讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類誠(chéng)信VS榮譽(yù)學(xué)案 高三英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整故事。ThehonestmistakeKariedouble-checkedthewordsonherspellingtest.Ifshegot100percenttoday,she'dwinherclass'sFirst-quarter

SpellingChallengeandabrandnewdictionary.Plus,Ms.Smithhadpromisedtodoahandstand

(倒立)ifanyonegota

perfectscore.Twomorewordstogo.O-u-i-c-k-l-y.H-o-n-e-s-t-y.Wait!She'dspelledhonesty,nothonestly!Sheerasedthet-yand

wrotel-ybeforehandinginherpaper.“I'llcorrectthesewhileyou'reatthebreak,”

MsSmithsaid.AfterthebreakKariemovedrestlesslyinherseat,tappingherpencil.MsSmithwalkedtothefrontoftheroomandclearedherthroat.

Then,asifshewereanOlympicgymnast(體操運(yùn)動(dòng)員),MsSmiththrewbothherfeetintotheair.

“

Congratulations,Karie!Youdidit!”

sheannouncedwhileupsidedown.The

wholeclasserupted!Ms.SmithpresentedKariewithherprize.Karie

smiledbroadlyasshereadthenoteonthedictionary:ToKaire,forherperfectperformance.“EverythingOK?"MomaskedasKarieburstthroughthefrontdoorafterschool.

“Everything'sPERFECT!”

Karieshouted,showing

Momherspellingtestand

prize.Momhuggedher.

“Putthetestonthefridgeso

Dadcanseeitwhenhegetshome.”Karietookanotherlookatthetestpaperbeforeputtingitonthefridge.Herhandsstoppedinthemidair.Shejustcouldn’tbelieveherowneyes.

Honesly?

YES!

H-O-N-E-S-L-Y!Karietumbled(摔倒，翻滾)tothefloor.“Karie,what'sthematter?”

askedMom.

“Idon'tfeelsogood,”

Kariesaid,squeezingthetest

paperintoherbackpack.“Probablytoomuchexcitement.”

Momrubbedherback."Howaboutsometea?”Karieswallowed.

“Howdoyouknow?

A

“t”

isexactlywhatIneeded.”Kariedraggedherselftoherbedaftersometea.Howcouldshetellthewholeclassshedidn’tdeservetheprize?ThatMs

Smithdidthehandstandfornothing?注意1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:

SoonKarieheardherdadcomeinwiththesmellof

pizzafloatingintheair.Paragraph2:

MsSmithwasunlockingtheclassroomdoorwhenKariegottoschoolthenextmorning.一、寫前指導(dǎo)

【說(shuō)明】考場(chǎng)時(shí)間有限，審題方法須簡(jiǎn)單、易操作。大道至簡(jiǎn)，審題“建?！保?.

速讀原文，圈出人物角色（who）、時(shí)間（when）、地點(diǎn)（where）；劃出動(dòng)詞（以便了解主要事件,即what）和心理詞匯（以便清晰人物角色的情感發(fā)展,即how和why）。2.

細(xì)讀續(xù)寫段落的首句，明確故事發(fā)展的沖突點(diǎn)和高潮，回讀原文標(biāo)示出“伏筆”情節(jié)（1—3個(gè)），提煉出有思想性、體現(xiàn)價(jià)值觀和傳遞正能量的元素（例如珍愛生命，學(xué)會(huì)合作，學(xué)會(huì)感恩，弘揚(yáng)正義等）。本篇續(xù)寫題原文最后一段中“shedidntdeservetheprize”是續(xù)寫回應(yīng)的“伏筆”；經(jīng)過(guò)父母親的引導(dǎo)及Karie的自我感悟，續(xù)寫結(jié)尾提煉出Honestymatters/counts/isthemostvaluable.(誠(chéng)實(shí)最重要)。3.

快速構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)，合理+創(chuàng)新。續(xù)寫是對(duì)原文的延伸，續(xù)寫短文多以記敘文或故事類文章為主，故事情節(jié)有一定的曲折起伏，故事線索的邏輯性也都是比較強(qiáng)的。所以我們續(xù)寫時(shí)要遵循原文的思路和語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格。為此，考生有必要細(xì)讀原文，關(guān)注原文的主要情節(jié)、矛盾的沖突點(diǎn)或高潮處，還要關(guān)注原文的語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格，如細(xì)節(jié)描寫或人物對(duì)話等。根據(jù)故事需要，續(xù)寫部分需要合理地增加一些次要的情節(jié)，比如人物的表情、動(dòng)作、心理活動(dòng)、細(xì)節(jié)描寫等。所給文章結(jié)尾的思路和內(nèi)容并不一定是唯一的，考生可以根據(jù)自己對(duì)文章的理解，從而對(duì)文章的結(jié)尾有不同的、合理的詮釋。二、讀后續(xù)寫注意事項(xiàng)1．在讀懂原文的基礎(chǔ)上，緊扣原文中心，根據(jù)所給短文的內(nèi)容和所提供的段落開頭所給的語(yǔ)句續(xù)寫，以原文為起點(diǎn)，寫出故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展和變化。要注意前后照應(yīng)，符合邏輯，防止自相矛盾。必須與上文緊密聯(lián)系，使上下文融為一體。2．對(duì)原文故事沒有寫出的情節(jié)展開合理的推想，打開思路，多角度地想象出幾種情況或結(jié)局，并從中加以最優(yōu)選擇。3．原文的主要角色，續(xù)文中都要安排“戲”，但不要引進(jìn)影響事件結(jié)局的新角色。4．續(xù)寫的兩段長(zhǎng)短兼顧，不要一段過(guò)長(zhǎng)，一段過(guò)短，給人倉(cāng)促的感覺。5．語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格需要統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展需要進(jìn)行環(huán)境、動(dòng)作、心理等細(xì)節(jié)描寫（沒有細(xì)節(jié)的續(xù)寫是沒有生命力的），但同時(shí)要注意細(xì)節(jié)描寫不宜大量堆砌，生僻詞匯不宜過(guò)多。還要注意直接引語(yǔ)與間接引語(yǔ)相互結(jié)合，切忌整段都是直接引語(yǔ)。6.

結(jié)束句宜以哲言警句點(diǎn)題，升華主題，予人深思和回味。7．詞數(shù)少于130的，閱卷時(shí)會(huì)從總分中減去兩分。（溫馨提醒：寫滿格，分不會(huì)低）8．要特別注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)的使用，注意中英文標(biāo)點(diǎn)的不同寫法和用法，如句號(hào)、逗號(hào)、省略號(hào)和書名號(hào)。因?yàn)槔m(xù)寫內(nèi)容數(shù)量比較大，很有可能要用到引號(hào)、冒號(hào)等標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)。9.先打草稿再規(guī)范謄抄，力爭(zhēng)書寫規(guī)范、美觀（字大小適中；字母規(guī)范、不黏連；均勻保持一個(gè)a的詞間距），卷面整潔（如寫錯(cuò)，劃一條直線即可，切忌涂成黑塊導(dǎo)致“自黑”）。

三、范文品讀（遵循語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)先輸入后輸出的原則，給學(xué)生正確信息的示范，方能提高語(yǔ)言鑒賞能力）SoonKarieheardherdadcomeinwiththesmellofpizzafloatingintheair.

"Where’syourspellingtestpaper,sweetheart?"Dadasked,

gazingat

hereagerly.Karie

gulped

beforetryingtoanswer."I...,"she

fumbled

inherbackpack,tookoutthepaperandhandedit

unwillingly

toherdad.WhenDadwas

admiring

theperfect100onthepaper,he

spotted

“honesty”.Dad

frowned,"Probablyyoudon’tdeservetheprize.”

Immediately,thescene

flashedback

whenacashierinthepizzashopgavethemtoomuchchangebymistake.Herfatherwentstraightbacktoreturnthe

unexpected

moneyinsteadofkeepingit.Shesoonunderstoodwhatsheshoulddo.

Ms.SmithwasunlockingtheclassroomdoorwhenKariegottoschoolthenextmorning.

"You're

anearlybird,"MsSmithsmiledather.

Handsslightlytrembling,KariegaveMs.Smithhertestpaperaswellasthedictionary.Karie

confessed

herspellingmistakeinthetest,

apinkflushspreadingoverhercheeks."Isee."

EventhoughMsSmithtriedtocontainheremotions,surpriseregisteredonherface.Foramoment,Ms.Smithstoodquietly,readingthenoteonthedictionary.

Thenshepickedupapen,crossedouttheword"perfect"andwrote"honest"instead

beforehanding

theprizebacktoKarie."Igettokeepthis?Honestly?"

Karie'sjawdropped.

“Forhonestly,no."MsSmith

grinned."Butforhonesty,yes.”【點(diǎn)評(píng)】本篇范文動(dòng)作、心理細(xì)節(jié)描寫生動(dòng)，詞匯使用貼切，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)豐富，令人腦中迅速勾勒出畫面感，值得研讀、細(xì)細(xì)理解和學(xué)習(xí)模仿。續(xù)寫第1段描述故事主人公Karie在父親的言傳身教下感悟如何處理煩惱之事；續(xù)寫第2段生動(dòng)描寫Karie向老師Ms.Smith坦白自己的拼寫錯(cuò)誤后，老師頗顯教育智慧的反應(yīng)。角色之間的對(duì)話精辟有力，以Ms.Smith所說(shuō)的對(duì)比句為結(jié)束句“Forhonestly,no."MsSmith

grinned.

"Butforhonesty,yes.”

令人拍案叫絕?。ㄕ?qǐng)品味范文中標(biāo)示紅色劃線處，學(xué)習(xí)消化，努力化為己用。）四、學(xué)生佳句、精彩段落展示：大聲朗讀，欣賞、學(xué)習(xí)、理解、運(yùn)用。（溫馨提示：1.

教師在批改作文時(shí)，要有一雙“發(fā)現(xiàn)美的眼睛”，給每一個(gè)學(xué)生信心，在每一張作文卷上勾出亮點(diǎn)表達(dá),；2.

收集、整理學(xué)生作文亮點(diǎn)，在講評(píng)時(shí)盡可能擴(kuò)大鼓勵(lì)面；3.

學(xué)生攝入大量的正確語(yǔ)料，自然可辨別自己作文中的錯(cuò)誤。）1.

Kariesaidnothing

withanembarrassedsmile.2.

Karie’sfaceturnedred

aftersaying

that.3.

Karie

droppedherhead

withtearsrollinginhereyes.4.

Withthe

scent

ofthetastypizza,herparents’

yells

spreadintoherears.5.

Somethingcomplex

keptcomingtoKarie’smind,whichmadeherfeelshamedtogettheprizethatshe

shouldn’thavewon.6.

Karie

gulpedbeforetrying

toanswer,

“Imustsaythat...”7.

Therewas

anangelandademonfightinginhermind.Finally,theformerwonandKariedecidedtobehonest.8.

Happinesstogetherwithnervousnessfloatedupanddown

inherheart.After

afiercedebate

inhermind,shetoldherparentsthat

actually

shedidn’tget100percent.

9.

Afterhearingthat,Dadstrokedhisdaughter’shair,

comfortingher,

“YouareanhonestgirlandMsSmithwillnotblameyou.

Everythingisgoingtobefine.”10.

Kariepretendedtobecalm,but

hertremblingvoicegaveheraway....Sheexplained

withtearsrollingdownlikeabrokenstringofbeads.11.

Karie

sighed,

taking

outhertestpaperand

pointingout

themistake

shehadmade.12.

Karie

slowly

openedherbackpackandshowedDadthetestpaper.

Herheartracedandhermindwentblank.

13.

Karie

screweduphercourageandcofessedtohavingmade

aspellingmistakeinthetestpaper.14.

Kariewasinadilemma,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.15.

Dadasked,

“Whathappened?You

shouldhavebeenhappy.”

16.

Karieansweredinatremblingvoice,tookoutthepaperandhandedittoherfatherunwillingly.17.

Afteramomentofsilence,herdadgavethepizzatoherandsaidthat

itwasherhonestythatwonthegift,butnotthescores.18.

ThenKarie

approached

towardMsSmith,

passsing

thedictionarytoher.Theteacher

staredat

her

withapuzzledface.19.

Thoughhesitatingforawhile,KariegavethedictionarybacktoMsSmithandsaid,

“...”20.

Beadsofperspirationdrippeddown

Karie’sface.Shethoughtshecouldn’tdeservetheprize.21.

MsSmith

stroked

Karie’shairandgaveher

ashiningsmile.22.

SodelightedandinspiredwasKariethat

shemanagedtokeepherbalancebetweenhonestyand

glory.23.

“Thoughyouspelta

mistaken

‘honestly’,you

dotherightthinghonestly.”

24.

“Actually,Iwantedto

haveastudentsetanexample

whocanbelearnedinourclass.Andthisstudentisyou!”

MsSmithexplained.25.

Itisnotperfectionbuthonesty

thatmatters!26.

...KariewaswaitingforMsSmith’s

disppointedlook,butwhatshereallyreceived,

instead,washerunderstandingsmileandsincerepraiseforherhonesty.

“Itdoesn’tmatterwhether

youspeltitright,

butwhether

youreallyhaveit.”

saidMsSmith.27.

...After

atoughsilence,MsSmithsaid,

“Exactly.ButIwon’ttakebacktheprize.

Itisgiftedforyourhonesty!”

Hearingthat,Kariejumpedup

asifshewereabirdflyinginthesky.Itishonesty

thatdeservesrewarding!28.

MsSmithsaid,

“Onlywhenyouadmityourmistakecanyouunderstand

thetruemeaningofhonestyandperfectscores.Sotheprize

stillbelongstoyou.”

Whatinspiringnews!

Sunshineranthroughtheunlockeddoorandmadeherfacelighted.29.

...

Hearing

MsSmith’swords,Karie

burstintolaughter

andfelt

thedarkcloudfloatinginhermindhasdisppeared.

Honestyisthemostvaluable!30.

KariehandedoverthetestpaperandtheprizetoMsSmith,withherheartbeatingcrazily.精彩段落：1.

SoonKarieheardherdadcomeinwiththesmellofpizzafloatingintheair.

"Oh,dear,whereisyourspellingtestpaper?

Howproudtohear

thatmydaughterhasgot100percent.”

Dadwentintothelivingroom

withasmileshiningonhisface.Tohissurprise,Kariedidn’t

seem

tobeglad

asheexpected.

“Whathappenedtomygirl?”

Dadasked.

Hesitantly,Kariegavethetestpapertoherdad.

Whenlookingthrough

thetestpaper,Dad

fixedon

“honesly”.DadsaidtoKariewithkindness,

“Followyourheart.

It’smybeliefthat

youwillmake

abestchoice.”

Thoughfeelinghardbetweenthetitleandhonesty,

she

finallychose

thelatter.

【點(diǎn)評(píng)】第1段續(xù)寫人物對(duì)話、表情描寫生動(dòng)，畫面感強(qiáng)；沒有“大”詞匯，但詞匯使用貼切，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)流暢、地道，展現(xiàn)作者扎實(shí)的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)和出色的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。2.

Thoughfeelinghardbetweenthetitleandhonesty,Kariefinallychose

thelatter.

Withherheartbeatingwildly,shewentuptoMsSmithandtoldherthetruth,

wonderingif

theteacherwouldpunishher.However,MsSmithjustsmiledandsaid,“Notuntil

youshowedthepapertome,

didIfind

youhadspelt‘honestly'

wrong,butyoubahavedhonsetly!That’s

whatIappreciate.”

Uptonow,Karierealizedwhatherfathertoldheryesterdaywasreallysignificant:

Anhonestpersonwillneverlose.

【點(diǎn)評(píng)】用詞生動(dòng)貼切，如title,thelatter,beatingwildly,wonderingif；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、倒裝句、表語(yǔ)從句等語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)使用符合語(yǔ)境；結(jié)束句簡(jiǎn)短卻非常有力量。小段落展示了作者較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)及運(yùn)用能力。3.

ToKarie’ssurprise,

asmileofunderstandingflashedacross

MsSmith’sface.“Takeiteasy.Althoughyoudon’tdeservetheprize,thenewdictionaryIgavetoyouis

agiftforyourhonesty.”

JoywelledupinsideKarie

becauseshehaslearntthat

onecanspell“honestly”wronginthetest,butcan’tinlife.

【點(diǎn)評(píng)】人物的表情與心理活動(dòng)描寫得非常生動(dòng)，結(jié)束句提煉哲理性強(qiáng)，可見作者平時(shí)用心學(xué)習(xí)，積累素材之成效。4.

Tohersurprise,MsSmithgaveher

awarmhug

insteadofcritizingher.

“I’mproudofyourbravey,dear!Youcan

still

gettheprize

not

becauseofyourgrade

but

foryourhonesty.”

5.

MsSmithcheckedthepapercarefullyandnodded,

“Yes,mygirl!Butyoucan

still

gettheprize.”

“Forwhat?”

Karieasked

confusedly.

“Notforthe

‘honesly’

youspelt,but

‘honestly’

youarebahaving!”【點(diǎn)評(píng)】以上兩位同學(xué)都運(yùn)用了對(duì)比手法，發(fā)人深思。6....MsSmith

gaveabighug

t