續(xù)寫語言組織微觀技巧-高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫必備微技能(策略PPT)

續(xù)寫語言組織微觀技巧2第一部分微觀技巧概述閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。技巧探究OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp.”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.

Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Ⅰ.Readforinformation※讀懂WhenWhereWhoHowoneweekendinJulyintheforestJane,TomJanewaslostBehaviorsFeelingsPara.1quarrel,walkedaway1.Para.22.frightenedregretfulconfusedPara.33.Para.4keptmoving,hadtostop,wantedⅡ.Readfortheplot(情節(jié))angrywaslostcriedBehaviorsFeelingsPara.5saw,drank,ate,feltstronger4.Para.65.6.joyful,hopefulheard,tookoff,thinkinghopeful,anxious※續(xù)寫Climaxheard,tookoff,thinkthat...(helicopters)hopefulsaw,drank,atejoyfulwantedregretfulcryedfrightenedgotlostangryquarrelledBeginningnomorehelicopterswokeupfellings?rescued?EndingⅠ.分析續(xù)寫的開頭語，理順邏輯關(guān)系

段落開頭語開頭語中的線索詞根據(jù)開頭語，設(shè)計(jì)新情節(jié)可提的問題可設(shè)計(jì)的情節(jié)Para.1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.helicopters1._________HowdidJanefeelthen?2._______________________________________3.__________________________描寫如何在森林里度過darkHowdidJanestrugglethroughthenight?DidJanefallasleep?段落開頭語開頭語中的線索詞根據(jù)開頭語，設(shè)計(jì)新情節(jié)可提的問題可設(shè)計(jì)的情節(jié)Para.2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.daybreak4.______5.____________WasJanerescued?6.____________________________7.____________________________8.____________________________9.JanewokeupWhorescueJane?HowdidJanefeel?HowwasJanerescued?描寫如何救援Ⅱ.續(xù)寫中可設(shè)計(jì)的各個(gè)方面：surroundings；thoughts；looks；words；actions

激活續(xù)寫設(shè)計(jì)的詞匯環(huán)境forest,stream,rock,berry,valley,steep,cave,lake,waterfall困難hunger，starve，thirsty，injure，broken，blood，panic，shelter，survive，suffer，cold,severe活動(dòng)walk，climb，fall，crawl，taste，attempt，struggletoone'sfeet，makeone'swayto，pickup情緒toone'sgreatjoy,breakdownrescueteam,doctor,searchfor,spot救援意志、品質(zhì)calm,courage,will評(píng)價(jià)amazing,makeitSurroundings：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thoughts：____________________________________________________________________________________________Slowly,thesunhidhimselfbehindthemountains,anditwashardtoseeanything.Itwasafoggyday.…Shewalkedandwalkeduntilshecametoanopenareawherewaterandberrieswereavailable.Feelingscaredandhelpless,Janesatbesideatreeandheldhershoulderinherarmstomakeherselfwarm.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Actions:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingthroughthethickdarkness,JaneseemedtoseeTom'ssmilingface.Tohergreatjoy,itwasTom!Withamindtofindhim,Janestartedtolookforthelakeindarkness.SoJanemadeadecision.Shedidn'twanttogoonanymore.Shewassotiredandfoundanareawhichwasfullofgrass.Shesleptsoon.Looks:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Words:________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Janewasshockedandrantowardshim.SeeingJane,hewassoexcitedandcouldn'tcontainhisjoy.“IfIdidn'tquarrelwithTom,ifIstayedwithTom,didn'twalkaway.Wemusthaveagoodandromanticevening.”Janebegantocryandsaidtoherself.Tomsaid,“Iwon'tleaveyoualoneanymore.”Ⅲ.參考范例Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Amidthe________________(恐怖的黑暗中),

________________(奇怪的聲音)ofwildbeastswereheard.“Ifitweren'tfor________________(愚蠢的吵架),Iwouldn't________________(被困在)here,”shethoughttoherself,________________(后悔的眼淚)cloudinghereyes.Surroundedby________________(恐懼和疲勞),Janefelt____________(筋疲力盡的)andfinallysliddreadfuldarknessstrangesoundsthatstupidquarrelbetrappedregretfultearsfearandtirednessexhaustedinto__________(睡著了).“Tom,_____________(是你嗎)?”shemurmured.“Tom,__________(救命)!”Inherdream,shesawamanextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Afterawashing,Janecontinuedtoforceherwayahead.Intheboundlesssearch,shefounditimpossibleto___________________(找到出路),whichthrewherinto______________(絕望).Fortunately,a_____________(直升機(jī))flewoverheadjustatthatmoment.InnotimedidJanerushtotherockand_____________(爬上)ontoit.sleepisthatyouhelpfindawayoutdesperationhelicopterclimbShewaved________________(她黃色的襯衫)madlytothepassinghelicopter.________________(讓她高興的是),thistime,thehelicopter________________(發(fā)現(xiàn))her.ThemomentJane________________(團(tuán)聚)herhusband,hertearscloudedhervision.Theyhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmlightofthesettingsun.heryellowblouseTohergreatjoyspottedwasreunitedwith4.注意事項(xiàng)(1)語言的豐富性。包括詞匯、句式、語法的多樣性、情感表達(dá)的多樣性、動(dòng)詞使用的豐富性(2)語篇的連貫性。包括內(nèi)容連貫、寫作意圖一致、語句連貫、關(guān)注兩個(gè)續(xù)寫段落之間的銜接和上下文間的前后呼應(yīng)。24第二部分實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練示例閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappearedThetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.試題再現(xiàn)續(xù)寫原文回答下面幾個(gè)問題，檢測(cè)一下你是否讀懂了原材料。Whoarethecharactersinthetext?ThetwinsJeffandJenna.2.Whatweretheydoing?TheyweremakingbreakfastfortheirmotherasaMother’sDaysurprise.3.Howwaseverythinggoing?Thebreadwasburnt,theporridgeboiledover,andJeff’shandtouchedthehotburner.Everythingwasinamess.理解材料理解材料1.Opening:閱讀完材料，試著完成下面的故事山吧！3.Climax:4.Resolution:5.Ending:2.Build-up:ThetwinsJeffandJennaplannedtomakebreakfastfortheirmotherasaMother’sDaysurprise.EverythingwentwelluntilJeffburntthefirstpieceofbread.Theporridgeboiledover,Jeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandtheotherpieceofbreadturnedblack.Theirfatherappeared…Thetwinscarriedthebreakfasttotheirmother…理解材料理解材料首句精研Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.AccordingtoPara.2,thebreakfastmustbemadeinPara.1;ifthiswasthecase,didtheirfatherofferanyhelp?Ifyes,how?Howmightthemotherreacttothebreakfast?Whatmightbetheendingofthestory?研讀兩段給出句，想想它們給我們提供了哪些續(xù)寫線索？首句分析Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared._______________________________________________________（“別害怕”爸爸邊說邊遞給他們一人一塊濕毛巾，幫他們快速清理干凈一切臟亂。非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語）Afterthecleaning,hebeganhelpingthempreparebreakfast.Thetwinsactedastheirfather’slittlehelpers,anditwasapleasuretoteamupwiththeirfather._______________________________________________________（在爸爸的精心指導(dǎo)下，沒過多久法式吐司和雞粥就做好了。it表示時(shí)間的用法）Everythingsettled,

theirfatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.根據(jù)括號(hào)中的提示，補(bǔ)出范文缺失的部分。首句分析

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMother’sDay!”shoutedthetwins.“Andwehaveasurpriseforyou!”_______________________________________________________（這份驚喜如此美好，媽媽興奮地?fù)u醒了爸爸，這時(shí)候爸爸正假裝酣睡呢。so…that…倒裝）Herfacelitupwithhappiness.Motherhuggedthetwinsandshowedherthanks.ShetastedapieceofFrenchtoastandsaidthatitwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.Lovefilledthewholeroom._____________________________（這是多么美妙又甜蜜的驚喜??！感嘆句）根據(jù)括號(hào)中的提示，補(bǔ)出范文缺失的部分，并關(guān)注哪些語言。首句分析Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don’tpanic!”theirfatherhandedeachofthemawettowel,

helpingthemcleanthemessupquickly.Afterthecleaning,hebeganhelpingthempreparethebreakfast.Thetwinsactedastheirfather’slittlehelpers,anditwasapleasuretoteamupwiththeirfather.Underhiscarefulguidance,

itdidn’ttakelongbefore

theFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.

Everythingsettled,

theirfatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMother’sDay!”shoutedthetwins.“Andwehaveasurpriseforyou!”SosweetwasthesurprisethatMotherexcitedlyshookFather,whowaspretendingtosnore.Herfacelitupwithhappiness.Motherhuggedthetwinsandshowedherthanks.ShetastedaFrenchtoastandsaidthatitwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.Lovefilledthewholeroom.

Whatabeautifulandsweetsurprise!閱讀以下參考范文，檢測(cè)一下你是否補(bǔ)出范文缺失的內(nèi)容。范文示例2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫——邏輯連貫

“Don’tpanic!”theirfatherhandedeachofthemawettowel,

helpingthemcleanthemessupquickly.Afterthecleaning,hebeganhelpingthempreparebreakfast.Thetwinsactedastheirfather’slittlehelpers,anditwasapleasuretoteamupwiththeirfather.Underhiscarefulguidance,

itdidn’ttakelongbefore

theFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.

Everythingsettled,

theirfatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.

重復(fù)、指代等

Para1：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“HappyMother’sDay!”shoutedthetwins.“Andwehaveasurpriseforyou!”SosweetwasthesurprisethatMotherexcitedlyshookFather,whowaspretendingtosnore.Herfacelitupwithhappiness.Motherhuggedthetwinsandshowedherthanks.ShetastedapieceofFrenchtoastandsaidthatitwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.Lovefilledthewholeroom.Whatabeautifulandsweetsurprise!Para2：Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

范文賞析

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don’tpanic!”theirfatherhandedeachofthemawettowel,

helpingthemcleanthemessupquickly.Afterthecleaning,hebeganhelpingthempreparebreakfast.Thetwinsactedastheirfather’slittlehelpers,anditwasapleasureto

teamupwiththeirfather.Underhiscarefulguidance,

itdidn’ttakelongbefore

theFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.

Everything

settled,

theirfatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫——精彩語言范文學(xué)習(xí)v-ing…動(dòng)詞短語固定搭配獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)固定句式it作形式主語……范文賞析

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMother’sDay!”shoutedthetwins.“Andwehaveasurpriseforyou!”SosweetwasthesurprisethatMotherexcitedlyshookFather,whowaspretendingtosnore.Herfacelitupwithhappiness.Mother