高中英語寫作擴句.doc

擴句的方法在學(xué)習擴句法之前，先對學(xué)生進行五個簡單句句型，并列句和復(fù)合句的專項訓(xùn)練，打好基礎(chǔ)。擴句是在基本句型的基礎(chǔ)上，添加各種修飾成分，使句子得到擴展，即根據(jù)表達的需求增加定語，狀語，同位語等成分，或者舉例子補充細節(jié)內(nèi)容，或者添加諺語俗語等。1 1. We arrived in Sanya.- We arrived in Sanya, happily and excitedly. (添加副詞)2 2. I like to make friends with my classmates.- I like to make friends with my classmates, who have the same interest as mine. (添加定語從句)3 3. We were happy and returned home.- We were happy and returned home after we had finished collecting all the rubbish.(添加狀語從句)4 4. I like reading books.- I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.(通過舉例補充細節(jié))5 5. We should study hard.- As we all know, “Practice makes perfect”. So we should study hard.（添加諺語）6 6. I often join in many activities.- I often join in many activities in order to communicate with other students and broaden my mind. (添加目的狀語)三 具體應(yīng)用試題要求：假如你是一名中學(xué)生，請以My colorful school life為題，寫一篇短文。要求100個字左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總數(shù)。要點提示：1：上課認真聽講 2：課后完成作業(yè) 3：經(jīng)常參加體育鍛煉 4：去圖書館閱讀Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard. _ May there always be colorful life around my school. 學(xué)生的習作：Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard. I listen to the teacher carefully. I finish my homework after class. I often take exercise. I often read in the school library. May there always be colorful life around my school.點評：該學(xué)生能完整的寫出各個要點，沒有出現(xiàn)太大的語法錯誤，表達通順，單詞拼寫無誤。但是很明顯字數(shù)不夠，沒有達到100個字左右，字數(shù)不夠是很多學(xué)生面臨的共同問題。其次，句子的表達過于平淡無奇，沒有句式多樣化和使用高級詞匯，固定搭配、固定短語等使表達地道。而且，沒有使用連接詞，上下文的連接不夠順暢。 改進方法：步驟一：列要點 把要寫的內(nèi)容要點化，做到要點齊全。 1: Listen to the teacher carefully 2: finish my homework 3:take part in exercise 4: often read in the library步驟二：造簡單句 充分利用五個簡單句句型對各個要點進行補充，使其變成一個完整的句子。每個句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，語法是否正確，說法是否符合英語表達習慣。 1: I listen to the teacher carefully in the class. 2: I finish my homework after class. 3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates. 4: I do some reading in the school library.步驟三：擴展句子 1: I listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say.(增加目的狀語從句) 2: I finish my homework after class, which is a piece of cake for me.（增加定語從句） 3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates, such as playing football, going swimming and playing badminton etc.（舉例說明） 4: I often do some reading in the school library when I have nothing to do after class.（增加時間狀語從句）步驟四：潤色句子 根據(jù)高考（海南）英語作文評分細則，第五檔的要求：24-25分，至少有3個復(fù)雜句，2種從句形式，語氣自然，敬語得體，無中式英語，語言基本功扎實，詞匯豐富。這就要求我們在譴詞造句方面下工夫?！皾櫳渥影ㄔ~語的選擇與句型的運用?！?比如可以用高級詞匯，短語和固定搭配來替換一般詞匯。增加習慣表達句式，倒裝句，it當形式主語和形式賓語，非謂語動詞等，使用多種句式，使其多樣化。 1: It is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. (把第一句換成it當形式主語的用法，使句式多樣化。) 2: I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me.(增加了takeseriously和in time兩個短語，是句子更加生動) 3: In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my classmates, such as playing footall, going swimming and playing badminton etc.（增加了in order to do sth目的狀語和different kinds of使句子的意思更完整。） 4: Interested in reading books, I develop the habit of going to the library and do some reading on my favourite books.（使用過去分詞短語當狀語，再添加短語develop the habbit of 使文章增加亮點）步驟五：連句成篇 “過渡詞在文章中起著承上啟下的作用，它好比一座橋梁，能將全文各句有機地聯(lián)系在一起，從而使句子不再是孤立的獨立的個體?！笔褂帽硎巨D(zhuǎn)折，并列，遞進，因果關(guān)系等連詞把句子連接起來，“有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊”使上下文更加通順，邏輯性更強。Im a high school student and I understand what Im studying for. I have been working hard.（原文已給） First of all(過渡詞), it is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. Whats more(過渡詞), I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me. In addition(過渡詞), In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my classmates, such as playing footall, going swimming and playing badminton etc. Finally(過渡詞), Interested in reading books, I develop the habit of go