welearn寫作寶典秋季課第九周講義

寫作寶典第九周講義英語(yǔ)一

寓意和分析思路圖畫寓意：

原因：

解決方案：

意+跑題

Thepictureshowsateacherusestwowrongcharactersdeceivestudentsbecauseheforgothowtowritethecorrectone.Thisphotorevealsaphenomenonthatoursociety,especialyschools,aboundswithpeoplewhomisleadotherpeopleforcoveringtheirignorant.

沒(méi)把握好節(jié)奏

Aswecanseefromthepicture,ateacherisverypanicforforgettinghowtospellawordwhilehavingalanguageclass.Nowadays,peoplearegettingrustieraboutwritingliketheteacher

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inthepicture.Theoveruseofdigitalproductshas esomethingweshouldgivemorethoughtto.

首段展示

Thisisanironicpicture:ateachermisspellsinhisclassawordzhaoshi,orcausingtroublesliketrafficaccidents.Onthesurface,theteacherispoorlypreparedfortheclass,buttotakeacloserexamination,Ithinkthecartoonisttriestodrawattentiontoadisturbingsituationseeneverywhereinournationthedecliningabilitytowrite.

中間段落統(tǒng)一性不夠

Whatisthecauseofthisphenomenon?Thisphenomenonismainlycausedbytherapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology.Firstofall,peopleusuallyusesmartphonesandcomputerstotypetorecordtext,usingakeyboardinsteadofapen.Secondly,teachersinschoolsallusemultimediacoursewaretoteach.Teachers‘writingbehaviorhasbeenreducedandtheirwritingskillshavebeenweakened.Althoughelectronicproductshavebroughtusconveniencweshouldnotrelytoomuchonthem.

中間段落案例的有效性

WiththeadventofInternetera,thereareever-growingnumber ackingonworkingwiththeircomputers,anditisexactlytheconvenientin texertanenormousimpactonourwords-writingability.Furthermore,weC blame.

Ourreadingtimeeveryday,letalonewritingtime,isalmost Daily,

everyother inthisdevelocountryhasn’tread eSouthKoreannabbedawaytheapplicationofDragonBoatD anceofourownculture.

中間段展示

SofarasI’mconcerned,th endarecomplex.Forthepastseveraldecades,wehavebeena eyboards;inrecentyears,youngpeopleinparticulartendto oice-to-characterappsthatsavethetroubleofmovingfingers. ,thevolumeofinformationdeliveredbywritingonpaperno usandthofallthatcommunicated.Theseconvenientalterna lbreakthroughshavemadeuswritemuchlessthaninthepas teachers,aremorelikelythanevertomakespellingmistakes.

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尾段優(yōu)秀段落展示1

ItishightimewetakeeffectivemeasurestosaveChinsescharacter.Fortunay,oursocietyhasalreadyrealizedthisurgentsituation.Theofficialmediaholdsvariesofprogramsaboutspelling,whichhelpscreateanatmosphereforlearning.Schools,especiallyprimaryschools,alsopaymoreattentiontoteaching.Forusstudents,wecantrytowritelettertoourfriendseveryweektopracticewriting.Ifthingsgoonlikethis,charactercanbebrilliantagaincertainly.

尾段優(yōu)秀段落展示2

Inmyalview, wordisoneofthemostsignificanttraditionalculturesforus.Itisnotsufficienttoknowhowtoreadorunderstandmeaningsbehindthesewords.Butweshouldwritingthemonpaperthatwecouldfeelthebeautyandmagicofourtraditionalcultures.Measuresmustbeapplied.Primarystudentsshouldbeaskedtowritetheironpaperratherthanonephoneorcomputer.Meanwhile,calligraphyshouldbeincludedasanauxiliarycourseinschool.Ifirmlybelieveourproudtraditionalculturescaninheritingenerationsintheseways.

英語(yǔ)二

首段描述不夠客觀

Thebarchartcomparesthechangeofsalesamountbetweentraditionalautosandnewenergyvehiclesin.Baseduponthedataofthechart，onecanseethatthesalestrendinbothtraditionalandnewenergyvehicleshaswitnessedarise.Buttraditionalautosbentdownsignificantlyin2014infaceoftheadventofpowerfulcompetitor—newenergy

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vehicles.Sincethat,newenergyvehiclesgainedmuchpopularityasthesalevolumesurgednoticeably.

首段較為優(yōu)秀段落

Thebarchartclearlyshowsthechangesinsalesoftraditionalandnewenergyvehiclesinbetween2012and2016.Ingeneral,thesaleoftraditionalcarhasexperiencedamarkedincrease,fromalmost19millionin2012tomorethan25millionin2016,althoughtherewasaslightdecreaseduring2013~2014.Thefigurefornewenergyautoincreasedtoabout5millionoverthesameperiod.

首段展示

Thebarchartcomparesthesalesofconventionalcarswiththoseofnewenergycarsinbetween2012and2016.In2012,around19millionconventionalcarsweresold,whilethesalesofthelatterareinsignificant.Duringthisperiod,conventionalcarshada40%growth,whilenewenergycarsanexponentialincrease,enteringalmost5millionfamilies.

中間段較優(yōu)秀段落展示

Thereisawhopgapofthesalesvolumebetweenconventionalcarsandnewenergyvehicles.Twomainreasonscanaccountforthissituation.Ontheonehand,newenergyvehiclesarenewinventionswhichcouldn’tbeputintomassproductionatpresent.Ontheanotherhand,requiringhigherleveloftechnology,thecostofnewenergyvehiclesismoreexpensivethanconventionalcars,soonlyafewpeoplecanaffordthem.

中間段較優(yōu)秀段落展示

Itseemsthatthetraditionalcarsstilldominate,butrowthhasbeenflagging.Bycontrast,newenergyvehiclesaregainingmoment.Therearethreereasonscanexinit.Firstly,ernmentstronglyadvocatenewenergyvehiclesandgiveslotsofsubsidies.Secondly,environmentalprotectionisrootedinpeople,moreandmorebuyersvoluntarychoosesnewenergyvehicles.Finally,astheprogressinscienceandtechnology,newenergyvehiclesare

gettingbetter,eveninsomeaspects,theyarenotinferiortotraditionalcars.

尾段弄錯(cuò)大方向

Timesareadvancing,andsoarethestandardofliving.Carshave eanindispensabletoolinpeople'slife,butIhopetocontrolthe