寫作技巧：GRE作文范例19-寫作技巧

1、寫作技巧：GRE作文范例19-寫作技巧                GRE作文范例19    Issue    "Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so. Technological innovations have taken place, but t

2、he overall condition of humanity is no better. War, violence and poverty are still with us. Technology cannot change the condition of humanity."    Sample Essay    The discussion of this statement turns on what is meant by "little real progress"

3、 from the first sentence, "the overall condition of humanity" in the second sentence, and "the condition of humanity" from the third sentence. To be sure, war, violence and poverty are still with us and we as mankind are probably more aware of these problems worldwide than ever b

4、efore thanks to advances in technology and communication. But depending upon the definition of progress and the condition of humanity, this would appear to be an incorrect statement.    First of all, the phrase "little real progress" from the first sentence must be defi

5、ned. If the author defines progress as elimination of death, war, violence and poverty, then perhaps it could be stated that humankind has not made much improvement over the past one hundred years. People are still dying, wars are still being fought, violence is present almost everywhere and there a

6、re most likely people in every country in the world living in poverty. However, if the term "progress" is defined not as elimination of these problems but rather a reduction in them, then great progress has been made over the past century. Life expectancies are up in nearly every country o

7、f the world due to improvements in medicine and the scientific study of the human body. War and violence, although still present, has been reduced and to a large part confined to certain areas of the world rather than the global wars of the past such was World Wars I and II. Poverty has also been re

8、duced as international trade has lead to economic improvements in many formerly impoverished nations. Very real progress has been made in these areas over the past one hundred years.    Secondly, the phrases "the overall condition of humanity" and "the condition of

9、 humanity" must be defined. If the terms mean that we are all still born into pain, suffer many tragedies during our lives, and still die in the end, then of course the overall condition of humanity is no better than it was one hundred or even one hundred thousand years ago. Life is still life,

10、 and no matter what technological innovations come along, it is unlikely that the basic facts of living as a member of the human race will ever change. However, if the term means how we are able to live our lives during the time that we are given, then again tremendous progress has been made during

11、the past century. Cures have been found for many diseases, some of which have officially been completely eliminated. Medical treatments for other diseases have made them less deadly or less debilitating. For example, many cancer victims that would have died in the past can now go on living comfortab

12、ly and cancer-free after treatment. Diabetics who would have died in the past can now live nearly normal lives. Even poor eyesight can be effectively eliminated through laser surgery. It would seem to be beyond argument that overall, the condition of humanity is much better now than it was one centu

13、ry ago.    If one takes a very narrow definition of "progress" and "the condition of humanity", it could be fairly stated that mankind has made little in the way of advancement over the past century. Millions of people worldwide still live in poverty. Acquired

14、 Immune Deficiency Syndrome (AIDS) is killing millions of people with no cure in sight. War and violence continues in the Middle East, Africa and Afghanistan. But to take this narrow point of view would be to ignore the obvious tremendous advances that have been made over the past one hundred years

15、by the human race. As mankind continues on into the twenty-first century, it would be preferable to consider all that has been accomplished over the past one hundred years and to look ahead to future advances over the next century instead of ignoring mankind's obviously improved circumstances to

16、day.    (696 words)    觀點陳述型作文/題目    "在過去約一個世紀的時間中，人類幾乎沒有實現(xiàn)真正的進步。技術(shù)創(chuàng)新確實發(fā)生了，但人類的總體狀況毫無改觀。戰(zhàn)爭、暴力，以及貧窮仍然伴隨著我們。技術(shù)無法改善人類的生存狀況。"    范文正文    上述陳述中的探討所圍繞的是這樣三個概念的含義，即第一句中的"little real progress&q

17、uot;，第二句中的"the overall condition of humanity"，以及第三句中的"the condition of humanity"。毫無疑問，戰(zhàn)爭、暴力以及貧窮仍然伴隨著我們，并且，作為人類，由于技術(shù)與通信的進步，我們可能比以往任何時候都更深切地意識到了這些問題。但除非將"progress"和"the condition of humanity"這樣的概念進行清晰界定，否則，上述陳述將是相當謬誤的。    首先，第一句中的"little

18、 real progress"必須予以界定。如果作者將"progress"定義為祓除死亡、戰(zhàn)爭、暴力以及貧窮，那么或許可以這樣說，人類在過去的100多年中并未取得太大的進展。人們?nèi)栽诓粩嗨劳?，?zhàn)爭仍在進行，暴力幾乎到處存在，世界每個國家都有人生活于貧困之中。但是，如果"progress"這一術(shù)語并非被定義為對上述問題的消除，而是對這些問題的削減，那么，過去一個世紀中人類確實取得了重大進步。由于醫(yī)學和對人體科學研究水平的提高，全世界幾乎每個國家中人類壽命都呈上升趨勢。戰(zhàn)爭與暴力，雖然仍然存在，卻已被減少，且在很大程度上都被限制在世界的某些地區(qū)，而

19、再也不是像第一、第二次世界大戰(zhàn)那樣波及全球。隨著國際貿(mào)易在許多以前的貧窮國家導(dǎo)致了經(jīng)濟改善，貧困也得以減輕。在過去的100年中，這些領(lǐng)域中已取得了極為真實的進步。其次，"the overall condition of humanity"以及"the condition of humanity"必須予以界定。如果這些術(shù)語指的是我們所有人仍然降生于痛苦之中，一生中蒙受著許多悲劇，并最終仍然死去，那么，毫無疑問，人類的總體狀況絲毫不比100年或甚至10萬年之前來得更好。生活依然是生活，無論產(chǎn)生怎樣的技術(shù)創(chuàng)新，作為人類的一員，生活的某些基本事實依舊不變。如果該術(shù)語指的是我們是如何在被賦予的生存時間中得以生活的，那么我們可以再一次說，人類在過去的世紀中取得了巨大的進步。對許多疾病，人類已找到了治愈方法，某些疾病已正式被徹底消除。對某些疾病的醫(yī)治已使這些病癥變得不再那么致命，不再那么毀滅性。例如，在過去有可能死去的許多癌癥患者，現(xiàn)在經(jīng)治療之后可繼續(xù)舒服地生活下去，擺脫癌癥的折磨。在過去可能會死去的糖尿病患者，現(xiàn)在也能過上幾乎正常的生活