【讀后續(xù)寫公開課】動作描寫課件

1、讀后續(xù)寫動作描寫Continuation Writing Description of Action目錄CONTENTS壹寫作方法指導貳續(xù)寫文本回顧叁學以致用肆學生成果展示Guidance of the MethodsOne方法一構(gòu)建動作鏈 Action-chainOnePre-actionTransit- actionPost-actionAction先前動作過渡動作后續(xù)動作動作鏈時間軸瞄準扔繩索套住牛套住牛？先前動作過渡動作后續(xù)動作動作鏈Tie the calf？攔下車上車告知司機目的地攔一輛車？先前動作過渡動作后續(xù)動作動作鏈Stop a car？沖過去蹲下來一把抱住抱兒子？先前動作過渡動

2、作后續(xù)動作動作鏈hug the son？他瞄準小牛脖子，扔去繩索，套住了小牛。使用A, B and C.連動謂語句他攔下車，坐上汽車，告訴司機目的地。她沖過去，蹲下來，一把抱住兒子。He aimed at the calfs neck, threw the rope and tied the calf successfully.He stopped the texi, got into it and told the driver his destination.She dashed forward, squatted down and gathered his son into her ar

3、ms. 動作鏈他瞄準小牛脖子，扔去繩索，套住了小牛。靈活使用非謂語句He aimed at the calfs neck, threw the rope and tied the calf successfully.Having aimed at the calfs neck, he threw the rope, tying the calf successfully.(前后非謂語)動作鏈老師放下書，按摩了下女孩肩膀，讓她站起來，然后教她 “防困操”。The teacher put down her textbook, massaged the girls shoulders, told h

4、er to stand up and then taught her to do the anti-sleep exercises. 使用A, B，C and D.連動謂語句One他蹲下來，輕輕地拎起貓咪來，踱步到了列車出口。He squatted down, carefully lifted off the cat, and paced slowly to the exit of the bullet train.使用A, B and C.連動謂語句One甘道夫停下馬，看了下敵人，便帶著千軍萬馬從山谷上沖了下來。Gandalf pulled up the horse, took a look

5、 at the enemy, and led thousands of armed troops to dash down from the valley.使用A, B and C.連動謂語句One聽到音樂，孩子們當即停下了吃飯，開始搖頭晃腦，手舞足蹈。Hearing the music, the children stopped their lunch and began shaking their heads and bodies to dance. 使用Doing., A and B. 句式One收到魔法學院的錄取通知后，哈利波特興奮地跑起來躲避著憤怒的叔叔。Having receive

6、d the letter of admission from the Magic Academy, Harry rushed to his feet excitedly to escape from his angry uncle. 使用Having done., A. 句式One在女孩們的指引下，她翻到明信片的背面，發(fā)現(xiàn)背后畫著年少的自己。Under the girls guidance, she turned over the post card, only to find a drawing of her youth on the back.使用A，only to. . 句式One被法院

7、宣判后，他坐進了囚車，意外發(fā)現(xiàn)人們在外面等待著送別他。Having been sentenced by court, he sat in the prison van, only to find people waiting outside to see him off. 使用Having been done, A，only to.句式One方法二構(gòu)建動作面Action-sceneOne一個動作鏡頭1肢體動作描寫：手部，腳部，身體的動作。動作面鏡頭2面部神態(tài)描寫：表情，眼睛，耳鼻口的動作。鏡頭3語言描寫：主人公所表達的口頭語言。鏡頭4心理描寫：主人公內(nèi)心的思索活動。頒獎時感謝Bob鏡頭1肢體動

8、作描寫：拿著獎品動作面鏡頭2面部神態(tài)描寫：看了一眼獎品鏡頭3語言描寫：說“感謝Bob！”鏡頭4心理描寫：感到興奮舉手回答問題鏡頭1肢體動作描寫：舉手動作面鏡頭2面部神態(tài)描寫：微笑鏡頭3語言描寫：小聲說“我來！”鏡頭4心理描寫：被老師鼓舞她感到興奮，手里捧著獎品，看了一眼后，說，“謝謝, Bob！”靈活使用非謂語受到老師的鼓勵，她舉了手，微笑著小聲說，“我來！”Feeling excited, she held and glanced at the prize, saying, “Thank you, Bob!” Encouraged by the teachers words, she rai

9、sed her hand, smiling and whispering, “I volunteer.”動作面一個動作鏡頭1肢體動作描寫動作面鏡頭2面部神態(tài)描寫鏡頭3語言描寫鏡頭4心理描寫整體局部Aragorn斬釘截鐵，振臂一揮，下令： “放箭！”Wearing a decisive and resolute look, Aragorn waved his hand down, ordering, ”Release the arrows!” 面部肢體語言使用Doing，A，doing. . 句式One她站在空曠的路邊，仰望天空，感受著這份珍貴的平靜。Standing beside the em

10、pty road, she looked up into the sky， feeling the precious peace from within. 面部肢體心理使用Doing，A，doing. . 句式One 他欣喜若狂，拿著傘，在雨中又唱又跳。面部肢體心理肢體Overwhelmed with joy, he held his umbrella, singing and dancing in the rain. 使用Done，A，doing and doing. . 句式One貝貝坐在泳池邊，雙臂低垂，眺望遠方，思考自己是白熊貓還是黑熊貓。面部肢體心理肢體(With) his arms

11、 drooping, Beibei sat beside the pool, looking into the distance and wondering whether he was white or black. 使用獨立主格，A，doing and doing. . 句式One注意點協(xié)調(diào)重點詳略得當EmphasisOneThe ice wind was cutting AJs face like a sharp knife and he felt so frozen. He straightened his arms with his arms and waist wiggling(扭

12、動) and moved slowly. But as the sunlight gradually became warmer, AJ felt that the surface of the ice became wetter. His dad was so nervous on the bank and cried, “Be quick! The ice is melting.” At that moment, AJ saw an ice far away was being swallowed up by the sunlight and he realized that the ur

13、gency demands immediate actions. When he approached to the cow, he aimed at the calfs neck, threw and tied it successfully. (107)第四檔 18.5One救援背景筆墨過多救援動作可以適當再拓展Review of the StoryTwoSummary of the Previous StoryOn a _ morning, Dad and AJ, whose dream is to perform _ and _ calves like a _, was heading

14、 towards their _ to check the cows. Accidentally, they noticed _ coming from a _ lake and were shocked to find a calf _ on the ice. Watching the _ calf, AJ was eager to _ it but Dad refused due to the danger of the situation. After AJ presented an _ plan, Dad finally agreed, and they _. freezingropi

15、ngtyingprofessionalfarma mad cry frozenstuckfrightenedrescueapplicabletook immediate actionTwoParagraph 1Paragraph 2AJ moved closer to the calf. AJ tried to calm himself and the calf. AJ might fail at the first time. AJ made a loop, threw, and tied the calf. AJ returned to the shore.AJ and Dad pulle

16、d the calf back to the shore. The calf returned to the cow group.Dad praised AJs courage. Two動作面動作鏈詳情緒/環(huán)境動作鏈/面詳ThreeApplication of the LearningHe moved slowly because he felt the ice would be melt soon. The ice was so cold that he could hardly think anything but to save the calf. Staring at the stru

17、ggling calf, AJ insisted on moving. Finally, he arrived at the middle of the pond. He used the second rope to tie the calf. Successfully, he lied on the ice with the calf tied and smiled.第三檔 13.5Three具體籠統(tǒng)壹使用肢體神態(tài)詞匯貳避免單調(diào)和冗雜叁動作描寫三原則ThreeHe inched out slowly because he felt the ice would be melt soon. T

18、he ice was so cold that he could hardly think anything but to save the calf. (1)Staring at the struggling calf, AJ insisted on moving. Finally, he arrived at the middle of the pond. (2)He used the second rope to tie the calf. (3)Successfully, he lied on the ice with the calf tied and smiled.第三檔 13.5

19、ThreeStaring at the struggling calf, AJ crawled carefully and insisted on moving, refusing to let fear beat him down. He took out the second rope, made a loop, aimed at the calf and threw with all his strength. 動作面He made it! The instant the loop settled around the calfs neck, AJ pulled it tight. Overwhelmed with joy, he lay on the ice and gr