專題書面表達(dá)之讀后續(xù)寫十高考英語真題分項詳解

1、精品word十年20212021高考英語真題分項詳解33書面表達(dá)·讀后續(xù)寫1.2021年7月，浙江高考閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world-the town of Churchill in Manitoba，Canada.As Elli and I cooked

2、 dinner，a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed，and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp，which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.I radioed the camp

3、 manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way，but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇)，I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager su

4、ggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes，but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through the fence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫)，the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.留意:1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2. 至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫局部分為

5、兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp._Paragraph2:At that very moment, the helicopter arrived._【解析】本文主要表達(dá)了人與熊對抗，之后成功脫險的故事。仆人公的感情線變化為：興奮渴望驚恐放松。劇情線以仆人公如何與北極熊周旋并成功擺脫它開放。由第一段的段首提示句可知：幾分鐘后，熊又回到營地。接下來可通過場景渲染，描寫當(dāng)時令人顫栗驚恐的畫面，例如“Roars and scr

6、eams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness.這不僅合理地描寫了熊的反響，也描繪出讓人戰(zhàn)栗的場景。由第二段的段首提示句可知：此時，直升機到了。假設(shè)想要進行續(xù)寫兩段的合理連接，第一段的結(jié)尾可描寫成“After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, the bear trotted forward a few steps.這樣可以營造出危急的場景?！拔覀兛吹街鄙龣C的到來，感到絕處逢生的喜悅，可以以人物心理描寫作為第二段的開頭，重點描寫喜極而泣的狀態(tài)，例如“My heart leaped with joy as

7、 I knew we were likely to be saved.最終，結(jié)尾局部需要快速收束，并說明成功逃脫的結(jié)局。關(guān)于畫線詞：Elli作為女仆人公，是續(xù)寫內(nèi)容中應(yīng)當(dāng)消滅的畫線詞，noises, pictures, fence, spray與熊有關(guān)，也在兩段續(xù)寫內(nèi)容中消滅。最終，兩人回歸平安狀態(tài)，因此畫線詞safe也可自然而然地消滅在續(xù)寫內(nèi)容中。由此劃分畫線詞，可快速鎖定需使用的畫線詞范圍，幫助構(gòu)思?！痉段摹緼 few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Roars and screams pierced the silence

8、 with needle-like shrillness. The noises turned Elli and I pale with horror. I feared that the giant would destroy our whole fence. He roared repeatedly, shattering what was left of the silence. Elli seized this opportunity to take some pictures of the bear. The animals noises echoed all around us.

9、We betrayed our feelings by huddling together, shivering with fear. After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, he trotted forward a few steps.2.2021年，新高考全國I卷，山東閱讀下面材料, 依據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town h

10、ad lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to

11、 work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.“I wish you could see him, she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.After their moth

12、er left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money, said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.“So do I, said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I

13、 have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do, said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), an

14、d put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.留意:1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右:2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too._ With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business._【答案】When Mrs. Meredith heard of

15、 Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernards home. They told Bernar

16、d how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, h

17、e wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Merediths family

18、, and he also did what he could to help those in need.【解析】【分析】本文是依據(jù)短文進行續(xù)寫，使之成為一個完整的故事?！驹斀狻?.認(rèn)真讀懂所給供給的材料:和藹的Meredith一家住在一個小社區(qū)里，他們想掛念一個貧困的家庭。那家的男仆人生病臥床，女仆人要照看丈夫、無法外出賺錢，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活格外困難。后來，Meredith的孩子想出了一個方法-制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣爆米花。2.依據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過制作和賣爆米花掛念Bernard一家擺脫逆境的。3.續(xù)寫局部和前面的文章

19、連接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)進展和人物性格相全都，故事情節(jié)的向后連續(xù)進展要符合情理。4.依據(jù)第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(當(dāng)Meredith太太聽到John的方法時，她也認(rèn)為這是個好方法)可以針對如何實現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個提議開放構(gòu)思；依據(jù)第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切預(yù)備就緒后，Bernard開頭了他的新生意)可以針對Bernard如何通過賣爆米花讓家庭擺脫逆

20、境開放構(gòu)思。5.續(xù)寫的語言要盡可能與原文的語言保持風(fēng)格上的全都。文章時態(tài)以一般過去時為主。應(yīng)使用自己生疏的句型和短語進行寫作，考生要留意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清楚，要點全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合題干要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)精確，適當(dāng)補充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。3.2021年1月，浙江高考閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事?！癐'm going to miss you so much, Poppy, "said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to

21、 hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(心情)get the better of him.The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk.

22、 Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. "What should

23、 we do to cheer Poppy up？"asked Dad. “We've tried everything.“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mom. Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let's get a little dog for Poppy."It didn't take long before they walked throu

24、gh the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(搖擺)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.留意:1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2. 至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫局部分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你

25、所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Para 1. Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared._Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university._【答案】Para 1. Dad put the box on the ground and opened the top. A shiny little wet nose popped up. Then two fluffy paws. Next the box tipped over sideways, and out tumb

26、led a mass of wiggly golden silliness. Poppy was amazed. She wagged furiously. She barked with joy. She smiled, her tongue lolling out as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog. “That didnt take long, rema

27、rked Mom, as both dogs went roaring around the house in an impromptu game of chase. Dad laughed. Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a sma

28、ll golden cloud came racing up to lick his face too. “Oh my gosh, who is this? he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the look of shock on his face. “Thats Pee-wee, said Dad. “I cant believe you got yourselves a puppy! “We didnt, replied Mom. “This puppy is for Poppy!【解析】【分析】這是一篇讀后

29、續(xù)寫作文。【詳解】通過閱讀所給文章可知，文章表達(dá)了男孩要去上高校，和自己的狗Poppy道別。而沒有了男孩在家里，Poppy也格外惦念男孩，于是男孩父母打算給Poppy買一條小狗作伴。續(xù)寫局部分為兩段，第一段開頭是：爸爸翻開盒子，一條可愛的小狗消滅了。所以后文應(yīng)當(dāng)是描寫買來的小狗的樣子以及這兩只狗的相處狀況；第二段開頭是：幾個星期后，男孩從高校回到家里。本段應(yīng)當(dāng)寫男孩回到家以后看到兩條狗的反響，以及父母告知男孩這條狗是買給Poppy的。續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要生疏所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最終還要留意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后

30、，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)?！军c睛】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：a mass of，with joy，look forward to等高級詞匯；非謂語動詞的運用The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog.；時間狀語從句When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a small golden cloud came r

31、acing up to lick his face too.等高級句式。4.2021年6月，浙江高考閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque

32、 in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and wate

33、r rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impres

34、sed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our hor

35、ses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. "Dont be late for supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the co

36、lors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(編織的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.留意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為l50左右；2至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語：3續(xù)寫局部分為

37、兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. _Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. _【答案】Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. My horse turned to the left to avoid the little rabbit as I

38、 held on tightly and tried not to fall. Then my dad turned around and shouted, “Hold on! All of a sudden the horse began to run. My dad tried to keep up behind us. For a few minutes my horse slowed down to a trot and then stopped beside a river. I looked around and realized that we were way off the

39、track.We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Luckily the stars came out and gave us a little light when we were looking for the way to the farm house. After what must have been several hours, we suddenly heard the sound of sheep in the distance. My dad and I both rode our horses towards the s

40、ound of the sheep. As we got closer we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us over. What a night!【解析】讀后續(xù)寫要求考生首先要讀懂已有信息，不僅能讀懂字面含義，還要理清文章的脈絡(luò)。續(xù)篇這篇短文時，考生要搞清楚故事的進展進程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的變化等。在此根底上，考生要順著文章的思路，依據(jù)線索，發(fā)揮想象，對其后的情節(jié)進行合理猜測，并用語言表達(dá)出來。通過閱讀所給文章可知，父親帶兒子去西部荒野的一個伴侶家體驗農(nóng)場生活，見父親和叔叔騎馬，兒子也很想騎，于是親身上馬體驗。依據(jù)第一段所

41、給首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.這一句是故事進展的轉(zhuǎn)折點，可從rabbit消滅后帶來的反響擴開放，可以寫馬的反響，也可以寫人的反響，但要留意與第二段首句相照應(yīng)。第二段首句是We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.這一句照應(yīng)前文Uncle Paul的囑咐不要誤吃晚飯，可從如何尋路返回農(nóng)場去寫。續(xù)寫時留意要使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，我們要生疏所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最終還要留意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后要用

42、下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。5.2021年11月，浙江高考閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。A Vacation with My MotherI had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot abo

43、ut her.My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our

44、 friends. Who knew if wed ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and travelers chec

45、ks Mom had forgotten.David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout(放哨) while I go, and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go. I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, wh

46、ere are the kids? “What?! Oh, GoshI thought they were being awfully quiet. We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we werent about to take any chances.留意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2. 至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫局部分為兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1:The next day we remembere

47、d the brand-new tent we had brought with us. _ Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. _ 【答案】The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement

48、, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass comfo

49、rtably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously. Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didnt have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot to take this tent with us again.【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。短文表達(dá)了作者的母親很健忘，一家四口自駕旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中發(fā)生了好玩的事情。【

50、詳解】首先，依據(jù)文章當(dāng)中第二段內(nèi)容比較快活的基調(diào)，第一段的故事情節(jié)應(yīng)當(dāng)比較偏向正面感情顏色，例如：我們在露營過程中一起搭建帳篷的快活時間或露營過程中的趣事(尤其是前文有鋪墊媽媽是個forgetful的人，這一點也可以埋下伏筆來表達(dá)后面過程中由于媽媽健忘而帶來的趣事)(也有同學(xué)在此處描述了露營過程中對其他生疏人供給掛念，來集中表達(dá)nice這一個點);其次，第二段開頭說來描述欣賞風(fēng)景： 此處可以用一些描述景色環(huán)境的表達(dá)來襯托下氣氛，但是第二段不能僅僅只能有景色描述；例如：這里可以實寫和虛寫結(jié)合的方式，看到景色(同時回憶往事)，最終把故事的落腳點放在“家人的感情“親情“生活的樂趣“與媽媽一起的趣事等

51、等角度都可以的;當(dāng)然也有同學(xué)描述與生疏人的相遇，引出了生疏人的善意這個主題;總之這次的話題比較開放，情節(jié)可以寫的角度比較多;再次，除了情節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容以外，以下幾個方面是考生需要著重關(guān)注的得分點：字跡清楚程度，語法多樣性和句式豐富性，連接成分的使用，語言的場景恰當(dāng)程度;高考英語寫作中，考生所接受的句型結(jié)構(gòu)肯定程度上影響了老師對考生寫作水平的推斷;說到語法豐富性方面，例如在作文中用到從句結(jié)構(gòu)、強調(diào)句、非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)等。尤其應(yīng)當(dāng)留意的是：避開句型單一化，如通篇使用定語從句，這樣反而使閱卷老師覺得該考生對句型把握的不夠充分。應(yīng)當(dāng)在文章寫作中有意識地多使用不同的句型結(jié)構(gòu)?！军c睛】文章思路清楚，語言標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，段落

52、整齊，語篇連貫，層次清楚。使用了較為高級的句式: 虛 擬 語 氣 和 with 復(fù) 合 結(jié) 構(gòu) Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what引導(dǎo)的主語從句和which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom.高級句式的

53、應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達(dá)力量。6.2021年6月，浙江高考閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on,

54、and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (騎行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog! he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up