讀后續(xù)寫-100+英畝山林迷路記：黑暗中那束光的奇跡+(1)+講義 高二下期期末模擬質(zhì)量檢測英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Icanwalkthepathtothelakenearourhouseinthedarkwithoutaflashlight—myfeetknowtheway.Aroundmyfamily’scottageinOntario,therearemorethan100acrestoexplore,crossedbycreeks(小溪)andvalleys.I’vebeenhikingupthemountains,crossingthosecreeksonthatlandforthepastthirtyyears,soitwasashockwhenIgotlostlastwinter.Lateonebright,afternooninFebruary,Iputonmysnowshoesandheadednorthwestfromthehouse.Whilemakingmywayupthelong,gradualslope,Istoppedtoappreciatethebeautyofnature.Finally,Iarrivedatthetopofthemountain.Withtoweringtreesthatseemedtotouchtheskyandcolorfulwildflowersundermyfeet,Itookadeepbreathandyelledattheremotemountain.Iwastotallycarriedawaybythebeautyofnature.Asthesunset,myfeetandfingersstartedtofeelcold.Idecidedtoheadback.Ididn’tturnbackthewaythatIhadjustcome.Ichangedmydirectionandchosethesteepsideofthehill.Ihadageneralsensethataheadwasthecreekthatledtothevalley,soIwalkedslowly,trustingthatthecreekwouldleadmetotheroadtomycottage.Imademywaydownthehillside.Alongtheway,Ipickedupsticksandexploredmywaythroughthisstrangewoods.Iusedmyphonetophotographthetrees,mountains,andanythingthatcaughtmyeyes.Asitwasgraduallygrowingdark,Ibegantodoubtthisroute.Wherewasthecreek?HadIwalkedinthewrongdirection?Ipulledoutmyphonetocheckmylocation,butitdiedinmyhand.Thatsenseofdoubtnowfeltmorelikepanic:Ididn’tevenhaveanyfoodoraflashlight.Itwasgettingdarkeranddarker.Iwascompletelyalone,lostinthewilderness.Iwalkednervously,trippingoverthingsinmypathandfeelingfrightenedwitharacingheartbeat.IthoughtIwasgoingtodiehereinthewoods.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Butthen,IwasabouttogiveuphopewhenIsawaweaklightinthedistance._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thehouse’sownerwelcomedmeinside._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意作者對自家位于安大略的小屋周邊環(huán)境十分熟悉，在這片超過100英畝、遍布小溪和山谷的土地上已徒步三十年，閉著眼都能走到附近的湖邊。去年二月一個陽光明媚的下午，作者穿上雪鞋向西北方向登山，山頂?shù)拿谰白屍涮兆?。日落時，作者決定返程，沒有走原路，而是選擇了陡峭的山坡，想著順著小溪就能回到小屋。下山途中，作者拍照留念，天色漸暗時，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)沒找到小溪，懷疑走錯路，拿出手機查看位置，結(jié)果手機沒電。此時孤身一人身處荒野，既無食物也無手電筒，作者滿心恐懼，以為自己要命喪于此。故事山分析開端：作者在熟悉的土地上向西北方向登山，享受美景。發(fā)展：作者決定返程，選擇不同路線，途中拍照，天色漸暗開始懷疑路線。高潮：手機沒電，作者意識到迷路，身處荒野，極度恐慌。結(jié)局（待續(xù)寫）：作者看到遠(yuǎn)處燈光并前往，得到幫助。尾聲（待續(xù)寫）：作者在房子主人的幫助下安全回家，感悟這段經(jīng)歷。伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)作者對周邊環(huán)境熟悉，暗示即使迷路也有找到出路的可能，續(xù)寫中可體現(xiàn)憑借以往經(jīng)驗判斷方向前往燈光處。提到天色漸暗，為后文手機沒電、陷入恐慌做鋪墊，續(xù)寫中可回應(yīng)在黑暗中朝著燈光艱難前行的困難。作者選擇陌生的陡峭山坡下山，是迷路的原因，續(xù)寫中可體現(xiàn)對這條錯誤路線的反思，以及在尋找燈光過程中因地形困難而遭遇的阻礙。未攜帶食物和手電筒，加劇困境，續(xù)寫中可體現(xiàn)到達(dá)有燈光處時因饑餓和寒冷對屋內(nèi)溫暖與食物的渴望。作者以為要命喪于此的絕望，與后文看到燈光形成強烈反差，續(xù)寫中可體現(xiàn)看到燈光后的驚喜和重新燃起的希望。續(xù)寫要點（兩段）第一段：著重描寫看到燈光后的心理變化，如從絕望到燃起希望，以及向燈光處前進的過程，包括途中克服的困難，如被樹枝絆倒、雪地難行等。第二段：描述房子主人的熱情接待，如提供食物、溫暖的環(huán)境，以及與主人的交流，最后表達(dá)對這次經(jīng)歷的感悟，如對陌生人善意的感激，對自然的敬畏。情感線從迷路時的恐慌、絕望，到看到燈光時的驚喜、希望重燃，再到進入房子后的安心、感激，最后是對這次經(jīng)歷的深刻感悟，展現(xiàn)情感的起伏變化。故事線作者迷路，陷入恐慌?？吹竭h(yuǎn)處燈光，燃起希望。艱難向燈光處前行，克服困難。到達(dá)有燈光的房子處。受到房子主人熱情接待。安全回家，感悟經(jīng)歷。主旨升華句Inthefaceoftheunknowninnature,hopecanalwaysshinethroughthedarkestmoments,justlikethelightinthewilderness.Thekindnessofstrangerscanbeawarmharborinthestormyseaoflife,remindingusofthebeautyofhumanity.Ourexperiencesinnature,whetherfullofbeautyorhardships,arepreciouslessonsthatshapeourunderstandingoflifeandourplaceintheworld.Eveninthemostfamiliarplaces,unexpectedchallengescanarise,teachingustobepreparedandadaptableatalltimes.Amomentofdespaircanturnintoanewbeginning,anditisourperseveranceandthehelpofothersthatleadusoutofthedarkness.寫作示范示范一

Butthen,IwasabouttogiveuphopewhenIsawaweaklightinthedistance.Atthatmoment,myheartleapedwithaglimmerofhope.Ignoringthepaininmylegsandthecoldnessthathadseepedintomybones,Istumbledtowardsthelight.Thesnowwasdeep,andeverystepwasastruggle.Brancheswhippedatmyface,butIpressedon.AsIgotcloser,thelightgrewbrighter,guidingmelikealighthouseinthestormysea.Thehouse’sownerwelcomedmeinside.Hequicklybroughtmeawarmblanketandacupofhottea.Shivering,Isatbythefireplace,feelingthewarmthslowlyreturntomybody.TheownerlistenedpatientlyasItoldhimmystory.Hethenofferedtodrivemehome.Onthewayback,Iwasfilledwithgratitudeforhiskindness.Thisexperiencetaughtmetoalwaysbepreparedandtoneverlosehope,nomatterhowdirethesituationmayseem.示范二

Butthen,IwasabouttogiveuphopewhenIsawaweaklightinthedistance.Itwaslikeamiracle,cuttingthroughthethickdarkness.Mydespairwasinstantlyreplacedbyarushofexcitement.Ipickedupmypace,thoughmyfeetwerenumbfromthecold.Thepathwasuneven,andIfellseveraltimes,buteachtimeIgotup,moredeterminedthanever.Thelightseemedtobemyonlysalvation.Thehouse’sownerwelcomedmeinside.Thesmellofwarmfoodhitmynostrils,andIrealizedhowhungryIwas.Hefedmeandletmerestforawhile.AfterIrecovered,hecalledmyfamilytoletthemknowIwassafe.AsIleftthehouse,Ithankedhimsincerely.Thisadventureinthewildernessmademeappreciatethevalueofkindnessandthepowerofhope.Italsomademerespecttheunpredictabilityofnatureevenmore.【答案】Butthen,asIwasabouttogiveuphope,Isawaweaklightinthedistance.AsIcamecloser,thelightgrewbrighter.Itwascomingfromasmallareaintheforest.Inthecenterstoodatinywoodenhouse,itswindowsshiningwar