2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫：家庭假期游玩孩子意外受傷護(hù)士Lisa熱心救助見真情

2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫

家庭假期游玩孩子意外受傷，護(hù)士Lisa熱心救助見真情

原文分析讀后續(xù)寫原文審讀多篇范文呈現(xiàn)解題思路分析讀后續(xù)寫可積累文本1.原文賞析第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分

25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,

使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwaslastAugust.Wewereonvacation,justme,myhusband,andourtwokids,outforanice,safe,sociallydistancedweekaway.WewenttoapopularplacecalledDiana'sBaths,wherethewaterfallsoffaseriesofflatrocksupthemountain.Thebathswerefulloffamilies,sowemadeourwaytooneoftheupperlevelsofrocktokeepourdistance.Bothwherewesatanddownbelow,thewaterfelldownandintosmallpools,wherekidsinswimsuitswereplayingwateraround.IwasfrightenedasIsawmytwoboysjumpbetweenthesmoothrocks.Itoldthemtostayawayfromallthoseedges.ButIsoonrelaxed,andwewereallhavingfun,laughinginthepools.Suddenly,IturnedandsawmysonWyattsittingdownbetweentworocksinfast-movingwater.Ishoutedathimtogetout.HecalledbacksomethingthatIcouldn'thear,andthenhedisappearedovertheedge.AllIrememberfromthemomentsafterwasscreaming,overandover,likeaprayer,“Somebodyhelpmyson!”Ididn'tevenknowwhathelpheneeded,becauseIcouldn'tforcemyselftolook.Myhusbandwasalreadyjumpingdowntherocks.Ifinallylooked.Wyattwassittingup-hewasalive.Mybiggestfearwasgone.AsIheldmyyoungerson,Jed,close,Iheardanotherwomanscream.“Thatchildjustwentoverthewaterfall!”sheshoutedatherhusband.“Weareleaving!”Theywalkedaway,neverevenlookingbacktoseewhetherourchildwasOK.Itwasabout4metersfromthetopofthewaterfalltothepoolbelow,whichwasfilledwithhugerocks.Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks.That'swhatLisatoldus.Wedidn'tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint.Allweknewwasthatwhileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance,tooafraidorunbotheredtohelp,Lisadidn'thesitate.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse.Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame.2、

原文審讀

紅色定從/定語；藍(lán)色賓從；黃色狀從，從句斜體；下劃線+標(biāo)黃單詞+斜體

為需掌握積累單詞、短語；黑體標(biāo)黃，非謂語；可積累部分為

embody；

注釋(定語從句)

ItwaslastAugust.Wewereonvacation,justme,myhusband,andourtwokids,outforanice,safe,sociallydistancedweekaway(非謂語動(dòng)詞做狀語).

Wewenttoapopularplacecalled

Diana'sBaths(非謂語動(dòng)詞做后置定語),wherethewaterfallsoffaseriesofflatrocksupthemountain(定從).Thebathswerefulloffamilies,sowemadeourwayto

oneoftheupperlevelsofrocktokeepourdistance(非謂語動(dòng)詞做目的狀語).Bothwherewesatanddownbelow(定從),thewaterfelldownandintosmallpools,wherekidsinswimsuitswereplayingwateraround(定從).Iwasfrightened

asIsawmytwoboysjumpbetweenthesmoothrocks(狀從).Itoldthemtostayawayfromallthoseedges.ButIsoonrelaxed,andwewereallhavingfun,

laughinginthepools(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).Suddenly,Iturnedandsaw

mysonWyatt

sittingdown

betweentworocksinfast-movingwater.Ishoutedat

himtogetout.Hecalledbacksomething

thatIcouldn'thear(定從),andthenhedisappearedovertheedge.All

Irememberfromthemomentsafter(定從)

wasscreaming,overandover,likeaprayer,“Somebodyhelpmyson!”Ididn'tevenknowwhathelp

heneeded(定從),becauseIcouldn'tforcemyselftolook(狀從).Myhusbandwasalreadyjumpingdowntherocks.Ifinallylooked.Wyattwassittingup-hewasalive.Mybiggestfearwasgone.AsIheldmyyoungerson(狀從),Jed,close,Iheardanotherwomanscream.“Thatchildjustwentoverthewaterfall!”sheshoutedat

herhusband.“Weareleaving!”Theywalkedaway,neverevenlookingbacktosee(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)

whetherourchildwasOK(賓從).

Itwasabout4metersfromthetopofthewaterfalltothepoolbelow,

whichwasfilledwithhugerocks(定從).Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks.That'swhatLisatoldus(賓從).Wedidn'tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint(賓從).Allweknew(定從)

was

thatwhileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance,tooafraidorunbotheredtohelp,Lisadidn'thesitate(表從).

兩種構(gòu)思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應(yīng)”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應(yīng)“兩法六句”1.讀后續(xù)寫分類與構(gòu)思分析分類維度內(nèi)容分析原文反應(yīng)句類型情感類故事，基于驚險(xiǎn)事件的轉(zhuǎn)折與情感升華，重點(diǎn)描述親情、感激與陌生人無私的幫助。"Somebodyhelpmyson!"

"Lisadidn’thesitate."構(gòu)思思路通過Lisa救助孩子的過程引發(fā)情節(jié)發(fā)展，展現(xiàn)人物行動(dòng)、心理轉(zhuǎn)折及情感升華；以家庭的感激之情作為結(jié)尾的情感高點(diǎn)，體現(xiàn)人性溫暖和社會(huì)責(zé)任感。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Shewasanurse."布局-Paragraph1：描述Lisa救助過程，突出她的專業(yè)能力和冷靜應(yīng)對。

-Paragraph2：展現(xiàn)救援完成后，家人表達(dá)感激，情感升華。"Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse."框架提煉-起因：孩子落水危機(jī)；

-發(fā)展：Lisa果斷施救；

-高潮：救援完成，親情得到守護(hù)；

-結(jié)局：感恩及情感升華。"Wyattwassittingup—hewasalive."

"Lisadidn'thesitate."實(shí)施注意事項(xiàng)-突出情感線索，注意過渡句銜接；

-體現(xiàn)Lisa的果敢和專業(yè)特質(zhì)；

-避免情節(jié)斷裂，合理融入心理和動(dòng)作描寫。"Mybiggestfearwasgone."

"Lisatoldusshewasanurse."承接事項(xiàng)1.突出原文中情節(jié)張力；

2.用環(huán)境、心理和動(dòng)作描寫貫穿文段；

3.保留原文救援現(xiàn)場的急迫感和母親的情感波動(dòng)。"AllIrememberfromthemomentsafterwasscreaming."

"Lisadidn’thesitate."設(shè)計(jì)注意事項(xiàng)1.巧妙設(shè)計(jì)Lisa的救援細(xì)節(jié)；

2.突出家庭和陌生人之間的情感對比；

3.強(qiáng)調(diào)親情和陌生人善舉的重要性。"Whileeveryoneelselookedon...Lisadidn’thesitate."2.故事山模式與分析·

引入：家庭假期游玩和瀑布的危險(xiǎn)·

起因：孩子落水危機(jī)；發(fā)展：Lisa果斷施救；高潮：救援完成，親情得到守護(hù)；結(jié)局：感恩及情感升華。分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句伏筆1.Lisa是護(hù)士；

2.家人對危機(jī)的擔(dān)憂和焦慮；

3.其他人袖手旁觀反襯Lisa的勇敢。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Somebodyhelpmyson!"沖突點(diǎn)Wyatt跌落瀑布，生命受到威脅。"Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks."隱含線索1.Lisa的職業(yè)背景為后續(xù)救援成功提供邏輯支持；

2.母親對孩子的關(guān)愛推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展；

3.社會(huì)責(zé)任與人性善良的主題貫穿全文。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Whileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance..."解決方案1.Lisa冷靜施救，利用專業(yè)能力保護(hù)孩子；

2.家庭通過感激體現(xiàn)情感升華，強(qiáng)調(diào)陌生人善舉的重要性。"Shetoldmeshewasanurse."

"Wedidn’tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint."3.續(xù)寫情境下推薦語料動(dòng)作描寫1.

Lisaleanedoverswiftly,herhandssteadyasshecheckedWyatt’spulse.2.

Sheadjustedhispositioncarefullytoavoidfurtherinjury.3.

Mr.Johnsonrushedtocallforhelp,hishandstremblingwithurgency.心理描寫1.

PanicgrippedmeasIwatchedmysondisappearovertheedge.2.

AwaveofreliefwashedoveruswhenWyattopenedhiseyes.3.

GratitudefilledmyheartasIsawLisaworkingtirelesslytosavehim.環(huán)境描寫1.

Theroarofthewaterfallechoedassnowflakesmeltedontherocks.2.

Theicywindbitatourskin,intensifyingtheurgencyofthemoment.3.

Thepoolbelowshimmeredfaintlyunderthefadingsunlight.場景常見詞匯高級替換描述緊張afraidpetrified,alarmed感激thankfulindebted,grateful救援動(dòng)作helpassist,rescue高級替換詞4.高中語法現(xiàn)象與積累語料語法現(xiàn)象示例句被動(dòng)語態(tài)"Wyattwasfoundsittingup—hewasalive."條件句"Ifitweren’tforLisa,Wyattmightnothavesurvived."強(qiáng)調(diào)句"ItwasLisawhotookimmediateactiontosaveWyatt."動(dòng)名詞作主語"Helpingastrangerinneediswhatdefinestruehumanity."地道搭配-leapovertheedge

-filledwithgratitude

-hesitateforasecond5.PossibleAnswers:Version1Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,

whichexplainedherswiftandpreciseactions(定從).

Shecarefullychecked

Wyattforinjuries,

hercalmdemeanorsoothing(soothev.安慰撫慰).

ourfranticminds(獨(dú)立主格).."He’sstable,buthemayhaveabackinjury(對原文的承接).,"shesaid,hervoicesteadybutfirm(獨(dú)立主格).Withmyheartpounding(with復(fù)合狀語),Iwatchedherimprovise(vt.即興的做某事)

amakeshiftstretcher

using

jacketsandsturdysticksnearby(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨送走).Asthefreezingwatercontinuedtorusharoundus(狀從),Lisagaveclearinstructionstomyhusband

andotherswhohadcomecloser(定從).Together,theygentlycarriedWyatttoasaferspotawayfromtheslipperyrocks(介詞短語做后置定語).Lisaneverhesitatedforamoment,staying

byhissideandmonitoring

hiscondition(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame,guided

byLisa’sdetaileddescriptionofWyatt’sconditionandtheterrain(非謂語動(dòng)詞做方式狀語).Theypraisedher

quickthinkingandprofessionalism,whichhadpreventedfurtherinjuries(定從).OnceWyattwassecuredintheambulance(狀從),Lisaturnedtouswithawarmsmile."He’llbeokay,"shereassuredus.

Tearsstreameddownmyface

asIhuggedhertightly(狀從),wordsofgratitudetumblingout(獨(dú)立主格).Later,we

stayedintouch,oftenvisiting

her(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)

toexpressourendlessthanks(目的狀語).Lisa’sselflessnessremindedusthateveninthedarkestmoments,astranger’skindnesscouldlighttheway(賓從).

OurfamilyleftDiana’sBathswithmorethanmemories—weleftwitharenewedfaithinhumanity.Version2:Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,afactthatexplainedherremarkablecomposure(n.鎮(zhèn)定)

duringsuchachaotic(adj.混亂嘈雜的)

moment(定從).Sheimmediatelydirected

everyonearoundher,transforming

thebystandersinto

acoordinatedteam(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)."Weneedtokeephimwarm,"sheinstructed,wrapping

Wyattinadryblanket(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)

someonehadoffered(定從).

Aswewaitedfortherescueteam(狀從),LisakepttalkingtoWyatt,keeping

himcalm(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)

whilereassuringus(狀從省略).Despitethecoldwindwhipping(vi/vt抽打，鞭打)

throughthevalley(介詞短語做狀語),shefocusedsolelyonensuring

Wyatt'ssafety,nevershowinganysignoffatigueorhesitation(非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作).Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame,

andLisahandedover

Wyattwithadetailedreportofhiscondition."You’reveryluckytohavehadherhere,"oneoftherescuerssaid,noddingtowardLisa(非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作).Watching

herwalkawayquietly(非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),Icouldn’tholdbackmytears.Hercourageandkindnesshadsavedmyson’slife,andherhumilityleftanindelible(adj.不可磨滅的)

impressiononus.Later,welearnedmoreaboutherlife—shehadalwaysgoneaboveandbeyondtohelpothers.

Herstoryinspiredustopayherkindnessforward,finding

waystohelpothersinneed(非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作)wheneverpossible(狀從壓縮).Lisabecameaheronotjustfor

thatdaybutfor

life,leavingalegacyofcompassionandbraveryinourhearts(非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做后置定語).Version3Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,

anditallmadesense.Herprofessionaldemeanorandquickresponsestoodoutamongthechaos.

"Keephimstillanddon’tmovehisneck,"sheinstructed

firmly

assheassessed

Wyatt’scondition(狀從).MyhusbandandIfollowedherorderswithoutquestion,gratefulforherpresence(adj做狀語).Sheworkedswiftly,using

herscarftosupport

Wyatt’sheadandensure

heremainedstable(非謂語動(dòng)詞做動(dòng)作串+賓從)

untiltherescueteamarrived(狀從).Despitetheicywatersoaking(vi.浸泡)

throughherclothes,Lisastayedcloseto

Wyatt,holding

hishandandencouraging

himwithsoft,comfortingwords(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame

andtookover,expressing

theiradmirationforLisa’sefforts(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).AsWyattwascarriedaway(狀從),IturnedtoLisa,overwhelmedwithgratitude(非謂語動(dòng)詞做后置定語)."Yousavedhislife,"Isaid,myvoicetrembling(獨(dú)立主格).Shesimplysmiledandshook

herhead."Ijustdid

whatanyoneshoulddo(賓從),"sherepliedhumbly.Herwordsstayedwithmelongafterthatday.Weekslater,weinvitedLisatodinner,

wherewegottoknowherbetter(定從).Shesharedstoriesofherwork,andwesharedhowheractionshadinspiredustobebetter,kinderpeople(賓從).Fromthenon,Lisawasn’tjust

thewomanwhosavedmyson(定從)—shebecame

apartofourfamily’sstoryofresilienceandgratitude.亮點(diǎn)解析與語料積累范文亮點(diǎn)語法與語言點(diǎn)亮點(diǎn)句式1.

非限定性定語從句:"Lisa,whoneverhesitated,becametheanchorofourhope."2.

強(qiáng)調(diào)句:"Itwashercouragethatmadeallthedifference."3.

過去完成時(shí):"Bythetimetherescueteamarrived,LisahadstabilizedWyatt."優(yōu)秀詞匯與短語1.

描寫緊張情緒:poundingheart,franticminds,tremblinghands2.

動(dòng)作描寫:improvisedastretcher,monitoredhiscondition,handedoverWyatt3.

心理描寫:overwhelmedwithgratitude,renewedfaith,inspiredtoact詞匯升級與替換1.

感激:grateful→indebted,appreciative2.

勇敢:brave→valiant,fearless3.

幫助:help→assist,rescue高考積累短語與例句短語:1.

"wrapsomeoneinablanket"2.

"paykindnessforward"3.

"becomeapartofsomeone’sstory"例句:1.

"Lisa’squickthinkingwasinstrumentalinsavingWyatt’slife."2.

"Heractionsinspiredustoseetheworldthroughalensofkindness."單詞詞性詞義近義詞聯(lián)想詞例句hesitateverb猶豫falter,pausedelay,doubt1.Shedidn’thesitatetohelptheinjuredchild.

2.Don’thesitatetoaskifyouneedhelp.