高考英語讀寫類作文講評 (38張)ppt課件

1、Learning aims: To learn how to sum up the main idea of a short passage; To learn how to polish up your own writings; To correct some mistakes from your own writings.讀寫義務(wù)型寫作分為兩部分：讀寫義務(wù)型寫作分為兩部分：第一部分要求用約第一部分要求用約30個詞概括所給短文的要點(diǎn)，個詞概括所給短文的要點(diǎn)，文體主要以議論文，記敘文或闡明文為主。文體主要以議論文，記敘文或闡明文為主。第二部分以約第二部分以約120個詞就短文某一主題議論本人的

2、個詞就短文某一主題議論本人的閱歷并發(fā)表看法。閱歷并發(fā)表看法。此項旨在著重調(diào)查學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)英語的綜合才干，特別此項旨在著重調(diào)查學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)英語的綜合才干，特別是閱讀寫作以及思想的才干。第一部分要求學(xué)生能是閱讀寫作以及思想的才干。第一部分要求學(xué)生能讀懂文章，在讀懂的根底上概括文章要點(diǎn)，所以閱讀懂文章，在讀懂的根底上概括文章要點(diǎn)，所以閱讀才干和概括才干要求較高。讀才干和概括才干要求較高。寫作要求分析Technique Guides 概括敘事性概括敘事性(narrative)文章主要內(nèi)容普通應(yīng)包括文章主要內(nèi)容普通應(yīng)包括四個方面的內(nèi)容：四個方面的內(nèi)容： 1. 什么人？什么人？(Who) 2. 發(fā)生什么事情？發(fā)生

3、什么事情？(What happened) 3.目的如何目的如何/緣由是什么？緣由是什么？(Why) 4.結(jié)果如何結(jié)果如何/什么啟示或教訓(xùn)？什么啟示或教訓(xùn)？(Consequence/Inspiration/Lesson) You may begin like these: The passage/ story is mainly about (talks about) + a story/ phenomenon where/that +從句從句 2. The writer tells/shows/states us that 3. As is shown in the passage, 4. W

4、hat the passage tells/shows/states us is that 故事性閱讀資料，應(yīng)該用最簡練的言語來闡明故故事性閱讀資料，應(yīng)該用最簡練的言語來闡明故事講述了什么，還可以講述該故事給他的啟示事講述了什么，還可以講述該故事給他的啟示 (inspiration) 或其中的一個道理或其中的一個道理(principle)。 At least 36 people died in a fatal stampede during New Year celebrations in Shanghai on January 1st, 2021. The tragedy happened

5、at a crowded square in Shanghais gleaming Bund area at around 11:35 p.m. Most of the injured were young people in their twenties, a majority of them women. There were also college students and children. They were sent to several hospitals for treatment, including Changzheng Hospital, the Shanghai No

6、.1 Peoples Hospital, Ruijin Hospital and Huangpu District Central Hospital. Lack of awareness over safety risk behind public gatherings and loose control at the scene contributed to the tragedy. The disorder at the scene also exposed the deficiency in emergency exercise and safety education. A profo

7、und lesson should be learned from the incident. For those areas with high safety risks, the authorities should have special emergency response plans and make sufficient analysis and assessment, including the arrangement of police, volunteers and supporting measures. 參考1 At least 36 people died in a

8、fatal stampede stmpid during New Year celebrations in Shanghai on January 1st, 2021, caused by lack of awareness over safety risk and loose control at the scene. (35)馬蘇云 參考2 A tragedy in which at least 36 people died during New Year celebrations in Shanghai raised peoples awareness of the security o

9、f public places. And the author analyzed the causes of the tragedy. 33字(楊天一) 參考3 What the passage shows us is a stampede which happened in Shanghais Bund area several days ago, including the reasons why it happened and the measures authorities should take. (29字) (suggested answer)Transitionalsentenc

10、es connecting your experience Actually, in real life, everyone can have an experience of Having read the passage, I think of After reading the passage, I am lost in thought, which reminds me of What a touching story, which reminds me of How to polish up your writingGeneralAdvancedgetfinishlikecareco

11、nsideruseimportantacquire/attain/obtainaccomplish/completeappreciate/be fond of/prefer concerntakeinto consideration/account make use of /take advantage ofbe of vital/great importanceExercise1 sad She felt lonely and d_. She was really u_ about the way her father treated her. happy She was feeling m

12、ore c_ than before. Sandy will be d_ to see you. Im absolutely _ that you are coming. bad Smoking in public is a/an _ habit. The weather is _. I found this manner is extremely _. The food looks _, but it tasted OK. great He is an _ player to watch. Her dance was an _ performance. Their last concert

13、was really _. The film was absolutely _. What a _ idea. This travel was a/an _ experience. very She looks _ beautiful this tonight. Conditions have improved _over the past few years. Raising money for the homeless has been _ difficult. Self-confidence is _ vital to success.GeneralAdvancedsadhappybad

14、greatverydepressed/upset/in low spiritscheerful/delighted/thrilled/pleasedawful/unpleasant/horribleamazing/admirable/awesome/brilliant/excellent/enjoyable/fantasticbadly/ dramatically/ especially/rather/pretty/perfectly/awfully/amazingly Its important to obey the public regulations. Only if we do th

15、at, can we live in a peaceful, safe and beautiful society. (姜佳怡) Some people like visiting some places which have lots of visitors. (蔡宜靜) (prefer)Its of vital importance to obey the public regulations. Only if we perform them, can we live in a peaceful, safe and comfortable society.Some people prefe

16、r to visit some crowded interest of places rather than stay at home for holiday.Exercise 2 Try to polish up the two sentences各種從句各種從句非謂語非謂語倒裝句型倒裝句型with復(fù)合構(gòu)造復(fù)合構(gòu)造強(qiáng)調(diào)句型強(qiáng)調(diào)句型省略句型省略句型祈使句型祈使句型虛擬語氣虛擬語氣優(yōu)句鑒賞 The more actions we take for public rules, the more advantages we will achieve from the society. In my o

17、pinion, if everyone who took part in the New Year celebrations had behaved well, the tragedy would not have happened. So it is obvious that everyone must have the awareness over safety risk, especially when in public places. 巧用副詞不讓句子裸奔 Obviously, most of people lack the consciousness of public safet

18、y. Surprisingly, the fatal stampede led to 36 deaths and dozens of injuries. Definitely, we should put our security in the first place. Personally, a series of prevention measures must be taken to guarantee public order.有沒有副詞效果確實(shí)不一樣！ I believe that I suggest that I hope that I support that I _ belie

19、ve that I _suggest that I _hope that I _support thatfirmlystronglysincerelyfully/completely/entirely/absolutely1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from original passage6Too s

20、imple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題： There are 36 young people dead in Shanghais gleaming Bund area when they celebrated for the coming new year.(19字) (張周杰) A fatal stampede which happened during New Year celebrations in Shanghai made us pay attention to safety risk behind public gatherings. (21字) (王麗娟)學(xué)生習(xí)作

21、改錯1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from original passage6Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題：學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 People will not follow public rules because of lacking of awareness over s

22、afety risk behind public gatherings and loose control at the scene contributed to the tragedy. (黃陳侃) As far as I am concerned, its everyones duty to obey and protect the public gatherings. (李佳鑫)order學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 Second, people should expose the deficiency in emergency exercise and safety education. (施佳佳)

23、In an emergency exercise, people will be in a panic. So when we are in an emergency exercise, we ought to keep calm.(杜天琴)strengthen 1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from o

24、riginal passage6Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題：學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 During New Year celebrations in Shanghai, because young people are lack of awareness over safety risk behind public gatherings resulting a fatal stampede happened, where 36 people died and many people injured. (蔡佳麗) If it is necessary for him t

25、o go to the places, what he always does is that finding an open place and staying there. (楊天一) of,were(to) findstay學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 We always wait for a moment, then will we go on it. (徐菁玲) I think not only followed by travelers, but also the authorities should have special emergency response plans and make s

26、ufficient analysis and assessment. (陳嘉敏)We would rather wait in line than push our waythrough the crowd.I think not only should travelers follow the public order, but also the authorities 1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures

27、4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from original passage6Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題：學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 There is a fatal stampede during New Year celebrations in Shanghai. From this incident, we should improve our safety awareness and the authorities are supposed to make special emergency re

28、sponse plans.1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from original passage6Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題：學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 To avoid such tragedy happening again, the authorities should h

29、ave special emergency response plans and make sufficient analysis and assessment.(王麗娟)1 Summarize incomplete idea2 Misuse/misunderstand original passage3Too many mistakes made in sentence structures4Express opinions too early5Apply the suggestions from original passage6Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的問題問題：學(xué)生習(xí)作改錯 In public, I follow the traffic lights. I dont play on the street. (黃嘉楠) In my opinion, if we want to live in a safe environment, we will be careful. (徐菁玲) My friend likes shopping. When she goes out, she always follow social rates. (姜佩文)we cant be too careful.orde