托福寫作突破27分大關(guān)的六脈神劍

1、托福寫作突破27 分大關(guān)的六脈神劍導讀： 本文 托福寫作突破27 分大關(guān)的六脈神劍，僅供參考，如果覺得很不錯，歡迎點評和分享。去模版化是一切高分作文的基石其實， 很多同學的語言基礎(chǔ)不錯，但因為討巧或者對于托福獨立寫作的認識不夠，采用了固定化的模版結(jié)構(gòu)和模版句式去寫作文，從短期來看，這不能幫你突破22-23 分的獨立寫作，拿到高分;從長期來看， 對于寫作能力的提升更是百害無一利，試問如何套用模版去寫大學教授布置的paper 呢 ?當然， 為了讓大家更直觀的了解什么是模版化的思路和語言，我會讓大家看一篇文章的節(jié)選，凡是我加粗的部分，就是模版化的語言和結(jié)構(gòu)。開頭段Do you agree or di

2、sagree with the following statement? Government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.In a society that changes as amazingly as ours, people are under more and more p

3、ressure due to the increasingly pontential of competation. Consequently, the general publicas well as sociologists begin to wonder whether which is the best way for the government to release the tensive state of people between supporting the developmentof arts andsupporting athletics. Towards such a

4、 long-running tug-of-war,I am inclined to argue that government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics.上面是開頭段，想必很多同學會有類似的模版，其實，模版能夠幫助我們快速作文，但是大家會否有感覺，這樣的模版句式是否套用到每個題目中都是合適的呢?畢竟“社會飛速發(fā)展”，“普通大眾和社會學家開始思考”“激烈的爭奪中”， 在很多題目中會出現(xiàn)和題意 水土不服的癥狀，寫出來就會有邏輯不通，前后語言不連貫的問題。分論點01Indee

5、d, there are certain merits contained in the plausible statement that supporting athletics do have some advantages. To begin with, it is imperative to pinpoint that spending more money on supporting athletics can improve the whole level of the athletics since they can buy more equipments for trainin

6、g, thus我相信更多的同學都很熟悉這種寫法，這叫做讓步段，很多童鞋在寫作中，由于按照這樣的模版寫作，就不得不每篇文章都是先一個讓步段， 然后兩個觀點段。但是， 讓步段出現(xiàn)在這個位置真的合理嗎?真的適合每一個題目嗎?我們都知道托福獨立寫作不僅是議論文，更是考試作文，在有限的時間內(nèi)寫作，需要的是觀點明確且直接，讓步段放在第一個論證段落就很有可能讓考官暈掉，不明白我們的觀點到底是什么。明明寫同意，卻上來說對方很有道理，還一整段都在說對方好。分論點02However, it is, as far as practical experience and significance are concer

7、ned, more preferable to advocate that funding arts can improve the ability of appreciation of all the people. Prmarily, we can這個童鞋終于開始說明政府支持藝術(shù)的第一個理由了，可是， 注意， however 這個標粗+波浪線的句子并不是理由，理由在that 后面，那么，童鞋們請注意，獨立寫作需要用有限的字數(shù)表達更多有價值的信息，這個模版毫無疑義，所以請直接寫“FundingFairstst ，can ”分論點03Simultaneously, the other pers

8、uasive justification is, in and of itself, self-evident. Supporting arts more can lead to the fashion of art, thus enhancing the creativity of people since people will have more creative thoughts after appreciating art piecies.矯情，同樣刪去，直接寫理由二就好?！皊uSpepcoortnindg ，arts more can ”或許會有同學說， 這不是為了湊字嗎?句型還挺

9、美的。沒錯， 句型是挺美，但是這是無效信息，既不是分論點，也不是解釋，更不是例子，無效信息必須干掉。銘叔點評該名同學基本功很好，但是由于過于依賴固定化的模版句式和思路去寫， 缺乏對于題目本身的思路分析，導致其始終無法突破22 分。通過教學，這名學生放棄了模版式的語言，放棄了先寫讓步再寫理由的僵化的模版思路，采用總分總的寫法，根據(jù)題目的不同，訓練思路分析的能力并進行大量的頭腦風暴，對于幫助她從22 分突破到27 分，奠定了很好的基礎(chǔ)。以下是該學生放棄模版后的寫作效果，請大家品鑒。(為保證真實性，提供的是寫作初稿)Do you agree or disagree with the followin

10、g statement?Young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term.In such a society that has already been overwhelmed by more and more chioces(choices) of majors for students, people started thinking (whether)the essence of education should be da

11、bbling in one major deeply or knowing a lot widely. Though majoring in one region do bring people someadvantages such as making people own incompetable(incomparable) knowlegde(knowledge), I still believe that it is more profitable for students to study more widely for having more predominances in th

12、e academic learning, the social connection, and the future job.To begin with, it is a common sense that the interaction and interconnection between different subjects can not be eliminated. In this case, studying one major might bring benefits for learning another subject. Take myself, a student who

13、 is taking U.S. history course in advanced placement as an example: when I was in grade ten, I tried my best to recite the crucial time, cause, and effect of historical events and spent nearly three hours a day to prepare for the AP exam in May;yet, what is unfortunate is that I was not able to unde

14、rstand many academic terms in the economic regions such as mechanism, thus negatively influencing my understanding of some events and even caused misunderstandings and misconceptions. As a result, I only got three out of five in the AP test. However, I found it was obviously easier for me to study t

15、his course in grade eleven since I have already finished studying microeconomics in grade ten, thus saving plenty of time for me to study in the U.S. history while clarifying all kinds of terms, definitions, and significances without a hitch.Eventually, I got five points in the AP U.S. history exam

16、when I was in grade eleven.(卻少了總結(jié)性的內(nèi)容，畢竟 ap 的例子講完，這到底和分論點有什么關(guān)系呢，還是要總結(jié)一下)Secondly, there will be more likelihood for students to getalong well and make more friends with others after taking different curricula. As the saying goes, “ birds of the same feather flock together” , students would be able t

17、o have moretopics to talk with others and make more friends if the students were learning widely. As a high school student, I cannot deny that the help and suggestions given by my friends are definitely helpful and indispensable. Once I was preparing for the presentation for my physics class in libr

18、aryand confused about how to explain Schrodinger s Cat to myclassmates, one of the students in the library suddenly passesby my seat and then went back. He asked me whether I wasdepicting the Schrodinger Csat by powerpoint. After communicating with Jack, the student who is majoring in theoretical ph

19、ysics, I suddenly got new pattern of presenting and new perspectives in physics, and later made friends withJack. He offered me with many valuale (valuable) advice andhelp me deal with bugs, thus making my presentation perfect.As a result, I got full points in the presentation of physics class thoug

20、h it is nearly impossible for a student majoring in history to get such high scores in the core curriculum.Last but not least, having various experiences is able to give students a better shot to find a optimal job in the future.To be specific, future employers will value the distinctive experience.

21、 Take my cousins as examples: my cousin John, a studentgraduatedfrom Chicago University and doublemajored history and law, has learned and is able to speak appropriately in Chinese, English, French, Spanish, and German. In the pass(past) few months, he successfully found a job in one of the law offices in New York city with high salary and less work time due to the tremendous benefits he brought by his laguage (language) talent; however, my cousin Alice was only gifted in studying Chemistry and she gave up studying other subjects because of her disclination (disinclination). Yet, she has tro