英語(yǔ)高考讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)

英語(yǔ)高考讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)第1節(jié)宏觀感知【題型解讀】讀后續(xù)寫考題提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。從試題結(jié)構(gòu)來看，讀后續(xù)寫評(píng)價(jià)的是書面理解能力和書面表達(dá)能力。因此，在寫作之前，首先要讀懂文本、理清故事情節(jié)，然后再構(gòu)思故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。【命題特點(diǎn)】該題型一方面考查學(xué)生對(duì)所學(xué)語(yǔ)言的實(shí)際運(yùn)用能力，另一方面也培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維能力。讀后續(xù)寫不是隨心所欲地寫，而是根據(jù)題目要求，在讀懂原文的基礎(chǔ)上，利用原材料的素材、線索和情節(jié)等充分發(fā)揮想象力和創(chuàng)造力來續(xù)寫。通過對(duì)高考真題中讀后續(xù)寫的分析，我們可得出它的四大命題特點(diǎn)：選材以故事類記敘文為主，內(nèi)容有趣,故事線索邏輯性強(qiáng)命題特點(diǎn)所給出的段落開頭與上文聯(lián)系緊密,指明了續(xù)寫的方向讀寫并重，先讀透所給材料才能使續(xù)寫內(nèi)容不偏離主線續(xù)寫段的情節(jié)不唯一，可根據(jù)自己的理解續(xù)寫不同的內(nèi)容命題特點(diǎn)【評(píng)分原則】.本題總分為25分，按七個(gè)檔次進(jìn)行評(píng)分。.評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從內(nèi)容、詞匯語(yǔ)法和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個(gè)方面考慮，具體為：(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。(2)所使用詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。.評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)先根據(jù)作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來綜合衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。.評(píng)分時(shí)還應(yīng)注意：(1)詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分；通過閱讀以上三個(gè)動(dòng)作鏈的例子，我們會(huì)感覺眼前展現(xiàn)出一幅生動(dòng)形象的畫面，雖然沒有情感詞匯在里面，但是已經(jīng)把一些情感都豐富地體現(xiàn)出來了?！熬渥?非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞”結(jié)構(gòu)下面用三個(gè)句子來說明這種描寫動(dòng)作的句子結(jié)構(gòu)。模式1：句子+-ing【例11老人靜坐。分析老人靜坐，這個(gè)動(dòng)作前面或后面會(huì)有哪些動(dòng)作？動(dòng)作鏈老人靜坐=坐在夕陽(yáng)下+看報(bào)紙+聽廣播Theoldmansatunderthesunset,readingthenewspaperandlisteningtotheradio.模式2：句子+havingdoneI例2】沒有買到票。分析沒有買到票，這個(gè)動(dòng)作前面或后面會(huì)有哪些動(dòng)作？動(dòng)作鏈沒有買到票=排了很久隊(duì)+被告知票賣完了Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthatthetickethadbeensoldout.模式3：句子+-ed【例3】孩子們哭了。分析“哭”這個(gè)動(dòng)作前面或后面會(huì)有哪些動(dòng)作？或者因?yàn)槭裁丛蚝⒆涌蘖?。?dòng)作鏈哭了=被感動(dòng)+哭了。Deeplymovedbythestory,thechildrenbegantocry.二'會(huì)用高級(jí)句式.形容詞（短語(yǔ)）作狀語(yǔ)形容詞（短語(yǔ)）在句中作狀語(yǔ)，可以表明主語(yǔ)所處的狀態(tài)。這種表達(dá)結(jié)構(gòu)簡(jiǎn)單，卻表意豐富，讀后續(xù)寫中經(jīng)常用到。如：Lostinthemountainfortwodays,thesestudentswerefinallyrescuedbythelocalpolice.這些學(xué)生在山里迷路兩天后最終被當(dāng)?shù)鼐炀攘顺鰜?。Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.她高興得說不出話來，緊緊地抱著她的兒子，熱淚盈眶。.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)可以豐富句子的內(nèi)容，其作用一般相當(dāng)于一個(gè)狀語(yǔ)從句，可以表示原因、條件、伴隨、結(jié)果、方式等。如：Shestoodontheplatformwithherhandwavingtoherfriend.她站在站臺(tái)上，朝她的朋友揮手。Thelittlegirllookedatthebigfishwithhereyeswideopen.這個(gè)小女孩看著這條大魚，眼睛睜得很大。Theoldmanlayonthebench,withhisfacecoveredbyanewspaper.這位老人躺在長(zhǎng)凳上，臉上蓋著一張報(bào)紙。Withalotofworktodothisevening,heisunabletocometotheparty.他今晚還有許多工作要做，不能來參加這個(gè)派對(duì)。.獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)的構(gòu)成為“名詞（代詞）+現(xiàn)在分詞/過去分詞/不定式/形容詞/介詞短語(yǔ)”，其作用相當(dāng)于一個(gè)狀語(yǔ)從句。如：Theothertwoclimbeddownintothecratertocollectsomelavaforlaterstudy,butthisbeingmyfirstexperience,Istayedatthetopandwatchedthem.另外兩人向下爬進(jìn)火山口去收集供日后研究用的巖漿，但我是第一次經(jīng)歷這樣的事，所以留在山頂上觀察他們。Theboyrushedtotheoldman'shouse,hisfacecoveredwithsweat.男孩沖到老人家里，滿臉是汗。.倒裝句型為了突出或強(qiáng)調(diào)句子中的某個(gè)部分，我們可以將其置于句首，形成倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)。如：Onlythendidwedecidetoanswerviolencew汕violence.直到那時(shí)我們才決定以暴制暴。NeverwillZhouYangforgethisfirstjobattheofficeofChina。成儀.周洋永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記他在《中國(guó)日?qǐng)?bào)》辦公室獲得的第一份工作。AmongthepainterswhobrokeawayfromthetraditionalstyleofpaintingweretheImpressionists,wholivedandworkedinParis.在那些突破傳統(tǒng)畫法的畫家中有生活和工作在巴黎的印象派畫家。.強(qiáng)調(diào)句型強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的基本結(jié)構(gòu)為“1小/\^$+被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分+為2171]0+其他部分”。如：Itwasmysisterwho/thatfirsthadtheideatocyclealongtheentireMekongRiverfromwhereitbeginstowhereitends.首先想到要沿著湄公河從源頭騎車到終點(diǎn)的是我的姐姐。Furtherreadingmademerealizethatitwashardworkanddeterminationaswellashergentlenaturethatgotherintomedicalschool.進(jìn)一步的閱讀讓我意識(shí)到是她的努力、決心以及溫柔的性格使她進(jìn)入了醫(yī)學(xué)院。.虛擬語(yǔ)氣在表示虛假的、與事實(shí)相反的或難以實(shí)現(xiàn)的情況時(shí)用虛擬語(yǔ)氣；表示主觀愿望或某種強(qiáng)烈情感時(shí),也用虛擬語(yǔ)氣。如：Iftherehadn'tbeenforyourhelp,theboywouldhavefailedinthetest.要是沒有你的幫助，這個(gè)男孩就會(huì)在測(cè)試中不及格。Butforthisexperience,shewouldn,thaverealizedthatsheshouldspendmoretimewithherfamily.如果沒有這次經(jīng)歷，她就不會(huì)意識(shí)到她應(yīng)該花更多的時(shí)間和家人在一起。三'巧用修辭手法無論是在漢語(yǔ)還是在英語(yǔ)中，修辭都是一門具有獨(dú)特魅力的藝術(shù)。在讀后續(xù)寫中，恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用修辭手法可以使平淡的語(yǔ)言變得鮮活、生動(dòng)，從而增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力，也有助于考生獲得高分。其中，較為常用的修辭手法有比喻和擬人兩種。.比喻比喻是根據(jù)事物之間的相似點(diǎn)，把某一事物比作另一事物，從而把抽象的事物說得具體、形象，把深?yuàn)W的道理說得通俗、淺顯、明白。常見的比喻形式有明喻和暗喻兩種。（1）明喻通常是把被比喻的“本體”和用以比喻的“喻體”同時(shí)說出，說明本體事物像喻體事物。它是最簡(jiǎn)單、最常見的一種修辭手法，其常見的標(biāo)志詞有l(wèi)ike,as,asif,asthough等。Thesceneryalongthejourneyisjustlikeabreathtakinglandscapepainting.（景物描寫）沿途的風(fēng)景就像一幅令人嘆為觀止的山水畫。Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.（環(huán)境描寫）寒風(fēng)開始咆哮，像鋒利的小刀一樣刺痛了我的臉。Thesmileonherfacewasasvibrantasthesunonasummerday.（情感描寫）她臉上的笑容和夏天的太陽(yáng)一樣充滿活力。Ireachedouttotouchherface,whichwasascoldastheice.（人物描寫）我伸手去摸她的臉，她的臉冰涼。Herhairgrewgreyerandgreyer,asif（itwere）coveredwithsnowandfrost.（肖像描寫）她的頭發(fā)越來越白了，簡(jiǎn)直像蓋了一頭皚皚的霜雪。（2）暗喻與明喻不同，暗喻不通過比喻詞表現(xiàn)出來，而是直接將一種事物當(dāng)成另一種事物來描寫，此時(shí)兩種事物之間的聯(lián)系和相似之處都是暗含的。暗喻較明喻而言更加簡(jiǎn)潔，也更加生動(dòng)、深刻,表現(xiàn)力強(qiáng)。Herhairwasagoldenriverstreamingdownhershoulders.（肖像描寫）她的頭發(fā)像是一條流淌在她肩上的金色河流。Thebeautifulparkwasascentedcarpetofcolor.（景物描寫）那個(gè)美麗的公園就像一塊芬芳的彩色地毯。Ifeltalumpinmythroat,tearswellingupinmyeyes.（f青感描寫）我如鯉在喉，淚水濕潤(rùn)了眼眶。Theboywolfeddownthefood.（動(dòng)作描寫）這個(gè)男孩狼吞虎咽地吃下了食物。.擬人擬人就是把事物人格化，它既能生動(dòng)形象地寫出某事物的某個(gè)特點(diǎn)，又使事物具有擬人化后特有的具象效果。Thebreezegentlykissedhercheeks.（景物描寫）微風(fēng)輕柔地親吻著她的臉頰。Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.（景物描寫）鵝毛般的雪花在夜空中飛舞，構(gòu)成了一幅美麗的圖畫。Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.（景物描寫）頃刻間，一片黑暗統(tǒng)治了森林。Fearseized/swallowedhim.（情感描寫）恐懼把他吞噬了。Angerchokedmywords.（情感描寫）我氣得說不出話來。Agoodideasuddenlystruckme.（心理描寫）我突然想到一個(gè)好主意。第3節(jié)語(yǔ)料素材一、人物描寫【高分詞匯】agracefulfigure優(yōu)美的身段ashapelyfigure勻稱的體形askinnyfigure瘦削的身材aslimfigure苗條的體形awell-developedfigure發(fā)育良好的身體animposing/adashing/ahandsome/astrikingfigure儀表堂堂haveagoodfigure（人）形體很好anaveragebuild中等身材awell-builtman身材魁梧的人lackofresponsibility缺乏責(zé)任感withthevirtueof具有的美德asenseofresponsibility責(zé)任感l(wèi)ight-heartedandoptimistic無憂無慮且樂觀的bebothwiseanddiligent既聰明又勤勉beenthusiasticabout.?.熱衷于behonestandreliable誠(chéng)實(shí)可靠bemodestabout..?對(duì)謙虛besensitiveabout..?對(duì)敏感beconsiderateof…對(duì)考慮周到bepessimisticabout…對(duì)感到悲觀【增分靚句】Hehadawidemouthandhumorousgreyeyes.他有一張大嘴巴和幽默的灰色眼睛。.Shearrivedlateforclass，herhairwetandmessy.她上課遲到了，頭發(fā)又濕又亂。Shewasfair-skinned,havingreddishhairandlongfingers.她皮膚白皙，有著紅發(fā)和修長(zhǎng)的手指。Hisstrongly-builtbodyandsun-tannedskinmakehimlooklikeasportsman.他強(qiáng)斗士的身體和黝黑的皮膚使他看起來像一個(gè)運(yùn)動(dòng)員。Hehassparkingbluegreeneyes,thinningsilverhairthatspillsontohisforehead,bigears,atriangularnose,andtuftsofgrayingeyebrow.他有一雙閃亮的藍(lán)綠色的眼睛，稀疏的銀發(fā)散落在前額，大耳朵，三角形的鼻子和幾緡灰白的眉毛。Adreaminglookcameoverherface.她臉上浮現(xiàn)出夢(mèng)幻般的神情。Hesmiled,hiseyesfulloflaughter.他露出了笑容，雙眼充滿笑意。Colorglowedinhisfaceandhisstrangeeyeswidenedwithjoyfulness.他的臉熠熠閃光，奇特的眼睛因歡樂而大大睜開。Aleybecamehappynowandagentlesmilespreadoverherface.現(xiàn)在阿利變得很開心，整張臉洋溢著溫和的微笑。SherodetherestofthewayhomewearingaMonaLisasmileofpeaceandgrace.她帶著蒙娜麗莎式的平靜而優(yōu)雅的微笑，騎完了剩下的回家路。【語(yǔ)段欣賞】Theyoungwomanwastall,withgraceandelegance.Shehadagreatamountofdarkhairthatwasbeautifullyshowninthesunlight,andafacemorebeautifulthananyother,withdark,mysteriouseyes.Shewaspoliteandwell-mannered,withatenderlook.這個(gè)年輕的女人很高，且很優(yōu)雅。她有一頭烏黑的頭發(fā)，在陽(yáng)光下顯得十分美麗，她的臉比任何其他人都漂亮，她有一雙神秘的黑眼睛。她彬彬有禮，舉止文雅，目光溫柔。Hiseyeslitupwhenshewalkedintotheroom.Asmilelitupherface.Thesmilespreadacrossherface,whichlituphisgloomyafternoon.看見她走進(jìn)房間，他雙眼一亮。她笑了，臉上露出了喜色。她滿臉的微笑點(diǎn)亮了他陰郁的下午。Iwatchhimashemakeshiswaytowardthestage.Mediumheight,stockybuild,ashyblondhairthatfallsinwavesoverhisforehead.Theshockofthemomentisregisteredonhisface,andyoucanseehisstruggletoremainemotionless,buthisblueeyesshowthealarmI'veseensoofteninprey.Yetheclimbssteadilyontothestageandtakeshisplace.我看著他走上舞臺(tái)。中等身材、健壯結(jié)實(shí)、淺灰色的金頭發(fā)垂在前額。這一刻帶給他的震驚仍寫在臉上，看得出他在竭盡全力保持鎮(zhèn)靜，但他藍(lán)色的眼睛里還是透著驚恐不安，我在捕獵時(shí)經(jīng)?？吹竭@種神情。他強(qiáng)裝鎮(zhèn)定，走上舞臺(tái)，站在自己的位置上。二、動(dòng)作描寫【高分詞匯】wearsweetsmilesonone,sface面帶甜甜的微笑haveaslightfrownonone,sface微微皺眉withtearswellingupinone?seyes熱淚盈眶catchaglimpseof瞥一眼withone'seyesfixedon某人的目光緊盯著raise/liftone"seyes抬起頭來cryout大叫speaktooneself自言自語(yǔ)shoutatthetopofone?svoice高聲地喊叫withone,smouthwideopen張大著嘴巴nodone'shead點(diǎn)頭shakeone'shead搖頭scratchone?shead撓頭buryone'sheadin…把頭埋進(jìn)shakeone"shand握手wavegoodbyetosb.向某人揮手告別wanderaroundthestreet在街上閑逛tiptoetothebed躡手躡腳地走到床邊【增分靚句】ItwasobviousthatthemanagerofthecoffeeshopwaswaitingforLiFangtoleave—hewipedthetables，thensatdownandturnedontheTV.很明顯，咖啡館的經(jīng)理在等李方離開——他擦好桌子，然后坐下來，打開電視。Hiseyesstareatwhatisleftofthebrothers'dinnerontable.他的眼睛盯著兄弟倆留在餐桌上的殘羹剩菜。OlivergetsitfromadeskandgivesittoHenrylikeagift.奧利弗從桌上拿起它，像送禮物一樣遞給亨利。Thehostessscreams,theothercustomerslookatherandsheputsahandtohermouth.老板娘尖叫起來，其他顧客都望著她，于是她用手捂住了嘴巴。Charliefirstpicksoutthelacesandeatsthemasiftheywerespaghetti.Thenhecutsofftheleathertopoftheshoeasifitwerethefineststeak.查理先把鞋帶挑出來，像吃意大利面一樣把它們吃了。然后他把皮制的鞋頭切下來，就好像那是最美味的牛排。Shesteppedbackappearingsurprisedandputupherhands,asifindefence.她往后退了退，顯得很吃驚，舉起了手，想要自衛(wèi)。Theboyswhohadnevercomeacrossanythinglikethisbeforestartedjumpingoutofthewindows.以前從來沒有見過這種情況的男孩們嚇得從窗戶跳了出去。ProfessorHigginscarelesslythrowsahandfulofmoneyintoherbasket.希金斯教授漫不經(jīng)心地朝她的籃子里扔了一把錢。Danielrunsintohisbedroomandshutsthedoorangrily.丹尼爾跑進(jìn)臥室，生氣地關(guān)上了門。AsIdroppedmydadoff,Iwatchedhim,dressedinhisworkclothes,gettinghistoolsfromthetrunkofmycar.我讓父親下車，看著他穿著工作服，從車的后備箱里拿出工具?！菊Z(yǔ)段欣賞】TheEagle,scaptainknockedtheballtothegroundwithhishand,andthenkickeditandscored.Therefereeblewthewhistle；thematchwasoverandtheEagleshadwon.老鷹隊(duì)的隊(duì)長(zhǎng)用手將球擊倒在地，踢了一腳，進(jìn)球得分了，裁判吹響了哨子。比賽結(jié)束，老鷹隊(duì)贏了。Hearingthefamiliarvoice,Marystoppedherpace.Sheturnedaround,andstaggeredforwardafewsteps.Shefounditwasherelderbrother.Soexcited,shejumpedupandthrewherarmsaroundtheman'sneck.Sheburiedherfaceinhisshoulderandsobbedforafewmoments.Thenshesaidinaloudandexcitedvoice.聽到這熟悉的聲音，瑪麗停下腳步。她轉(zhuǎn)過身來，往前踉蹌走了幾步。她發(fā)現(xiàn)那是她的哥哥。她太興奮了，跳了起來，雙臂摟住那人的脖子。她把臉埋在他的肩膀上，啜泣了一會(huì)兒，然后興奮地大聲說話。三、情感描寫【高分詞匯】bemad/wildwithjoy欣喜若狂jumpwith/forjoy高興得跳起來loseone,stemper發(fā)脾氣aburstofanger怒火的迸發(fā)withaheavyheart心情沉重地one,sheartseemstobetornapart某人的心似乎被撕裂了beinfloodsoftears淚如雨下sufferfromstress有精神壓力haveaworriedlook愁眉苦臉shakewithfear嚇得發(fā)抖withone'seyesfullofhorror某人的眼睛里充滿恐懼asenseofshame羞恥感beembarrassedbeyondwords無比尷尬【增分靚句】Myheartbegantoraceandmymindwentblank.我的心跳開始加速，腦子里一片空白。Soashamedwasshethatshecouldfeelthebloodrushtoherface.她是如此的羞愧以至于臉如充血般發(fā)燙。Whenthehostannouncedthatshewontheprize,awideexcitementtookholdofher.當(dāng)主持人宣布她獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)，她的激動(dòng)之情溢于言表。Hisheartsankwhenheheardthenewsthathefailedtowinaprize.聽到他沒獲獎(jiǎng)的消息，他的心情很沉重。.Terroranddeathstruck,andherheartwasbeatingpainfullyfast,bangingagainstherribs.恐'怖和死亡襲來，她的心臟跳動(dòng)得非?？?，撞擊著她的肋骨。Ifeltthatthebloodinmybodycooled/frozerapidlybecauseoftheterriblesight.因?yàn)檫@可怕的景象，我感覺我的血液都快速凝固起來。Hewassickwithfear,butthethoughtoftheconsequencesurgedhimon.他極度害怕，但一想到結(jié)果，他還是要繼續(xù)下去。Iwonderifit'sbecauseIhaven'tbeenabletobeoutdoorsforsolongthatI'vegrownsocrazyabouteverythingtodowithnature.我不知道這是不是因?yàn)槲姨脽o法出門的緣故，我變得對(duì)一切與大自然有關(guān)的事物都無比狂熱。Iwasalittlenervousatfirst,buteveryonewassoniceandfriendlythatIsoonstoppedworrying.起初我有點(diǎn)緊張，但是大家都那么友好，我很快便不再擔(dān)心了。Ifeltsoashamed.Imustbereallystupidtofailasimplemathquiz!我感到很丟臉。我一定是蠢到家了才會(huì)連一次簡(jiǎn)單的數(shù)學(xué)測(cè)試都沒通過！【語(yǔ)段欣賞】Tom'smindwasmadeupnow.Hewasgloomyanddesperate.Hewasanabandoned,friendlessboy,hesaid；nobodylovedhim；whentheyfoundoutwhattheyhaddrivenhimto,perhapstheywouldbesorry,tearswouldbeshedandheartswouldbebroken.Althoughhehadnofriendtocomplainto,hehadtriedtodorightthingsandgetalongwithothers.湯姆現(xiàn)在拿定了主意。他既沮喪又絕望。他說他是一個(gè)被遺棄的、沒有朋友的男孩子；沒有人愛他；當(dāng)他們發(fā)現(xiàn)他們把他逼成什么樣時(shí)，也許他們會(huì)后悔、會(huì)流淚、會(huì)心碎。雖然他沒有可以抱怨的朋友，但他試著做正確的事，和他人好好相處。四、環(huán)境描寫【高分詞匯】thesettingsun落日arainyseason多雨的季節(jié)astormynight暴風(fēng)雨之夜beburiedinsnow深埋在雪中unbearablyhot難以忍受的酷熱inthewarmspringsunshine在春天溫暖的陽(yáng)光中clearup放晴bathein(the)sunshine沐口光浴afavorablysituatedcity位置優(yōu)越的城市asmallvillageoffthemap——個(gè)偏僻的小村子withinastone'sthrowofthebeach離海濱僅咫尺之遙besituatedatthenorthernextremeof???位于最W匕端inavillageamongthehills在群山環(huán)抱的村莊里roomfacingsouth朝南的房間thethinlypopulatedruralarea人煙稀少的農(nóng)村地區(qū)belocatedsomewhereonthePacificcoast位于太平洋沿岸某處【增分靚句】Thesunbegantoriseinthesky,bathingthemountainingoldenlight.太陽(yáng)開始升起，給山披上了一層金紗。Thesunroseoveraquietworldandlookedwarmlydownuponthepeacefulvillage.太陽(yáng)在——個(gè)寧青爭(zhēng)的世界里升起，溫暖地俯視著這個(gè)寧?kù)o的村莊。Theskyisclearbluenowandthesunhasflungdiamondsdownonmeadows,riverbanksandwoods.此時(shí)已是萬(wàn)里藍(lán)天，太陽(yáng)將鉆石般燦爛奪目的陽(yáng)光灑向草原、河岸和樹林。Thegroundswerecoveredwithdarkgreengrassthroughwhichstretchedastraightwhitestonepath,庭院里處處是碧綠的芳草，綠草中鋪著潔白筆直的石路。Thebeautifulsceneryisafeastforyoureyes.美麗的景色令人大飽眼福。Itwassoquietintheclassroomthatthesoundofaneedledroppingontothegroundcouldbeheard.(2)書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分；(3)單詞拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是寫作規(guī)范的重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮，英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受?！驹u(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】檔次描述第七檔(22—25分)(1)創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高；(2)使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響理解；(3)自然有效地使用了段落間、語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。第六檔(18—21分)(1)創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融洽度較高；(2)使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)比較流暢，有個(gè)別錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解；(3)比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第五檔(15—17分)(1)創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)；(2)使用了比較恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)方式不夠多樣性，表達(dá)有些許錯(cuò)誤，但基本不影響理解；(3)使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第四檔(11—14分)(1)創(chuàng)造了基本完整的故事內(nèi)容，但有的情節(jié)不夠合理或邏輯性不強(qiáng)，與原文情境基本相關(guān)；(2)使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，個(gè)別部分影響理解；(3)尚有語(yǔ)句銜接的意識(shí)，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。教室里很安靜，連一根針掉在地上的聲音都能聽得見。Whenwereachedthetopofthehill,amagnificentviewoftheseagreetedus.當(dāng)我們到達(dá)山頂時(shí)，我們看到了一片壯麗的海景。Thedark,rainyevening,thewind,thethunderingcloudsheldmeentirelyintheirpower.那漆黑的雨夜，刮著大風(fēng)、電閃雷鳴、烏云滾滾，我完全被這種景象鎮(zhèn)住了。However,thelakesshonelikeglassinthesettingsunandlookedwonderful.然而，湖水在落日的余暉下閃亮如鏡，景色迷人。Uponthearrivalofspring,beautifulbirdswillsinghappilyinthepark,春天一至U,美麗的鳥兒們就會(huì)在公園里歡快地歌唱。【語(yǔ)段欣賞】Atthecloseoftheafternoonservice,wereturnedbyanexposedandhillyroad,wherethebitterwinterwind,blowingoverarangeofsnowysummitstothenorth,almostgrayedtheskinfromourface.下午的禱告結(jié)束以后，我們沿著一條光禿崎嶇的山路返回。冬日刺骨的寒風(fēng)吹過大雪覆蓋的山峰,吹向北邊，吹得我們一臉蒼白蕭索。Itwasthecoolgraydawn,andtherewasasenseofpeacedeepinthewoods.Notaleafstirred；notasounddisturbedgreatNature?smeditation.Dewdropsstoodupontheleavesandgrasses.Awhitelayerofashescoveredthefire,andathinbluebreathofsmokerosestraightintotheair.正是涼爽的、灰蒙蒙的黎明時(shí)分，樹林深處一片寧?kù)o。沒有葉子在動(dòng)，沒有任何聲音打擾大自然的沉思。露珠還掛在樹葉和草上?；鹕细采w著一層白色的灰燼，一縷藍(lán)色的輕煙直直地飄向空中。五、結(jié)尾升華句Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.患難見真情。五、結(jié)尾升華句It'snevertoooldtolearn.活到老學(xué)到老。Timeandtidewaitfornoman.時(shí)不待我。Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.有志者，事竟成。.Constantdroppingwearsthestone.滴水穿石。Nocross,nocrown.不經(jīng)歷風(fēng)雨，怎能見彩虹？Thelongestjourneybeginswiththefirststep.千里之行，始于足下。Treatotherpeopleasyouhopetheywilltreatyou.己所不欲,勿施于人。It'sbettertolosemoneythantolosehonesty.寧失萬(wàn)貫，不失誠(chéng)信。Nopains,nogains.不勞則無獲。Theshortestanswerisdoing.最簡(jiǎn)短的回答就是行動(dòng)。Diligenceisthemotherofsuccess.勤奮是成功之母。Itisbettertolightonecandlethantocursethedarkness.與其詛咒黑暗，不如燃起蠟燭。Itismoreimportantforamantokeephispromisethantoguardhisproperty.——個(gè)人嚴(yán)守諾言比守衛(wèi)他的財(cái)產(chǎn)更重要。Onegoodturndeservesanother.善有善報(bào)。Helpothersmoreandcreatemorehappiness.多幫助他人，多創(chuàng)造快樂。Lightalampforothers,andyouwillnotonlylightupforothersbutalsoyourself.為別人點(diǎn)一盞燈，照亮別人，也照亮了自己。Itisakindofhappinesstobelovedbyothers,anditisalsoakindofhappinesstocareforothers.得到他人的關(guān)愛是一種幸福，關(guān)愛他人也是一種幸福。Lookbeforeyouleap.三思而后行。Betterlatethannever.遲做總比不做好。Don"tjudgeabookbyitscover.不要以貌取人。Actionsspeaklouderthanwords.行動(dòng)月生于言辭。Allthingsaredifficultbeforetheyareeasy.萬(wàn)事開頭難。Nothingintheworldisdifficultforonewhosetshismindtoit.世上無難事，只怕有心人。.Habitissecondnature.習(xí)慣成自然。Failureisthemotherofsuccess.失敗是成功之母。Practicemakesperfect,熟能生巧。Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.自助者天助之。.Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.一日一蘋果，身體健康不求醫(yī)。Hewholaughslastlaughsbest.笑到最后的人笑得最好。WheninRomedoastheRomansdo.入鄉(xiāng)隨俗。Followyourowncourse,andletpeopletalk.走自己的路，讓別人說去吧。Whateveryoudo,gowithallyourheart.無論做什么事，一定要全力以赴。Factsspeaklouderthanwords.事實(shí)勝于雄辯。Abirdinthehandisworthtwointhebush.一鳥在手，勝過雙鳥在林。第4節(jié)強(qiáng)化訓(xùn)練in[2022?福州八縣（市、區(qū)）一中期中聯(lián)考]閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文?！癢hysheletoutmysecret?Whyshedidthattome?IvividlyrememberedthatdaywhenIwasconfusedattheknowinglookswhicheveryonegaveme.Thatterribleexperiencewasimprinted（銘亥！J）onmymind.Icouldn'tforgivethepersonwithwhomIhadsharedmysecret.Shelostallmytrustandfriendship.Fiveyearsback,Sallywasanewadditioninourclass.Idon'tknowwhatbuttherewassomethingstickyaboutherthatattractedmetowardsher.ShewasthemostfriendlypersonIknew.Westartedasclassmatesbutafterafewmonthswewerelikebestfriends.Wedidhomeworktogetheranddreamedofgoingtothesameuniversityoneday.Wehungoutandwenttothemoviesonweekends.Thatwasasweettime.Nevertheless?Icouldn,texpectsuchanenormousbetrayalfromher.Ididn,tknowwhatmademetellSallyaboutmypersonallife.Ifeltmuchregrettomyself.Sheexaggerated（夸大）thematter,addedherownspicestoitandmadeitthehottesttopicinschool.Itwaslikesomeonehadstabbedaknifeinmyback.Aftersherevealedmysecret,everyoneatschoolstartedlaughingatmeandgazingatmewhereverIpassed.Iwaslikeapondinwhichsomeonehadthrownastoneandithadbeenspilledup.ItwasthemostembarrassingtimeIhadgonethrough.Soonafterwards,Ileftschoolandshiftedtoanotherone,becauseIthoughtnoonehadtherighttolaughatme.SallycalledmemanytimesbutIdidn'tanswer.MyheartwasbrokenbecausethepersonwhomItrustedmostcheatedme.Imadeeffortstoremovethescarfrommyheart.Istartedanewlife,leavingallthebadmemoriesbehind,becausetheymademeapersonwhooftenthoughtaboutthepastexperiences.Fiveyearslater,withthelifegoingon,Imadenewfriendsandseldomthoughtaboutthepast.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。ButonedayImetAnnainthemarket,myformerclassmate,whotoldmeshockingnews.IimmediatelycalledSallyinordertoexplainthemisunderstanding.【參考范文】ButonedayImetAnnainthemarket,myformerclassmate,whotoldmeshockingnews.AnnasaidthatafterIleftschoolthegossipsoondisappeared.Everyoneinourclassmissedme.BecauseIleftwithoutsayinggoodbye,Sallywassadforalongtime.Andtomyamazement,shetoldmethatSallywasnottheonewhobroughtmysecrettolight.ltwasMarywhohadabigmouthandalwayswantedtoputhernoseinotherpeople?smatters.ShehappenedtooverhearmyconversationwithSally.Iwasallatsea,feelingthatthefloorhadslippedawaybeneathmyfeet.Anxiousandregretful?IaskedAnnaforanycontactwithSally.IimmediatelycalledSallyinordertoexplainthemisunderstanding.Aftergettingthrough,Isincerelyapologizedtoher.Shesaidsoftly,uNevermind.Wearegoodfriends."Iwasintears,guiltandjoy.Atthatmoment,Iwishedithadnothappened.!wishedtimecouldgobackandIcouldovercomemymistake.FromthatIgotalessoninlifethatweshouldlearntotrustourlovedones,becausealittlemistakecanleadustoruinwhatweshouldvalue.Trustisthefoundationalprinciplethatholdsfriendship.Trustisalsotheeasiestthingintheworldtolose.Weneedtobeopenandtrustourfriends.⑵閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwasgoingtobemyfirstdayatRainbowMiddleSchool.Everyoneelsewascomingbackfromwinterholiday,butIwasgoingtobenewinthisschool.Aftergettingoutofmymother'scar,Ilookedaroundandnoticedthatkidsweregatheringaroundinthehallwayswiththeirfriends,whisperingandgiggling.Notknowinganyoneandhavingnowheretogo,Idecidedtojustwaitoutsideuntilthebellrang.IwasstandingoutsideMrsEverett?sclassroom,readinganovelnamedOliverTwist,whenIglancedbacktofindsomeonelookingovermyshoulder."Areyounewhere?Anyway,Iabsolutelythegirlsaid.thegirlsaid.thegirlsaid.lovethenovel!It'soneofmyfavoritenovels.Bytheway,I'mMacy!”thegirlsaid.Iwasabouttoanswerwhenthebellcutmeoff.Shyly,IenteredtheclassroomtofindMrsEverettsmilingandsheledmetoaseat.Onceeveryonecameinandsatdown,MrsEverettcalledmeuptothefrontandintroducedmetotheclass.AsIscannedtheirfaces,Inoticedthattheylookedboredanddidn'tseemtocareaboutme.Ireturnedtomyseatandlistenedtotheteacherfortherestoftheclass.ThelunchbellrangandIgotoutoftheclassroom,checkingmybackpackformylunch.Scanningthelunchtables,IwasnervouslywonderingwhereIshouldsitwhenIsawMacyapproachingme.”Hey.Ifyouwant,youcancomeandsitwithus,“Macyofferedasshepointedtoapinktableneartheclassrooms.Feelinghappy，Iglancedoverwhereshewaspointingandfollowedherover.Suddenly,myshoelacewasundoneatthatmoment.ThenIknockedintoMacyanddroppedmylunchbox.!saidsorryandpickedupmylunchbox.Withmyheadlow,Iwasafraidtheothergirlsatthetablewouldlaughatme.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Tomysurprise,theystartedcomfortingme. Afterschool,Iwaitedformymothertopickmeupattheschoolgate.【參考范文】Tomysurprise,theystartedcomfortingme.SomeofthemcameuptomeandaskedifIwasOK.Oneevenkindlyofferedmeherlunch.Atthatmoment,IrealizedthatIreallyhadhadamisunderstandingofthem.Atfirst,Ihadthoughttheydidn'tcareaboutme.However,theygotalongwellwithme.Wehadareallyhappytimehavingourlunchtogether.Afterschool,Iwaitedformymothertopickmeupattheschoolgate.Mynewclassmatesallgreetedmewhentheypassedme.Macystoppedandsaidshe'dliketomakefriendswithme.Iagreedhappily,andwetalkedmuchandsurprisinglyfoundwelivedinthesamecommunity.Whenmymotherarrived,wetwostartedourjourneyhome,andwe'vebeengoinghometogethereverydaysincethen.131（2022?廣東惠州二調(diào)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Afreezingdownpourwashedthestreetinfrontofthesmall-townbar.Isatgazingintothewaterydarkness,aloneasusual.Ihadbeeninthatoldbarforhalfanhour,quietlydrinking,whenmythoughtfuleyesfinallyfocusedonamedium-sizedlump（一團(tuán)）inapuddle（水洼）ahundredfeetaway.Foranothertenminutes,Ilookedoutthroughthewindowtryingtodecideifthelumpwasananimalorjustsomething.Thenightbefore,aGermandognamedShephadcomeintothebarbeggingforpotatochips.Hewasstarvingandjustthesizeofthelumpinthepuddle.Whyshouldadoglieinacoldpuddleinthefreezingrain?Iaskedmyself.Theanswerwassimple:Eitheritwasn'tadog,oritwas,buthewastooweaktogetup.Thewoundinmyrightshoulderachedallthewaydownmyfingers.Ididn'twanttogooutinthestorm.Hey,itwasn'tmydog.Itwasjustastrayonacoldrainynight,alonelydrifter（流浪者）.SowasI,Ithought,asItossed（扔）downwhatwasleftofmydrinkandheadedoutthedoor.Hewaslyinginthethreeinchesofwater.WhenItouchedhim,hedidn'tmove.Ithoughthewasdead.Iputmyhandsaroundhischestandraisedhimtohisfeet.Hestoodunsteadily,andhisheadhunglikeaweightattheendofhisneck.Hisfloppyearswerejusthairlesspiecesoffleshdottedwithopensores（傷口）.“Comeon,Shep,“Isaid,leadinghimtoacornernexttothebar,wherehelayonthecoldcementandclosedhiseyes.AblockawayIcouldseethelightsofalate-nightconveniencestore.Itwasstillopen.Iboughtthreecansofdogfoodandfedhim.Hecouldn'tswallowbutpoorlylookatme.Hewasdying!注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Thelocalvet（獸醫(yī)）wasstillathisoffice,soIloadedthepoorcreatureintoataxiandheadedthere. Threedayslater,whenIopenedthedoorofthevet's,Shepwelcomedmewithwildenthusiasm.I參考范文】Thelocalvetwasstillathisoffice,soIloadedthepoorcreatureintoataxiandheadedthere.Afteraquickcheckonthepoordog,thevetshookhisheadwithregret.HepromisedmehewouldtryhisutmostbutShepwasunlikelytogetthroughitunlesstherewasamiracle.Whilethevettreatedthesorescarefully,Itriedtodropwaterinhismouthandfedhimwithfoodbitbybit.Inevergaveuphopeofgettinghimsaved.ManytimesIwouldcaresshisneck,whisperingintohisearstoencouragehimtoholdon.Hewassoweakthathehadtostayinthevet's.Threedayslater,whenIopenedthedoorofthevet's,Shepwelcomedmewithwildenthusiasm.Hewaggedhistailfromlefttorightasiftosay“Thankyou”.Hewasgainingstrengthandimprovingforthebetter.Tearsfillingmyeyes,Iknewalloureffortswereworthwhile.Soon,thedogrecoveredfromseveresoresandIadoptedhimandtookhimhome.Onceinawhile,IwouldgotothatbarwithShep,adrinkformyselfandaserveofpotatochipsforhim.WhatwouldhavehappenedifIhadn'tsteppedoutonthatstormynight?Careandkindnessreallymadeadifference,tobothofus.⑷（2022?江蘇常熟階段性抽測(cè)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使其構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Nieshacouldnotforgetthewayshehadfrozeninfrontoftheclasstoday.MrRobertshaddividedtheclassintogroupstodopresentations.TodayhadbeenNiesha,sturn.However,herhandshadshakensobadlythatshecouldn'treadhernotes.Hervoicehadbecomesoftereventosilence.MrRobertshadkindlyendedNiesha?spartofthepresentationeventhoughshehadclearlynotfinished.HehadalsoaskedNieshatostayafterclassforamoment.“Niesha,Iknowyou,reshy,butyouworkedhardonthisproject.I'dhatetoseeyougiveuponyourself.MrRobertshadhesitated,“IfIgiveyouanotherchanceuntiltomorrow,doyouthinkyoucanfindyourcourage?”Nieshahadnodded,gratefulforthechance.Shehadgoneasquicklyasshecouldtohernextclass.Shehadkeptherheaddownandhopedtheschooldaywouldendsoon.Whenshereachedherbackstepsthatafternoon,shecouldseeaninvitinglightcomingfromthekitchenwindows.Mommawasbaking.MommastudiedNiesha?sfaceasshecameintothekitchen.“What'swrong,Niesha?”TearsshoneinNiesha'sbrowneyes.Shetoldherthewholestory.Mommawassilentforamoment,herhandsstillbusywiththecake."Whyisitthatyoucantalktomeaboutanythingandeverything,butyoucan?ttalktoyourclass?”Mommaasked.Shesetthetimerandthensaid,“Letmeshowyousomething."NieshafollowedMommatoherbedroom.ThereMommashowedherabookfilledwithnewspaperclippingsandpictures.Inittherewasablueribbonthatsaid“FirstPlace“andapictureofherselfwhenshewasveryyoung,standingwithherparents.“Iwonitforpublicspeaking.Istartedtheschoolyearastheshyestgirlonthespeechteam,butIendedtheyearastheblueribbonwinner.Itwasn,teasyatfirst-notsureofmyselfatall.Iworkedhard,andmostlyIfacedmyfears.Youjustneedtofindyourcourage.n注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。HearingMomma,swords,Nieshagazedatthepreciousblueribbon,lo