專題10-2021新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫典例分析10-My-Own-Violin

1、專題10-2021新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫典例分析10-My-Own-Violin專題10-2021新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫典例分析10-My-Ow目錄01表達(dá)積累02原文分析03續(xù)寫擴(kuò)展04續(xù)寫賞析目錄01表達(dá)積累02原文分析03續(xù)寫擴(kuò)展04續(xù)寫賞析01表達(dá)積累01表達(dá)積累表達(dá)積累1.分類廣告2.把報紙放在我腿上3.大蕭條4.謀生5.爸爸哼著小曲the classified advertisementslaid the paper on my lapthe Great Depressionmake a livingDaddy hummed表達(dá)積累1.分類廣告the classified adver表達(dá)積

2、累6.媽媽吹著口哨7.這是不可能的8.學(xué)校管弦樂隊9.緊緊地閉上眼睛10.這幅畫面牢牢地記在腦海里Mother whistledit was out of the questionthe school orchestraclosed my eyes tightcapture the picture firmly in my mind表達(dá)積累6.媽媽吹著口哨Mother whistledit 表達(dá)積累11.我默默地發(fā)誓12.盡管日子不好過13.隨后的許多夜晚14.圍著桌子坐著15.熱情地握手I vowed silentlyYet even though times were hardmany f

3、ollowing nightssit round the tableheartily shook hands表達(dá)積累11.我默默地發(fā)誓I vowed silentlyY表達(dá)積累16.兩人同時交談17.拿起一個箱子，打開，18.拿出小提琴19.旋律洶涌澎湃20.如瀑布般流暢both talking at oncepicked up a case, opened itlifted out a violinThe melody surgedspoke like waterfalls表達(dá)積累16.兩人同時交談both talking at o02原文分析02原文分析My Own Violin“Want

4、ed: Violin. Cant pay much. Contact”I rarely read the classified advertisements, so why did I notice that one? I laid the paper on my lap and closed my eyes, remembering what had happened many years before, during the Great Depression when my family struggled to make a living on our farm. I, too, had

5、 wanted a violin.原文分析注意細(xì)節(jié)表達(dá)的積累My Own Violin原文分析注意細(xì)節(jié)表達(dá)的積累When my older twin sisters began showing an interest in music, Harriet Anne learned to play Grandmas piano, while Suzanne turned to Daddys violin. Simple tunes became lovely melodies. My baby brother danced; Daddy hummed and Mother whistled. I

6、just listened.When my arms grew long enough, I tried to play Suzannes violin. Oh, how I wanted one! But I knew it was out of the question.原文分析我太想要一把屬于自己的小提琴了。While 表示對比 When my older twin sisters begOne evening as the twins played in the school orchestra. I closed my eyes tight to capture the pictur

7、e firmly in my mind. Someday, Ill sit up there, I vowed silently.It was not a good year. At harvest the crops didnt bring as much as we had hoped. Yet even though times were hard, I couldnt wait any longer to ask, “Daddy, may I have a violin of my own?”“Cant you use Suzannes?”原文分析日子在艱難， 我還是骨氣勇氣問爸爸要了

8、小提琴。One evening as the twins playe“Id like to be in the orchestra too, and we cant both use the same violin at the same time.”Daddys face looked sad. That night, and many following nights, I heard him remind God in our family prayers, “ and Lord, Mary Lou wants her own violin.”O(jiān)ne evening we all sat

9、 round the table. The twins and I studied. Mother sewed and Daddy wrote a letter to his friend, George Finkle, in Columbus, Ohio. Mr Finkle, Daddy said, was a fine violinist.原文分析父親寫信給朋友“Id like to be in the orchestWhen Daddy received a letter from Columbus a few weeks later, he asked me, “Mary Lou,

10、do you want to go with me to visit Mr Finkle?”He drove us to Columbus and we came to a fine, old house. A tall man opened the door. He and Daddy heartily shook hands, both talking at once.原文分析父親帶我見了他的小提琴家的那位朋友。When Daddy received a letter f“Mary Lou, Ive been hearing things about you. Your Daddy has

11、 arranged a surprise for you!” He picked up a case, opened it, lifted out a violin and started to play. The melody surged and spoke like waterfalls. Oh, to play like him, I thought.Finishing the piece, he turned to Daddy. “I found it in a pawnshop（當(dāng)鋪）for seven dollars. Its a good violin. Mary Lou sh

12、ould be able to make a beautiful music with it.” Then he handed the violin to me.原文分析我見到了新的小提琴?！癕ary Lou, Ive been hearing tParagraph 1 ：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine!_Paragraph 2 ：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement._原文分析父

13、親的朋友吧小提琴送給了我， 后面續(xù)寫應(yīng)該是我很感動， 也很努力練習(xí)， 也參加了夢寐以求的校園演奏會。我回到了現(xiàn)實，結(jié)局應(yīng)該是正能量。所以后面續(xù)寫應(yīng)該是我把我的小提琴賣給了這個人。Paragraph 1 ：原文分析父親的朋友吧小提琴送給了03續(xù)寫擴(kuò)展03續(xù)寫擴(kuò)展Paragraph 1Paragraph 1 ：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine!I liked it very much I practice playing with violinAnd take part in the

14、school orchestra Paragraph 1Paragraph 1 ：I likParagraph 2Paragraph 2 ：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement.I decide to sell my violin The advertiser and I met The father bought the violin for her daughter Paragraph 2Paragraph 2 ：I dec句子潤色“真漂亮。”我說，幾乎喘不過氣來?！癐ts beautifu

15、l.” I said, barely breathing.barely breathing句子潤色“真漂亮。”我說，幾乎喘不過氣來?！癐ts bea句子潤色我知道爸爸和我的祈禱都得到了回應(yīng)。had been answeredI knew Daddys prayer, and mine, had been answered. I knew Daddys and my prayer had been answered. 句式提升句子潤色我知道爸爸和我的祈禱都得到了回應(yīng)。had been 句子潤色回到家里，我每天都在練習(xí)，一點(diǎn)也不累。Back home, I practiced daily, fee

16、ling no tiredness. 句式的提升feel no tirednessWhen I was back home, I practiced daily, and felt no tiredness. 句子潤色回到家里，我每天都在練習(xí)，一點(diǎn)也不累。Back ho句子潤色當(dāng)我準(zhǔn)備加入學(xué)校管弦樂隊時，我激動得渾身發(fā)抖。When I was ready to join the school orchestra, I trembled with excitement. school orchestratrembled with excitement句子潤色當(dāng)我準(zhǔn)備加入學(xué)校管弦樂隊時，我激動得渾

17、身發(fā)抖。Whe句子潤色在觀眾席上，爸爸媽媽驕傲地笑了笑，他們的小女兒拿著她心愛的小提琴，讓全世界都?xì)J佩她。in the audienceDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. held her cherished violinDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl ，and she

18、 held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. 句子潤色在觀眾席上，爸爸媽媽驕傲地笑了笑，他們的小女兒拿著她句子潤色那時的歲月似乎過得更快。The years seemed to run more swiftly then.run more swiftly句子潤色那時的歲月似乎過得更快。The years seem句子潤色我把小提琴裝進(jìn)箱子里，走進(jìn)了成年人的世界。packed my violin in its caseI packed my violin in its case and stepped into the gro

19、wn-up world. the grown-up world句子潤色我把小提琴裝進(jìn)箱子里，走進(jìn)了成年人的世界。packe句子潤色護(hù)士的訓(xùn)練，婚姻，工作，撫養(yǎng)四個女兒，這些都是我的年華。bringing up four daughtersNurses training, marriage, working, bringing up four daughters filled my years. 此句表達(dá)很精美，摘抄積累。句子潤色護(hù)士的訓(xùn)練，婚姻，工作，撫養(yǎng)四個女兒，這些都是我的年句子潤色但我的孩子們都不喜歡小提琴。高層次表達(dá)Yet none of my children cared about

20、 the violin.But all my children did not like violin.句子潤色但我的孩子們都不喜歡小提琴。高層次表達(dá)Yet non句子潤色 我把報紙放在一邊，去找我的小提琴。Laying the paper aside, I went to find my violin. Lay the paper aside句子潤色 我把報紙放在一邊，去找我的小提琴。Laying t句子潤色我撥了號碼。那天下午晚些時候，一輛舊車停在我的車道上。in my drivewayAnd I dialed the number. Later that afternoon, an ol

21、d car stopped in my driveway. dialed the number句子潤色我撥了號碼。那天下午晚些時候，一輛舊車停在我的車道上句子潤色一個三十多歲的男人和一個年輕女孩敲門。A man in his thirtiesA man in his thirties with a young girl knocked on the door. knocked on the door句子潤色一個三十多歲的男人和一個年輕女孩敲門。A man i句子潤色“我一直在祈禱有人能回應(yīng)我的廣告。我女兒非常想要一把小提琴answer my advertisement“Ive been pra

22、ying someone would answer my advertisement. My daughter wants a violin so badly.”wants a violin so badly句子潤色“我一直在祈禱有人能回應(yīng)我的廣告。我女兒非常想要一把句子潤色他說，“你要價多少？“七美元，”我說。He said, “How much are you asking?” “Seven dollars,” I said. 句子潤色他說，“你要價多少？“七美元，”我說。He said句子潤色我把箱子交給了那個女孩。她打開箱子，輕輕地碰了碰小提琴，小提琴被傍晚的陽光照得發(fā)亮。handed

23、 the case toI handed the case to the girl. She opened the case and touched the violin lightly as it caught the glow of the late-afternoon sun. touched the violin lightlythe glow of the late-afternoon sun句子潤色我把箱子交給了那個女孩。她打開箱子，輕輕地碰了碰小提句子潤色然后，她伸出雙臂摟住微笑的父親。threw her arms roundThen she threw her arms rou

24、nd her smiling father.句子潤色然后，她伸出雙臂摟住微笑的父親。threw her 04續(xù)寫賞析04續(xù)寫賞析續(xù)寫賞析I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine! “Its beautiful.” I said, barely breathing. I knew Daddys prayer, and mine, had been answered. Back home, I practiced daily, feeling no tiredness. When I was

25、ready to join the school orchestra, I trembled with excitement. Daddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. The years seemed to run more swiftly then. I packed my violin in its case and stepped into the grown-up world. Nurses training, marriage, working, bringing up four daughters filled my years. Yet none of my ch