Amother'sdaysurprise讀后續(xù)寫導(dǎo)學(xué)案-高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

ContinuationWriting讀后續(xù)寫AMother’sDaySurpriseThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.續(xù)寫第一步：Readforthethemeandfiveelements（主題和6要素）ThemeWhenWhereWhoWhatWhyHow續(xù)寫第二步：Readfortheplotandtheemotion（情節(jié)和情感）續(xù)寫第三步：CharacterAnalyst(人物性格分析)Mom____________________________________________________Thomas__________________________________________________Maggie__________________________________________________續(xù)寫第四步：研究所給句子，推測(cè)新信息，合理提出續(xù)寫情節(jié)推斷續(xù)寫框架。TIP1:兩段首句定一框研究所給的開頭句子，一般續(xù)寫第一段的開頭承上啟下，具體寫什么大多由第二段的開頭決定

Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Questions1:2:3:...TIP2：兩框兩首正能量：第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來(lái)確定。Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Questions1:2:3:TIP3：提出問(wèn)題鏈，借用回答構(gòu)成情節(jié)TIP4：尋找原文的續(xù)寫點(diǎn)TIP5：巧用動(dòng)作為主線，借助心理描寫，讓續(xù)寫內(nèi)容生動(dòng)形象化細(xì)節(jié)積累：1)她的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。Abrightsmilecrossedherface2)因?yàn)楦吲d雙眼閃閃發(fā)亮。Hereyestwinkledsparkledwithpleasure.3)看到早餐盤她眼睛都驚訝得睜大了。Hereyeswidenedwithsurpriseatthesightofthebreakfasttray.4）她把它們緊緊地抱在胸前，終于抬起頭，淚流滿面地微笑著。Shehuggedthemtoherchest,andatlastshewasabletolookupwithtearfuleyesandasmile.5）一股幸福與溫暖流遍全身，媽媽輕輕地親了兩個(gè)孩子。Asurgeofhappinessandwarmthrunningthroughher,Momkissedthetwokidsgently.續(xù)寫第五步：大膽下手寫吧Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.續(xù)寫第六步：優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)，提升語(yǔ)言的豐富度（一）續(xù)寫第一段（側(cè)重描寫動(dòng)作和人物做早餐的場(chǎng)景）1.他把這鍋粥放在文火上，讓杰夫看著煮15分鐘。______________________________________________________(雙連動(dòng)詞)Heputthepotofporridgeonagentleheat,____________________________________________________________(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ))2.看到他們失望的表情，他建議他們把廚房打掃干凈，而他幫助他們給媽媽做早餐。He______________________,andadvisedthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemmakebreakfastformother.______________________________,headvisedthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemmakebreakfastforMother.3.很快廚房里彌漫著一股香味。Inaflash,___________________________________________________.4.雙胞胎準(zhǔn)備浩早餐托盤，加上一張他們做的漂亮的卡片，走出廚房。Thetwinspreparedthebreakfasttray,_____________________________,andsteppedoutofthekitchen.5.很快，一個(gè)精心設(shè)計(jì)的法式吐司和一碗粥就做好了。（二）續(xù)寫第二段：6.當(dāng)他們的母親看到眼前的美味的早餐，她的臉上閃過(guò)一絲驚喜。Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousbreakfastinfrontofher,_______________________________________(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ))7.她驚喜極了，于是興奮地?fù)u醒正在假裝睡覺(jué)的父親。____________________________________thatsheexcitedlyshookfather,whowaspretendingtobeasleep.(so...that....結(jié)構(gòu))滿分結(jié)尾句1.詹娜與父親目光相遇，他們偷偷地互相眨了眨眼。Jennacaughtherfather’seyesand____________________續(xù)寫最后一步：整理寫作，認(rèn)真謄寫（書寫至關(guān)重要?。。。?021年惠州三模讀后續(xù)寫Thomaswatchedtheirrigationcanal(灌溉渠)forasignofwater.Itlookedasdryashefeltinside.Thomas’sthoughtswereinterruptedashisyoungersister,Maggie,cameskippingacrossthefield.“WhatareyougivingMamaforherbirthday?”sheasked.Thomasfelthisstomachturn.HehadforgottenthatMama’sbirthday,thefirstsincetheylefttheirhometown,wastomorrow.“It’sasurprise,Maggie,”heanswered.Itwasthetruth.Evenhewouldbesurprised.Thomaswouldwishtobebackinthemountainsoftheirhometown.SurelyMamawouldwantthesame.Atleastitrainedthere.Eachtimeitdid,Mama,Thomas,andMaggiewouldsitonthefrontporchandwatchforarainbow.Theneachofthempickedoutafavoritecolorintherainbow.Mamaalwaysgavethesameanswer.“Turquoise(藍(lán)綠色，綠松石),”shewouldfinallysaywithadreamysmile,pointingatthesky.“Squeezedintight,betweentheblueandgreen.Closeyoureyesandyoucanseeit.Ifyoucouldtouchit,itwouldfeelcool,likeabreezeblowingacrossthestream.”Thomaswasdiscouraged.Thesunwouldbesettingsoon,andhestillhadnothingtogivehismother.Whathesawaroundwererocksandsand.Hepickedupalarge,flatrock,scoopedupthedirtandwatcheditfalltotheground.Suddenly,somethingcaughthiseye.Aspeckofcolorpeekedthroughthedirt.“Hey,what’sthis?”heasked.“Let’sfindout,”Maggieyelled.ThomasandMaggiedugwiththeirfingersanduncoveredasmall,roundstone.Inthecenter,therewasatinyhole.“That’sjustaturquoisebead(珠子),”Thomasexclaimed.“MyfriendJack’ssisterhasajarfullofthem.”“Let’sseeiftherearemore,”Maggiegotexcited.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；請(qǐng)按如下格式在以下位置作答?！癐haveanidea,Thomassaidcheerfully.Earlythenextmorning,ThomasandMaggiesetasmallpackageonthetable.續(xù)寫第一步：Readforthethemeandfiveelements（主題和6要素）Theme：________________Who:_________________What:_________________When:_________________Where:________________Why:__________________How：________________續(xù)寫第二步：Readfortheplotandtheemotion（情節(jié)和情感）續(xù)寫第三步：CharacterAnalyst(人物性格分析)Mom____________________________________________________Thomas__________________________________________________Maggie__________________________________________________續(xù)寫第四步：研究所給句子，推測(cè)新信息，合理提出續(xù)寫情節(jié)推斷續(xù)寫框架。TIP1:兩段首句定一框研究所給的開頭句子，一般續(xù)寫第一段的開頭承上啟下，具體寫什么大多由第二段的開頭決定TIP2：提出問(wèn)題鏈，回答構(gòu)成情節(jié)TIP3：兩框兩首正能量：第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來(lái)確定。TIP4：巧用動(dòng)作為主線，借助心理描寫，讓續(xù)寫內(nèi)容生動(dòng)形象化大膽寫吧Para.1:“Ihaveanidea,”Thomassaidcheerfully.Para.2:Earlythenextmorning,ThomasandMaggiesetasmallpackageonthetable續(xù)寫第五步：優(yōu)化細(xì)節(jié)借鑒課本和名著仿寫第一段：Ourevidencesuggeststhattheydidwearclothesmadefromanimalskins.Wecontinuediscoveringtoolsthatweresharpenersforothertool.Itseemsthattheyusedthesharpenedstonetoolstocutupanimalsandremovetheirskin.Thensmallerscraperswereprobablyusedtoremovethefatandmeatfromtheskin.Afterthattheywouldrubanampleamountofsaltontoskintomakeitsoft.Finally,theywouldcutitandsewthepiecestogether.Quiteadifficultandmessytask.(AnexcerptfromB8U5“AVisittotheZhoukoudianCaves)仿寫：Suddenlyshediscovered,inablacksatinbox,asuperbdiamondnecklace,andherheartthrobbedwithanimmoderatedesire.Herhandstrembledasshetookit.Shefasteneditroundherthroat,outsideherhighneckedwaist,andwaslostinecstasy（狂喜，陶醉）atherreflectioninthemirror.…Shethrewherarmsroundherfriend'sneck,kissedherpassionately,thenfledwithhertreasure.（AnexcerptfromMaupassant’s“TheNecklace”）仿寫第二段續(xù)寫最后一步：整理寫作，認(rèn)真謄寫（Handwritingreallycounts!）參考答案AMother’sDaySurprise微技能參考答案：Heputthepotofporridgeonagentleheat,andaskedJefftowatchoutforgoingforfifteenminutes.AskingJefftowatchoutforitgoingforfifteenminutes.SawtheirdisappointedfaceSeeingtheirdisappointedfaceInaflash,sweetsmellfilledtheairinthekitchen.Addedabeautifulcardtheyhadmade.Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrossherface.Soon,awelldesignedFrenchtoastandabowlofporridgewereready.AninvitingsmellofbreakfastfilledtheairAninvitingsmellofbreakfastfillingtheairThesurprisewassosweetSosweetwasthesurprisethatsheexcitedlyshookFather,whowaspretendingtobeasleep.Hefakedastonishmentwhenhesawthebreakfast.TheywinkedateachothersecretlyWithmovedtearsrollingdownhercheeks下水作文：（一）Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Realizingwhattheywerepreparingfor,shewasgreatlysurprised.Soimmediatelyheofferedtogetinvolvedinthekid’sjob.Heputthepotofporridgeonagentleheat,askingJefftowatchoutforitgoingfor15minutes.Andthen,hetoldJennatobreakanothertwoeggsandmixthemwithmilk.Withallpreparationsdone,theystartedtofrybreadtogether.Inaflash,asweetsmellfilledtheairinthekitchen.Totheirdelight,thebreakfastwasssuccessintheend.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Eyesopened,sheheard“HappyMother’sDay”fromherkidswithlovelybreakfastbeforeher.Behindthechildrenwasstandingtheirfather.Toshedlightonthesurprise,hetoldthemotherthewholestory.Afterlearningaboutwhathadhappened,shegazedattheboy’shandwithmovedtearsrollingdownhercheeksandhuggedthemtightly.下水作文：（二）Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindismay,theirfatherappearedinthedoorway.Onelookandheknewwhattheywereupto.Seeingtheircrestfallenfaces,hetoldthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemmakebreakfastforMother.Thetwinscheeredupanddidastold.Withinanhour,thekitchenwascleaned,andFatherhadmadesomeeggsandwichesandcookedsomeoatporridge.Thenhesneakedbacktobed.Thetwinspreparedthebreakfasttray,addingacardtheyhadmade,andthencarriedthetrayupstairstotheirparents’bedroom.Thetwinswoketheirmotherupbyhuggingherandyelling‘HappyMother’sDay,darlingMummy!’Motherhuggedthetwins.Hereyeswidenedatthesightofthebreakfasttray.SheshookFatherwhowaspretendingtosnore.Hefeignedastonishmentwhenhesawthebreakfast.Motherbitintoasandwichandsaiditwasthebestshehadevertasted.Jeffimmediatelywantedtohaveabite.Jennacaughtherfather’seyeandtheywinkedateachothersecretly.2021年惠州三模讀后續(xù)寫參考范文1：“Ihaveanidea,”Thomassaidcheerfully.“WecanmakeanecklaceforMom.”Inasecond,theproposalfoundacceptancefromMaggie.Theycontinuedthediscoverybyusingsharpenedstonetodugdeeperformorebeads.Thenalltheturquoisebeadswereselected.Afterthattheyrubthosebeadswithahandkerchieftoremovethedirt.Finally,theywentbackhometogetcolorfulthreadsthroughtheholes,whichwasquiteadifficultandmessytask!Tiredastheywere，theyfailedtosleepatthethoughtofMom‘sresponsewhenreceivingthegift.Earlythenextmorning,ThomasandMaggiesetasmallpackageonthetable.Whenspreadingbreakfast,Momsuddenlynoticedthepackagewithanote:ToDearMom.Sheunwrappeditanddiscoveredasuperbturquoisenecklacewithrainbowcoloredthreads.Herheartthrobbedwithanunexpectedaffection.Herhandstrembledasshetookit.“HappyBirthday,Mom”Maggiejumpedoverwithherbrotherbehind.Theyfasteneditroundherhighneckedwaist.Momputherarmsaroundthetwochildren,closedhereyes,andfeltthebreezeblowingacrossthestream.參考范文2：“Ihaveanidea,”Thomassaidexcitedly.Theykeptdiggingandfoundmorebeads.Awhilelater,Thomascountedtwentythreebeads.Heputtheminhisshirt,holdingupthefrontsohewouldn’tdropthem.Thenhecarriedthemtotheriver,andMaggiehelpedhimwasheachone.Carefully,theydriedandpolishedthemwithahandkerchief.“Mamawillhaveabirthdaypresentafterall!”Thomasexclaimed.HeseemedtoseeanecklacesparklingaroundhisMama’sneckandhisMamastrokeditfondly.Earlythenextmorning,ThomasandMaggiesetasmallpackageonthetable.“What’sthis?”Mamawascurious.Assheunwrappedthesmallpackage,shegasped.“Whatabeautifulnecklace!”shecried,pullingThomasandMaggieclose.“Icanalmostfeelacoolbreezeblowingacrossthestream.”Mamaclosedhereyesandsmiled.“ItsmellslikerainandIcanseethatturquoiseinthemostbeautifulrainbow.Thankyou,mydearestchildren.”Thomasfeltgoodinside.Mamahadherfavouriteturquoise!（Thomasfeltgoodinside,asifatemporarymomentbackinthemountainsoftheirhometown.）評(píng)分原則：評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從以下四個(gè)方面考慮：（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；（2）內(nèi)容的豐富性（和對(duì)所標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)的應(yīng)用情況）；（3）應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；（4）上下文的連貫性。AGIFTFORGRANDPASummervacationwasing.JackandhisbrotherBerlinwerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofvisitingtheirgrandparentsagain.Thebigdaycameatlast.Afterthehappyfamilygotready,theysetoutforthegrandparents’eagerly.Ontheway,thebrotherswereexcitedlytalkingaboutthefuntheyhadwithgrandparents.Alittlebluehousewithatallwhitechimneyfinallyappeared.BehindthepropertywastheforestcarryingtheirgoodmemorieswithGrandpa.Theyarrivedatthedriveway,attheendofwhichGrandmawaswaitingforthemjoyfully.JackandBerlineachgaveGrandmaabighugandthenswepttothelivingroom,shoutingexcitedly"Grandpa,weareback!"Seeinghisgrandsons,Grandpawaswildwithjoyandtriedtogetupwithallhisstrengthfromthechairbutinvain.Ahelplessexpressionflashedonhisface.Grandmaexplainedthathishealthwasdecliningrapidlyandmaybecouldn’tstanduponhisownforever.ButGrandpadeclaredstubbornly,"Ican!"Certainly,hewasstuckinhisboyishway.Mumandgrandparentswerehappytomeetagainafteralongtime.’Theysattogetherandchattedaboutwhathappenedrecently.Thebrothersweresoonboredwithadultconversation,wentoutandwanderedintotheforest.Talltreesstretcheduptotheheavenswithlargebranchescrossingeachother,whileyoungonesrosestraightlikesoldiers.Grandpawasonceagreatexplorerfullofwisdom.Hecouldtellwherethebirdscamefromonlybytheircallsandsongs.Thetrees,birds,lizards,lotsofbugs...HowmanymerrymomentstheyspentwithGrandpainthekingd