimwitharadiantsmile.NosoonerhadIsaidgoodbyetotheirfamilythanIsetouttodothetaskwithoutanydelay.(過渡句1)ThesubsequentdayswitnessedhowIwascommittedtodesigningdrawings,selectingtheLegopiecesandintegratingpracticalcomponentstocreateprosthetics.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy‘shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind.Itseemedlikeacenturylaterwhentheboy-customizedprostheticstookshape.Thencamethebigday.（銜接句2）Paragraph1:Assighment：Polishyourwriting讀后續(xù)寫具體評分點（共25分；踩點得分）（一）內(nèi)容第一段：要點1：失去雙臂的男孩的反應(yīng)。3分要點2：主人公為男孩量身定做義肢的過程。4分要點3：主人公完成義肢制作的表述。2分第二段：要點1：戴上義肢。3分要點2