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1、IELTS WritingNina醬醬 With the increasing globalization in business and trade, long-distance air transportation is often used to export types of fruit and vegetables to other countries where those plants cannot grow or are out of season. Some people think it is a positive development while others cons

2、ider this use of air transport unjustified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.Overall 5-5.5（因為不是專業(yè)考官，打分只給出可能區(qū)間）（因為不是專業(yè)考官，打分只給出可能區(qū)間）TASK ACHIEVEMENT 5-5.5觀點堆砌，缺乏拓展。文段給出傾向性，但是論述缺乏傾觀點堆砌，缺乏拓展。文段給出傾向性，但是論述缺乏傾向性。向性。COHERECE AND COHENSION 5太依賴簡單句。邏輯連詞單一切文段之間邏輯性缺乏。太依賴簡單句。邏輯連詞單一切文段之間邏輯性缺乏。LEXICAL

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5、不足。足。EXICAL RESOURCE 6詞匯較單一，但是缺乏準確的詞語。小錯誤較多。詞匯較單一，但是缺乏準確的詞語。小錯誤較多。GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY 5.5語法的語法的range還是不錯的，但是錯誤比較多。對于一些語法的使用還是不錯的，但是錯誤比較多。對于一些語法的使用還不熟悉。還不熟悉。 It sounds ridiculous that one can eat watermelons and mangoes while watching the snow-covered landscape before the international tra

6、de was opened up for the long-distance air transportation of fruit and vegetables. Although different opinion have been raised by people, my personal view is that this should be encouraged as long as it is needed. Some people believe that it is great development, which has been brought in a win-win

7、situation for both the exporting and importing countries. There is no doubt that people in the importing countries can enjoy wider range of fruits and vegetables that may not be available without air lines. In other words, it has helped to improve their wellbeing. In the mean time, the economy of th

8、e exporting countries could be developed due to the increased amount of trades. This can be witnessed in countries in south-east Asia like Thailand and Vietnam where the trade surplus from tropical fruit is the important revenue. However, there are still some voices from other people who regrade thi

9、s long-distance trade as a social hazard. For ordinary citizens, most of the imported food are too expensive and may pose a threat to their own business since the exotic foods bring competitions to the local market, making it difficult to gain profits especially in this global economic downturn. In my opinion, I believe that this should be encouraged because whether to import or export food is depended on the comparative advantages, the hi