讀后續(xù)寫(xiě) 練習(xí)寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo) 講義-高三英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫(xiě)作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。EmilyWhite

wasbornseventeenyearsagowithsomanybirth

problemsinherbody.Someofherorgans,bonesandmuscleswereoutofshape.Nooneexpectedhertosurvive.Shedidmakeitbutwithherstrangebodyfigure,everyonecouldrecognizeher,evenfromadistance.InEmilyWhite’shometown,therewasayearlyoutdoor

performance

intheschoolauditorium(大禮堂).IthadbeenperformedforsomanyyearsandactuallyhadbecomeoneofthemostimportanteventsoftheChristmasseasonformanyofthetown’speople.Manypeopletriedouteachyearforit,butsomanywereturnedaway.Itcanonlyincludethemostexcellentpeopleinthefield.Emilyhadabeautifulsinging

voice.LastyearshewenttoMrs.Owens–hermusicteachertoasktojoinintheperformance.Withoutlettingher

sing,Mrs.OwenstookalookatAmy’sbodyandsaid,“Child,youjustdon’tfit.Everyonewouldstareatyouandthatwouldmakeyouuncomfortable.Itwouldmakethemuncomfortable,too.”Withoutsingingasinglenote,Emilywassentbackthroughthedoorofthechoralroom.Hurtandupset,shedecidednevertotryoutagain.ButMrs.Owensthenretired.Thisyear,therecameanewmusicteacher,

Mr.Buttler.HeheardaboutEmilyandsuggestedthatshehaveatry.Emilydidn’twanttobe

rejected

again,soshehesitatedalittleaboutit.AsEmilystruggled,thedoorwaspushedopenandMr.Buttlercalled,“Emily,you’renext.”Althoughkindof

nervous,EmilydidasMr.Buttlertoldhertodo.Mr.ButtlersatbythepianotokeepEmilycompany.WhenEmilyfinishedhertestingperformance,shethankedMr.Buttlerandknewtheresultwouldbe

posted

onthedoorofthechoralroomthenextday.Emilycouldn’tsleepthatnight.Shewassufferingfromthefeelingsthatshedidn’tfitandthegreatneedtobeaccepted.Bythenextmorning,herstomachwaseveninpainbecauseofstress.注意:1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;Paragraph1:Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.__________

Paragraph2:

Finally,thedayofperformancecame.______

試題分析█前文分析●主要人物?EmilyWhite:

-bornseventeenyearsagowithsomanybirthproblemsinherbody.-

hadabeautifulsingingvoice?Mr.Buttler:-anewmusicteacher-heardaboutEmilyandsuggestedthatshehaveatry●主要情節(jié)Emily是一個(gè)一出生身體就有很多問(wèn)題的孩子，不過(guò)，她竟然奇跡般地生活了下來(lái)。她的家鄉(xiāng)每年都有一場(chǎng)圣誕季在學(xué)校大禮堂的節(jié)目表演，要能上臺(tái)表演是件非常難的事情。Emily的嗓音非常不錯(cuò)。去年她也想上臺(tái)表演，但被看都沒(méi)看一眼她的音樂(lè)老師Mrs.Owens拒絕了，理由是她的長(zhǎng)相。她很受打擊，表示再也不愿去嘗試了。好在，Mrs.Owens不久就退休了。來(lái)了一位叫Mr.Buttler的音樂(lè)老師。他極力鼓勵(lì)Emily去試試。最終，在老師的鼓勵(lì)下，她報(bào)了名，參加了面唱，在忐忑不安中，等待結(jié)果的出來(lái)。......●主題要義人與人的關(guān)系Emily主動(dòng)嘗試被拒到新音樂(lè)老師鼓勵(lì)去參與，凸顯鼓勵(lì)的重要性█下文安排●續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容建議：Paragraph1:Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom....①（與開(kāi)頭句銜接）簡(jiǎn)單描述忐忑的心情②主要寫(xiě)看到的結(jié)果及對(duì)Mr.Buttler的感謝③努力排練，為了更出色的表現(xiàn)Paragraph2:

Finally,thedayofperformancecame....①表演前，簡(jiǎn)單回顧困難和描述她的身心表現(xiàn)②表演的情況③后續(xù)（如何升華主題）下水作文Paragraph1:

Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.So

nervous

wasshethatherheartbeatwildly.Butthefactwasthatatthetopofthe

posted

listwashername“EmilyWhite”.Shewasn’t

rejected,whichmadeherhappy.Shewentbackthroughthedoorofthe

choralroom

andgavesincerethanksto

Mr.Buttler.ItwashisappreciationandencouragementthatEmilyhadsuchlucktohavethechancetoshareherbeautifulsinging

voice.Inthefollowingdays,shepracticedashardasshecouldtoshowthebestofherself.(88words)Paragraph2:

Finally,thedayofperformancecame.Itwastimeforhertoproveherselfthoughthe

problemsinherbody

reallybroughthermuchtroubleinlife.Waitingforherturntocome,shefeltabitanxious,palmssweating,butshetriedtodevelophermoodsof

performance.Sooncameherchance.Shegatheredherenergyto

sing

thesongbyheart.Herclearandmelodiousvoiceconqueredtheaudiencewiththeirgenerousandthunderousapplauses.ConfidencecametoEmilyandshewasevenchosenastheambassadorfortheannualgreatevent.(88words)參考范文Paragraph1：

Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.Shewasnot

rejected

thistime.Hernamewas

posted

atthetopofthelist.She,

EmilyWhite,

waschosentobetheleadingsinger!Shewould

sing

aloneinthe

performance.Emilycouldn’tbelievehereyes.Theremustbesomemistake.But

Mr.Buttler

saidtoherwithdeterminedeyes.“Emily,Ichooseyoubecauseyoushouldperformthepart-your

voice

isunusual.Believeinyourself.”Greatlyencouraged,Emilypracticedreallyhard.Paragraph2：

Finally,thedayofperformancecame.Standinginfrontoftheline,Emilyfeltherthroattightandherpalmssweating.Whenthecurtainopenedup,theeyesofthewholeaudiencefelluponEmily.“EmilyWhite!”Someonewhispered.Thenalon