2023屆高考英語讀后續(xù)寫課件

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Setting背景Plots情節(jié)Emotions情感Plotsclimax

高潮Theme主題3StepsofwritingReading“Bye,Mom!Don’tforgettomakemypie!”shouted12-year-oldJakeafterkissinghismother,Susan,goodbye.Hewasanxiouslywaitingforthebus.Momentslater,thebuspulledover,andJakehoppedin,assumingitwasjustgoingtobeanordinaryridetoschool.“Luckily,Momgaveme$6.OtherwiseI’dhavetowalkallthewaytoschool,”hethought.Thebuscametoastop,pickingupChristel,a56-year-oldwomanfromthenextstop.Shewassmellyandlookeddirty.Somepassengersfrownedather,butshewasleastbotheredaboutthem.Momentslater,shetrembledthroughthecrowdtowardanemptyseatnexttoJake.“Ticket,please?!”theconductorsaidloudly,staringather.Christel’sfaceslowlystartedtogored.“Onesecond,I’mlookingformypurse,”shereplied.“I...uh...Idon’thavemoney.Iforgottobringmypurse,”Christelstammered(結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說),embarrassed.“Lady,thisisnotacharityridethatpicksupbeggarsforfree.I’mstoppingthebusrightnow.Getout!”yelledtheconductorasthecrowdofpassengersturnedtowardChristelallatonce.Jakewitnessedeverythingandwasdisappointedathowtheconductortreatedthepoorwoman.Thenherememberedhestillhadsomechange.“Hereisyour$3...Giveheraticket,”hesaidtotheconductor,throwingthemoneyintohishand.“Thankyou,sweetheart.Iamforevergratefultoyou!Whatisyourname,dear?”saidChristel.“I’mJake.That’sokay.IjustdidwhatIshoulddo,”repliedJake,takingChristel’swordsofgratitudecasually.TheytalkedaboutJake’sschoollife.“Iwanttobecomeabaseballplayer,butmyschooldoesnothavesuchfacilities.Idon’twanttotroublemymom.She’salreadyworkinghardintherestaurant.Myfatherpassedawayinanaccidenttwoyearsago,”revealedJake.（解釋了家庭情況，實(shí)現(xiàn)不了夢想的原因）“Alright,Grandma!We’vearrivedatmyschool.I’llleavenow.Bye-bye!”ChristelwastouchedbyJake’swarmheart.Shestaredasecondtimeathisschool,watchinghimdisappearinsidethegate.SettingTime----Place----Characters:ReadingSettingTime----morningPlace----onthebusCharacters:(maincharacters)Jack----a12-yearsoldboywhohasabaseballplayerdream.(maincharacters)Christel----a56-year-oldladywhowassmellyandlookeddirty.mom,conductor,passengers,principalReadingMainplotofthetext----本文以人物為線索展開。12歲的杰克上學(xué)遲到了，他坐上公交車趕赴學(xué)校。途中來了一位衣著骯臟且忘帶錢包的56歲的克里斯特爾太太。正當(dāng)售票員要把付不起車費(fèi)的克里斯特爾太太趕下公交車時，杰克站出來為克里斯特爾太太買了車票。二人在乘車途中進(jìn)行了真誠的交談，從談話中克里斯特爾太太了解到杰克夢想成為棒球運(yùn)動員，杰克的媽媽在一家飯店打工，父親兩年前因?yàn)橐馔馊ナ??？死锼固貭柋唤芸藴嘏男母袆恿?。在杰克下車進(jìn)學(xué)校后，她又一次盯著他的學(xué)校，看著他消失在大門里。在原文中學(xué)習(xí)到的表達(dá)：

1.動作類：shout大聲說（有意識地高聲喊叫，常用于提出警告，發(fā)出命令，喚起注意等。）pullover路邊停車hopin跳上assume以為

pickupsb接某人上車frownatsb.對某人皺眉tremble顫抖

stareatsb.盯著某人看stammer結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說yell大叫

。（多指求援、鼓勵時的呼叫，也可指因外界因素刺激而發(fā)出的尖利聲音）turntowardsb.轉(zhuǎn)向某人。witness目擊，見證，觀察。

takesb’swordsofgratitudecasually漫不經(jīng)心地接受某人的感激之詞。

reveal揭示，透露

情感表達(dá)：

anxiously焦急地

sb’sfacestartedtogpred臉開始變紅

embarrassed尷尬的

bedisappointedat對......失望

begratefultosb.感激某人

文中多處使用現(xiàn)在分詞非謂語表達(dá)1.Momentslater,thebuspulledover,andJakehoppedin,assumingitwasjustgoingtobeanordinaryridetoschool.2.“Hereisyour$3...Giveheraticket,”hesaidtotheconductor,throwingthemoneyintohishand.3.“I’mJake.That’sokay.IjustdidwhatIshoulddo,”repliedJake,takingChristel’swordsofgratitudecasually.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡得相應(yīng)位置做答。ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprising

visittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.___________________________________________________________________________________________Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThinkingClues----首句線索Para1:ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.

Para2:Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.見到校長了嗎？說了什么？做了什么

對比之前的狀態(tài)，其實(shí)她是非常富裕的。見到Jake了嗎？說了什么？做了什么？去了哪里？幾個驚喜？ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.1.第一句話：找到Jack。第二句話：Jack心理感受（震驚，不敢相信）第三句話：Christel把Jack帶去哪里？Jack的心理變化（困惑）第四句話，來到校長辦公室，見到校長，夸Jack。Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.

Chtistel引導(dǎo)Jack去看球場。Jake情感表現(xiàn)？（驚喜，狂喜，開懷大笑。行為表現(xiàn)，跑，跳，激動的落淚，擁抱。）Christer的行為表現(xiàn)，情感。怎么和Jack表達(dá)？WritingClimax是什么驚喜？根據(jù)事情的發(fā)展順序和所給的首句，Climax1就是第一段見到Jack給予驚喜，Climax2第二段給出更大的驚喜.雙方當(dāng)時面對的周圍環(huán)境描寫，心理描寫，隨即采取相應(yīng)的行為動作描寫。來到學(xué)?！S來到校長辦公室——講述兩人的邂逅——帶著來到球場——看到改造后的球場——激動地奔跑——開心地笑了詞匯激活

【行為類】①拜訪：see/visit/payavisitto

②問候：greet/sendhisrespectsto/extendgreetingsto

③表達(dá)：express/show/describe【情緒類】①感到震驚的：

shocked/astonished/surprised

②開心地：happily/pleasantly1.inhighspirits2.inagoodmood3.canhardlyconcealexcitement4.amixtureofexcitementandhappiness5.beoverjoyedat6.bebesideoneselfwithjoy/bewildwithjoy

7.brightenone’sheart

心情愉快心情好幾乎無法掩飾興奮既興奮又開心對......感到非常高興欣喜若狂使某人心情愉快描寫“喜樂”開心“我想給你一個驚喜!”她指向棒球場，眼里閃爍著光芒?！癐wantedtosurpriseyou!”shepointedatthenewballparkwithhereyes

gleaming.感激如果沒有杰克的幫助,我就不會順利回家。ButforJack'shelp,Iwouldn'tgohomesmoothly.獲得高分的寫作技巧Tip1:故事要圍繞著主要人物展開。Tip2:詳細(xì)刻畫角色及其情感。Tip4:使用恰當(dāng)?shù)男揎椩~以使描寫更加生動。Tip3:使用恰當(dāng)?shù)你暯釉~以使故事更有連貫性。Tip5:做到首尾呼應(yīng)以使故事更加有條理。Tip6:確保第二段和第一段的銜接有邏輯。showtime

ThenextdayChristelpaidasurprisingvisittotheschoolinherexpensivecar.

Jakewasshockedtoseeheroutsidehisclassroom.“Icameheretoseeyou.Pleasefollowmetoyourprincipal’soffice,”saidChristel,confusingJake,whohadnoideahowhislifewouldchange.ChristelgreetedtheprincipalandtoldhimaboutherencounterwithJake,expressinggratitudeforJake’shelp.Christelturnedouttobeawealthyandsuccessfulwoman.“Youmustbereallyproudofyourstudent!”shetoldtheprincipal.Jakedidn’trealizeabiggersurprisewaswaitingforhimoutsidetheprincipal’soffice.“Jake,honey,doyoumindvisitingyourfield?”askedChristel.Jakedidasshetold,hurryingtotheschoolplayground.Christelhadhiredtop-classdesignerstochangethegroundintoabigballpark.Jakecouldn’tbelievehisowneyes,staringatthelatestequipmentforthenewballpark.Christelhelpedtohireanexperiencedbaseballcoachforthesch