2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫-家庭溫情類-愛筑心房：一份特別的家的禮物

2025屆新高考英語沖刺復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫

家庭溫情類--愛筑心房：一份特別的家的禮物原文分析讀后續(xù)寫原文審讀多篇范文呈現(xiàn)解題思路分析讀后續(xù)寫可積累文本1.原文賞析

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Whenmyhusbandpassedawaylastyear，myworldturnedupsidedown．RichardandIhadbeentogetherforoverfortyyears，andsuddenly，therewasanunbearableblankwhereheusedtobe．So，whenmyson，James，andhiswife，Natalie，invitedmetolivewiththemforawhile，Iwasn’tabouttorefuse．Ithinkbeingwiththegrandkidswillbehealing．

Theywelcomedmewithopenarms，makingmefeellikepartoftheirdailylife．TheyinsistedthattheywantedtohelpmethroughthisdifficulttimeandwhenImovedin，Ionlytooktheessentials．Therestofmythingswerelocked30minutesawayatmyhome，lockingawaythememoriesofalifesharedwithRichard．

Fromthebeginning，therewassimplyoneruleforthekidsandmyself：“Please，allthreeofyou，stayoutofthebasement（地下室），”Jameshadsaidwhenweweresittingfordinner，histonewasgentlebutfirm．“Therearesomerepairsbeingdone，andit’sreallydustyandmessydownthere．Wedon’twantanyofyoutogetsickorhurt．Understood?”Theboys，John，6，andEric，4，nodded．IunderstoodJames’concern，too．Iagreedwithoutgivingitmuchthought．Itwasn’tlikeIhadanyreasontogodownthereanyway．

Livingwiththemwasanadjustment．JohnandEricwereeverythingIneededtokeepmedistractedwhilemyhearthealedandgrewwithloveformygrandchildren．Wehadalsogottenintoanewroutine，whereeveryevening，we’dgatherinthelivingroomforstorytime．NothingdelightedmemorethanwatchingtheireyeslightupasIreadtothem．

We’dbeenreadingHarryPotterandtheChamberofSecrets

forafewdaysnow，andithadquicklybecomeafavoriteforthem．Oneevening，Iturnedtothenextchapter，andasIreadaboutHarrydiscoveringthehiddenentrancetothechamber，Ericsuddenlypipedup，“Grandma!WehaveaChamberofSecretstoo!Inthebasement!”注意：

1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)150左右：

2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ipaused，glancingdownathimunbelievably．Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome．2、

原文審讀

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為需掌握積累單詞、短語；黑體標(biāo)黃，非謂語；可積累部分為

embody；

注釋(定語從句)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Whenmyhusbandpassedaway

lastyear(狀從)，myworldturnedupsidedown．RichardandIhadbeentogetherforoverfortyyears，andsuddenly，therewasanunbearableblank

whereheusedtobe(定從)．So，whenmyson，James，andhiswife，Natalie，invitedmetolivewiththemforawhile，Iwasn’tabouttorefuse．Ithink

beingwiththegrandkidswillbehealing(賓從)．

Theywelcomedmewithopenarms，making

mefeellike

partoftheirdailylife．Theyinsistedthattheywantedtohelpmethroughthisdifficulttime

(賓從)andwhenImovedin(狀從)，Ionlytooktheessentials．Therestofmythingswerelocked30minutesawayatmyhome，locking

away(狀從)

thememoriesofalifeshared

withRichard(非謂語動詞做后置定語)．

Fromthebeginning，therewassimplyoneruleforthekidsandmyself：“Please，allthreeofyou，stayoutofthebasement（地下室），”Jameshadsaidwhenweweresittingfordinner(狀從)，histonewasgentlebutfirm．“Therearesomerepairsbeingdone(非謂語動詞做后置定語)，andit’sreallydustyandmessy

downthere．Wedon’twantanyofyoutogetsickorhurt．Understood?”Theboys，John，6，andEric，4，nodded．IunderstoodJames’concern，too．Iagreedwithoutgivingitmuchthought．Itwasn’tlikeIhadanyreasontogodownthereanyway(賓從)．

Livingwiththemwasanadjustment．JohnandEricwereeverythingIneededtokeepmedistracted(定從)

whilemyhearthealedandgrewwithlove

formygrandchildren(狀從)．Wehadalsogottenintoanewroutine，whereeveryevening，we’dgatherinthelivingroomforstorytime(定從)．Nothingdelightedmemorethanwatchingtheireyes(否定比較級=最高級)

lightupasIreadtothem．

We’dbeenreadingHarryPotterandtheChamberofSecrets

forafewdaysnow，andithadquicklybecomeafavoriteforthem．Oneevening，Iturnedtothenextchapter，andasIreadaboutHarry(狀從)

discovering

thehiddenentrancetothechamber(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)，Ericsuddenlypipedup，“Grandma!WehaveaChamberofSecretstoo!Inthebasement!”注意：

1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)150左右：

2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ipaused，glancingdownathimunbelievably．Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome．兩種構(gòu)思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應(yīng)”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應(yīng)“兩法六句”1.讀后續(xù)寫分類與構(gòu)思分析分類角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句續(xù)寫類型溫情類情感故事，通過親情治愈失落的心靈。"Whenmyhusbandpassedawaylastyear,myworldturnedupsidedown."構(gòu)思與布局1.第一段：發(fā)現(xiàn)地下室的秘密，引出意外驚喜；

2.第二段：表達(dá)情感，重拾對生活的希望和家庭的溫暖。"‘Grandma!WehaveaChamberofSecretstoo!Inthebasement!’"提煉框架原文中伏筆：“地下室秘密”，承接兒童的天真表達(dá)，引出地下室情感象征的場景。"Please,allthreeofyou,stayoutofthebasement."實(shí)施建議1.延續(xù)原文語氣和細(xì)節(jié)描寫；

2.通過心理、動作和環(huán)境描寫表現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)變的情感；

3.以正向結(jié)局升華主題。"Livingwiththemwasanadjustment."承接原文注意事項(xiàng)保持情感連貫；注意兒童語言的天真風(fēng)格；地下室與回憶之間需有自然連接；不要偏離親情治愈主題。"We’dbeenreadingHarryPotterandtheChamberofSecretsforafewdaysnow,andithadquicklybecomeafavoriteforthem."巧妙設(shè)計(jì)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容1.地下室布置成溫馨回憶場景，引發(fā)感動；

2.利用兒童角色語言推動情節(jié)，結(jié)局強(qiáng)調(diào)重拾對生活的熱愛。"Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome."2.故事山模式與原文分析分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句伏筆地下室禁止進(jìn)入，暗示秘密的存在。"Please,allthreeofyou,stayoutofthebasement."沖突點(diǎn)孫子無意中提到地下室秘密，引起奶奶的好奇心。"‘Grandma!WehaveaChamberofSecretstoo!Inthebasement!’"隱含線索地下室可能是兒子為母親布置的回憶場所，用來治愈母親的傷痛。"Therestofmythingswerelocked30minutesawayatmyhome."解決方案奶奶進(jìn)入地下室，發(fā)現(xiàn)重溫回憶的溫馨布置，感受到家人的用心。"Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome."2:故事山模式分析

StoryMountain思維導(dǎo)圖1.引入：丈夫去世，生活失落，搬入兒子家。2.上升：孩子提到地下室的秘密，引發(fā)好奇。3.高潮：地下室布置與過去的房間一模一樣，充滿回憶。4.下降：奶奶感動，感受到家人對她的愛與關(guān)懷。5.結(jié)局：奶奶重新燃起對生活的熱愛，與家人更加親密。3:推薦例句與詞匯替換描寫類別英文例句高級替換詞動作描寫-Shepushedthedooropencautiously,herheartpoundinginanticipation.

-Tearswelledupinhereyesasshesteppedinside.

-Hertremblinghandstracedthefamiliarpatternsonthequilt.-cautiously→gingerly

-stepped→ventured

-trembling→quivering心理描寫-Herheartachedatthesightoftheroom,butitwasacomfortingache.

-Memoriesfloodedbacklikeanunstoppabletide.

-Shefeltawarmglowofgratitudespreadthroughherchest.-ached→throbbed

-flooded→surged

-glow→radiance環(huán)境描寫-Theroomsmelledfaintlyoflavender,ascentthattransportedherbackintime.

-Thesoftlightingcastagoldenhueovertheroom.

-Thecarefullyarrangedfurniturefeltlikeawarmembrace.-smelledfaintly→carriedawhiff

-cast→bathed

-carefully→meticulously4:語法與搭配分析語法現(xiàn)象原文例句搭配與語料時態(tài)變化"Livingwiththemwasanadjustment."-beanadjustment

-presentcontinuousforongoingactions復(fù)合句使用"Theyinsistedthattheywantedtohelpmethroughthisdifficulttime."-insistthat+從句

-wanttohelp+賓語詞匯積累-"unbearableblank"=intolerablevoid-blank(n.)=gap,void

-unbearable(adj.)=intolerable,insufferable語料例句-Herhusband’spassingleftanunbearablevoidinherlife.-Thesoftlightingbathedtheroominanostalgicglow.5.PossibleVersionsIpaused,glancingdownathimunbelievably.

Ericsaidhewouldshowittome.BeforeIcouldstophim,hejumpedoffthecouchandgrabbedmyhand,tugging

metowardthebasementdoor(非謂語動詞做動作串).Icalledthatwewerenotsupposedtobegoingdownhere(賓從).“Thereitis!”Ericexclaimed,pointingtowardadoorhiddenbehindalargesheetofplastic(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Iwascuriousandreachedforthedoorhandle.

Thedoorswungopen

withasoftcreak,revealing

aroom(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

thattookmybreathaway(定從).Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome.

Thefamiliarwallpaperandthesamepatternofthebedwereidentical.Butwhattrulymademyheartsing(主從)

wasthephotograph:RichardandIonourweddingday,smilingandyong,fulloflife(非謂語動詞，adj補(bǔ)語).Istepped

backward,tearsstreamingdownmyface(獨(dú)立主格)

asathousandmemoriesfloodedback(狀從).

JamesandNatalierusheddown

thestaris,followed

byJohn.Jamesexplainedsoftlythattheywantedtosurprisemeanddidn’twantmetogobacktomyoldhouse(賓從).

Theywantedmetohaveaspaceherethatfeltlikehome(定從).Ihuggedthemandsaid

intears

thatIwantedthem(賓從),too.Version2:

Paragraph1:Ipaused,glancingdown

athimunbelievably(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).“Whatdoyoumean?”

Iaskedwithacurioussmile.Theboysexchangedmischievous(adj.淘氣的naughty)

looks

beforeleadingmetoward

theforbiddenbasement.AsIhesitated(狀從),Johntuggedmyhandandwhispered,“You’llloveit,Grandma!”

Myheartraced

asthedoorcreakedopen(狀從).Paragraph2:Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome.Familiarphotoslinedthewalls,andmyfavoritequiltwasspread

neatlyonthebed.Tearsfilledmyeyes

asIturnedtoJames(狀從),whostoodatthedoor(定從).“Wethoughtitmighthelp(賓從),”hesaidsoftly.Myheartswelledwithgratitude,andforthefirsttimeinmonths,Ifeltwholeagain.·

亮點(diǎn)詞匯短語：mischievouslooks,creakedopen,swelledwithgratitude·

升級替換詞：tearsfilled→welledup;feltwhole→feltcompleteVersion3:Paragraph1:Ipaused,glancingdown

athimunbelievably(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

“Really?Whatmakesyousaythat?”Iasked,

tryingtomaskmycuriosity(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Ericgrinnedandwhispered,“There’sabigsurprise!”Unabletoresisttheirexcitement(adj做主語補(bǔ)語),Iallowedtheboystoleadmetothebasement.Themoment

westeppedinside(狀從),thedimlightflickeredon,

revealing(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

aspacethatlookedastonishinglyfamiliar(定從).Paragraph2:Theroomwasaperfectcopyofmyownbedroombackhome,fromthefloralcurtainstotheantiqueclockonthedresser.Thefaintscentoflavenderhungintheair,just

asithadforyearsinmyoldroom(狀從).Overwhelmedbyemotions(非謂語動詞做原因狀語),IturnedtoJames,whowasstandingbehindmewithasoftsmile(定從).“Wewantedtobringyourmemoriesclosertoyou,”hesaid.Tearswelledupinmyeyes

asIrealized

howmuchloveandefforttheyhadpouredintothisgesture(狀從含賓從含定從).·

情緒描寫：maskmycuriosity,overwhelmedbyemotions,tearswelledup·

動作描寫：grinned,whispered,flickeredon·

環(huán)境描寫：dimlight,floralcurtains,faintscentoflavenderVersion3Paragraph1:Ipaused,glancingdown

athimunbelievably(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)“Areyousureaboutthat?”Iasked,feigning(vt.假裝)

suspicion(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Theboysnoddedeagerly,

theirsmallhandstuggingatmine(獨(dú)立主格).“Comeandsee!”theychimedin(加入，配合，一致)

unison(n.合奏，合唱).DespiteJames’earlierwarning,theirenthusiasmwasinfectious,andIfoundmyselfdescending

thestairswiththem.Thedooropened,andIfroze

insurprise.Paragraph2:

Thebasementhadbeentransformedintoareplicaofmyoldbedroom.

Familiarbookslinedtheshelves,andmyfavoritearmchairsatinvitinglyinthecorner.Awarmglowfromthelamplituptheroom,castingshadowsthatfeltlikeoldfriends(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).“Wethoughtthismighthelpyoufeelathome,”Jamessaidfrombehindme.Myvoicecaughtinmythroat

asImurmured(狀從),“It’sperfect.”Loveandgratitudefilledmyheart

asIembracedmyboys(狀從),thankfulforafamily

thatunderstoodmesodeeply(定從).亮點(diǎn)分