高考英語讀后續(xù)寫專題之遇險(xiǎn)類+地震中的溫暖與追求+講義

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Thevideoofaquakesurvivorsearchingforthearmyofficerwhosavedhislife10yearsago

hasattractedmuchattentiononChina'ssocialmedia.

“Tenyearshavepassed.Ihavebecomeasoldierlikeyou.Canyouseeme?I'vebeenlooking

foryoualltheseyears.Whereareyou?”thesurvivor,QiangTianlin（強(qiáng)天林），saysinthevideo.

Sincethevideowentonlineaweekago,ithasbeenviewedmorethan12milliontimesand

forwarded（轉(zhuǎn)發(fā)）over30,000timesonSinaWeibo.

Qiangwas14andattendingGuanzhuangMiddleSchoolwhenthe8.0-magnitudeearthquake

struckSichuan,sWenchuanCountyonMay12,2008.

Thequakeclaimed（索取）morethan80,000lives,andaround130,000military（軍隊(duì)）

personneltookpartinthesearchandrescuework.

Worriedabouthisfamily,Qianglefthisschoolandheadedhomealone.Walkingona

mountaintrack,aftershockssuddenlycausedalandslide.

Apassingsoldiergrabbed（抓?。㏎iangandusedhisownbodytoshield（保護(hù)）the

teenagerfromthefallingrocks.

“Wereitnotthatsoldier,Imighthavedied.Isawfallingrockshittinghisbackandhishands

werebleeding,Qiangrecalled（回憶）.Thesoldiertookhimtoatemporaryshelternearbyand

fetchedQiang5sfamilythenextday.Inthefollowingmonths,hecametotheshelterseveraltimes,

settinguptentsanddelivering（派送）supplies（物資）topeople.

“IregretthatIdidn'taskforhisname.AllIknowisthathewas1.7meterstallandothers

calledhimBattalionCommander,Qiangsaid.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為二段，每段的開頭語已經(jīng)為你寫好；

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TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang5slife.Previously（以前的）,hisacademic

performance（學(xué)習(xí)成績）waspoor,buttheofficer

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Theofficerresponded（回復(fù)）afterviewing（觀看）thevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhada

chancetochatontheWeChat（微信）.___________________________________________

一、文章大意

2008年5月12日四川汶川發(fā)生8.0級(jí)地震，強(qiáng)天林當(dāng)時(shí)14歲，在回家途

中遭遇山體滑坡，一位路過的身高約1.7米、被稱為營長的士兵用身體保護(hù)了

他，并將他帶到臨時(shí)避難所，還幫他找到了家人，之后多次來送物資。10年后，

強(qiáng)天林已成為一名士兵，他發(fā)布視頻尋找當(dāng)年救他的軍官，該視頻在社交媒體上

引起廣泛關(guān)注。

二、伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)

（一）伏筆

1.軍官的保護(hù)行為：為強(qiáng)天林擋住落石，手部流血，這一細(xì)節(jié)為后續(xù)強(qiáng)天林

的轉(zhuǎn)變埋下情感基礎(chǔ)，可在續(xù)寫中體現(xiàn)強(qiáng)天林對(duì)這份恩情的銘記以及其對(duì)

他人生態(tài)度的影響。

2.軍官多次送物資：展現(xiàn)軍官的持續(xù)關(guān)懷，可在續(xù)寫中成為強(qiáng)天林成長過程

中的溫暖回憶和激勵(lì)因素。

3.強(qiáng)天林不知軍官名字：推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展，使得尋找軍官這一情節(jié)成為可能和

必要，在續(xù)寫中可圍繞尋找過程及找到后的情感交流展開。

（二）續(xù)寫回應(yīng)

1.第一段：可描述軍官的行為如何改變強(qiáng)天林的生活，如從學(xué)習(xí)成績差到努

力學(xué)習(xí)，最終成為士兵，回應(yīng)軍官的榜樣力量對(duì)他的積極影響。

2.第二段：寫軍官看到視頻后的回應(yīng)以及他們的交流，可展現(xiàn)兩人之間的情

感連接，如軍官對(duì)強(qiáng)天林成長的欣慰等。

三、續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)

（一）第一段

1.描述強(qiáng)天林生活的變化，重點(diǎn)突出在學(xué)習(xí)和人生目標(biāo)方面的轉(zhuǎn)變，強(qiáng)調(diào)軍

官對(duì)他的激勵(lì)作用。

2.可以提及他在努力過程中遇到的困難以及如何克服，進(jìn)一步豐富情節(jié)。

（二）第二段

1.軍官回應(yīng)的內(nèi)容和方式，比如表達(dá)對(duì)強(qiáng)天林的贊賞、回憶當(dāng)年的情景等。

2.兩人交流中的情感互動(dòng)，如感動(dòng)、欣慰等，以及對(duì)未來的展望或期許。

四、故事線

地震發(fā)生-軍官救強(qiáng)天林-強(qiáng)天林成長-發(fā)布視頻尋找軍官-軍官回應(yīng)-

情感交流與展望未來

五、感情線

從軍官的救命之恩引發(fā)強(qiáng)天林的感恩之情，到他努力成長過程中的堅(jiān)定信念，再

到找到軍官后的感動(dòng)與欣慰，情感逐漸升華。

六、主旨升華句

1.Theactofkindnessinthefaceofdisastersowedtheseedsofhopeand

transformationinayoungheart.（在災(zāi)難面前的善舉在一顆年輕的心中播下

了希望和轉(zhuǎn)變的種子。）

2.Throughtheyears,thememoryofthatselflesssacrificebecamethedriving

forcebehindone'spursuitofabetterself.（多年來，那份無私犧牲的記憶成

為了一個(gè)人追求更好自我的動(dòng)力。）

3.Thebondformedinthechaosoftheearthquakeendured,bridgingthegapof

timeandbringingtwolivesbacktogetherinamomentofemotionalreunion.

（在地震混亂中形成的紐帶經(jīng)久不衰，跨越了時(shí)間的鴻溝，在情感重聚的

時(shí)刻將兩個(gè)生命再次聯(lián)系在一起。）

4.Thesearchwasnotjustforaperson,butfortheembodimentofcourageand

kindnessthathadshapedalifeandinspiredajourneyofgrowth.（這次尋找不

僅僅是為了一個(gè)人，更是為了尋找勇氣和善良的化身，它塑造了一個(gè)生命

并激發(fā)了成長之旅。）

5.Intheaftermathofdisaster,asimpleactofheroismhadthepowertoignitea

flameofdeterminationthatwouldburnbrightlythroughtheyears,leadingtoa

beautifulencounterofgratitudeandfulfillment.（在災(zāi)難的余波中，一個(gè)簡單

的英雄行為有能力點(diǎn)燃一團(tuán)決心的火焰，多年來熊熊燃燒，導(dǎo)致了一次感

恩和滿足的美好相遇。）

七、寫作范文

范文一

第一段

TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang'slife.Previously,hisacademic

performancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sheroicactbecameaturningpoint.Everytime

hethoughtofthesoldierriskinghislifetosavehim,asurgeofdeterminationfilled

him.Hestartedtofocusonhisstudies,spendinglonghoursporingoverbooks.When

hefaceddifficultiesandwantedtogiveup,theimageofthebleedinghandsofthe

officerwouldflashinhismind,motivatinghimtopersevere.Eventually,hishard

workpaidoff,andhemanagedtogetgoodgrades.Inspiredbytheofficer,healso

joinedtheschooFsvolunteerteam,helpingothersjustliketheofficerhaddonefor

him.Hewasdeterminedtobecomeasoldiertocontinuespreadingloveandhope.

第二段

TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhadachance

tochatontheWeChat.TheofficerwasdeeplytouchedbyQiang'seffortsand

transformation.HetoldQiangthathewasjustdoinghisdutybackthenandnever

expectedsuchaprofoundimpact.HerecalledthemomenthesavedQiangvividlyand

wasgladtoseethattheyoungboyhadgrownintoaresponsibleandbraveman.They

talkedabouttheirlivesovertheyears,andtheofficerencouragedQiangtokeepup

thegoodworkinthemilitary.Theypromisedtomeetinpersonsomeday,andboth

werelookingforwardtothatmomentwithanticipationandjoy,knowingthattheir

connectionformedduringthedisasterhadenduredandwouldcontinuetoinspire

theminthefuture.

范文二

第一段

TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang'slife.Previously,hisacademic

performancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sselflessshieldinspiredanewpathforhim.He

madeavowtohimselfthathewouldnotwastethesecondchanceatlifegivenbythe

officer.Hebegantostudywithextraordinarydiligence,seekinghelpfromteachers

andclassmateswheneverheencounteredproblems.Thememoryoftheofficer's

kindnessbecamehissourceofstrengthduringtoughtimes.Inadditiontoimproving

hisacademicperformance,healsoactivelyparticipatedinphysicaltraining,aimingto

buildastrongbodyliketheofficer.Hisdreamofbecomingasoldiergrewstronger

daybyday,andhefinallyachieveditthroughunremittingefforts.

第二段

TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhadachance

tochatontheWeChat.TheofficerexpressedhisprideinQiang'sachievements.He

sharedsomeofhisownexperiencesinthemilitaryandadvisedQiangtoalways

remembertheresponsibilityonhisshoulders.Theyreminiscedaboutthedaysafter

theearthquake,andtheofficerwasamazedathowmuchQianghadremembered

abouttheirbriefencounters.Theirconversationwasfilledwithwarmthandemotion.

TheofficerhopedthatQiangwouldcontinuetostriveforexcellenceandmake

contributionstothecountryandthepeople.Thisencounternotonlyrekindledtheir

oldconnectionbutalsostrengthenedtheirbeliefinthepowerofkindnessandthe

responsibilitytopassiton.Astheyendedthechat,theybothfeltasenseof

fulfillmentandlookedforwardtoanewchapterintheirrelationship.

參考答案

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