2021.1.8浙江首考續(xù)寫(xiě)

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浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)ExperienceHalloweenExperience:IgotmyheadstuckinapumpkinPhotograph:CelesteNoche/TheGuardianFri26Oct20182021年1月浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)原題第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（滿分25分）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage——Istaggered/carriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforescooping/takingouttheirinnards/insides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualritual/event.I'munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.（staggered：walkwithweak,unsteadysteps,asifyouareabouttofall)Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ileaned/bentoverandpressedmycrown/headagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIleantinto/wentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynose

brieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞）forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththegigantic/hugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexultation/excitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I'mgoingtosetitdown,now,"Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.Ifeltajabof/gotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican'tgetitout!”Iroared/shouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.學(xué)會(huì)讀題

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage——Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I'munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.01讀內(nèi)容：為續(xù)寫(xiě)的融洽性奠定基礎(chǔ)Relationship:family伏筆：下文母親把拍攝的視頻上傳到了網(wǎng)上提供信息：我的頭之后拔不出來(lái)了這里的point是：自己的南瓜最大.起因：為證明自己的南瓜最大Read01Read讀內(nèi)容：為續(xù)寫(xiě)的融洽性奠定基礎(chǔ)把頭塞進(jìn)南瓜Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞）forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I'mgoingtosetitdown,now,"Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.發(fā)現(xiàn)頭出不來(lái)了嘗試各種辦法01WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican'tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后,請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

Paragraph2:ThevideowaspostedtheMondaybeforeHalloween讀內(nèi)容：為續(xù)寫(xiě)的融洽性奠定基礎(chǔ)Read自救無(wú)果

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage——Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I'munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkin

wouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.02讀線索：為思維邏輯發(fā)展指明方向故事開(kāi)端（背景介紹）：我們家過(guò)萬(wàn)圣節(jié)的傳統(tǒng)：比賽挑選最大的南瓜，而且要搬回家。情節(jié)推進(jìn)：為了證明自己的南瓜最大，作者打算把自己的頭塞進(jìn)南瓜里。Emotion：得意Emotion：不服輸、堅(jiān)定Read02Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞）forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I'mgoingtosetitdown,now,"Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.讀線索：為思維邏輯發(fā)展指明方向Emotion：自豪、興奮Emotion：窘迫情節(jié)推進(jìn)：成功塞入南瓜，但想出來(lái)卻遇到困難Read情節(jié)推進(jìn)：使用各種辦法02WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican'tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后,請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

Paragraph2:ThevideowaspostedtheMondaybeforeHalloweenEmotion：驚慌失措讀線索：為思維邏輯發(fā)展指明方向ReadEmotion：？Emotion：？故事高潮：拔不出來(lái)了03讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)◆

ReadfortheLANGUAGE:★theenvironmentdescription(afigureofspeech)★thedialoguedescription★thethoughtdescription……Read03讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage——Istaggered/carriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforescooping/takingouttheirinnards/insides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualritual/event.I'munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwould

settlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.1.轉(zhuǎn)折Unfortunatelywe….,but….2.獨(dú)立主格…,with…Read03讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)3.動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（同時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)該段用了銜接詞來(lái)發(fā)展故事）5.強(qiáng)調(diào)句Itwas..that…Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ileaned/bentoverandpressedmycrown/headagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIleantinto/wentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynose

brieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞）forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththegigantic/hugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexultation/excitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I'mgoingtosetitdown,now,"Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.Read4.….,like…03WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican'tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后,請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

Paragraph2:ThevideowaspostedtheMondaybeforeHalloweenRead7.獨(dú)立主格6.v.+and+v.+ving表目的，but….讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)03Read讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)1.轉(zhuǎn)折Unfortunatelywe….,but….Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforescooping/takingouttheirinnards/insides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.2.本文語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)：多用獨(dú)立主格Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualritual/event.Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.3.動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（同時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)該段用了銜接詞來(lái)發(fā)展故事）4.….,like…FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞）forcedintoabottle.03Read讀語(yǔ)言：為上下文連貫性提供依據(jù)5.強(qiáng)調(diào)句Itwas..that…ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.6.v.+and+v.+ving表目的，but….IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.

Tip：Beconsistent(一致的)withthelanguage.Para1Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Para2ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween.1.Whatwasmyfeelingatthattime?2.Whatwasthereactionofmyfamily?3.HowdidIfinallygetmyheadoutofthepumpkin?*Momwasfilmingthewholetime1.Wasthevideopopularandwhat'sthereactionofthepublic?2.HowdidmyfamilyandItakethematter?3.ENDINGWriting欣賞原文結(jié)尾，學(xué)習(xí)地道表達(dá)Experience:IgotmyheadstuckinapumpkinUndertaketheText承接上文Themuffledvoicesfromoutsidewereoddlycalming,though–Momunruffledandamused,Jasongivingadvice,my10-year-oldbrother,Austin,singingasongIcouldn’tmakeout.Therewasenoughspacearoundmynecktoletalittlelightinand,fortunately,I’vealwayslikedthesmellofpumpkin.Mybellowingprovokedlittlesympathy.“Don’tuseupallyouroxygen,”Momsuggested.

Experience:IgotmyheadstuckinapumpkinUndertaketheText承接上文Dadwassummoned–less,itseemed,inexpectationofpracticalhelpthantomakesurehedidn’tmissoutonthespectacle.Iheardhimproposecallingthefiredepartment.“Staytuned,”saidMom;she’dmentionedshewasgoingtouploadthevideotoFacebook,butitwasonlythenIrealisedshe’dbeenfilmingthewholetime.Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuch,muchlonger.Thevideocutsbeforemyrescue–DadgotmetopushmyheadfartherintothepumpkinsoMomcouldreachinandundotherubberbandroundmyponytail.Iemergedwithsquash-conditionedhair,asorechinandmynosepluggedwithpulp.Experience:IgotmyheadstuckinapumpkinUndertaketheText承接上文ThatFacebookvideowentuptheMondaybeforeHalloween,andbytheendofthatdayithadover1,000views.PeopleaskedMomtoputitonYouTube,andbyWednesdaymorningweweregetting5amcallsfromTVbreakfastshowsandthentheinternationalmedia–thevideostartedrackinguphundredsofthousandsofviews.WhenIwentonayouthcamp,IwasrecognizedbychildrenI’dnevermet.Thepumpkinalsobecameaminorcelebrity.Passersbyandtrick-or-treaterswouldknockandask,“WhichisRachel’spumpkin?”beforetakingselfies(自拍)withit.Experience:IgotmyheadstuckinapumpkinUndertaketheText承接上文Althoughourpumpkincarvingthefollowingyearwasamoresedateaffair,Iwouldn’tsayIlearnedmylesson.AfewmonthslaterIsqueezedmyselfintoalaundrybasketduringagameofhide-and-seekandbecamehopelesslyjammed.ItwasDadwhorespondedtomycriesforhelp.Inevitably,Iwaskeptwaitingforawhile–firsthehadtolookforthevideocamera.趁熱打鐵，利用原文完成續(xù)寫(xiě)Experience:Igotmyheadstuckinapumpkin

Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Themuffledvoicesfromoutsidewereoddlycalming,though–Momunruffledandamused,Jasongivingadvice.Therewasenoughspace