讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：The+first+hunting+講義高三英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Hisfathersaid,

“Allset,boy?”

andJeremynodded,pickinguphis

gun

withawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthis

camera

torecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgo

duck

huntingforthefirsttime.However,he

hated

it,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.Buthewasdeterminedtogothroughwithit.Helovedhisfather,andwantedhis

approval

morethananythingintheworld.Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyand

waited.Toreducefear,hetooka

picture

ofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.“I’llletyou

shoot

first,”hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun.“Youknow,I'vebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus...”Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.“There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.I'llgiveyoutheword.”

Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,

tense

andeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,“Don'tletthemcome,please!”Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack,”hisfathersaid.“Onemallard(綠頭鴨).”Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...“Getset,”hisfatherwhispered.“Now!”criedJeremy'sfather."Takethem!”Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersand

flew.“Shoot!”saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：1.

所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.

續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph

1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”

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Paragraph

2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________主要人物：Jeremy喜歡攝影、討厭打獵、愛(ài)父親、渴望得到父親的認(rèn)可Father喜歡打獵、期待跟兒子一起打獵（以為兒子也喜歡打獵）時(shí)間地點(diǎn)：時(shí)間：atdawn描述：freezing;sacred;thesuncomeout;thewhitefrostonthegun.地點(diǎn)：nearthecleanwater幫助：戶外情景運(yùn)用環(huán)境描寫(xiě)，呼應(yīng)時(shí)間地點(diǎn)相關(guān)描述細(xì)節(jié)shoot的雙重含義：shoot一語(yǔ)雙關(guān)

含義1:射擊；含義2:拍攝文章主要矛盾/問(wèn)題表面上的矛盾：Jeremy是否該開(kāi)槍打獵深層次的矛盾：1)Jeremy該堅(jiān)持自己的興趣(拍照)還是為了獲得爸爸的認(rèn)可而選擇打獵2)父親和兒子的相處之道：父親喜歡的東西，兒子是否一定要聽(tīng)從和喜歡有第二段開(kāi)頭可推出第一段的內(nèi)容：第二段開(kāi)頭ToJeremy’ssurprise可知，第一段結(jié)尾可以寫(xiě)Jeremy講完自己的為什么不開(kāi)槍的原因后的心理描寫(xiě)，他以為父親會(huì)生氣。詞語(yǔ)積累：請(qǐng)找出以下中文對(duì)應(yīng)的英文表達(dá)。續(xù)寫(xiě)題目：1.推開(kāi)門(mén)：pushopenthedoor2.極冷的：freezing3.第一次：forthefirsttime4.完成（或做完）艱難（或令人不快）的事：gothroughwith5.(給武器)裝彈藥：load6.他停止說(shuō)話，向前彎下腰，瞇起眼睛：Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.7.緊張的：tense8.翅膀搏動(dòng)的呼嘯聲：pulsingwhistleofwings9.(聲音)突然而響亮地：sharply

參考范文：1.從…中判斷：judgefrom2.勃然(大怒)：explode3.一想到…某人就有一種…感覺(jué)：Atthethoughtof…,sbwasovercomewithasenseof…..4.眼里閃著光，嘴角露出微笑：Eyesglintandlipscurveintoabigsmile5.把某人攬入懷中：gathersbintoone’sarms6.溜達(dá)、散步：stroll

7.模糊的雙眼：mistyeyes8.沐浴在燦爛的陽(yáng)光下：bebathedintheradiantglowofsun9.鳥(niǎo)鳴聲：thechirpsofthebirdsPossibleversion1:

Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”

“Becausetheyweresoalive”,Jeremyexplained,withhislipsshaking.Hesatonthegrass,buriedhisfaceinhishandsandburstintotears.Allhopeofpleasinghisfatherwasgone.Foralongmoment,hisfatherwassilent.ThenJeremyfelthimkneeldownbesidehimandpathimontheshouldergently.Suddenly,hisfathershouted,

“Getready!”

Feelingcoldmetaltouchinghishand,Jeremylookedup.

Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

“Herecomesanotherduck.”

Abeautifulwildduckflewcloser,itswhite

breastshininginthesunshine.Jeremyhelduphiscameraimmediately.”

Igothim!”

Abroadsmilelituphisface.Hisfathergavehimathumbs-up.Jeremy

discoveredtherewasnodisappointmentinhiseyes,onlyprideandlove.

“It’sokay,son.Iloveshooting,butthatdoesn’tmeanyouhaveto.”

Hepausedandsaid,

“Couldyouteachmehowtousethatcamera?”P(pán)ossibleversion2:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”

“I,I’msorry.”

Jeremymurmuredwithhisheadlow,beingtotallyataloss（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞）.Hedidwanttoshoottheduck

andgethisfather’sapproval.（強(qiáng)調(diào)句，回扣原文）However,whenheheldhisgunandaimedatthe

flying

mallard(學(xué)以致用，新概念3L9),hismindwentblank---heknewhecouldn’tkillthebeautifulcreatureinsuchacruelway.Hestruggledforalongtime.Finally,hegatheredallhisbraveryandlookedupintohisfather’scrosseyes.

“Dad,”

hesaid,

“I

hateguns

andkillings.CanIquithunting?”（反映主題：人與動(dòng)物和諧相處)

Hisfatherwentsilentandturnedaround.

ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

Hetookoverhis

camera

unbelievablywithhismouthopenedwide.

（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）Amusedbyhisaction,

非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞

hisfatherlookedathim

affectionately

(學(xué)以致用，新概念3L9)andexplained,

“Iknowyoulovephotography,however,I