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閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。BellawasonlyfiveanditwasherfirstcampingtripwithMumandDad.Shewasexcitedbutwasalittlenervoustoo."Whatifthetentfallsoverandsquashesus?Whatifthewindblowsitaway?Whatifawolfesintothetentandeatsus?..,"shekeptaskingMum.ThismadeMumlaugh.Bellahadreadtoomanyfairystorieswithbigbadwolvesinthem.MumfortedBellathattherearen'tanywolvesinthecityoreveninthewholecountry,exceptinzoos.“Well,whatifoneescapedfromazoo?”askedBella.Mumlaughed,“Zooswerecarefulenoughnottolettheiranimalsescape.”ThenBellasoonforgotaboutwolvesastheystartedplanningforthecampingtrip.BellahelpedDadloadupthecar.Theyputinthetent,abigoneforthewholefamily.Thenthesleepingbags,blanketsandmore."It'scoldatnightwhenyou'resleepinginatent,"addedDad.Wheneverythingwaspacked,thecarwasfulltobursting.Dadstartedthecar,andsoontheywereleavingthecitybehindthem."Lookatthehills!"shoutedMumexcitedly,"Lookatthecowsonthegrass!"Theydroveup
awindingroad
untiltheyreachedthecampsite,whichbelongedtoafarmandwasinabigfield.Oncethetentwasup,Bellawenttoexplore.Thereweretreestoclimbandastreamforpaddling.Bellasattherewatchingthecowseatingthegrass.Thedayflewbyanditwasgettingdark.Astheywerereadyforsleep,strangerustling(沙沙聲)noisescamefromthefencenext
totheirtentinthedarkness."What'sthatnoise?Isitawolfapproaching?"BellaworriedandmovedclosertoMum."Maybeit'sjustthewind,"MumgentlypattedBella.Belladidn'tsayanythingmore.Theywerealltiredafteradayoutdoors,and
crawled
intotheirsleepingbags.SoonMumandDadwereasleep.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80個(gè)左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.文章大意:五歲的Bella首次和父母露營,因讀了太多童話故事而擔(dān)心帳篷被吹倒、狼來襲等問題。父母安慰后她開始期待露營,幫忙準(zhǔn)備并一同前往營地。到達(dá)后她盡情玩耍,夜晚準(zhǔn)備入睡時(shí)聽到奇怪沙沙聲,懷疑是狼,在父母安撫下雖未再言語,但因緊張難以入眠。故事山分析:開端:Bella首次露營,因童話中的狼而充滿恐懼與擔(dān)憂,不斷向媽媽提問,媽媽則耐心安慰,為露營之旅奠定了既有期待又有隱憂的基調(diào),也為后續(xù)可能出現(xiàn)的與“狼”相關(guān)的情節(jié)埋下伏筆。發(fā)展:Bella參與露營準(zhǔn)備,一家人駕車前往營地,途中欣賞風(fēng)景,到達(dá)后搭建帳篷并在營地探索,享受白天的歡樂時(shí)光,暫時(shí)忘卻擔(dān)憂,情節(jié)逐漸推進(jìn)到露營的核心場景。高潮:夜晚入睡時(shí)聽到奇怪的沙沙聲,Bella心中對狼的恐懼再次被喚起,向媽媽詢問后雖得到安撫但仍無法平靜,緊張氛圍達(dá)到頂點(diǎn),故事的懸念和戲劇性增強(qiáng)。結(jié)局:續(xù)寫部分將圍繞Bella再次聽到聲音后的反應(yīng)及最終如何化解恐懼展開,使故事完整并呈現(xiàn)出情感的變化與升華。五處伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng):伏筆:Bella讀太多有狼的童話故事而擔(dān)心狼。續(xù)寫回應(yīng):再次聽到聲音后,她更加堅(jiān)信是狼,內(nèi)心極度恐懼,但最終發(fā)現(xiàn)是農(nóng)場的小狗,與之前對狼的恐懼形成對比,消除了誤解。伏筆:媽媽安慰說沒有狼且動物園管理嚴(yán)格不會有狼逃脫。續(xù)寫回應(yīng):Bella盡管聽到安慰,但夜晚的聲音仍讓她害怕,這凸顯出孩子內(nèi)心恐懼的難以消除,直到真相大白才徹底安心,體現(xiàn)出心理變化的過程。伏筆:營地在農(nóng)場的大田野里。續(xù)寫回應(yīng):沙沙聲原來是農(nóng)場小狗發(fā)出的,合理利用了營地的環(huán)境背景,使情節(jié)的轉(zhuǎn)折不突兀,解釋了聲音的來源。伏筆:Bella白天看到農(nóng)場里的奶牛等動物。續(xù)寫回應(yīng):夜晚的“不速之客”也是農(nóng)場動物之一,與白天的場景相呼應(yīng),豐富了農(nóng)場這一故事背景的元素運(yùn)用。伏筆:Bella聽到聲音靠近媽媽且未再言語但沒睡著。續(xù)寫回應(yīng):她因緊張而難以入睡,為后續(xù)進(jìn)一步探究聲音來源和解決恐懼心理做了鋪墊,推動情節(jié)繼續(xù)發(fā)展。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn):描述Bella再次聽到聲音后的具體行動,如小心翼翼地查看或緊張地等待。揭示聲音的來源,如原來是農(nóng)場的小狗,以及Bella得知真相后的反應(yīng),如松一口氣、感到好笑等。情感線:
Bella最初是興奮與緊張交織,對露營既期待又因狼的恐懼而不安。在準(zhǔn)備和白天游玩時(shí)興奮占據(jù)主導(dǎo),暫時(shí)忘卻恐懼。夜晚聽到聲音后,恐懼瞬間回歸且加劇,靠近媽媽尋求安慰卻難以平靜。當(dāng)發(fā)現(xiàn)聲音來源是小狗后,轉(zhuǎn)為釋然和輕松,從極度恐懼到放松的情緒變化貫穿故事始終,體現(xiàn)了孩子在面對未知時(shí)的心理成長歷程。故事線:
Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Sheheldherbreathandlistenedcarefully.Thenoiseseemedtobegettingcloser.Tremblingwithfear,sheslowlypeekedoutofthetent.Tohersurprise,shesawalittledogfromthefarmwaggingitstailnearthefence.Realizingitwasthesourceofthenoise,Bellaletoutasighofrelief.Shegiggledandfinallyfeltatease,snugglingintohersleepingbagandfallingasleeppeacefully.主旨升華句:“Fearoftenmagnifiestheunknown,butcourageliesinseekingthetruthandfindingit'snotasdreadfulasimagined.”(恐懼常常放大未知,但勇氣在于探尋真相并發(fā)現(xiàn)并非如想象中可怕。)“Themonstersinourmindsaresometimesjustfriendlycreaturesindisguise,waitingtobediscovered.”(我們心中的怪物有時(shí)只是偽裝的友好生物,等待被發(fā)現(xiàn)。)“Inthefaceofthedarkandtheunknown,alittleexplorationcanturnterrorintolaughter.”(面對黑暗與未知,一點(diǎn)探索能將恐懼化為歡笑。)“Ourfearsarelikeshadowsthatvanishwhenthelightofrealityshinesuponthem.”(我們的恐懼如同陰影,當(dāng)現(xiàn)實(shí)之光照射時(shí)便會消散。)“Whatseemsscaryinthenightcanbeasourceoffortandamusementoncerevealed.”(夜晚看似可怕的東西一旦被揭示,可能成為安慰和樂趣的來源。)寫作示范一:Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Shemusteredupthecouragetounzipthetentslightlyandpeekout.There,inthemoonlight,wasasmall,furrycreature.Itwasapuppy!Ithadprobablybeencuriousaboutthenewarrivals.Bella'sheartratesloweddown.Shewhisperedtothepuppy,anditbarkedsoftlyinresponse.Withasmileonherface,Bellaclosedhereyesanddriftedofftosleep,herfearsreplacedbyasenseofwonder.寫作示范二:Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Shelaystill,hereyeswideopen.Afterawhile,shedecidedtowakeDad.Dadquietlygotupandtheybothwentoutsidetoinvestigate.Astheyroundedthetent,theysawalittledogsniffingaround.Dadlaughedandexplaineditwasjustafriendlypupfromthefarm.Bellalaughedtoo,feelingabitsillyforbeingsoscared.Shewentbacktothetentandsleptsoundly,knowingtherewerenowolvestofear.參考范文:Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Shewonderedwhatwashappeningwhensuddenly,sheheardmorerustling.Itsoundedlikesomethingwalkingaroundoutside.“Thiscampsiteisjustthekindofplaceawolfmightlike.What..whatifawolfdidescapefromazoo?”
Bellalayawake,shivering,astherustlingcontinued.1minute,2minutes.…….afterwhatseemedages,Bellacouldn’tbearitanylonger.Shecreptoutofthesleeping
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