高考英語一本培養(yǎng)高分寫作優(yōu)課件精講義優(yōu)習(xí)題四檔作文晉升五檔專練

1、精品基礎(chǔ)教育教學(xué)資料，需要可下載使用！四檔作文晉升五檔專練授課提示：對應(yīng)學(xué)生用書第74頁A（2018全國卷口）你受學(xué)生會(huì)委托為校宣傳欄英語天地寫一那么通知，請大家觀看一部 英文短片Growing Together,內(nèi)容包括：.短片內(nèi)容：學(xué)校的開展；.放映時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；.歡迎對短片提出意見。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。下面是一篇學(xué)生的四檔作文，請將它提升為五檔。Boys and girls ,May I have your attention, please? Recently, I have 1 a good news to tell you that a goo

2、d movie will be shown in our campus. Welcome to join us and enjoy it! Here 2 is some relevant details about it.To begin with, the name of the movie is Growing Together; which is about the development of our beloved school. 3 We think the movie will be meaningful and interesting. Besides, please note

3、 that it will be shown in the library from 2 : 00 to 4 : 00 in the afternoon on June 9th.Every one of you will be welcome to take part in it, enjoying the movie, having a heated discussion afterwards and giving your own comments.Hopefully, you would make it to our activity. I have the confidence tha

4、t you will have a great time then.Students Union考生能根據(jù)試題要求組織材料進(jìn)行寫作。It is everyones responsibility to protect the environment. If we can change our way of life, we can make a big difference to the Earth. Lets take actionfrom now on!Students Union短文分段合理，第一段表達(dá)通知；第二段主要通知時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)。第三段提出幾點(diǎn)建議。本文 得17分。2.考生駕馭句子的能

5、力不強(qiáng)，文中出現(xiàn)如下語言錯(cuò)誤：【1】句中的a應(yīng)去掉。【2】is應(yīng)改為are?！?】句可使用it作形式主語以 提高語言的高級(jí)表達(dá)句式：It is believed that the movie will be not only meaningful but also interesting.五檔作文Boys and girls ,May I have your attention, please? Recently, I have good news to tell you that an outstanding movie will be shown in our campus. Welcom

6、e to join us and enjoy it! Here are some relevant details about it.To begin with, the name of the movie is Growing Together, which is about the development of our beloved school. It is believed that the movie will be not only meaningful but also interesting. Besides, please note that it will be show

7、n in the library from 2 : 00 to 4 : 00 in the afternoon on June 9th.Whats more, every one of you will be welcome to take part in it, enjoying the movie, having a heated discussion afterwards and giving your own comments.Hopefully, you would make it to our activity. I hold the firm belief that you wi

8、ll have a great time then.Students UnionB(2016全國卷n)假定你是李華，你校攝影俱樂部(photography dub)將舉辦國際中學(xué) 生攝影展。請給你的英國朋友Peter寫封信，請他提供作品。信的內(nèi)容包括：.主題：環(huán)境保護(hù)；.展覽時(shí)間；.投稿由B箱：intlphotoshowqmschoolo注意：I.詞數(shù)100左右;2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。下面是一篇學(xué)生的四檔作文，請將它提升為五檔。Dear Peter;How are you doing? As the International Students Photography Show

9、is approaching, Id like to invite you to take part in this activity.1 The photography club of my school will hold a photo exhibition for international middle school students from June 18 to June 30. Ive heard that you are quite skilled in taking photographs, so I hope you can offer some photos for t

10、his exhibition. 2 The theme of this show is about environmental protection. 3 If you can join in this activity, I believe you must win first prize. You can send your works to intlphotoshowgmschooLLooking forward to your early reply.Yours,Li Hua.短文基本涵蓋了全部的寫作要點(diǎn)。本文得16分。.考生對時(shí)態(tài)的把握比擬準(zhǔn)確，短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，穿插使用一般將來

11、時(shí)，偶爾 使用現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。.考生駕馭句子的能力比擬強(qiáng)，文中語法錯(cuò)誤較少。【2】中介詞about多余，應(yīng)去掉。.有些句子沒有語法錯(cuò)誤，但是語言不太地道。如【1】句，改為被動(dòng)句，可以提升語 言表達(dá)效果：The photo exhibition for international middle school students will be held in mv school from June 18 to June 30. J. 3 句明顯帶有漢語表達(dá)的痕跡，可改為： If_youoin_in_this_activity,_Lbelieve_you_will_pobably_wir_first_p

12、rize/If_youoin _in_this_activity,_you_can_put_your_talent_into_good_use.五檔作文Dear Peter;How are you getting along? Pm writing to invite you to join in the International Students Photography Show held by the photography club of our school.As your best friend, I know you are skilled at taking photos. N

13、ow the International Students Photography Show is a chance for you to display your talent. The theme is environmental protection, aiming to call on more people to do what they can to protect the environment. The show will last from 18 June to 30 June.If you want to join in the activity, please send

14、your photos to int/photoshowgmschoolbefore May 31. Dont hesitate to ask me for help if you have any questions.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours,Li Hua C(2016全國卷I)假定你是李華，暑假想去一家外資公司兼職，已寫好申請書和個(gè)人簡 歷(resume)。給外教Ms Jenkins寫信，請她幫你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右;2 .可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。下面是一篇學(xué)生的四檔作文，請將它

15、提升為五檔。Dear Ms Jenkins,How is it going? The students really miss you very much. 1 Everyone of us excepts to see you soon. These days, I wrote some plans about summer vacation and my arrangements. I want to do a part-time job in a foreign company in my city. What do you think of my plan?I have written

16、 an application and personal resume. 2 Could you help me correct something wrong? 3 I really want to get this job, so please help me correct the unsuitable words and format. I have put it in the letter.Thanks for your help. Im looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Hua.這封書信分段合理，正文由三段組成。但寫作要點(diǎn)不完整。在第二段

17、的最后，應(yīng)告 訴外教，希望她在什么時(shí)間修改好發(fā)給自己。本文得16分。.整體上考生能夠使用正確的句子表達(dá)思想，但文中存在少量語法錯(cuò)誤?！?】句中的 Everyone錯(cuò)誤，應(yīng)寫為:Every one ;由于緊張或粗心，考生誤將expects寫成exceptso 2句為疑問句。應(yīng)把something改為anything。.考生的語言基本功不扎實(shí)，語言表達(dá)生硬牽強(qiáng)：如【3】句應(yīng)改為： I really want to get this Job, so please help me correct any mistakes you find ir_my_applicatior_ard_check_my_

18、format.五檔作文Dear Ms Jenkins,How is everything going these days? Im writing to seek help from you.The summer vacation is around the cornerf so I plan to take a part-time job in a foreign company during my two-month holiday. As you know, working experience is of vital importance when I graduate from co

19、llege. Therefore Id like to gain some working experience by doing the part-time job. Besides, I can earn some pocket money to buy what I need.In order to apply for the job, I have written my application and personal resume. Please polish my application and check the format of my resume when it is co

20、nvenient for you. I would appreciate it if you send it to me by Friday.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours,Li HuaD（2015全國卷工）假定你是李華，你校英文報(bào)外國文化”欄目擬刊登介紹美國節(jié)日風(fēng)俗 和中學(xué)生生活的短文。請給美國朋友彼得寫信約稿，要點(diǎn)如下：.欄目介紹；.稿件內(nèi)容；.稿件長度：約400詞；.交稿日期：6月28日前。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；.開頭語已為你寫好。Dear Peter,Id like to ask you to w

21、rite an article for our schools English newspaper.Yours ,Li Hua下面是一篇學(xué)生的四檔作文，請將它提升為五檔。Dear_Peter,Id like to ask you to write an article for our schools English newspaper.The new column Foreign Culture”, which aiming to introduce western cultures to the students, needs articles about American holiday

22、customs and the life about high school students.As far as Im concerned, as a native speaker; it is easy for you to introduce the custom and culture of your country to the readers. 3 Just tell us how you spend your traditional holidays and what you usually do at school. 4 One thing you should remembe

23、r is that you should write your article within approximately 400 words and send it to me until June 28th.Looking forward to your early reply.Yoursz_Li_Hua.短文涵蓋了寫作要求的四個(gè)要點(diǎn)。基本上完成了寫作任務(wù)。文中多處使用高級(jí)詞 匯和較為復(fù)雜的表達(dá)方法，提升了短文的檔次，為短文增加了亮點(diǎn)。如：approximately , aiming to doz as far as Im concernedo 本文得 18 分。.由于考生的語言功底不夠扎實(shí)

24、，短文中有幾處語言表達(dá)不夠地道，具體如下：1句中的關(guān)系代詞which多余，應(yīng)去掉；或在which后加is ,構(gòu)成一個(gè)非限制性定 語從句。2句中的introduce與漢語中的介紹意思不完全相同。本句可改為：As far as Im concerned, as a native speaker, you have no difficulty letting us - - -L- - 1 “ - / - know_about_the_custom_and_culture_of_your_country,which_helps_us_broaden_our_horizons.這樣更地道,表達(dá)更清楚?！?/p>

25、3】句顯得較為口語化，且spend your traditional holidays表達(dá)不準(zhǔn)確 應(yīng)把spend 改為 celebrateo4句中的until 一詞誤用，應(yīng)改為beforeo且remember 一詞太常見，如果改為短 語bear/keep in mind ,可為短文增加亮點(diǎn)。五檔作文Dear_Peter;_Id like to ask you to write an article for our schools English newspaper.The school newspaper has started a column “Foreign Culture” , des

26、igned to introduce American customs and the school life of the students. I believe this is a wonderful opportunity for you to share your own experience. The subjects are about western festivals and customs, and you can also write about the students daily life. The article should be limited to 400 wo

27、rds or so. What you should keep in mind is that you have to submit your article before 28thz June.If you would like to make contributions for our newspaper, please send me your article before the deadline.Looking forward to your reply.Yoursz_Li_Hua假如你叫李華，是一名外語特色高中的學(xué)生。針對你市霧霾頻發(fā)的現(xiàn)象，你校學(xué)生會(huì)決 定由你代表學(xué)生會(huì)向全校師生

28、發(fā)出建議：綠色出行，騎車上學(xué)。請根據(jù)下面的寫作提綱寫一 個(gè)英語建議書。內(nèi)容包括：.保護(hù)環(huán)境的必要性；.列舉騎車上學(xué)的好處；.向同學(xué)們發(fā)出呼吁。注意：詞數(shù)100左右。下面是一篇學(xué)生的四檔作文，請將它提升為五檔。A Letter of AppealDear fellow students,We are writing to call on you to pay attention to the hazy weather; which frequently hits our city, doing harm to the citizens* health.1 It is commonly ackno

29、wledged that we should take effective measures to make the blue sky return. Riding a bicycle to school can help to improve the quality of air. 2 Riding a bicycle is also beneficial our health. Besides, we can reduce traffic jams in the street. Lets ride our bicycles to make our city a better place! Even a small act will make a difference. 3 Now lets join together to go green” with a bicycle. If we make a small change in our way of life, we can see the blue sky again!Take action!Students Union.本文思路清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)完整。正文第一段陳述了霧霾頻發(fā)帶來的危害，第二段陳述發(fā) 出建議的原因，并列出了騎自行車的好處，最后向同學(xué)們發(fā)出建議。短文涵蓋了大局部寫作 要點(diǎn)，