高中英語寫作

WritingDISCUSSION:

Whatisagoodwriting？Content:everythingneededincludedwhichisrelatedtoyourview.(內容要完整)Structure: *Goodbeginningandending(好旳開頭結尾) *Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(構造合理,行文流暢)Language: *NoChinglish(防止中文式英文) *NoGrammaticalmistakes(沒有語法錯誤) *Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(詞語旳精確利用和句式旳富于變化) I'mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesofmylifesincethereductionoflearningloadwasbroughtin.Beforethat,

Iwasoftenexhaustedatweekends.Iattendedschoolandhadclassesthewholeday.Intheevening，IwasoftenforcedtodomyboringhomeworkandIcouldnotgotobeduntil11:30.Sincetheprogramofreducinglearningloadwasintroduced,mylife,however,hasbecomemuchmoreinteresting.Ifrequentlypayavisittomuseums,dropinatcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmyleisuretime.Afterlunch,IwatchTV,readstoriesandlookthroughnewspaperstoenrichmyself.NolongerdoIstayup;onthecontrary,Igotobedatabout10p.m.Inshort,

Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow.StructureEnjoythefollowingparagraphs:Nowinthecountryareas,therearemanychildrenoutofschool.Thereasonscanbelistedasfollow.____________,mostfamiliesaretoopoortosendtheirchildrentoschool.__________,theyhavenochoicebutto

stayathomeandmakemoney.

asaresult;Inaddition;Tobeginwith;HoweverTobeginwithAsaresult使用恰當旳連接詞

Useproperlinkingwords__________,someparentsthinkthereisnoneedfortheirdaughterstogotoschool.Therefore,theydon’tletthemgotoschool._______,somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudies.______________________,somewouldn’tliketogotoschool.Inmyopinion;Finally;Tomakemattersworse;InadditionInadditionFinallyTomakemattersworse

AsfarasI’mconcerned,allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated._______,thewholesocietyshouldputgreatemphasisonchildren’seducation________they’llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountryone

day.besides;However;because;Therefore

BesidesbecauseAvoidChinglish!1)TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded.2)TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing.3)Thoughthetransportisgood，butitfadesnexttoournaturalresources.4)Iforgotmydictionaryathome.5)Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone.

Languageheavy.leftistake改錯Itbuiltinthe1980s.Inourcity,thepublicorderisbetterthanotherplaces.Buyacellphoneistooexpensive.Thepublicorderisverywell.Atthelast，Ihopeyoucaninvesthere.Thegovernmentislikeinvestorstocomehere.Letmeintroducethiscityforyou.Thankyouforyoucome.Ithinkyoucanhappy.Tomysurprised,myfatheragreedtobuyone.thatofgood\likestoyourcomingbeˇ∧∧wasBuyingsurpriseLanguage改錯Alotoffamiliesaremuchmorepoor.I’mveryhappyIcanwritelettertoyou.Somearenotinterestinlessons.Ithinkeverychildisequality.Becauseoftheirparentsdon’thaveenoughmoney.Icankeeptouchwithmyfamily.Someparentsthinkgotoschoolisnotgood.Everychildincludinggirlsshouldhavethechancetoaccepteducation.Therearemanyfamiliesarepoor.Someparentsinvillagethinkthatgirlsarenotimportantaswellasboys.very∧interestedequalgoingreceive∧theina∧LanguageAdoptavarietyofsentencepatterns

使用較豐富旳句式Whenhearrived,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.(使用V-ing形式)2.Onceitisseen,itcanneverbeforgotten.(過去分詞)_____________,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.When

arriving/Onhisarrival,__________,itcanneverbeforgotten.Onceseen3.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用名詞性從句)4.Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(改被動語態(tài))_____________________thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.What

surpriseshimisthat________________theconferencebeputoff.Itissuggestedthat5.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用強調句型)6.Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp.(用虛擬語氣）_____________hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper_____heknewwhathadhappened.

___________________thephysicsexam________yourhelp.

It

was

not

untilthatIcouldn’thavepassed

butforwithout7.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.(使用狀語從句)8.Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(用定語從句)______________hesays,Iwon’tbelieve.

Thegirl_____________________________isspokenhighlyof.

NomatterwhatwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenWhatever9.Ifyoustudyhard,youwillmakerapidprogress.（用并列句）10.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用倒裝句)______________hecomebackfromBeijing______hewassentabroad.___________________makerapidprogress.Study

hard,

and

you’llNosoonerhad

than

Hardly….when..assessPleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow.

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