高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫送給父母的結(jié)婚周年蛋糕講義

TimeswerehardintheUnitedStatesduringthe1930s.

Myfamilycouldhardlymakealivingonourfarm.

Evenso,

Iwasdeterminedtohelpmy

parents

celebratetheiranniversaryinaspecialway.Three

days

before

their

anniversary,

Mother

took

out

her

old

dresses.

They

were

wrinkled.

Sighing,

Mothersaid,

“Men’s

clothesdon’tchangethatmuch,

butmydressesarejustnotinstyle.”Ididn’twantMothertogiveuptheanniversarycelebration.

Daddy

wouldbedisappointed.

Also,

IknewnowwhatIwasgoingtodoforthemandtheywouldhavetobeawayformetodoit.

IpersuadedMothertochangeher

dress,

and

by

Friday

night,

she

hadfinished

the

dressand

pressed

it.OnSaturday,

DaddywenttoborrowMr.

Smith’spickuptruck,

andMotherwenttogetdressed.

BythattimeIcouldhardlywaitforthemtoleavesoIcouldstartmakingthe

cake!

Keepingmyplansecrethadbeenhard,

butI’ddecidednottotellmyyoungerbrothers,

Bill

and

David,

untilMotherandDaddyweregone.

Iwasafraidtheywouldget

excited

andletitslipout.Bill,

DavidandIwentouttowavegood-byeuntilthetruckwasfardowntheroad.

startedbackto

the

house.

“I

have

a

wonderful

surprise,”

I

told

them.

“While

Mother

and

Daddy

are

out,

we

are

goingto

make

a

cake

for

them.

An

anniversary

cake.”Billlookedatmeskeptically.“Afancythree-layercakeandwe’regoingtodecorateit.”“We’venevermadeacakebefore,”Billsaid.

“We’reprobablygoingto

make

amessandMotherwillbeupset.”ItoldthemIwastheoldestandIwasincharge.

Igotthemilkandfoureggsandthesugar.

Thehardestpartwouldbebreakingtheeggsontheedgeofthebowl.

Isifted(

篩

)

theflourandbakingpowdertogetherfirst.

Andsalt.

Iparticularlyrememberedthatbecauseitseemedstrangeto

put

saltinacake.

Iputallingredientstogetherandmixedthem.

Itlookedcreamyanddelicious.P1：I

poured

it

into

the

baking

pan

and

put

it

into

the

oven.

P2：

took

their

hands

and

led

them

to

the

kitchen.續(xù)寫思路1.

確立主旨：本文以第一人稱展開敘述，主要圍繞主人公“我”想給父母慶祝結(jié)婚周年慶，所以打算親自做蛋糕作為驚喜的故事。主旨肯定是表達親情,同學(xué)們在寫的時候不妨把故事寫的趣味性一些，太平淡沒有波折的文章是不夠吸引人的！2.

續(xù)寫難度：總體這篇文章情節(jié)還是較容易編排，第一段寫制作出蛋糕過程中發(fā)生了什么事情；第二段寫父母回來后看到蛋糕如何的反應(yīng)，注意對動作及情感描寫進行豐富運用。連句成篇P1：I

poured

it

into

the

baking

pan

and

put

it

into

the

oven.1.

NosoonerhadIfinisheditthanIstartedtocleanupallthemessIhadcreatedjustnow.

2.

“Hurry

up!Wehaveto

make

thekitchenbacktowhatitusedtobe.”

Iurgedmytwoyoungerbrothers,Bill

and

David,tojoinmeintidyingup.

3.Witheverythingsettledinthejointefforts,Iapproachedtheoven,eagertoknowifthe

cake

wouldbeready.

4.

“God,”

Billexclaimedallofasudden,

“Icansmellsomethingburningfromtheovenside,canyou?”5.ItdawnedonmethatItwasthecakethatturnedtan!6.Dashingtotheoven,Iturneditoffassoonaspossibleandtookthecakeoutcautiouslywithprotectivegloves.

7.What’sworse,

Mother

and

Daddy

cameattheverytime,inordertokeeptheplan,wethreekidsimmediatelyrushedtothefrontdoor,wheremyparentsjustarrived.

P2：

took

their

hands

and

led

them

to

the

kitchen.1.

“Don’topenyoureyesuntilIsayyes,”

Iwarnedwithbrightsmiles.

“

Okay,hereweare.”

2.

Withourhandsofftheireyes,Motherfirstcaughtsightofthecakeonthetableandcouldn’thelpasking,

“Didyouprepareforus?”

3.

Noddingmyhead,Ilaughedembarrassedly,

“

Butitdidn’tlookasniceas

what

youhadmadeforusbefore.”4.

Mothercameforwardandpattedmyshouldergently,

“

Burnedthoughitwas,itstilla

wonderful

surpriseformeandyourDaddy.”5.

AfterhearingwhatMothersaid,Itogetherwithmybrothersletoutasound,

“

MotherandDaddy,wishyouahappyanniversary;weloveyou!”6.

Afterwards,we,ofcourse,didn’tforgettoenjoythespecialcaketogether.7.

EverytimeIreflectontheday,somethingwarmarisesfromthebottomofmyheart——it’s

lovethatcounts!成品賞析

I

poured

it

into

the

baking

pan

and

put

it

into

the

oven（烤箱).

NosoonerhadIfinisheditthanIstartedtocleanupallthemessIhadcreatedjustnow.

“Hurryup!Wehaveto

make

thekitchenbacktowhatitusedtobe.”

Iurgedmytwoyoungerbrothers,Bill

and

David,tojoinmeintidyingup.

Witheverythingsettledinthejointefforts,Iapproachedtheoven,eagertoknowifthe

cake

wouldbeready.

“

God,”

Billexclaimedallofasudden,

“Icansmellsomethingburningfromtheovenside,canyou?”

ItdawnedonmethatItwasthecakethatturnedtan!

Dashingtotheoven,Iturneditoffassoonaspossibleandtookthecakeoutcautiouslywithprotectivegloves.

What’sworse,

Mother

and

Daddy

cameattheverytime,inordertokeeptheplan,wethreekidsimmediatelyrushedtothefrontdoor,wheremyparentsjustarrived.

We

took

their

hands

and

led

them

to

the

kitchen.

“Don’topenyoureyesuntilIsayyes,”

Iwarnedwithbrightsmiles.

“

Okay,hereweare.”

Withourhandsofftheireyes,Motherfirstcaughtsightofthecakeonthetableandcouldn’thelpasking,

“Didyouprepareforus?”

Noddingmyhead,Ilaughedembarrassedly,

“

Butitdidn’tlookasniceaswhat

youhad

madeforusbefore.”

Mothercameforwardandpattedmyshouldergently,

“

Burnedthoughitwas,itstillawonderfulsurpriseformeandyourDaddy.”

AfterhearingwhatMothersaid,Itogetherwit