中考英語(yǔ)優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（附范文）

1、中考英語(yǔ)優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（一）記敘文 1【習(xí)作要求】根據(jù)中文意思和英文提示詞語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)出意思連貫，符合邏輯的英文文段。所給英文提示詞語(yǔ)必須都用上；每組英文提示所寫(xiě)的句數(shù)不限。 彼得只有五歲，和他的祖母住在一起。一天他的祖母得了重感冒，彼得急得直哭，后來(lái)他 (1) Peter, five (2) live, grandma (3) have, cold, worried, cry (4) idea, find, parents' telephone number, call (5) news, hurry, home, hospital 【參考范文】 Peter is only fi

2、ve (years old). He lives with his grandma. One day his grandma had a cold. Peter was so worried that he began to cry. Then he had an idea. He found his parents' telephone number and gave them a call. When his parents heard the news, they hurried back home and took Peter's grandma to the hosp

3、ital. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 根據(jù)中英文提示可理清需要進(jìn)行表達(dá)的大致情節(jié)是：彼得只有五歲，他和他的祖母住在一起，一天他的祖母得了重感冒，他急得直哭。后來(lái)有了一個(gè)主意，他找到了他父母的 號(hào)碼，他打 給了他們，當(dāng)他的父母得知這一消息后迅速地趕回家，把祖母送進(jìn)醫(yī)院。須注意前面介紹的是一般情況用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，后面敘述的是過(guò)去發(fā)生的事用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。動(dòng)詞的運(yùn)用及動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài)是在進(jìn)行書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)尤其要注意的。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（一）記敘文 2【習(xí)作要求】請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面所給李玲的個(gè)人小檔案，以My good friend為題，寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，介紹李玲的基本情況。要求條理清楚，語(yǔ)句通順，體現(xiàn)表中的全部?jī)?nèi)容，不得少于12句話。 中文

4、名：李玲 英文名：Susan 性別：女 年齡：15 祖籍：青海 學(xué)校：第八中學(xué) 年級(jí)：三 班級(jí)：二 特長(zhǎng)：數(shù)學(xué)、英語(yǔ) 愛(ài)好：唱歌、看電視、打排球 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：友好，善良，樂(lè)于助人，學(xué)習(xí)努力 【參考范文】 My Good Friend I have a good friend. Her Chinese name is Li Ling, and Susan is her English name. She is from Qinghai. Li Ling is fifteen years old. She studies in No. 8 Middle School. She is in Class T

5、wo, Grade Three. Li Ling is good at maths and English. She likes singing and playing volleyball very much. And she sings quite well. She likes watching TV, too. Li Ling is very kind and friendly. She studies very hard and always likes helping others. What a good girl she is! I like her! 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 這是一篇記

6、敘文，內(nèi)容要交待清楚、全面，要注意中英文的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，如漢語(yǔ)中年級(jí)在前，班級(jí)在后，而英語(yǔ)正相反；首尾句要格外留意，要保持短文的完整性。 (1) 格式：人物介紹 (2) 人稱：第三人稱 (3) 時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí) (4) 短語(yǔ)：have a good friend, English name, to be from, No. 8 Middle School, in Class Two, Grade Three, to be good at, like singing and playing, sing well, like watching TV, study hard, what a good g

7、irl (5) 句型：陳述句與感嘆句優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（一）記敘文3【習(xí)作要求】根據(jù)中文意思和英文提示詞語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)出意思連貫、符合邏輯的英文文段。所給的英文提示詞語(yǔ)必須都用上，句數(shù)不限；中文提示內(nèi)容不必逐句翻譯。 一個(gè)雨天，李莉乘出租車回家。在車?yán)锼l(fā)現(xiàn)司機(jī)在學(xué)英語(yǔ)。他對(duì)李莉說(shuō)了些什么? 此事對(duì)你學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)有何啟發(fā)? 為支持北京奧運(yùn)你打算做些什么? (1) one rainy day, go home, by taxi (2) in the car, find, was learning English (3) said to Li Li, I, weak, English, when at school

8、, now work hard, to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games (4) I think. to show support （n.支持）for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games 【參考范文】 One rainy day, Li Li went home by taxi. In the car she found (that) the driver was learning English. He said to Li Li: "I was weak in English when I was at s

9、chool. Now I'm working hard at it to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games." I think I should learn from the driver. English is very important to us because it is widely used all over the world. As a student, I'll do my best to learn English well at school. And I'm going to speak

10、 English as much as possible to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 第一句很重要，以便確定全文時(shí)態(tài)。句與句之間要連貫。關(guān)鍵句要用上，如：I'm going to speak English as much as possible to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. (1) 格式：簡(jiǎn)介 (2) 人稱：第三人稱 (3) 時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，一般過(guò)去時(shí)，一般將來(lái)時(shí) (4) 短語(yǔ)、句式、句型：短語(yǔ)與句式已給出，句型包括簡(jiǎn)單

11、句、直接引語(yǔ)、賓語(yǔ)從句優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（二）應(yīng)用文 1【習(xí)作要求】假如你的名字叫王磊，你有一位美國(guó)朋友杰克(Jack)今年暑假要到西安來(lái)參觀，你寫(xiě)信告訴他，你住在西安市南大街65號(hào)，從火車站乘10路公共汽車到歷史博物館下車。到時(shí)你將在車站等他。此信寫(xiě)于2004年5月1日。 注意： (1) 數(shù)不得少于50個(gè)。 (2) 求意思完整，語(yǔ)句連貫。 【參考范文】 Xi'an, China May 1st, 2004 Dear Jack: I'm very glad to hear that you'll come to visit Xi'an this summer holi

12、day. Now I would like to tell you how to get to my house. I live at 65 the South Street, Xi'an. When you arrive in Xi'an by train (or by plane), you can catch (take) the No. 10 bus and get off at the History Museum. I'll wait for you there. Yours, Wang Lei 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 完成這道書(shū)面表達(dá)題應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)方面著手考慮： 首

13、先，這道題屬于書(shū)信文件，所以應(yīng)注意書(shū)信的正確格式。其次從提示的內(nèi)容來(lái)看，主要是說(shuō)王磊的一位美國(guó)朋友杰克于暑假要來(lái)西安參觀，王磊寫(xiě)信告訴他行走的路線及到時(shí)在車站等他等細(xì)節(jié)，應(yīng)采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)敘述。最后，同學(xué)們應(yīng)結(jié)合所給的主要內(nèi)容，用所學(xué)過(guò)的詞（組）及句型來(lái)完成此文。 參觀 visit 今年暑假 this summer holiday 想要 would like to do到達(dá) get to/arrive at/reach 乘坐公共汽車 catch/take a bus 下車 get off 等等。 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（二）應(yīng)用文 2【習(xí)作要求】假如你叫Han Meimei，你的筆友Mary現(xiàn)

14、在上海三中學(xué)習(xí)。她邀請(qǐng)你去參加聚會(huì)。請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)給Mary寫(xiě)一封信。信的要點(diǎn)如下： (1) 你很抱歉，不能去。 (2) 你母親病了，醫(yī)生叫她臥床幾日。你要照料母親。 (3) 謝謝寄來(lái)的漂亮的明信片(postcard)，很喜歡，將放在書(shū)桌上。 注意： (1) 信要通順、連貫。 (2) 詞數(shù)60字左右。信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 (3) 如寫(xiě)不下，可寫(xiě)在橫線下空白處。 No.3 Middle School Shanghai April 20, 2004 Dear Mary, Thank you very much for inviting (邀請(qǐng)) me to your party.

15、_ _ _ _Give my best wishes to your family. Yours, Han Meimei 【參考范文】 No.3 Middle School Shanghai April 20, 2004 Dear Mary, Thank you very much for inviting me to your party. I am very sorry, but I cant come. My mother is ill. The doctor has told her that she should stay in bed for several days. Ill t

16、ake care of my mother. Thank you very much for sending me such a beautiful postcard. I like it very much. I am going to put it on my desk. Could I hear from you soon? Give my best wishes to your family. Yours, Han Meimei 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 利用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)和題目所給材料寫(xiě)一封英文信。通讀全文，可較詳細(xì)地列出要點(diǎn)： (1) 你很抱歉，不能去 (2) 原因是母親生病了 (3) 醫(yī)生囑其

17、臥床幾日 (4) 你必須照料母親 (5) 謝謝寄來(lái)的明信片，很喜歡 (6) 明信片放在桌上 要注意的是：內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不遺漏；時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)正確；句子結(jié)構(gòu)正確；符合英文信的格式；單詞拼寫(xiě)正確；語(yǔ)句通順，上下文連貫；字?jǐn)?shù)在60左右。 通過(guò)以上分析，再著手開(kāi)始寫(xiě)，一定會(huì)寫(xiě)出一封符合題意要求的英文信來(lái)。 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（二）應(yīng)用文 3【習(xí)作要求】 Miss Jo Hunt和Lily是好朋友。Lily給Jo寫(xiě)信，告訴她自己和雙胞胎妹妹在中國(guó)學(xué)習(xí)和生活的情況，并詢問(wèn)對(duì)方的漢語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)情況及是否能來(lái)中國(guó)。 要求：寫(xiě)一篇100詞左右的信。 【學(xué)生習(xí)作】 March 5th，2004Dear Jo: How are you?

18、 I havent heard of you for a long time. Id like tell you something about our school life in China. Now we are students of No.4 Middle School. Were in the same grade, Grade Two, but in different class . Im in Class 1, but Lucy is in Class 4. We go to school five days a week. Every morning, we leave h

19、ome after a quick breakfast. Classes begin at eight oclock in the morning. We have four classes in the morning and three classes in the afternoon. We have lunch at school because we all like Chinese food very much. Our favorite food is dumplings. School is over at about 3 in the afternoon. After sch

20、ool we have sports on the playground. We have made friends with a lot of Chinese children. We teach them English and they teach our Chinese. Now we can speak and write a little in Chinese. What about you? By the way, when are you coming to China? Please write to me soon. Love from: Lily from，“收到某人的信

21、”應(yīng)為hear from。 to tell，正確的說(shuō)法是“would like sb. to do sth.” classes，既然在不同班級(jí)，應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)形式。 both，all表示三者以上的人或物，both表示二者。 us，此處應(yīng)用賓格形式。 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 本文從句子結(jié)構(gòu)到語(yǔ)言能力的表達(dá)都很不錯(cuò)。思路清晰，行文流暢。正確地運(yùn)用了動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)，但是大小寫(xiě)及動(dòng)詞搭配還要多加練習(xí)。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）看圖作文1【習(xí)作要求】看圖寫(xiě)話 根據(jù)所給圖示，以“Wang Lei's Busy Day”為題，寫(xiě)一篇不少于50字的短文，內(nèi)容必須符合圖意，語(yǔ)意連貫，句式規(guī)范，字跡工整。（正文第一句已給出） Wan

22、g Lei's Busy Day      It was March 8th yesterday._ _ _ 【參考范文】 It was March 8th yesterday. It was Women's Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He went shopping and bought much food. Then he cleaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his moth

23、er came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pleased. （58個(gè)詞） 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 先“看準(zhǔn)題意”：題目是Wang Lei's Busy Day。寫(xiě)作要圍繞王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的順序展開(kāi)。描述昨天的事應(yīng)該用過(guò)去時(shí)。從題意理解中即可“規(guī)范格式”：本文用記敘文格式去寫(xiě)。再“按點(diǎn)組句”： （1）3月8日為婦女節(jié)。It was Womens Day. （2）王雷去商店購(gòu)物。Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food. （3）

24、王雷打掃衛(wèi)生。He cleaned the room. （4）他燒飯。母親回家很高興。He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was very happy. 完成組句后，“連句成段”，可加上句子間的銜接句子。如在（1）與（2）之間可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother.在最后可再談王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he felt happy.把這些句子連成段后，最后“通篇潤(rùn)色”。 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）看圖作文2【習(xí)作要求】看圖組句 根據(jù)所給圖畫(huà)和提

25、示詞語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)出意思連貫、符合邏輯的四句話。每幅圖只寫(xiě)一句話，所給提示詞語(yǔ)必須都用上。（注意：只抄提示語(yǔ)不得分） 提示： （1）It was Tree Planting Day yesterday. （2）early, morning, I, go, in my old clothes. （3）we, help, each other, dig, hole, large enough, for, trees. （4）plant, some, along, school, playground. （5）from now on, water, tree, often, possible. 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析

26、（三）看圖作文3【習(xí)作要求】看圖作文 根據(jù)圖示，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的短文。要求故事完整，句子通順，內(nèi)容與圖片相符。 參考詞匯：newspaper (報(bào)紙)，bird (鳥(niǎo))，nature (自然) 【參考范文】 One day my uncle was reading a newspaper and learned that birds were our friends. We should get alone well with them. He looked at his nice bird in the cage, and decided to let it fly back homena

27、ture. He took the cage with the bird in it and went to a little hill near his house by bike. He went home with the empty cage. When he got back, he sat in a chair and had a rest. A moment later, to his surprise, he found the bird back in the cage. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 分析：該例四幅圖畫(huà)描述的是一位先生保護(hù)動(dòng)物的故事，內(nèi)容貼近考生的生活實(shí)際，有利于對(duì)考生進(jìn)行

28、保護(hù)生態(tài)平衡、保護(hù)地球環(huán)境的教育。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)是： （1）看報(bào)（Let Birds Fly）；（2）上山去放飛籠中鳥(niǎo)； （3）提著空籠返家； （4）驚奇地發(fā)現(xiàn)鳥(niǎo)兒重飛回籠。 通過(guò)觀圖、分析、判斷，列出了要點(diǎn)，可寫(xiě)草稿，再進(jìn)行潤(rùn)色，注意運(yùn)用簡(jiǎn)單的、熟悉的句型結(jié)構(gòu)，檢查要點(diǎn)有無(wú)遺漏，注意拼寫(xiě)、詞匯、語(yǔ)法及搭配上是否有誤。 說(shuō)明：看圖作文是從直觀入手，通過(guò)觀察、分析、理解，運(yùn)用聯(lián)想，將圖畫(huà)語(yǔ)言轉(zhuǎn)換成書(shū)面文字的寫(xiě)作過(guò)程。答題的思路和方法如下：首先，觀察圖畫(huà)，弄清故事梗概。仔細(xì)觀察每幅圖畫(huà)的內(nèi)容，抓住圖中的主要情節(jié)，把握關(guān)鍵的信息與聯(lián)系，諸如人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、動(dòng)作等。其次，明確信息，編擬提綱。經(jīng)過(guò)認(rèn)真的觀察

29、和分析，我們掌握了每幅圖的主要信息。為了在表達(dá)中不漏要點(diǎn)，可為每幅圖配上一個(gè)提綱性的句子，即用一句話表達(dá)這幅畫(huà)的大意，這幾句話實(shí)際上就是短文的寫(xiě)作提綱。有了提綱，我們?cè)趯?xiě)作過(guò)程中就能做到重點(diǎn)突出，有條理，不會(huì)離題。再次，依據(jù)圖示、提綱，連句擴(kuò)寫(xiě)成篇。連句成文時(shí)，要按照一定的順序和圖畫(huà)間的關(guān)系，中間加上一些符合邏輯關(guān)系的過(guò)渡詞、句，從而使所寫(xiě)短文層次分明，內(nèi)容連貫，渾然一體。同時(shí)注意盡可能運(yùn)用簡(jiǎn)單易懂、自己熟悉的有把握的句型結(jié)構(gòu)。最后，結(jié)合要求與圖示，復(fù)查所寫(xiě)短文。寫(xiě)完短文后要檢查格式、篇幅是否符合要求，文理是否通順，要點(diǎn)有無(wú)遺漏，詞匯、語(yǔ)法、搭配上是否有誤，單詞拼寫(xiě)有無(wú)錯(cuò)誤等。 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析(

30、四)提示作文1【習(xí)作要求】馬虎搞到兩張全興隊(duì)對(duì)國(guó)安隊(duì)的足球比賽入場(chǎng)券。他 通知好友趙華洋，約他放學(xué)后在新華公園門口碰頭，一起吃晚飯，然后去看球賽。二人在飯店美美吃了一頓，到付賬時(shí)馬虎才發(fā)現(xiàn)自己把錢夾忘在了家里，入場(chǎng)券也在他的錢夾中。 【學(xué)生習(xí)作】 Ma Hu got two tickets of (1) a wonderful football match between Quanxing and Guoan. He was thinking of invite (2) his good friend Zhao Huayang to watch it together. He gave him

31、 a call and told him to meet at the gate of Xinhua Park after class and then had dinner (3) together. They met each other on time and had good dinner (4) in a restaurant. When the waiter brought them the bill. Ma Hu found that he left (5) his wallet at home. The two tickets kept (6) in the wallet, t

32、oo.（1）of在這里不是表示所有關(guān)系，所以應(yīng)把of改成for，表示“用途”。 （2）動(dòng)詞invite在介詞of的后面，應(yīng)把它變?yōu)閕ng形式。 （3）連詞and連接的應(yīng)該是兩個(gè)并列的動(dòng)詞不定式，所以應(yīng)把had改為to have。 （4）這里注意dinner前面有形容詞修飾時(shí)，那么應(yīng)在形容詞前面加a。 （5）應(yīng)把left改成had left。因?yàn)榈健鞍l(fā)現(xiàn)”時(shí)為止前面的動(dòng)作已經(jīng)完成，要用過(guò)去完成時(shí)態(tài)。 （6）此處是被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，應(yīng)加上were?！久麕燑c(diǎn)評(píng)】 這是一篇根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示寫(xiě)作的作文，也是中考題中常常采用的一種寫(xiě)作方式。寫(xiě)作中要求要點(diǎn)齊全，時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確，短語(yǔ)、句型運(yùn)用較為恰當(dāng)即可得高分。本文要點(diǎn)齊全，

33、較好地體現(xiàn)了寫(xiě)作要求。只是文中細(xì)小錯(cuò)誤較多，這會(huì)影響獲取高分。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（四）提示作文2【習(xí)作要求】以“My Mother”為題，寫(xiě)一篇120字左右的短文。需包括以下要點(diǎn)： (1) 媽媽的身材不高，稍胖，圓臉，長(zhǎng)發(fā)。 (2) 媽媽是家庭主婦，每天起床很早，為全家人做飯。 (3) 早飯前做些家務(wù)，飯后送孩子上學(xué)。雖然她沒(méi)有很多錢，卻常給我們買好衣服和學(xué)習(xí)用品。 (4) 媽媽晚上睡得晚，她總有很多活要做。 (5) 媽媽勤勞，我愛(ài)媽媽。 【學(xué)生習(xí)作】 My Mother My mother is not tall and short (1). She is a little fat. She ha

34、s a round face and long hairs (2).My mother is a housewife. She is very busy every day. She get to(3) up very early every morning. She gets up at about five thirty. After that she begins to cook for the family. Before breakfast, she does some housework. After breakfast, she sends our children (4) to

35、 school. She always tells us study hard (5). She has not many (6) money, but she often buys us some nice clothes and school things. My mother goes to bed very late every night. She always has a lot of work to be done. (7) My mother is hard-working. I love her very much. （1）如果說(shuō)“她中等身材”，應(yīng)該說(shuō)： She is of

36、medium height.（2）hair是不可數(shù)名詞，不能用復(fù)數(shù)形式。 （3）改為gets。主語(yǔ)是第三人稱單數(shù)時(shí)，動(dòng)詞也應(yīng)變?yōu)橄鄳?yīng)的三單形式。 （4）此處“我們孩子”是同位詞組，“我們”與“孩子”之間是同位關(guān)系，應(yīng)將其改成：us children。（5）這里應(yīng)使用動(dòng)詞不定式，即tell us to do something。 （6）money 為不可數(shù)名詞，前面應(yīng)用much修飾，而不能用many。 （7）這里的動(dòng)詞不定式to do的邏輯主語(yǔ)是she，它們之間是主動(dòng)關(guān)系，所以動(dòng)詞不定式應(yīng)用主動(dòng)形式?！久麕燑c(diǎn)評(píng)】 作者以細(xì)膩的筆法描寫(xiě)了一位勤勞而又善良的母親，全文充滿了對(duì)母親的感激之情，語(yǔ)言流暢

37、，表達(dá)生動(dòng)，很有教育意義。小作者文中存在如第2處第6處等名詞方面的錯(cuò)誤，以及第5處、第7處等動(dòng)詞不定式方面的錯(cuò)誤，小作者寫(xiě)完之后要是能夠認(rèn)真檢查，多修改幾遍，這些錯(cuò)誤是可以避免的。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（四）提示作文3【習(xí)作要求】你校與加拿大某中學(xué)結(jié)成姊妹學(xué)校，加方校刊來(lái)信了解你校的課外活動(dòng)情況及你們的建議，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面表格中提供的內(nèi)容用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的短文。文章的開(kāi)頭已給出（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)） 生詞：興趣小組 interest group英語(yǔ)角 English corner活動(dòng) activity (n.) 活動(dòng)時(shí)間450 p.m550p.m主要內(nèi)容 1體育類（籃球、足球等） 2興趣小組（繪畫(huà)、歌舞、

38、電腦等） 3英語(yǔ)角（周三下午） 建議 1增加課外活動(dòng)時(shí)間 2減少作業(yè)量 I'd like to tell you something about the out-of class activities in our school. 【參考范文】 We usually have our activities from 450550 in the afternoon. We have different kinds of activities. Some students are interested in sports. They play basketball and football

39、. We also have some interest groups, such as drawing, singing and dancing. And now, computer is the most popular. On Wednesday afternoon we go to English corner. We like talking in English there. We hope we can spend more time on such activities and less time on homework. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 根據(jù)題目要求。這是一篇說(shuō)明性質(zhì)的書(shū)面表達(dá)

40、，要介紹的是課外活動(dòng)的時(shí)間、內(nèi)容及自己的建議。首先要做到的是細(xì)讀表格，明確要點(diǎn)。在行文時(shí)要注意表達(dá)舉行課外活動(dòng)要用have activities，表達(dá)起止時(shí)間要用from. to，在表達(dá)這三種主要活動(dòng)內(nèi)容時(shí)，為使行文流暢，最好加進(jìn)we have different kinds of activities（我們舉行不同種類的課外活動(dòng)）這樣一句話。緊接著要過(guò)渡到說(shuō)明體育類（籃球、足球），如果表達(dá)出“有些學(xué)生從事體育活動(dòng)（have sports）”或“有些學(xué)生熱衷于（are interested in.）”就較好。至于說(shuō)打籃球、踢足球較容易表達(dá)出來(lái)，可以直接表達(dá)They play basketbal

41、l and football，也可以表達(dá)成Basketball and football are the most popular. 要表達(dá)“興趣小組”時(shí)，注意用提示詞interest groups，要表達(dá)興趣小組的三種內(nèi)容，最好用例如（such as.），三種內(nèi)容作為名詞來(lái)表達(dá)時(shí)要注意用動(dòng)名詞形式（drawing, singing, dancing）。在表達(dá)英語(yǔ)角時(shí)注意用提示詞English corner，“在周三”注意用介詞on。在表達(dá)“建議”時(shí)，用自己熟悉的詞hope，要表達(dá)“增加時(shí)間”，“減少量”，此時(shí)要注意到同一意義可有不同的表達(dá)方式，如轉(zhuǎn)換成“在課外活動(dòng)上多花時(shí)間”“在作業(yè)上少花點(diǎn)

42、時(shí)間”的表達(dá)形式，與原意保持一致且與自己所學(xué)內(nèi)容較貼近而不大容易出錯(cuò)，“在方面花時(shí)間”注意用短語(yǔ) spend.on。 提示的要點(diǎn)往往是非常簡(jiǎn)略的，要使行文流暢、自然，需適當(dāng)加進(jìn)一些話，另外當(dāng)不能直接表達(dá)出需要表達(dá)的意義時(shí)，要考慮用自己熟悉的又不會(huì)改變意義的另一種表達(dá)形式，須知同一意義可以有很多種的表達(dá)方式。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析自由作文1【習(xí)作要求】Write eight or more sentences about the season you like best. 內(nèi)容要點(diǎn) 1四個(gè)季節(jié)中任選一個(gè)季節(jié)。 2被選季節(jié)的特點(diǎn)（氣候、時(shí)間、事物、活動(dòng)等）。 3人們?cè)诖思竟?jié)所從事的活動(dòng)。 4作者自己喜愛(ài)的活

43、動(dòng)和感受。【參考范文】 I like winter best. Though it is very cold, it is good for skating. I often go skating on Sundays with my father. When it snows, everything turns white. Trees and houses are covered with thick snow. How beautiful the world looks! My friends and I like to make snowmen. Sometimes we make s

44、nowballs and throw them at each other. That's a very interesting game. I like winter holiday very much because the Spring Festival is the happiest time of the year. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 這是一篇描寫(xiě)季節(jié)的文章，文章難度一般。要求從自己的角度描寫(xiě)季節(jié)和感受季節(jié)。應(yīng)注意以下幾個(gè)問(wèn)題： (1)確定全文的時(shí)態(tài)。此文一般選用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。 (2)除了對(duì)季節(jié)的描述，一定要有自己的見(jiàn)解，這是得分的重要內(nèi)容和關(guān)鍵所在。 作者用流暢的語(yǔ)言描述了冬天的

45、景色。全文意思表達(dá)清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)緊密。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析自由作文2【習(xí)作要求】Write about what you are going to do after you leave school. 【參考范文】 When I finish school, I want to be a teacher. Though teachers are poorly paid and they have no power, teachers are kind, respectable and learned, like angels. They lead the pathway to succeed. It

46、9;s quite sure that teachers are very important in modern world. We can't develop our country without knowledge. Teachers teach us knowledge. I like all of my teachers in my school. I would like to be an English teacher. It's very important for the students to learn English well today. I'll try my best to be an ideal teacher. My students can make our country better in the future. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 這是一篇闡述觀點(diǎn)的議論文，作者用簡(jiǎn)潔而流暢的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)了長(zhǎng)大后想成為一名老師的愿望。論據(jù)充分，觀點(diǎn)明確，并且字里行間滲透了對(duì)祖國(guó)的無(wú)比熱愛(ài)之情和把祖國(guó)建設(shè)更加美好的決心。優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析自由作文3【習(xí)作要求】請(qǐng)以My.為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。要求：有時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物，字?jǐn)?shù)不少于80個(gè)單詞。 【學(xué)生習(xí)作】