高中英語：國畫展仿寫之分析和下水作文

1、02-國畫展仿寫之分析和下水作文假定你是李華，你校最近舉辦了主題為uGrowing up with the Red Songsv的校園音樂會。請你為校英文 報寫一篇報道，內(nèi)容包括：.時間、地點.音樂會過程.同學們的感受注意：1）詞數(shù)80左右；2）可適當增加細節(jié)，可是行文連貫。審題：（此文當做對浙江卷國畫展作文的仿寫）此文為報道，時態(tài)已一般過去時為主，人稱：第三人稱為主；尾段已第一人稱為主首段：點名音樂會時間和地點主體段：音樂會過程，這也是對于同學來講最難的局部，就是不知道寫什么。結(jié)合浙江卷國畫展的寫法, 思考音樂會應該是怎樣的。可參考我們學校平時組織的文藝晚會，無非就是主持人，演員兩類 人，而

2、這些人無非就是老師和學生，由他們來表演節(jié)目，此為共同點一；共同點二就是一般開 頭和結(jié)束的時候都會有大合唱，可以考慮；而區(qū)別的是：常規(guī)的文藝晚會各種形式都有，這個 音樂會要局限于“紅歌”，既然是“紅歌”，那就只能是彈唱或者跳了，圍繞這幾點去展開， 思路就慢慢成形了。推薦寫法：1）.音樂會開頭和結(jié)尾；2）.音樂會中尾段：同學們的感受。注意：這段很容易寫自己的感受，那么審題就出現(xiàn)偏差了！語言組織：.星期六晚上，一場已“Growing with the Red Songs”為主題音樂會在學校禮堂舉行。A concert themed Growing with the Red Songs/with it

3、s theme Growing with the Red Songs” was held in the school hall on Saturday night.（此句90%以上使用our school作主語，用主動，個人認為被動會更好）.音樂會以老師們的合唱春天的故事開始。期間來自于各個班級的學生演唱或演奏了人們耳熟能詳 的樂曲。The concert began with a chorus sung by teachers-the Story of the Spring, during which the students from different classes sang or p

4、erfbmied many songs that were familiar to people.音樂會最后，當合唱我愛你，中國，臺下的同學們也伴隨著動人的旋律，滿懷激情地 放聲歌唱，At the end of the concert, the students off stage sang I Love You, China with great passion/passionately to the charming music while the chorus rang out.音樂會很受學生們的歡迎，許多人說，這真的是一場耳朵的盛宴。The concert gained great p

5、opularity with the students. The majority of them said that it was really a great feat fbr the ears.音樂會不但讓同學們更好地了解了中國的歷史和成長歷程，還弘揚了中國優(yōu)秀的傳統(tǒng)文化，培養(yǎng)了學 生的愛國精神。Not only did the concert allow students to have a better understanding of the history and development of China, but it also promoted the splendid tr

6、aditional culture and cultivated their patriotism.結(jié)合上面分析和理解，屠屠老師下水作文：A concert themed Growing with the Red Songs/with its theme Growing with the Red Songs was held in the school hall on Saturday night.The concert began with a chorus sung by teachers-the Story of the Spring, during which the students

7、 from different classes sang or performed many songs that were familiar to people. At the end of the concert, the students off stage sang I Love You, China with great passion/passionately to the charming music while the chorus rang out.The concert gained great popularity with the students. The major

8、ity of them said that it was really a great feast fbr the ears. Not only did the concert allow students to have a better understanding of the history and development of China, but it also promoted the splendid traditional culture and cultivated their patriotism.參考例文Our school held a concert themed Z

9、/Growing with the Red Songs in the school hall last Sunday.The concert began at 4:00pm. There was not an empty seat in the hall. First, a group of young teachers sang the well-known red song “The Eat is Red, their singing was full of feelings and really touched my heart. Then students from different

10、 class played a few red songs and gave some creative performances. We finished the concert with the song Ode to the Motherland.Throughout the concert, the atmosphere inside the hall was exciting and encouraging. While we watched and listened, we felt proud of being Chinese and we new out country wou

11、ld become stronger and more beautiful.今日作業(yè)仿寫：假定你是李華，上周你校舉辦了中國古典音樂演奏會。請你為校英文報寫一篇報道，內(nèi)容包括：1,時間和地點；.演奏內(nèi)容；.音樂會反響。注意：1）詞數(shù)80左右；2）可適當增加細節(jié)，可是行文連貫。A Chinese Classical Music Concertwas held in the school hall on Saturday night.The concert was really popular with the students, Many said that they would pass on

12、the traditional music and look forward to the next music feast.A Chinese classical music concert was held in the school hall on Saturday night.（被動比主動 好）Many masterpieces of ancient musicians（of+名詞作后置定語）,such as High Mountain and Flowing water and The Spring Snow were played by a famous band. The stu

13、dents present felt the mountain, the water; the winter snow the silk bamboo and the endless call of life flowing in the air at the concert. Additionally, students from different classes also performed music that was familiar to people.The concert gained great popularity with the students, especially those who love Chinese classical music. It was really a great f