2023新教材高考英語二輪專題復(fù)習(xí)專題六讀后續(xù)寫先技法再完美策略五“7-3-3”原則精彩續(xù)寫盡掌握

策略五“7·3·3”原則精彩續(xù)寫盡掌握7個(gè)“不”1．不增加人物由考綱樣題及近5年高考真題中所給的段落首句可知，續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)發(fā)展都是由原文的人物所推進(jìn)，因此，強(qiáng)行增加人物有可能會(huì)偏離情節(jié)發(fā)展。2．不增加旁支情節(jié)題目要求“考生根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫”，旨在延續(xù)原材料的故事情節(jié)，并不是要發(fā)展新情節(jié)。3．不用過多對(duì)話在續(xù)寫中展示對(duì)話，雖能豐富內(nèi)容和語言，增強(qiáng)語篇的連貫性，但使用過多的對(duì)話，會(huì)顯得篇幅累贅且很難在限定的詞數(shù)里把整個(gè)后續(xù)的情節(jié)發(fā)展補(bǔ)充完整。4．不用負(fù)能量結(jié)局結(jié)局設(shè)計(jì)絕對(duì)不能負(fù)能量。內(nèi)容應(yīng)該積極向上，能增長(zhǎng)知識(shí)或傳播正能量。如樣題的結(jié)尾，我們可以有兩種設(shè)定：這個(gè)年輕人就是銀行搶劫者，而Arthur因此成為一個(gè)大英雄；或者Arthur誤會(huì)了這個(gè)年輕人是銀行搶劫犯，但最終警察們還是表揚(yáng)了他見義勇為的行為。5．不在文末設(shè)置懸念題目要求是“使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文”，若在文末設(shè)置懸念，就會(huì)給人一種還沒結(jié)束的感覺，這樣的故事是不完整的。6．不偏離原文主題續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)時(shí)刻圍繞著短文的主題去推進(jìn)，如上面的樣題，由續(xù)寫第二段首句提到的“警察局”可推測(cè)，我們可以圍繞勇氣及正義的主題去進(jìn)行續(xù)寫。7．不違背邏輯常理情節(jié)和細(xì)節(jié)的想象要合理，符合生活常識(shí)及具有邏輯性。3個(gè)原則1．原文一致原則續(xù)寫內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫，保持時(shí)態(tài)一致、人物一致、事件一致及語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。如樣題中通篇短文基本都在用一般過去時(shí)，那續(xù)寫也應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)。2．曲折性原則凡是故事都應(yīng)有跌宕起伏或矛盾沖突，其中人物會(huì)遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。但情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)不能過于復(fù)雜或離奇，否則閱卷老師不能快速讀懂你想表達(dá)的內(nèi)容。3．正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要傳遞正能量，圍繞“真善美”的大主題去設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)，弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯(cuò)了，最后一定會(huì)改過自新，重新做人；賊逃跑了，最后一定是繩之以法，等等。3大步驟[典例示范]閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。[2022·新高考全國卷Ⅰ]Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.第一步精準(zhǔn)解讀文本語篇解讀：記敘文越野跑那天，來自鎮(zhèn)周邊的七所小學(xué)的學(xué)生們正在熱身，而身體殘疾的David獨(dú)自待在籬笆旁，因擔(dān)心其他的孩子會(huì)嘲笑他，決定不參加比賽。續(xù)寫線索：主人公(David)遇到問題→如何解決問題→問題被解決，主人公實(shí)現(xiàn)了自我成長(zhǎng)，完美結(jié)局，呼應(yīng)首段畫面，升華感悟。Basicelements：WhenItwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.What(事件)Davidwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,sohegaveuptakingpartinthecompetition.Who(人物)David，I(aspecialeducationteacher)，thecoachWhere(地點(diǎn))thescenewherethebigcross-countryrunwouldtakeplaceWhy(起因)Davidhadabraindisease.How(發(fā)展)第二步細(xì)讀首句構(gòu)思框架1．結(jié)合對(duì)原文脈絡(luò)和感情線的把握，根據(jù)兩段所給首句中的已知信息推測(cè)新信息，合理推斷續(xù)寫框架。Tip1：兩段首句定一框Tip2：二框二首正能量2．兼顧兩情相悅·續(xù)寫部分情節(jié)線體現(xiàn)：David決定不參加比賽→作者鼓勵(lì)大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽→大衛(wèi)強(qiáng)烈的心理斗爭(zhēng)→David最終決定參加比賽。·人物的情感變化線：(David)傷心→(I)frustrated→(David)determined第三步完成續(xù)寫——精細(xì)打磨續(xù)寫語言，豐富細(xì)節(jié)描寫一、細(xì)節(jié)描寫學(xué)涉筆成雅續(xù)寫部分應(yīng)沿用原文語言特點(diǎn)銜接呼應(yīng)，同時(shí)利用豐富的句式使續(xù)寫部分斐然成章。1．續(xù)寫對(duì)David決定不參加比賽的心理、動(dòng)作描寫細(xì)膩，體現(xiàn)出David的無助、矛盾的心理狀態(tài)。2．在描寫鼓勵(lì)David參加比賽時(shí)，利用直接引語呈現(xiàn)人物對(duì)話，栩栩如生。續(xù)寫第一段(側(cè)重描寫鼓勵(lì)David參加比賽)1．他低下頭，盡量避免和我有眼神接觸。①He__hung__his__head__and__tried__to__avoid__eye__contact__withme.(雙連動(dòng)詞)②Hehunghishead,trying__to__avoid__eye__contact__with__me.__(非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語)2．他咬著嘴唇點(diǎn)了點(diǎn)頭。Henodded，biting__his__lip.(非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語)3．仔細(xì)想了想，我提到了一些讓人對(duì)他的決心和毅力贊不絕口的事情。Having__thought__it__over,__Imentionedsomeeventswhich__won__people's__praise__forhisdeterminationandperseverance.4．但如果你不跑步是因?yàn)槟愫ε卤怀靶Γ@就不是一個(gè)足夠好的理由。Butif__you're__not__running__because__you're__afraid__of__being__laughed__at,__that'snotagoodenoughreason.(條件狀語從句)5．聽了我的話，他終于下定決心要跑步，我催促他去起跑線。①When__he__heard__my__words,__hefinallymadeuphismindtorunandIurged__him__to__go__to__the__starting__line．(時(shí)間狀語從句)②Hearing__my__words,__hefinallymadeuphismindtorunandIurged__him__to__go__to__the__starting__line．(分詞作狀語)續(xù)寫第二段(側(cè)重比賽場(chǎng)場(chǎng)景描寫和情感細(xì)節(jié)描寫)6．大衛(wèi)堅(jiān)定地站在自己的位置上，無視周圍的一切。Davidstoodfirmlyinhisposition，ignoring__anything__around.(分詞作狀語)7．幸運(yùn)的是，全場(chǎng)爆發(fā)出雷鳴般的歡呼聲和掌聲。Luckily,theaudienceburst__into__thunderous__cheers__and__applause．8．在熱情和鼓勵(lì)的鼓舞下，大衛(wèi)興高采烈地加快了腳步。Inspired__by__the__enthusiasm__and__encouragement,__Davidquickenedhispaceinhighspirits.(分詞作狀語)9．他看到早餐時(shí)裝出驚訝的樣子。Hefakedastonishmentwhenhesawthebreakfast.滿分結(jié)尾句(升華主題式結(jié)尾)10．有了征服自己的力量，他就能征服通向美好未來的路上的任何事情。With__the__power__to__conquer__himself,__hecanconqueranythingonthewaytoapromisingfuture.(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))二、利用適當(dāng)過渡詞，完美成篇Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Hehunghishead,tryingtoavoideyecontactwithme.Iaskedhimifhereallydecidednottorun.Henodded,bitinghislip.Havingthoughtitover,Imentionedsomeeventswhichwonpeople'spraiseforhisdeterminationandperseverance.ThenIquietlysaid,“David,ifyoudon'twanttoruntoday,nooneisgoingtomakeyoudo.Butifyou'renotrunningbecauseyou'reafraidofbeinglaughedat,that'snotagoodenoughreason.Therealquestioniswhetheryouaregoingtoletthosefewpeoplestopyoufromdoingsomethingyoureallywanttodo.”Hearingmywords,hefinallymadeuphismindtorunandIurgedhimtogotothestartingline.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidstoodfirmlyinhisposition,ignoringanythingaround.Buthehadonlygoneafewmetresbeforehetrippedandfellflatontheground.Myheartsank.Luckily,theaudienceburstintothunderouscheersandapplause.Inspiredbytheenthusiasmandencouragement,Davidquickenedhispaceinhighspirits.Itturnedoutthathecrossedthefinishlineeventually.Seeinghisconfidentsmiles,Isighedinrelief.Withthepowertoconquerhimself,hecanconqueranythingonthewaytoapromisingfuture.練重點(diǎn)練難點(diǎn)·創(chuàng)新應(yīng)用體驗(yàn)[2022·山東省煙臺(tái)市高三考前熱身]Asasinglemother,I'veneverdoubtedmydaughterJane'sdreamtobeasingeronthestage.Atanearlyage,shewascrazyaboutsinging.Whenevershehadachance,shewouldsingtoherheart'scontent.Hersweetandcharmingvoicetendedtogetpeoplearoundattractedtohersongs.Livinginasmallcity,Itookseveraloddjobs,determinedtodoeverythinginmypowertosupporther.SoonafterJaneattendedschool,hermusicteacherMarynoticedhertalentbychanceandvolunteeredtogivehersomeguidanceonhowtosing.Janepracticedsohardthatbeforelongshemadegreatprogressinsinging.Unfortunately,onenoonayearlater,Janewascrossingthestreetwhenacarelessdriverknockedherdown.Shewasrushedtohospital.WhenIhurriedthere,thedoctortoldmethatmydaughterwouldprobablynotstandonherownfeet.Ifrozewithshock,feelingasifIhadbeenthrownintoadarkworld.Weakanddizzy,Iwasabouttofalltothegroundwhensomeonetookholdofme.ItwasMary,whogotthenewsandracedhere.Shecomfortedme,sayingfirmly,“Grace,Janeneedsyou.Youmuststaycalmandstrong.”Inodded.Havingcalmeddown,IenteredthewardwithMary.Thatnight,Janerecoveredherconsciousness(知覺)andopenedhereyes.Holdingherhand,Isaid,“Mydear,everythingwouldbefine.”Marycomfortedhergently,“Iknowyouareastronggirl,Jane.Don'tworry.We'llbestandingbyyou.”IwasheartbrokentoseetearsstreamingdownJane'scheeks.Aftertwomonths,wereturnedhomefromhospital.Herteachersandfriendsfrequentlyvisitedher.Janeeventuallyacceptedthefactthatshewouldhavetogetaroundinawheelchair.Neverdidsherefertothesubjectofsingingagain.Iknewshewasaniceandunderstandinggirl,whowasafraidthattalkingaboutheroriginaldreamwouldupsetthetwoofus.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Oneday,however,Marycamewithgoodnews.WhenthehostannounceditwasJane'sturn,shewaswheeledontothestage.參考范文：Oneday,however,Marycamewithgoodnews.ShetoldJanetheschoolmusic