高考英語(yǔ)作文的潤(rùn)色與提高(1)

1、. 1 高考英語(yǔ)作文的潤(rùn)色與提高高考英語(yǔ)作文的潤(rùn)色與提高 以應(yīng)用文為主以應(yīng)用文為主 . 2 專題一：優(yōu)秀作文的基本特征專題一：優(yōu)秀作文的基本特征 . 3 優(yōu)秀高考英語(yǔ)作文的六個(gè)基本特征優(yōu)秀高考英語(yǔ)作文的六個(gè)基本特征 1 1、層次不亂、層次不亂2 2、句式多變、句式多變 3 3、亮點(diǎn)若干、亮點(diǎn)若干3 3、巧妙串聯(lián)、巧妙串聯(lián) 4 4、蠢錯(cuò)不犯、蠢錯(cuò)不犯6 6、整潔卷面、整潔卷面 . 4 層次不亂層次不亂 開頭：引出話題開頭：引出話題 （第一段）（第一段） 主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議 （第二段）（第二段） 結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)（第三段）結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)（第三段） . 5 題目：題目

2、： 假設(shè)你是李華，你的朋友假設(shè)你是李華，你的朋友Liz剛剛進(jìn)入高中，在交剛剛進(jìn)入高中，在交 友上面存在一些問題，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)如下提示，幫友上面存在一些問題，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)如下提示，幫 她度過難關(guān)。她度過難關(guān)。 要交朋友首先要做一個(gè)朋友。要交朋友首先要做一個(gè)朋友。 要和朋友同甘共苦；患難之中的朋友才是真的要和朋友同甘共苦；患難之中的朋友才是真的 朋友。朋友。 1.友誼需要時(shí)間和投入友誼需要時(shí)間和投入(effort). . 6 Dear Liz, _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ Yours, Li Hua . 7 層次不亂層次不亂 開頭：引入話題開頭：引入話題 主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建

3、議 結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié) 通常只需要通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，句話。提出話題， 并說明你有建議。并說明你有建議。 . 8 第一段：引出話題第一段：引出話題通常只需要通常只需要2-3句話。句話。 Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to solve this problem. . 9 層次不亂層次不亂 開頭：引入話題開頭：引入話題 主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議主體：

4、陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議 結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié) 通常只需要通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，句話。提出話題， 并說明你有建議。并說明你有建議。 每一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)或建議之間要每一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)或建議之間要 保持層次清晰，加上適當(dāng)保持層次清晰，加上適當(dāng) 的過渡詞語(yǔ)。的過渡詞語(yǔ)。 . 10 第二段：陳述觀點(diǎn)或建議第二段：陳述觀點(diǎn)或建議 To begin with, you should be a friend. Then, you need.Lastly, it is also important to do. First and foremost, you should be a friend. Secon

5、dly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. . 11 層次不亂層次不亂 開頭：引入話題開頭：引入話題 主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議主體：陳述觀點(diǎn)或給出建議 結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)結(jié)尾：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié) 通常只需要通常只需要2-3句話。句話。 每一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)或建議之間要每一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)或建議之間要 保持層次清晰，加上適當(dāng)保持層次清晰，加上適當(dāng) 的過渡詞語(yǔ)。的過渡詞語(yǔ)。 總結(jié)，并提出美好愿景?？偨Y(jié)，并提出美好愿景。 . 12 第三段：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)，或者表達(dá)愿景。第三段：呼應(yīng)、總結(jié)，或者表達(dá)愿景。 All in all/ In short/ In

6、 conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And i believe , with your trying, you can overcome. . 13 Dear Liz, Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to . First and foremost/ To begin with, y

7、ou should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And I believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Yours, Li Hua . 14 句式多變句式多變 長(zhǎng)短變化長(zhǎng)短變化 主、被動(dòng)變化主、被動(dòng)變化 主語(yǔ)變化主語(yǔ)變化 同義詞變化同義詞變化

8、 同功能句型變化同功能句型變化 橫向比較變化橫向比較變化 . 15 亮點(diǎn)若干亮點(diǎn)若干 高中詞匯高中詞匯 高中常見短語(yǔ)高中常見短語(yǔ) 高級(jí)句型高級(jí)句型 各種復(fù)合句各種復(fù)合句 倒裝句倒裝句 強(qiáng)調(diào)句型強(qiáng)調(diào)句型 虛擬語(yǔ)氣句型虛擬語(yǔ)氣句型 非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu) . 16 巧妙串聯(lián)巧妙串聯(lián) 起：起： first of all, to begin with, above all. 承：承：in addition, besides. 轉(zhuǎn)：轉(zhuǎn)：however, on the other hand. 合：合：in my opinion, all in all, in a word. . 17 蠢錯(cuò)不犯：蠢錯(cuò)

9、不犯： 初中二年級(jí)學(xué)生就應(yīng)該掌握的初中二年級(jí)學(xué)生就應(yīng)該掌握的 基本語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力?；菊Z(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力。 1. I very like the book. 2. He was very angrily. 3. There have many student in the classroom. 4. The car is yellow color. . 18 整潔卷面整潔卷面 英文書寫大方、圓潤(rùn)、自然；英文書寫大方、圓潤(rùn)、自然； 詞與詞間距適當(dāng)詞與詞間距適當(dāng) 字母大小適當(dāng)字母大小適當(dāng) 無大面積涂改無大面積涂改 不影響交際不影響交際 . 19 . 20 . 21 . 22 . 23 . 24 專題二專題

10、二 肅清基礎(chǔ)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤肅清基礎(chǔ)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤 . 25 中學(xué)生英語(yǔ)寫作中常見的中學(xué)生英語(yǔ)寫作中常見的1414種語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤：種語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤： 1.1.主謂不一致主謂不一致 My father and I likes going fishing by the lake. Large quantities of soil has been washed away. . 26 2.2.時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)混用時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)混用 Last night, I had enjoyed a party. The painting on the wall damaged seriously. was . 27 3.3.句子成分殘缺句子成分

11、殘缺 I stood up and saw there a boy. The young man running in the street. was was . 28 4.4.習(xí)慣搭配誤用習(xí)慣搭配誤用 I once heard from the animal like this. We passed away the building. of by . 29 5.5.名詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分名詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分 I made many friend in the summer camp. We can get some informations from the Internet. . 30 6.6.動(dòng)

12、詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分動(dòng)詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分 Our teacher often say that success lie in hard work. Mr. Smith, together with some students, are coming to our school. . 31 7.7.贅詞現(xiàn)象多發(fā)贅詞現(xiàn)象多發(fā) I hope you can return back to our school soon. Well hold a party on next Sunday. . 32 8.8.近義詞的誤用近義詞的誤用 The school requests that all the student

13、s should wear the school uniform. I quarreled with my teacher about my grades. . 33 9.9.基本詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤基本詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤 I flied to New York directly from Beijing. This will be done immediatly. . 34 10.10.前后人稱不一致前后人稱不一致 The boy was born in a poor family but she works hard. We watched a few movies and we loved it. .

14、 35 11.11.動(dòng)詞原形作主語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞原形作主語(yǔ)/ /賓語(yǔ)賓語(yǔ) Take a walk after dinner is very good for you. At that moment, I didnt feel like take a walk. . 36 12.12.邏輯主語(yǔ)與主句主語(yǔ)不一致邏輯主語(yǔ)與主句主語(yǔ)不一致 Preparing dinner, the doorbell rang. Walking in the street, a car hit an old man. . 37 13.13.一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句出現(xiàn)兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句出現(xiàn)兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ) There was no work to d

15、o, he went back home. I received your email, I was very excited. being When and . 38 14.14.中式英語(yǔ)中式英語(yǔ) Next week have a party. I sorry you I cant with you go Beijing. . 39 有則改之，無則加勉；有則改之，無則加勉； 用心則易，無心則難。用心則易，無心則難。 . 40 專題三：第一反應(yīng)與克制第一反應(yīng)專題三：第一反應(yīng)與克制第一反應(yīng) . 41 他是個(gè)好人。他是個(gè)好人。 第一反應(yīng)測(cè)試：第一反應(yīng)測(cè)試： He is a good man. ge

16、nerous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hospitable, easy-going, devoted, open-minded, modest, friendly . 42 對(duì)不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。 Im sorry that I cant go to Beijing with you. Would you accept my heartfelt apology that I cant make it to Beijing with you as we have planned? I sorry you

17、I cant with you go Beijing. . 43 存點(diǎn)錢是很重要的。存點(diǎn)錢是很重要的。 There is no denying/ It is beyond any dispute that depositing some money in the bank is crucial. Sometimes, whether you have money at hand means the difference of life or death for a loved one. . 44 專題四：打動(dòng)人心的句型專題四：打動(dòng)人心的句型 和和 打翻人胃的句型打翻人胃的句型 . 45 . 4

18、6 審題：審題： “十年后的我十年后的我” - “感性的、充滿想象的感性的、充滿想象的” 切忌：套用了太多所謂的切忌：套用了太多所謂的“萬(wàn)能句式萬(wàn)能句式” ，破壞了這種，破壞了這種 “感性感性”，使之變得，使之變得“太理性太理性”、“太剛太剛”了：了： （1）運(yùn)用了大量的表示順序的詞句）運(yùn)用了大量的表示順序的詞句(太過理性太過理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows. . 47 審題：審題： “十年后的我十年后的我” - “感性

19、的、充滿想象的感性的、充滿想象的” 切忌：套用了太多所謂的切忌：套用了太多所謂的“萬(wàn)能句式萬(wàn)能句式” ，破壞了這種，破壞了這種 “感性感性”，使之變得，使之變得“太理性太理性”、“太剛太剛”了：了： （1）運(yùn)用了大量的表示順序的詞句）運(yùn)用了大量的表示順序的詞句(太過理性太過理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows. . 48 （2）運(yùn)用了大量的表達(dá)強(qiáng)烈觀點(diǎn)句式（語(yǔ)氣太剛）：）運(yùn)用了大量的表達(dá)強(qiáng)烈觀點(diǎn)句式（語(yǔ)氣太剛）： I hol

20、d the point of view that There is no doubt that I strongly believe that I am firmly convinced that (there will be exciting and wonderful changes in /it gives me a strong body) It goes without saying that What I want to stress is that (health is very important to us) . 49 （3）運(yùn)用了大量的總結(jié)、轉(zhuǎn)換、強(qiáng)調(diào)、轉(zhuǎn)折等語(yǔ)氣、句式，不

21、 夠得體。 All in all, / Generally speaking, As a matter of fact, As for my spare time, As far as I am concerned, I hope become a doctor. When it comes to my own family, it occurs to me that I will have 2 children. It is known to us that family is the most important thing in our life. On the one hand, on

22、 the other hand . 50 注意：在結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，邏 輯通順的基礎(chǔ)上，要注 意句型的多變，句子的 優(yōu)美。 . 51 （1）運(yùn)用大量的強(qiáng)調(diào)句和倒裝句，給人非常生澀的感覺。 In my spare time, so active am I that I will go fishing with my family. It is after ten years that （2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量同樣的句式： Its I that want to be a teacher; It is I that am fond on children. It is I that like mak

23、ing a lot of friends. It is famous city that Ill go to （3）中式英語(yǔ)，意思相差較大,或完全不達(dá)意。 Lover Organize a family I hope my will be little speak English. . 52 那些能稍微充滿想象的句子，就顯得難能可貴： My two sons surrounding me smile like sunshine. On weekends, I will take my family to the beach to have a rest, enjoying the sun ri

24、ses. go out for a picnic, hugging the nature and strengthening our emotion clever and optimistic, my daughter is going to be the sort of girl who spread sunshine to others through her smile. Love can add delightful color to life. . 53 My Chinese Dream To make our motherland become more and more powe

25、rful, teenagers should play a role in realizing Chinese dream. Recently, our class has held a meeting about this. There I will discuss how I understand Chinese dream. Maybe everyone has a dream, whatever it is. Dream is like water, which can water our heart; dream is like sunshine, which can melt the snow; dream is like wind, which can blow away fog