2022年秋新教材高中英語(yǔ)Unit4BodyLanguageSectionⅣWriting課件新人教版選擇性必修第一冊(cè)

1、Section Writing讀 后 續(xù) 寫(xiě)典題示例閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Two men,both seriously ill,occupied the same hospital room.One man was allowed to sit up in his bed for an hour each afternoon to help empty the liquid from his lungs.His bed was next to the rooms only window.The other man ha

2、d to spend all his time on his back.The men talked for hours on end.They spoke of their wives and families,their homes,their jobs,their involvement in the military service.Every afternoon when the man in the bed by the window could sit up,he would pass the time by describing to his roommate all the

3、things he could see outside the window.The man in the other bed began to live for those one-hour periods where his world would be broadened by all the activity and colour of the world outside.The window overlooked a park with a lovely lake.Ducks played on the water while children sailed their model

4、boats.Young lovers walked arm in arm among flowers of every colour and a fine view of the city skyline could be seen in the distance.As the man by the window described all this in detail,the man on the other side of the room would close his eyes and imagine the beautiful scene.One warm afternoon the

5、 man by the window described a parade passing by.Although the other man couldnt hear the bandhe could see it.In his minds eye as the gentleman by the window described it excitedly.Unexpectedly,a strange thought entered his head:Why should he have all the pleasure of seeing everything while I never g

6、et to see anything?It didnt seem fair.As the thought appeared the man felt ashamed at first.But as the days passed and he missed seeing more sights,his envy turned him sour and he found himself unable to sleep.He should be by that windowthat thought now controlled his life.Late one night as he lay s

7、taring at the ceiling,the man by the window began to cough. He struggled to look out of the window beside the bed.Much to his surprise,it faced a blank wall. 寫(xiě) 作 指 導(dǎo)通讀短文可知,故事發(fā)生在一所醫(yī)院的病房里,主要人物是兩位病人。1.理解全文,把握主線通讀短文可知,本文大意是:在一家醫(yī)院的病房里住著兩位病人。其中一位病人經(jīng)允許可以在每天下午起身坐上一個(gè)小時(shí)。這位病人的病床靠近窗戶(hù),而另一位病人則不得不日夜躺在床上。躺在窗邊的病人每天向

8、另一位病人描述他看到的窗外的風(fēng)景和故事?？墒怯幸惶炻?tīng)故事的病人開(kāi)始產(chǎn)生嫉妒心理,希望自己能夠有機(jī)會(huì)看看窗外。2.分析關(guān)鍵詞和所給段落首句,展開(kāi)想象合理續(xù)寫(xiě)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段首句是:一天深夜,當(dāng)他躺在床上盯著天花板的時(shí)候,靠窗戶(hù)的那個(gè)人開(kāi)始咳嗽起來(lái)。根據(jù)本句及前文所述,可預(yù)測(cè)本段應(yīng)該寫(xiě)靠窗戶(hù)病人的病情十分危急,這位心生嫉妒的病人的做法以及由此產(chǎn)生的后果。由于續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段開(kāi)頭提及他看到了窗外的真實(shí)景象,因此,本段最后要提到病友去世,他要求移到窗邊病床上。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句是:他掙扎著看向床邊的窗戶(hù)外,令他吃驚的是,窗外只是一堵空墻。由此可知,這讓他意識(shí)到,病友所描述的一切都來(lái)自想象。因此,本段應(yīng)當(dāng)主要寫(xiě)病友為他

9、編織了一幅美麗的畫(huà)面,鼓勵(lì)他,讓他能夠更積極地面對(duì)病情,以及得知真相后他復(fù)雜的心理感受。高 分 范 文Late one night as he lay staring at the ceiling,the man by the window began to cough.He watched in the room as the struggling man by the window searched blindly for the button to call for help.However,listening from across the room,he never moved.Th

10、e following morning the nurse found the lifeless body of the man by the window.The other man asked if he could be moved next to the window.The nurse was happy to make the switch.He struggled to look out of the window beside the bed.Much to his surprise,it faced a blank wall.At that moment,he seemed

11、to understand everything,but he could not say it,just regretting that he had not moved when his companion was suffering from illness.He felt ashamed.His companion had made white lies every day just to encourage him.A feeling of regret,of gratitude,rose at the moment.名師點(diǎn)評(píng)習(xí)作緊扣語(yǔ)境,承接前文內(nèi)容進(jìn)行了合理的續(xù)寫(xiě),符合人物的特點(diǎn)

12、和邏輯。第一段順承前文內(nèi)容,通過(guò)watch,search,listen,move等動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)刻畫(huà)了人物形象,其中“l(fā)istening from across the room,he never moved”與前文“But as the days passed and he missed seeing more sights,his envy turned him sour and he found himself unable to sleep.”相呼應(yīng)。本段最后兩句也是情節(jié)發(fā)展的必然,與下文第二段首句環(huán)環(huán)相扣,使整篇習(xí)作渾然一體。第二段續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容通過(guò)seem,understand,regret,

13、encourage,rise等一系列動(dòng)詞的使用,形象地描述了這位病人深感愧疚的心理活動(dòng)。此外,習(xí)作中運(yùn)用了較多的高級(jí)詞匯與句式,如suffer from,feel ashamed,make white lies,but引導(dǎo)的并列句,現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)just regretting that he had not moved等,豐富的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)形式增強(qiáng)了文章的感染力,使續(xù)寫(xiě)的情節(jié)更加吸引人。高 分 典 句1.夜空中星星向我眨眼睛。Stars winked at me in the darkening sky.2.她接著說(shuō),“我緊緊地?fù)肀е麄?感覺(jué)到自己內(nèi)心突然有了一種力量”。She continued

14、,“I hugged them tightly,feeling a sudden strength inside me.”3.這位婦女熱切地看著這個(gè)女孩,想和她說(shuō)話。The woman was staring eagerly at the girl,trying to make a conversation.4.看到眼前的一幕,他嚇呆了,不敢動(dòng)彈。At the sight of the scene before him,he froze with terror,too scared to move an inch.5.樹(shù)上的小鳥(niǎo)唱著美妙的歌曲。Birds on the tree are sin

15、ging beautiful songs.6.回來(lái)的時(shí)候,他還交叉雙臂,臉上帶著一絲憤怒。When coming back,he still folded his arms with a little anger on his face.7.一種強(qiáng)烈的喜悅感在我的腦海中閃過(guò)。A strong sense of joy flashed through my mind.8.我伸手去摸她的臉,發(fā)現(xiàn)她的臉像冰一樣冷。I reached out to touch her face,which was as cold as the ice.9.他是如此緊張以至于能聽(tīng)到自己的心在狂跳。So nervous

16、was he that he could hear his heart beating wildly.10.鵝毛般的雪花在夜空中飛舞,像一幅美麗的圖畫(huà)。The feathery snowflakes danced in the night air,making a beautiful picture.即 學(xué) 即 練閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。My presentation was horrible.I lost the client.My boss wouldnt look me in the eye and the res

17、t of my day was spent in relative silenceI was left alone,in reality.Finally,I left my air-conditioned office and of course,outside it was very hot.I was hot literally and figuratively as three buses passed,too full to stop and then the one that did stop should have kept going because the air condit

18、ioning wasnt working.I boarded the bus but was unable to stand it,so I squeezed my way off at the next stop.I would just walk the mile and a half to home.I annoyed further,as I continued my journey.I refused to take off my jacket,purposely maximizing my frustrationswhen it rains let it pour was my p

19、hilosophy.A block from my building,I heard the water splashing and kids screaming so I knew the fire hydrant(消防栓) had been turned on.Without even thinking about taking an alternate route,I turned the corner,sure enough,there was a group of kids playing in the water.They were politely on the lookout

20、to stop the water from spraying on any passers-by,so when they saw me they stopped the water and when they saw my mean look they even got quiet.The younger ones in bathing suits,the girls wearing shower caps and the boys with water guns all stared at me as I started to pass by.Then I noticed a littl

21、e one,no older than five,holding a water gun down by his side,eying me a little harder than the others.I eyed him back.Then his brother,who Id seen around the neighborhood,nodded at him like he was saying,“I dare you.” My eyes tightened a little further as I communicated my own “I dare you” to the f

22、ive-year-old.Then his eyes moved,planning his escape route through the alley,and in that split second I knew I was going to get soaked(濕透).And he got me,behind my ear,before he ran towards his exit.I grasped his brothers water gun and ran after him.I pulled the trigger just as I met my “killer” at the alley.He fought back but his shooter was no match for my power,so instead