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1、整理課件2010年高考書面表達(dá)評(píng)析杭州學(xué)軍中學(xué) 姜發(fā)兵麗水，2010年10月12日整理課件最近，李越被評(píng)為你班的“每周之星”。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)她的先進(jìn)事跡（上周六，不顧天氣炎熱，為班級(jí)選購歌詠比賽的服裝），用英語為班級(jí)板報(bào)寫一篇100-120詞的短文。你的文章應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)： 1. 李越的事跡及其對(duì)同學(xué)的影響。 2. 你的評(píng)論。Star Student of the WeekLi Yue has been awarded the title of the star for what she did for our class.整理課件五審審全卷：發(fā)卷之初即看作文題，了解大體要求，以便在答其他題目的同時(shí)

2、構(gòu)思文章架構(gòu)，或從試卷中篩選備用詞匯和短語。審話題：個(gè)人情況、人際關(guān)系、語言學(xué)習(xí)、日?；顒?dòng)、周圍環(huán)境、文娛體育、校園生活審功能：感謝、道歉、祝愿、祝賀、勸告、建議、希望、征允、介紹、邀請(qǐng)、同意、喜好、意愿、反對(duì)、表揚(yáng)、鼓勵(lì)、評(píng)價(jià)、抱怨、情感、時(shí)空、特征、因果、比較、施惠、觀點(diǎn)、求職、 推薦審文體：新聞報(bào)道、討論紀(jì)要、情況對(duì)比、事件記敘、通告發(fā)言、表格說明審要點(diǎn)：要點(diǎn)整合擴(kuò)展、段落歸屬、首句續(xù)話、人稱時(shí)態(tài)整理課件1. -How about camping this weekend, just for a change? -OK, whatever you want.2. Many lifesty

3、le patterns do such great harm to health that they actually speed up the weakening of the human body.3. The settlement is home to nearly 1,000 people, many of whom left their village homes for a better life in the city.4. The majority of people in the town strongly support the plan to build a playgr

4、ound for children.5. If you plant watermelon seeds in the spring, you will be eating fresh watermelon in the fall.預(yù)審：發(fā)卷之初即看作文題，了解大體要求，以便在答其他題目的同時(shí)構(gòu)思文章架構(gòu)，或從試卷中篩選備用詞匯和短語。整理課件All the classmates, the majority of whom participated in the singing contest, were thankful to Li Yue for going out of her way to

5、 find the right costumes.We would be competing in the singing contest next week and so we needed costumes for the activity. 3. The settlement is home to nearly 1,000 people, many of whom left their village homes for a better life in the city.5. If you plant watermelon seeds in the spring, you will b

6、e eating fresh watermelon in the fall.整理課件審話題：個(gè)人情況、人際關(guān)系、語言學(xué)習(xí)、日常活動(dòng)、周圍環(huán)境、文娛體育、校園生活Last Saturday morning when Li Yue woke up, it was a day just like any other day. The sun was shining, the birds were singing and there was still a little homework to do.While her homework was very important, she didnt fo

7、rget that she would have to buy costumes for the singing contest.認(rèn)真；滿意，感動(dòng)，感謝；訓(xùn)練用功，更有信心，比賽成績好，大家很開心；樂于助人，熱心班級(jí)活動(dòng)，工作負(fù)責(zé)，學(xué)習(xí)用功，與人為善。是大家學(xué)習(xí)的楷模。表達(dá)祝賀。名至實(shí)歸。整理課件審功能意念：感謝、道歉、祝愿、祝賀、勸告、建議、希望、征允、介紹、邀請(qǐng)、同意、喜好、意愿、反對(duì)、表揚(yáng)、鼓勵(lì)、評(píng)價(jià)、抱怨、情感、時(shí)空、特征、因果、比較、施惠、觀點(diǎn)、求職、 推薦 感謝: appreciate; gratitude 祝賀: congratulate 表揚(yáng): keep up the good

8、 work, proud 評(píng)價(jià): awesome, sweet, trustworthy, role model, a kind gesture, be there for 情感: impressed; 因果: as, because, thanks toTrustworthy: can be trusted and depended on整理課件審文體：新聞報(bào)道、討論議論、情況對(duì)比、事件記敘、通告發(fā)言、圖表說明Thank you for reading.ABCD人稱時(shí)態(tài)整理課件審結(jié)構(gòu)：要點(diǎn)整合擴(kuò)展、段落歸屬、首句如何續(xù)話Star Student of the WeekLi Yue has b

9、een awarded the title of the star for what she did for our class.上周六，不顧天氣炎熱，為班級(jí)選購歌詠比賽的服裝。 出于自愿，反復(fù)選擇，大家滿意深受感動(dòng)，表達(dá)感謝，訓(xùn)練用功，更有信心。比賽成績好。大家很開心。樂于助人，熱心班級(jí)活動(dòng)，工作負(fù)責(zé)，學(xué)習(xí)用功，與人為善。是大家學(xué)習(xí)的楷模。表達(dá)祝賀。名至實(shí)歸。整理課件整理課件審全卷many of whom, will be eating審話題人際關(guān)系、校園生活審功能感謝、祝賀、表揚(yáng)、評(píng)價(jià)、情感、因果、審文體新聞報(bào)道、事件記敘（過去時(shí)態(tài)）、短評(píng)（ 現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)）審結(jié)構(gòu)（第一段先進(jìn)事跡50字45%）

10、上周六，不顧天氣炎熱，為班級(jí)選購歌 詠比賽的服裝。 出于自愿，反復(fù)選擇，大家滿意（對(duì)同學(xué)影響20字20%）深受感動(dòng)，表達(dá)感謝，訓(xùn)練用功，更有信心。比賽成績好。大家很開心。（第二段你的評(píng)論40字35%）樂于助人，熱心班級(jí)活動(dòng)，工作負(fù)責(zé)，學(xué)習(xí)用功，與人為善。是大家學(xué)習(xí)的楷模。名至實(shí)歸。整理課件閱卷數(shù)據(jù)整理課件均分和得分分布02.8311.8921.7932.242.453.2964.091674.1984.6994.5105.29114.59126.530136.89147.29157.29166.89175.9186.340193.79202.6211.5221.3230.8240.610250

11、.3260.13270.11280.05290.043000.6全省平均分整理課件自評(píng)監(jiān)控（不同時(shí)間自批同一份卷分差在5分以內(nèi)） 三評(píng)整理課件評(píng)卷速度：秒整理課件5A整理課件字母勻稱 大小適宜間距合理 連筆規(guī)范標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確 修改無痕字?jǐn)?shù)達(dá)標(biāo) 段落明晰academic整理課件書寫整理課件書寫整理課件整理課件accurate句構(gòu)屈折時(shí)態(tài)單復(fù)冠詞拼寫整理課件語法錯(cuò)誤，且句首即錯(cuò)整理課件拼寫詞性ALL is well that is spelt well.整理課件appropriate風(fēng)格明顯要點(diǎn)到位用詞適度語氣適當(dāng)表述中立整理課件用詞不貼切She is always described as a per

12、son of good personality.She is really a pleasant person, possessing admirable qualities of friendliness and honesty.She should have the award of the Star Student. Li Yue sets a good example with her act of kindness.You need to change the way: learn from mistakes, failure, your experienceLi Yue has i

13、nfluenced the whole class positively and he is really our role model.She deserves to be awarded the honor. 整理課件用詞不貼切To give all your effort or time to something you believe in.He devotes himself to helping those in need.We were greatly impressed by her kind gesture. 或：His act of kindness was appreci

14、ated. 整理課件To be frank, I applaud the decision that Li was chosen the star of the week.when it comes to: You start to talk about something.When it comes to speaking foreign languages, Martha beats me hands down. She can speak more than five languages fluently! I cant think of everything right now, bu

15、t when it comes to me Ill add more later.(honest even when this might be awkward or make other people uncomfortable:To be frank with you, I dont think she deserved the title. Students never care about school activities.Some studentstend to beless active in整理課件Help others, and they will help others.I

16、f you reach out to help others, most likely they will pay forward.語氣不恰當(dāng)整理課件authentic降低調(diào)門減少比喻間接翻譯觀點(diǎn)合理整理課件政治正確I wish people would care more about our class like Li Yue and get involved to make it a better place.When inteviewed, the elderly said, “We are greatly grateful to our Party!” The elderly said

17、, “We really love keeping you company. It was really sweet of you to be here with us.” 不地道調(diào)高整理課件Young people are to the elderly what the fish to the water. Many young people are brought up by their grandparents. They should learn to pay the love forward.不地道比喻They brought some fruit, which they had n

18、o chance to eat.They brought some fruit, but most importantly, they brought love and kindness.整理課件連接副詞思維嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)邏輯嚴(yán)密accessible整理課件Li Yue told us to calm down. To our surprise, we did at last. _ the elderly need our help.A. With the development of industry, B. Being physically weak and lonely, Some of us f

19、elt nervous at the thought of standing in front of the audience, but hopefully, Li Yue was able to help them handle the stress. Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class. In addition, she often devotes her spare time to helping others. She has set a good example for us. Therefore

20、, she deserves the honor. 整理課件The elderly were very excited.The elderly were very excited because the two volunteers decided to do this on a weekly basis.Students should do the service for society.Students should be encouraged to donate some time for community service整理課件教師范文整理課件A（教師創(chuàng)作1）Li Yue has b

21、een awarded the title of the star student of the week for what she did for our class.Last Saturday, the school held its annual singing contest. Li Yue had volunteered to buy the costumes for our class. In spite of the summer heat, she went back and forth between the stores and the class until everyo

22、ne was satisfied with the choice of costumes. Thanks to her efforts, our class performance turned out to be hugely successful. The whole class was impressed by her sweet act and grateful for her patience and enthusiasm. Li Yue has always been the role model for many of us because she is responsible

23、and always ready to help others. Having a Star Student like her really strengthens the community of our classroom. (110 words)整理課件B（教師創(chuàng)作2）Li Yue has been awarded the title of the star student of the week for what she did for our class. She was selected for being very helpful and considerate of other

24、s in our preparation for the school singing competition. Last Saturday, regardless of the hot weather, Li Yue toured different stores before she found the right costumes for our class. We all agreed that the gorgeous costumes made every participant more confident and the competition was more a fun a

25、ctivity than a stressful competition because of her effort. She deserves the title for her outstanding behavior during the previous week and for being such a tremendous role model. So congratulations to Li Yue on achieving the title of star student. Keep up the good work! And we really want to see m

26、ore students compete for the title. (115 words)整理課件C（外教范文）Li Yue has been awarded the title of the star student of the week for what she did for our class. Last Saturday morning Li Yue thought to herself about how important the upcoming song competition was for the class. Disregarding the hot weathe

27、r, she decided to make her way to the shops. She carefully chose the ideal costume for the activity. And with great maturity, responsibility and motivation she found what she was looking for. We were deeply impressed and truly felt thankful to her for going out of her way to help us enjoy our import

28、ant day.Li Yue is really our role model for being so thoughtful and helpful. I wish I could also have wonderful ways to be kind just like him. (110 words)整理課件D（高考范文） Li Yue has been awarded the title of Star Student of the Week for what she did for our class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday, L

29、i Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest. While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms, she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting. Finally, she found the right clothes. Dee

30、ply moved by her efforts, we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest. Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class. In addition, she often devotes her spare time to helping others. She has set a good example for us. Therefore, she deserves the honor. (117 words)整理課件命題走向整理課件浙浙20200404推薦學(xué)推薦學(xué)中文的中文的詞典詞典收詞收詞 價(jià)價(jià)格格 特點(diǎn)特點(diǎn)字典字典5 5學(xué)校生活學(xué)校生活（學(xué)習(xí)）（學(xué)習(xí)