參觀陽光農(nóng)場記敘文

參觀陽光農(nóng)場（記敘文）主要問題信息不全低級錯誤不斷(knowed,meeted,rided)過度發(fā)揮記敘文的連接詞：At

first,

firstAndthen,After

that,Finally,

at

last,Inthe

beginning,intheend,Shortlyafter….Soon

afterwards,敘述過去事情，用一般過去時感受用現(xiàn)在完成時，一般現(xiàn)在時上周六上午，我們學校高二學生去參觀了陽光農(nóng)場。Last

Saturday

morning,

the

Senior

Twostudents

of

our

school

went

to

visit

theSunshine

Farm.作為一位高三的學生As

a

Senior

Three

student（一大早）在學校門口集合We

gathered

at

the

school

gate

in

the

earlymorning.騎車半個小時到達農(nóng)場And

it

tookus

about

half

an

hour

tocycle

tothe

farm

(

located

in

the

suburb

of

our

city).We

spent

about

half

an

hour

cycling

to

thefarmWe

went

to

the

farm

by

bike

and

arrived

atthe

destination/

on

the

farm

half

an

hourlater/

after

half

an

hour.In

half

an

hour

用在一般將來時中到后，與農(nóng)場退休工人聊天，了解他們的生活情況Shortly

after

we

arrived,

we

had

anice/long/deep

chat/

talk

with

the

retiredworkers,

which

made

us

know

more

abouttheir

living

conditions/

how

their

life

wasgoing.,

making

us

know….Chat-

chatted-chatted使某人做某事Make

sb

do/ enable

sb

to

do（之后），向工人們學習如何干農(nóng)活，體會他們生活的艱辛After

that,

/

And

then,

we

began

to

learn

howto

do

farm

work

from

the

farmers,

enabling

usto

better

understand

the

hardship

of

their

life.感受：勞動是辛苦而快樂的，勞動創(chuàng)造美Through

this

activity,

I

have

strongly

felt

that

/

I

have

fully

realized

that

/

I

have

been

fully

aware

that

work

is

tough/hard/

tiring

butenjoyable/delightful/happy

and

thatlabourcreates

beauty

in

our

life.錯誤表達Work

is

hard

and

enjoyable,

which

creates

beauty

in

our

life.The

first

th