讀后續(xù)寫個人成長類克服舞臺恐懼癥-AroseforElizabeth講義-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項

閱讀下面短文，依據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Elizabeth

walkedintotheyard,carryingabunchofroses.“Beautifulflowersfor...or...,I'llnevergetitright!〞shecried,throwingthe

roses

ontheground.Elizabethhadbeenpractisingherspeechforaweek.She'dpresentedflowerstothedog,thecat,andthestatueinthegarden.Partofhercouldn'twait.ThisSaturday,thegreat

AnaWolff,famouspianist,wouldperformattheconcerthallintown.Forfouryears,Elizabethhadtakenpianolessons.She'dlistenedtoMs.Wolff'srecordingsoverandoveragainlovingthewaythenotestumbledlikearushingmountainstream.PartofElizabethwas

terrified.Hermusicteacheratschool,Mr.Leaf,hadaskedElizabethto

present

theflowerstoMs.Wolffafterthe

performance.Whydidhehavetochooseher?Elizabethhatedtalkinginfrontofpeople.Eachnight,Elizabethdreamtaboutmusic,spotlights,andshininggrandpiano.Sometimesshetripped〔絆倒〕

andfell.Othertimessheforgotthe

words.OncethedreamendedwithMs.WolffrushingoffstagebeforeElizabethcouldsayanything!Despiteallthese,Elizabethkeptpracticing.“Beautifulflowersforabeautifulperformance...〞Afterall,itwasanhonortosharethestagewithAnaWolff.Then,finally,thebigdaycame.“Allset,Elizabeth?〞Mr.Leafasked.“Herstomachtightened,but

Elizabethnoddedathim.〞Thelightsdimmed,andMs.Wolffwalkedontothe

stage

wearingablackgown.Smiling,shebowed.Theaudienceclappedloudly.Ms.Wolffmadehergracefulwaytothepiano,tookherseatandthenbegantoplay.Herfingersdancedacrossthekeys.Sheswayedandnodded,andhershinyblackponytailbobbed

〔跳動〕.

Backandforthsheracedherfeetamongthepedals.Drawnintothemusic,Elizabeth

forgot

foramomentaboutthesixwordsshehadtosay.SoonitwasAnaWolff'slastpiecebeforesheknewit.Andaburstofthunderous

applause

suddenlybroughtElizabethtoreality.Thefrighteningmomentwasalmostthere.Paragraph1:Takingadeepbreath,ElizabethwalkedslowlytowardsMs.Wolf,withrosestightinhand.

_Paragraph2:Justthen,Elizabethsensedsomeonepattingherontheshoulder.

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習(xí)作步驟

1.概括前文劇情

請用簡潔幾句話說出時間，地點，人物，時間和主要沖突是什么

2.分析Para1,Para2的第一句：關(guān)鍵詞

dreadedmoment

(什么恐驚時刻？為什么？〕cheeredandclappedloudlyforthem

(為什么要為他們歡呼和鼓掌？)

3.故事的結(jié)局和主旨

習(xí)作過程中的思索：1.故事的結(jié)局是什么？伊麗莎白的花送出了嗎？2.這個送花的過程中，伊麗莎白表現(xiàn)會有什么轉(zhuǎn)變？3.是什么大事或什么人促成了這樣的轉(zhuǎn)變？4.主要沖突是如何化解的呢？5.通過問題的解決，伊莎貝拉獲得了什么樣的情感成長呢？6.故事刻畫中，你用到了什么側(cè)面/間接描寫了嗎？次要角色〔沃爾夫夫人和觀眾〕7.刻畫舞臺上的緊急和其他場合的緊急有什么不同？能否通過人物的動作和舞臺環(huán)境的描寫來呈現(xiàn)？8.文章的主旨是什么？審題思索

1.文章寫作難點：

如何描寫舞臺恐驚癥；舞臺環(huán)境描寫

2.文章寫作要點和亮點：

觀眾的反響；感受的變化相關(guān)語料儲藏舞臺劇謝幕Afterthecurtainclosed,everyoneintheaudiencestartedclapping.Thentheactorscameoutonebyone.ViaandJustinwerethelastonesout,andwhentheyappeared,thewholeaudiencerosetotheirfeet.SoIgotupandclappedandclapped.Iclappeduntilmyhandshurt.......Finally.afterIdon'tknowhowmanyminutes,thelineofactorsonstagesteppedbackandthecurtainclosedinfrontofthem.Theclappingstoppedandthelightswentupandtheaudiencestartedgettinguptoleave.慚愧難當(dāng)，想找個地洞鉆進(jìn)去Idon'tknowwhatJackansweredbecauseIwalkedoutoftheclasswithoutanyoneknowingIhadbeenthere.MyfacefeltlikeitwasonfirewhileIwalkedbackdownthestairs.wassweatingundermycostume.AndIstartedcrying.Icouldn'tkeepitfromhappening.Thetearsweresothickinmyeyes.IcouldbarelyseebutIcouldn’twipethemthroughthemaskasIwalked.waslookingforalittletinyspottodisappearinto.IwantedaholeIcouldfallinsideof:alittleblackholethatwouldeatmeup喝倒彩Iwassurprisedthatawholebunchofkids(notfromBeecher)booedandhissedandlaughed.Someonefromtherightsideofthefieldeventhrewsodacanatthescreen,whichseemedtosurpriseMrTushman.Isawhimstandupandlookinthedirectionofthecanthrower,thoughIknewhecouldn'tseeanythinginthedark上臺領(lǐng)獎前觀眾的反響PeoplestartedapplaudingbeforeMr.Tushman'swordsactuallyregisteredinmybrain.IheardMaya,whowasnexttome,givealittlehappyscreamwhensheheardmyname.andMiles.whowasontheothersideofme,pattedmyback.“Standup,getup!〞saidkidsaroundme.andIfeltlotsofhandspushingmeupwardoutofmyseat,guidingmetotheedgeoftherow,pattingmyback,highfivingme.“Waytogo,Augqie!〞“Nicegoing,Augqie!〞Ievenstartedhearingmynamebeingchanted:“Augqie!Augqie!Auggie!〞lookedbackandsawJackleadingthechant,fistintheair,smilingandsignalingformetokeepgoing,andAmosshoutingthroughhishands:“Woohoo.littledude!〞站上領(lǐng)獎臺的所見所感IfeltlikeIwasfloating,itwassoweird.Likethesunwasshiningfullforceonmyfaceandthewindwasblowing.AsIgotclosertothestage.IsawMsRubinwavingatmeinthefrontrow,andthennexttoherwasMrs.G.whowascryinghystericallyahappycryingsmilingandclappingthewholetime.AndasIwalkedupthestepstothestage.themostamazingthinghappened:everyonestartedstandingupNotjustthefrontrows,butthewholeaudiencesuddenlygotupontheirfeet,whooping,hollering,clappinglikecrazy.Itwasastandingovation.Forme.參考范文Takingadeepbreath,ElizabethwalkedslowlytowardsMs.Wolff,withrosestightinhand.Thestagelightsfeltblazinghot.Beadsofsweattrickleddownherface.FinallyshestruggledtothespotwhereMs.

Wolffwasstanding.Elizabethopenedhermouth.Shemouthedthewords,butnosoundcameout.Murmursandscatteredcoughscamefromthefrontrow.Elizabethtriedagainbutthewordsfeltstuckinherwindpipe.Sheloweredherhead,tryingtoblockoutthesadnesseruptinginside.

Justthen,Elizabethsensedsomeonepattingherontheshoulder.SheraisedherheadandsawMs.Wolfflookingatherwithawarmsmile.Ms.WolffruffledElizabeth'shairandwhisperedinherear,“NowyouknowhowIfeeleverytimeIamonthestage!〞“Youmean…yougetterrified,too〞askedElizabeth.“Ido.Justswallowthatfearand