書面表達(dá)講評

1、1.Dont copy others blindly; Be good at observation and make a wise decision/choose a better way Obey the rules of a competition/Dont break the rules of a competition1. Creation？2. Do something in a proper way? Good ideas: Look at the picture and we can see lots of people are running around the playg

2、round, following the arrows. To our great surprise, one person is running across the playground and obviously, he will get to the destination much earlier. (暗示主題） （揭示） From my perspective, I think what the picture intends to tell us is that we should be good at observation and make a good choice. （假

3、設(shè)）If the person doesnt observe carefully before running and follows the majority, he wont be a winner. （展開） So it is with our study. When we work out a math problem, we should be good at observation-read the notice again and again and choose a better way. Only in this way, can we achieve success. Lo

4、ok at the picture and we can see lots of people are running around the playground, following the arrows. To our great surprise, one person is running across the playground and obviously, he breaks the rule of competition. (暗示主題） （揭示）This picture conveys a message that we are supposed to obey rules.

5、（假設(shè)） If someone breaks the rule in a competition, he is not a real winner and worse still, he will be punished. （展開）This picture reminds me of some students who often cheat at exams. Obviously, they break the rules of exams. Although they seem to get high marks, they dont make any real progress in t

6、heir study. Obviously, the boy breaks the rule of a competition. If everyone learns from him there is no fair competition. So it is with our study. There is no short way in our study. We should make progress step by step, suffering different kinds of hardship. Only in this way, can we equip ourselve

7、s with rich knowledge and contribute more to our society. This picture conveys such a message that we cant copy others blindly. As you know, it is certainly right for us to learn from others, but it is absolutely wrong to copy others blindly. So it is with our study. When faced with difficulty in ou

8、r study, we should try to find a better way to solve it instead of copying others. Only in this way, can we e a wise man. As we can see in the picture, there is a river and a group of ants in the picture. Some ants are working together to build an “ant bridge” so that their group members are able to

9、 cross the river and reach their final destination. In my opinion, this picture shows the importance of teamwork. It is impossible for a single ant to cross the river, but when they work together as a group, they can achieve their goals. So it is with our life. An individual person cannot easily car

10、ry out a challenging task on his own without joining hands with others. In fact, there are a lot of occasions when teamwork is needed, such as ball games and other collective activities .Only when we are good at teamwork, can we surely cross the “river” in our life, just like what the little ants do

11、 in the picture. What the picture intends to tell us is that when we meet some difficulties and challenges we should be good at teamwork because a single persons power is limited compared to teamwork. Take the Wenchuan earthquake as an example. Only when all of us lent our hands to the people who we

12、re suffering the disaster, could they get out of the trouble as soon as possible. It is a universal principle that unity is power. United, we will win. Separated, well fail, especially when carrying out collective activities, such as ball games, tug of war and other teamwork. Lets learn to team up w

13、ith others when necessary. Look at the picture and we can see there is a man who doesnt look at his way carefully, on which there is a big hole in front of him. Strangely, he looks up in the sky with a unpractical telescope, risking falling into a big hole, making other people who follow him fall in

14、to the hole too. On the contrary, a blind man feels his way step by step with a walking stick, passing by the hole safely. What I have learned from the picture is that we should do anything in a practical way. If the man looks at his way with his eyes instead of the unpractical telescope, he will no

15、t fall into the hole. Neither will he cause other people to get into trouble. On the contrary, the blind man chooses a practical way, feeling his way by knocking the ground with his stick, from which he benefits a lot. This picture teaches us a good lesson that whatever we do, we are supposed to cho

16、ose a practical way. 主題2 這幅畫試圖告訴我們的是，無論我們干什么都應(yīng)該講求實(shí)效。如果這第一個(gè)人不是用望遠(yuǎn)鏡看天空，而是注意眼前的大坑，他和他的追隨著不會陷入困境。 我們的學(xué)習(xí)也是如此。在學(xué)習(xí)上我們應(yīng)該持一個(gè)求實(shí)的態(tài)度，一步一步用知識武裝自己。只有這樣，我們才能實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的目標(biāo)。 . What the picture intends to tell us is thatwhatever we do we should do it in a practical way. If the first man doesnt look in the sky with a unpractical telescope and pays attention to the hole in front of him, both he an