讀后續(xù)寫師生關系類-熱心的Mrs.Caruso老師講義-高三英語寫作專項復習

2023年7月昆明市高二年級統(tǒng)測讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Igrewupinalargefamilyoftwelvesiblings.Weweren'tpoorbymoststandards,butthingsweredefinitelyhardforus.Myparentsneversharedtheir

financialworries,choosinginsteadtoletushaveacarefreechildhood.ButIknew,aschildrenoftendo,thatthereweretimestheywentwithoutandthatcertainthingsmyfriendshadwouldn'tbeavailabletome.我在一個有十二個兄弟姐妹的大家庭長大。按照大多數(shù)標準，我們并不貧窮，但事情對我們來說確實很艱難。我的父母從不分擔他們的經(jīng)濟擔憂，而是選擇讓我們度過一個無憂無慮的童年。但我知道，就像孩子們經(jīng)常做的那樣，有時他們沒有，我朋友們擁有的某些東西也不會給我。Backinthosedays,

hotlunch

wasaluxuryforthewealthierkids,andhotlunchbuyerssatseparatelyfromthestudentswhobrought

coldlunch.MysiblingsandIbroughtlunchfromhomeeveryday:thickslicesofhomemadebread,threecookiesandasmallapple.Wewouldlookonlonginglyasthe

richkids

proudlysatdownwiththeirsteamingplatesoffriedchicken,coldmilk,peachesandasliceofcake.在那些日子里，熱午餐對富裕的孩子來說是一種奢侈，熱午餐的購買者與帶冷午餐的學生分開坐。我和我的兄弟姐妹每天從家里帶來午餐：厚厚的自制面包片、三塊餅干和一個小蘋果。我們會熱切地看著富有的孩子們自豪地坐下來，端著他們熱氣騰騰的炸雞、冷牛奶、桃子和一片蛋糕。Ineversaidanything,butmyfirst-gradeteacher,

Mrs.Caruso,musthaveseenthedesireinmyeyes.Onedayshequietlypressedanoteintomyhandandwhispered,"Givethistoyourmother.”我什么也沒說，但我一年級的老師，夫人?？斔鳎欢吹搅宋已壑械挠?。有一天，她悄悄地把一張紙條壓在我手里，低聲說：“把這個給你媽媽?！盜hurriedhomeandgavemymomthenote.Shereaditandsmiled."Well,Mrs.Carusosaidbecauseofallyourhardwork,shewantstobuyyourlunchtomorrow."Thenextday.Iproudlycarriedmytrayofchickenacrossthecafeteriaandtookmyseatatthehot-lunchtable.Honestly,thefoodwasn'tasgreatasIhadimagined,butIwaspleasedtobethereandfelthonoredtobeapartofthegroup.我趕緊回家，把紙條給了媽媽。她讀了之后笑了。“好吧，卡魯索夫人說，由于你的辛勤工作，她想請你明天吃午飯?！钡诙?。我驕傲地端著一盤雞肉穿過自助餐廳，坐在熱騰騰的午餐桌旁。老實說，食物沒有我想象的那么美味，但我很高興能在那里，也很榮幸能成為團隊的一員。Onerainyday,Mrs.Carusoaskedmetostayafterschool.Mystomachinstantlydroppedtothefloor.DidsheknowIhadn'tfinishedmymathsheet?Aftertheotherstudentshadleft,Mrs.Carusosaidshewasgoingtofinishherworkandthendrivemehome.Itwasraining,andsheknewIhadalongwalk.Wepulleduptomyhouseandshegotout,puttingafew

bags

onthe

porch

(門廊).“TellyourmomIhadafewextrathingsshemightwant,"shesaid.Thenshedroveaway.Insidethebagswere

clothes,toys,andbooks.一個下雨天，卡魯索夫人讓我放學后留下來。我的胃立刻掉到了地上。她知道我還沒寫完數(shù)學表嗎？其他學生離開后，卡魯索夫人說她要完成她的作業(yè)，然后開車送我回家。天在下雨，她知道我要走很長一段路。我們把車停在我家，她下車了，在門廊上放了幾個袋子(門廊).“告訴你媽媽我還有一些她可能想要的額外東西，”她說。然后她開車離開了。袋子里有衣服、玩具和書。注：文中劃線詞是我們?yōu)榱藢崿F(xiàn)續(xù)寫和原文高度互動而刻意劃出的。試卷中并無這種標識。Paragraph1:Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

那年夏天，卡魯索夫人邀請我和我的兄弟姐妹去她家。Paragraph2:Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

這些經(jīng)歷使我的生活大不相同。01故事梗概作者出生和成長在一個有十二個兄弟姐妹的并不富裕的家庭。由于經(jīng)濟拮據(jù)時有發(fā)生，作者和兄弟姐妹在學校只能吃冷午餐（coldlunch）。作者很羨慕那些家境好能夠享受熱午餐（hotlunch）的同學。有一天，為了讓作者感受到溫暖，Mrs.Caruso老師特意請他品嘗了一次熱午餐。為了關心作者家里的其他兄弟姐妹，一個雨天，Mrs.Caruso親自開車送作者回家，并給作者家送去了一些衣物、玩具和書籍。

02寫作策略分析分清主要人物和次要人物是讀后續(xù)寫在閱讀環(huán)節(jié)的重要事項。原文中的主要人物只有2個：作者“我”和Mrs.Caruso。作者的媽媽和作者的兄弟姐妹（siblings）都是次要人物。題目需要考生續(xù)寫的部分是Mrs.Caruso邀請作者和作者的兄弟姐妹們?nèi)ニ易骺秃笏@的感想。因此，續(xù)寫部分的筆墨重點應該是Mrs.Caruso的舉動和“我”的感受和感悟。

03寫作示范Paragraph1:Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

Aswesteppedintohercozyhouse,thescentoffreshlybakedcookiesfilledtheair,instantlymakingusfeelathome.

Mrs.Caruso

welcomeduswithabeamingsmileandservedamouthwateringlunchthatwerelishedwithgratitude.Overthemeal,Mrs.Carusosharedheartwarmingstoriesofherchildhood,emphasizingtheimportanceofempathy,kindness,andreachingouttoothersinneed,especiallythosewhomightbelessfortunateandstrugglingwith

financialworries.Herwordsresonateddeeplywithme,andIrealizedthatshewasn'tjustateacher;shewasatruerolemodelandacaringmentor.Paragraph2:Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

Fromthatdayon,Ivowedtobethereforanyoneinneed,justasshehadbeenthereformyfamily.Fueledbyherbeliefinmypotential,Idedicatedmyselftoexcellinginmystudiesandpursuingmydreamswithdetermination.Evenuntiltoday,Ihaveneverforgottenthe

bag

of

clothes,toys,andbooks

sheleftonour

porch

thatrainyday,alongwiththe

hotlunch

sheboughtforme.Mrs.Caruso'slegacycontinuestoshinebrightly,illuminatingthepathformetomakeapositivedifferenceinthelivesofothers,justasshedidinmine.Ourbondhasbecomealifelongconnectionofrespect,guidance,andgratitude.

04寫作細節(jié)分析Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

Aswesteppedintohercozyhouse,thescentoffreshlybakedcookiesfilledtheair,instantlymakingusfeelathome（舒適溫馨的環(huán)境和現(xiàn)烤糕點的香氣增強了寫作和讀者的情感共鳴).

Mrs.Caruso

welcomeduswithabeamingsmileandservedamouthwateringlunch（和原文概念互動，Mrs.Caruso對我的幫助就是從lunch開始的）thatwerelishedwithgratitude.Overthemeal,Mrs.Carusosharedheartwarmingstoriesofherchildhood（分享故事是常見的教育手段）,emphasizingtheimportanceofempathy,kindness,andreachingouttoothersinneed,especiallythosewhomightbelessfortunateandstrugglingwith

financialworries.

Herwordsresonateddeeplywithme,andIrealizedthatshewasn'tjustateacher;shewasatruerolemodelandacaringmentor（榜樣model和導師mentor是很高的評價）.Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

Fromthatdayon,Ivowedtobethereforanyoneinneed,justasshehadbeenthereformyfamily(榜樣的力量和對我的實際影響).Fueledbyherb